I absolutely adored Mitra and knew that I would right from the start. He is just that honorable, sweet, loving man every woman deserves. The way he courts Tamara is so beautiful. Everything about him is just awesome. I loved the other two as well, just not quite as much. Reksa is passionate and possessive, but not overly so, just enough to make him hot. I also thought Rama's story was beautifully written and executed. He was someone that I felt an instant connection with and also someone that I could relate to. I did his path first and that made it much harder for me when he died in later paths. I may have cried a few times.
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
I was looking for a visual novel I knew I wouldn't want to immediately put down and this one caught my eye. The artwork stood out right away, but I think the description sold it for me. I got the impression that the story would be engaging enough to keep me interested and I was not disappointed. From the very bottom of my heart, thank you for being original.
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
This VN is a masterpiece. The thing that stood out the most for me were the characters, all of them. I fell in love with Asih and Yuda very early on and Sukma felt like family. I was really invested in trying to make their world better for them. It says a lot about your story-telling abilities that I cared so much about them. The avians will forever hold a special place in my heart.
4. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I know others have already stated as much, but the grammar is off in parts and it took me a minute to understand what was being stated sometimes. It isn't the spelling, just the way things are worded that threw me a bit. It's not off enough for it to affect the way I feel about the story or characters, just enough that I noticed it was a problem. Also, I don't think I enjoyed Reksa's path quite as much as I should have simply because I didn't get as much interaction with the other characters and I felt wrong lying to and stealing from people who were genuinely good to me. I understand the reasoning behind it, it just made me feel so guilty that I found it difficult to really invest in his route the way I would have wanted.
5. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Absolutely, I would buy it. You deserve to be paid just like any other game creator. I am aware of your Bermuda Triangle project and am keeping a close eye on the development of that game:) That being said, thanks so much for making this one free so that I could discover you and your talents.
Hi luvmyboyz! Thanks for spraing some time to review!
1. First of all, I'm sorry for this long overdue reply and thank you for giving all three bachelors a chance! I'm happy to see Mitra getting popular lately, but I agree that the way he courted Tamara was very beautiful! It was very fun to write and I sometimes blushed whenever I re-read that particular event... *sigh* and thank you! There's nothing that can make me happier to hear my story managed to touch your heart until you cry :') thanks for playing & thanks for enjoying this game thoroughly from beginning until end!
2. You're welcome! I was pretty skeptical at first but I'm glad to see many people welcoming my concept with open arms!
3. You flatter me >< I still have lots to learn and there are rooms for improvement -however, I do believe that every character is important. After all, everyone has a story to tell and their relationships with each other are one of the elements that will make my VN feels 'alive'. Thank you for giving so much love to Yuda, Asih, and Sukma :'D
4. Yuup, my nemesis from the past years until now is still grammar x_x I have proofreaders and despite the multiple checking, there're always some things we fail to notice. I just hope it's not too awkward/disturb your experience ^^;
and yes, I noticed that Reksa's route is much more 'desolate' compared to the others >< and sorry for making you feel guilty but the situation demands it u.u
5. Thanks for your support luvmyboyz! I progress much slower compared to other teams though so I hope you can be patient and walk beside me until it's finished :'3
Thanks again and see you again in the future! xoxo,
So...I was replaying Reksa's route and I found this while almost falling out of the tree with Rama..
Nice. I re-found the typo.
Edit: When I got to the Reksa vs Puba scene I found a minor thing, but its a line that moved above Reksa when he moved and it vanished a couple of times. Im going to the Good End btw too. Lol It kinda looks like a bird or cloud. While Im watching them fight, it might follow Puba instead? No clue.
Oh, my! Thank you 69;)! Hahah, I keep missing small things like these x'D
That thing above Reksa's head is a colour in his sprite that I forgot to erase. So yup, it's from the sprite file x_x Thanks for telling me about it & I'm sorry about my clumsiness ><
Thanks rebelxpure! Lots of people suggested it but I'm still somewhat skeptical >< let's just see in the future whether I will get a vision or inspiration to write small sequels for the boys ~
I have clocked so many hours into this game since owning it for..... months (so long I don't honestly remember). I have played each route at least 5 times each (especially Reksa because DAMN he is a brilliant specimen ;3). HOWEVER. EACH TIME I PLAY I HAVE BUT ONE QUESTION. I have gone insane trying to piece this puzzle together, so now I am finally asking: what is supposed to be rhyming in the line spoken month 5 week 2?
No disrespect by the way. This is in my top 5 favorite otomes (I've played a great many of them >.>). I just have this overwhelming desire to know what exactly was meant here, or maybe I'm just dumb.
lol no problem at all ivyThesaurus x'D thanks for dropping by and ask!
That is just Tamara and her awful sense of rhyme. Really :")) she thought 'no strength to figHT because of an empty stomaCH" those two sounds similar in a forced way lol.
Finished all three routes yesterday and I have to say, I'm really impressed with how well done this visual novel is. What I love the most is how it is based on Indonesian culture (including the character design of the bachelors) and I learned quite a bit about it. I'd love to see more games with non-white characters and real world cultures. Also Reksa is best guy, don't even try to convince me otherwise.
Hi triquester! Thanks for visiting and telling me your thought!
I'm really happy to hear you finished all routes & enjoyed yourself ^///^ I was quite worried since I'm still learning how to mix Indonesian cultures with Fantasy, but gosh, I was so relieved by your warm welcome!
My next project (Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle) also have Indonesian cultures, but this one will be more complex since I'm assimilating it with fantasy AND another culture. If you're still interested in the future, please give it a try and tell me if I'm doing good or not.
I think you did a great job with mixing Indonesian culture with fantasy and I already have your next project on my watch list! <3
(The part below this contains spoilers, read at your own discretion)
I forgot to mention in my last comment that I also really liked Rama's route (but Reksa is still my waifu) because of your depiction of mental illnesses. I liked that it took him long to accept his feelings for the MC and that she didn't pressure him into anything and stayed by his side. As a person who has a mental illness, it made me really happy because these kind of things aren't a joke and what we need is not advice, but love and support from the people who mean most to us.
(end of spoiler)
Anyway, great game and you'd best be sure that I'll play every single one that you churn out because you are AWESOME :D
AAHH! This is,by far,my favourite visual novel ever. ^^ And keep in mind,I've yet to complete the entire game,having done only one of the routes.The thing that caught my eye was definitely the story,it's a really cool,and I also like the art style.Haven't seen anything like it before,so I like it a lot.All in all,a good game.
Hi vnlover! Thanks for your enthusiasm x'D I see Reksa strikes again hahah
I still have a lot to learn and improve but I'm very happy to hear you like my art & story QuQ Take your time finishing it & I hope you enjoy it thoroughly until the end!
Wuh. Let me say this first. Greetings from Planet Bekasi! XD
I'm SOOO GLAD I finally found another Indonesian VN creator!! ^_^ Now I have more motivation to actually write my own VN. Thank you soooooo much for daring to brave the (non-urban) fantasy genre! You give me hope as a fantasy would-be writer!
I also love how you're not using Wayang as primary inspiration. Not that there's anything wrong with that - it's just that... it's been done like, *forever*, and I'm reaaally tired of seeing Ramayana-Mahabarata characters being recycled in Indonesian fantasy fiction. Like, our country is rich with history and mythology! Wayang isn't the only good source of inspiration, surely XP Thank your for being innovative!
I'll answer your questions once I've finished Rama and Reksa's routes. I chose Mitra first because he's such a sweetheart! I'm a sucker for sweet, gentle guys. I don't know, I feel really... safe around him. He's probably the kind of guy I'd want to marry IRL lol.
On a side note, one of my leading characters' name is Yuda, so it's quite funny to see your Yuda! My Yuda is probably your Yuda's polar opposite lol (he's more like Mitra in terms of personality). And somehow both their lady's names begin with A and only consist of 4 letters (well, at least the nickname). XP Asih and Yuda are sooo cute together, I won't even dare to want Yuda as love interest, heheheh.
Hi CuriousCat and Planet Bekasi! *high five* I'm so excited to see fellow Indonesian creator! -and yes, you have no idea how much I worried about how people will receive my story x'D After all, there is little to no visual novels that implements Indonesian cultures. But thankfully, the people here have big hearts and the warm welcome astounds me! Be confident with your own story and just do it! x'D yes, people will give you critiques/comments, but as long as it's interesting & you did your best, there will be no regrets!
And lol, Yuda is certainly a good name x'D I spent quite a lot of time browsing javanese names + asking my friends lol
As for Wayang... sadly, I haven't had the chance to watch Wayang so I have no idea what it is about :')) if I do and find something good, I might try and implement it lol -but of course, we must find a good way to tell the readers!
I'm really interested to hear your thoughts so l'lll wait patiently until you finish all the routes :'3
Wow. I played this game quite a long, long time ago and just noticed that i actually never left a comment about it even though i could have sworn that i did. To be honest, i don't remember much of the details anymore but i just wanted to thank you for creating such a great game. Cuz even though i may not be able to talk about small details, i remember how much work you obviously put into this game and how much i loved all of the characters, especially Reska since he's still one of my fav characters out of all the hundred otome games i've played so far. The story or at least the choiches that you, as the maincharacter, could make didn't always make sense since i was obviously just interested in Reska but still had to go trough many useless conversations with the other boys and missed out opportunites to talk to Reska, but this may be just my fault cause i could have made one wrong choice and caused these unneccesary events though this. Still, this really is a great game and i'm so gonna play it again these days to fresh up my love for Reska, haha. Thanks for creating this game, seriously! :)
You're welcome komaekabane! I'm so happy to hear you remembered about WInged Ones even though you played it a long time ago!
Reksa's route is pretty quiet when you first meet him so I understand your 'frustration' about not interacting enough with him & wanting to talk to him more than to the other characters x'D
Again, you're welcome & I'm so very happy to see people still coming & dropping a few comments here and there giving me your support & warm encouragements! It's what pushing me to go forward :'3
After so much delay in my life, I recently just finished Mitra's route (UPDATE! I had gone through all the routes and my first forever love is still Mitra!!! xD Boy how unexpected that I got him while my early intention is pursuing Rama, oh well at least I have a really a cute-gentle-badass-husband anyway :'D ), so here they go :
How can I choose between those gorgeous men? HOW??? Although my forever husband is Mitra (he has the sweetest story.... Do I smell favoritism from the developers? ;) ), I adore Rama; as I... had been through certain phase of trauma and depression like him and feel more connected to him, somehow motivated by his character development... (especially the childish and sarcastic nature... is that a bliss or an oddness ^^"). Besides the 3 main bachelors, I like Yuda very much. He truly is a dependable big brother.... but I am also eager to be his second wife if he is one of LI routes ;) *slaps by Asih*
An otome built with my homeland legend and culture + badass heroine? Bring me in!
Although the plot is a bit mainstream, but how the story is written and unfold with neat culture infuse, characters with well-built backstory, great choice of BGM, and proper graphics effect; those covers the little flaw.
As long as I played, I found an error around the begining of chapter II : in which Asih's figure is blank for one scene (the picture) and it's a bit inconvenient when Rama's Happy End CG is revealed long before I achieve his route ^^:
Well, pardon me as a poor college student now and can't contribute anything but my love and admiration to your Bermuda work + that one collaboration project.... but I'll definitely save some money so I could regard you in your future project!
First of all, let me apologize for this very late reply Q_Q I often forgot to take a look at my itch.io notification. However, I'm really thankful for you to show me the bugs in Winged Ones!
I will definitely fix Asih's sprite + Rama's final CG -it's really intriguing o.o I thought I already reset the CG album but I guess I missed one!
1. Aww thank you! Believe me, I was trying to be as fair as possible & not bias to my babies x'D gotta say that Mitra's route IS the most light-hearted and sweet though. I was experimenting a little you see; Rama's route is complex/hardest, Reksa's is medium, while Mitra is the easy/light-hearted one. I was trying to see which one people likes more :'3 and if my story telling is good enough for all 3 types.
I'm also happy to hear you feel connected to Rama & motivated by his development! *hugs & kisses to you hun, for pulling through that phase!* He definitely needs more love and I was trying to potray depression; to make other people understand how it feels/looks like.
and lol, Yuda sure is more popular than I thought x'D sadly, Asih is already beside him </3 *slapped by Asih along with you*cough*
2. Amen! I also hope to bring more Indonesian culture in the future x'D
3. Aww now you're making me blush >////< I still have lots to learn & improve, but I'll do my best so you won't be disappointed!
4. Yup, noted! I will fix & re-upload the files once my internet stops PMS-ing. I swear it's getting worse when rainy season arrives u.u;
5. No problem at all! I have received your love and thoughts -which is already precious enough to me :'3 good luck with college! stay strong and do things one by one & you'll be surely finished with final project!
Hello, there. I finished your game with the three characters in 24 hours, so here I am... To begin with, you have to know that I'm french and that we don't have many otome games in our language (and excuse the faults in this message haha). That's why I first came here and looked for a good game, without waiting time to play.
I LOVED it. My god, just addictive.
1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why? I support... MITRA !! Yay, Mitra is my looover ! <3 <3 <3 Oh my god, really, at first I was not interested in him, he was too « good-guy » and, frankly, I'm not a fan of kids, while he's always talking about family, projecting himself, etc.... That's the only negative point about his character, to me. The fact is, I totally fucked up with the Reska's route the first time (I couldn't even get to know him, haha, because I chose to be honest) and I always picked up the good choices so I would meet Mitra, without especially wanting it. Hehe, that's the proof I was meant to be his lover. Gradually, I learned to like him. He's sooo sweet (with his little feathers in his hair, aaawh <3), caring, kind, protective without being annoying, comprehensive. Oh, and I find that most of the romantic scenes were in his route, like the wing's performance (<3 !!) and the discussion in the burnt forest, you know after the first attack. Besides, after playing with all the guys, I feel a lot more close to everyone in Mitra's route, because we spent time with Avians, with Yuda, Asih, etc... since Mitra is a chief.
On the contrary, in Reska's route, I really felt like we didn't give a shit about Avians, we never spent time with them, we lied to them, we stole, ... that was too bad. I have to say, I was a little decieved by the story with Reska. I read so many commentaries which sayed that they loved Mitra before meeting with Reska ! He's cute too but nah. Maybe to possessive and that attitude annoys me. I mean, we're free to do what we want... However the love story is a bit more « mature » in his route, when we can't have that with Mitra (grr).
Then, there is Rama. Rama was a good surprise too. His background is really sad and coherent, I didn't expect that (and I didn't expect his fate in others guys'route ! I was like « What. No way, whaaaat »:O when Mitra came back with a piece of his loincloth.
2. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Ah, I don't know what to begin with ! This was really good ! I NEED to say it : the Avians are beautiful ! Asih is magnificient as hell ! I fell in love with her the minute she appeared on the screen. I didn't like Tamara's design, with blue hair (yurk) and the colors of her clothes that didn't match. Besides, her pony tail and her scarf which were flotting in the air... I know that you probably wanted to make her like a manga heroin, but it's just that I don't like mangas anymore, so it's personnal. :) But if we compare with Asih, her design seems less worked. The bachelors were great, especially Mitra (omg, his wings !! Omg, his eyes ! Mitraaa <3). Howerer I found them a little slim, even Mitra, who is supposed to be a warrior.
The writing was surprisingly good. No offense but in France, we don't find a game with this quality very often. I was so immersed in the story ! Sometimes I laughed, I shivered, my eyes got wet, I was chocked, I fangirled, ... That's a very good point, to manage to reach the fellings of your players by your work. Bravo ! What else... ? The story is addictive. A little simple but addictive. Simple because I think that the « war » goes too quick and is simply resolved. Tamara didn't do miracles by her own. At the end, we don't understand WHY the goddess chose her. She just threw a rock, what anyone could have done, and yet this is in Mitra's story ; with Reksa or Rama, her intervention is a little more useless.
Last but not least, the MUSICS were magic ! The game wouldn't be what is it, if the soundtrack wasn’t there. It really created an ambiance and fitted with the scenes. I have shivers when I rethink to some moments with Mitra... Maybe I'll download them later, if I can find them.
3. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Yeah, it's a fact that french people are known to complain a lot. So here are my questions and critics to maybe help you to improve your work in the future :)
I noticed some incoherences or mysteries unsolved. What with the dream in which Tamara hears someone being tortured ?! When I was with Mitra, I thought that maybe this was part of Reska or Rama's route, but no. Then, there is the past of Tamara. She confesses it with Mitra and Rama but this is completely forgotten in Reska's story. Is that normal ? Something else : when I played with Reska, Tamara didn't give a shit about Rama, and then we end up helping him and bringing him meat. That was strange. ^^ On this matter, it's a shame that we can't have some informations if we're not playing with the right bachelor. For example, the explanations around Rama's death. Rama is forgotten some days after it, and we can never discover why he wanted so much death. It would be great to speak about it, but not entirely of course...
I have nevertheless a last critique. So, here, I don't know if I react like that because I'm french (and annoying) or not, because no one spoke about the following subject until me xD One thing bothered me in your story : the women's condition. God, we really have an image so that the wife is here to cook, to do laundries, etc... Each time we saw Asih, she talked about house chores : « dinner is almost ready », « ah ! come one, breakfast is ready ! » like she does nothing else, and she's so weak, not physically but in her personality too... I hated that. I felt sometimes some observations from our protagonist, with a little irony (« it was like she taught me to be a good wife »), but it wasn't enough. Maybe it's their society to live this way – traditionally - , but Tamara seemed not really bothered. And the guys are sooo paternalist !
I finish this part on this : in my mind, the love story is too « cuty ». I mean the sexuality seems a taboo, when all the blood, the fights, the deaths and the war subject are for a mature public, so I don't understand this choice x)
I hope that my last remarks will not upset you. I really loved your game and I just wish that my commentary will help you for – maybe – another project.
4. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Yeah, of course, if I have time to. I discovered english otome games ;)
THANK YOU for your work. Really. I lived a great adventure, which I won't forget and I'm sad to think that my commentary will conclude your wonderful story ! (I already miss Mitra :( hehe, I'll replay it one day)
Thanks for visiting and giving me your honest comment! I'm really happy when I read it ^.^- now, I will do my best to answer your questions -*SPOILER ALERT*-
1. I'm always glad to hear people giving their effort & time to read all the routes, so thank you -and WOW, just 24 hours? O.o you read fast! Did you skip sleep? Take care of your health! ><
2. Hahahah, glad to hear Mitra grew on you, dear <3 his omoed-omoedan event is also one of my favourites! It was so much fun writing it ^^- and yes, in Reksa's route we are encouraged to break some rules since the circumstance is the Komodos are the Avians' enemy and Tamara couldn't afford to tell anyone that she is helping the said enemy >< and yep, Rama's story managed to shock the majority of readers *happy dance*
As for the slim proportion, I'm sad to say that I haven't seen any real-life Indonesian guy who is buff/at least lithe with enough muscles to use as references... OTL a lot of the guys over here is skinny so it might affect my art even though I have photos references by my side.
I'm flattered to hear you think my writing-style is good >\\\< I still have a lot to learn though since I still have loopholes here and there -which you pointed out some x'D I will definitely work hard to improve it!
3. And thank you for liking Asih's design! She is one of the first designs I finished. As for Tamara's I was trying to make her pop up with her blue hair *cough* but I learned my lesson since some of my friends also said she looked unnatural ><
As for her dream, it was a dream sent by Ayu. She was illsutrating Rama's past mentality, where he was suffering & in his mind, people were laughing & ridiculibg him. In the last sequence where there is a loud CRACK, it was the time where he attempted his last suicide. Yep, I got a lot of questions about this & I took notes that I need to be more clear about this ><
Ah and of course, the timeline issue where some event about another bachelor pop out when you're inside another bachelor's route. I'm still trying to figure this out to be honest. I sometimes mixed them ><;; I thought it would be okay to get people read more about Rama since; Tamara basically lived in the village, so she would spend some time with him. At least, she would feel the need to try and help Rama out when he suddenly 'caged' himself and not eating. Welp, at least that was what I thought but then again, yeah, if might be weird to do that if you're not close to him. So this is an error from me maybe? Hmm... I will be more careful next time!
As for the women condition... in Indonesian past tradition (still is actually depending on which area where you live), women tend to be a housewife where the one who work and has a career is the husband. Despite Tamara's heritage(half British, half Indonesian), she grew and live in Indonesia since birth so she already knew about this and thought it is normal since she doesn't really have any ambition besides getting away from her uncle. This past about her and her uncle's family is not pretty, hence she grabbed at the first chance she got to move away. At Mitra & Rama's routes, the circumstances & mood affect her to tell them about it. In Reksa's route, she simply locked the memory deep within her heart & moved on because she felt like she doesn't need to tell him about it since she has decided to stay. She was also too busy helping him, keeping him a secret, following him to the village, war, etc so I think it's logical to say the thought never occured to her? X'D hahahh at least that was what I think.
Ah and about the story too 'cuty' despite the mature theme... *cough* Indonesian tradition is about keeping your virtue until wedding night so.... yup, not gonna go too far from kissing x'D hahahah (I'm also too embarassed to write them *cough*)
5. Thank you for your support!
I hope my answers satisfy you? >\\\< I really enjoyed reading your comment & replying them -sorry for the text wall though O.O;
This will greatly help me to revise & polish my 2nd project! timeline & managing the small events are my deepest concern besides the programming, but I will do my best to improve!
As for why the Goddess chose Tamara... hmm... this actually will be explained later in my 2nd project; Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle, but I'll do my best to explain while keeping it spoiler-less as much as I could.
It has something to do with her personality, traits -everything that defines her and most importantly, She chose her because she is an outsider -someone who doesn't have a real link to Her 'world'; who can change the future posibilities & fix the problem the Goddess created Herself. No one is able to touch the Pink Crystal besides Tamara and her chosen one remember? Because She cannot directly interfere with fate and that's why She needs some help from 'outside'.
Um... do I explain well? I sometimes have a hard time with how to explain this particular element ^^;; as I said, more information will be explained in my 2nd project; Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle. It will explain the whole island's history & I think you will understand better after you play it in the future. I'm in the middle of making it now ~
Hey ! Thanks for answering, it's a really cute attention that we don't see everywhere ! Yep, I slept 3 hours but it worthed it, hehe. I read more comments since yesterday and I see that I'm not the only one who was such attracted by your story to play aaaall the night.
Oh, I'm really sorry if I offended you. I didn't know that you were Indonesian (or almost), and everything makes sense now. I really didn't replace the story in the right context and, well, when I finally read the encyclopedia given with the game, I felt a little embarrassed for saying what I said. And I didn't know either Tamara was from the same culture >< So, excuse me.
I saw that you worked on an other project more or less linked with "the Winged Ones". I don't want to play the demo since the game isn't finished yet and I'm afraid to become a big fan too early haha (and to live with furious impatience until it's out). But I'm so glad that there will be some informations about "the Winged Ones" ! I admire your universe and I want to learn more and more.
I wish you to succeed in your projects. All of the critics are throwing to improve it, but it's an amazing job for a game meant to be free. By the way, I wanted to really thank you for making it free ! It was such an adventure, you deserve to be known and to have some contributions (I'll talk about you with some of my acquaintances but I don't promise you a new public if they don't like playing in english :P)
Sadly this game is very difficult for me to play because there is no way to turn off the flashing background images. The flashing backgrounds are very bad for people with epilepsy and other neurological conditions. Can you add an option in the settings to turn off the background flashes? Or, please limit them to 3-4 flashes instead of having them last 10-15 clicks. That way I can read your VN without becoming physically ill. What I've managed is very good so far. :)
I didn't know that background flashes are bad for epilepsy or other neurological conditions >< I'm very sorry for the discomfort you experienced u.u; sadly, I haven't learned how to make a button to turn it of yet.
My tip is that maybe you can click it fast when the background started to flash? It will skip it immediately and if you miss something, you can roll back with your mouse >< that's the best I can say for now, sorry Yukiko!
Yes, that is the one I speak of! Thank you for caring! >//< I do enjoy the affect, it was thoughtful of you to put in for immersion. If it is repeated too often at one time it can become harmful though. Please keep it in mind for future games! I asked my friend to read the screens I could not. It was embarassing but worth it! hehe. Of course I'd prefer to read your words with my own eyes! I did finish Mitra's route and it was super cute and a little epic! It helped me be excited for the other routes. Good job :D
Oh! And thanks for making the characters shake when they laugh loudly. It helped me to laugh out loud too, otherwise I would have just smiled. ^-^
I was super impressed. I really loved the writing, may I may not have cried a little bit with the Rama ending. I'm glad that the main character was able to be an active story participant, not just a side character. A lot of female characters don't get to be a badass in romance stories. I really enjoyed the artstyle and character designs, I thought the use of color was AWESOME. A couple nits: Question A: What program did you use? I was curious, as I'm only proficient in HTML and CSS. Question B: If you make another VN, do you think it will be similar in tone? I loved the humor, but the psychological bit really stood out as well. Lastly, I would probably buy the next one (fingers crossed), and I wish I could now. I'm broke af atm.
Hi CazCatra! Thanks for visiting and telling me your thoughts! ^.^- I'm very happy to hear you like ny writing & art-style -and yes! I already started my 2nd project called; Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle. It's a brand new story but set in the same world, albeit with a wider horizon. Fair warning, this one has darker theme than Winged Ones >< It's also going to be A LOT longer so I decided it to be commercial.
The campaign has ended but you can still pre-order via my paypal shop :"3 (see game page for more info ~)
As for your other question:
At first, I use Novelty, it's a great software for beginner programmer because it's more like drag and click rather than typing the program, but sadly, it's still in beta version and I think the creator dropped it u.u
Next, I use Ren'Py and although it's more difficult, it's free and it's like a magic item once you understand its functions x')
And take your time buying it if you want to ~ the completion of Bermuda is still far in the future :"D until then, maybe keep up with the weekly update!
.....Well....I did it, I went through and I played all the routes In a day. Do I regret it? Absolutly, I shouldnt have been so greedy, I should have savoured how amazing this game was. I absolutly adored the art, the music, and of course the characters and I experianced them all in a day.....But I can redeem myself, with the sequel...That I just found and have downloaded and am going to start now soooooooo yeah. :D Really love your work.
Thanks for playing and telling me your thoughts! Whoa, you're a fast reader O_O finished them all in one day! I hope you didn't sacrifice your sleep hours >< of course, I'm very happy to hear you love my work, but don't push yourself too hard, ok? X'D
Bermuda is not really a sequel, but yup, there are tid bits of Winged Ones in it lol.
I didnt loose any sleep lol( iusually stay up to 4am my time but i finished around 1am my time) and yeah I read really fast XD Bermuda Game Talk: I saw in the bermuda game its not really a sequel but its none the less interesting lol I started it last night and finished a chapter before going to bed trying to take it a bit slower though in the beginning of it all i can say is my favorite color: blue, favorite animal: wolf. I didnt have to think twice on what I chose XD
I...I cant pick at all. All three of them are amazing , I played in this order: Mitra, Reksa and Rama. Tba I just went with my own knowledge with Mitra using every choice in the game to go bother him (and at the time I dident like Rama). When there was no choice about Mitra, I'd just pick whatever and go with it. So, basically with Reksa, *bam!* walkthrough. (yes my abilities with picking are useless). I loved Reksa because how he was, his primative nature was so adorable, TBH i love possesive people like Reksa but just not to the point where It becomes yandere and kills all my friends like in anime! :D . Anyway, with Rama...I found out I actually liked his char when I was heartbroken when he died in Mitra's route. I was all like TTTTTTTTTTT>TTTTT. I know, im sensitive! Even then IM STILL FIGRURING OUT HIS ROUTE RIGHT NOW! I keep getting the option for ONLY the explosives and im just like determed AF to get his good route. EVEN THE FREAKING WALKTHROUGH HAS ME CONFUSED. In the Walkthrough it says:
Ask Rama about his action. In game it says: Ask Mitra about his action. So, I picked that and I think thats my mistake. Im going back RN to pick the other one. At this point I've memorized almost everypart of the Walkthrough.
What makes you consider to play this game?
TBH I was on a spree on finding stories like this one in itch.io that has some element of dating in it. (I was mostly looking for gay ones shhh)
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most?
Oh. My GOSH! The most thing that stood out for me was this ONE WORD in one of the choices, I cant even rember what choice at this point! (damn you rama) It says: suppsed or somethng along thoes lines but it bothered me. But I LOVED this novel regardless! My daydreams are filled with Mitra, Reksa and Rama! I blame it on my love for reading.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
All I ask: Help me with Rama. The freaking walkthrough confuses me. And I dont think Im the greatest person to ask for critiques , I'm blinder than a blind person. I love everything in this novel
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Yes, FRACK yes. Either one, IDK. I dont have a credit card and Im not going up to my parents and be like : "hey can I buy a visual novel" parents: "whats it about" me:" NEVER MIND"
I just Need help with Rama. Its bothering the heeeck otta me. I hope you make a series otta this!
Edit: YES YES YES I GOT IT. YOUR WIKI CONFUSED ME TOO MUCH BUT I FOUND IT. im so happi x.x
https://www.indiegogo.com/proj...Hi Sixtynine -and whoa, I feel your struggle with Rama's route x'D I was preparing to post the walkthrough here, but I guess you already found his happy ending? O.O Ah but I'll post the important points here just in case ><
*SPOILER ALERT*Rama's walkthrough:
1. - Learn Language w/ Granny Sukma
- Poke/Knock/Throw - When you first time meet Mitra, Rama, & Reksa: >Mitra: Choose anything >Rama: Be friendly >Reksa: To unlock Rama's good end you have to choose >>> Don't leave him >>> Be honest or just don't save Reksa at all :'D You have to focus all your affection to Rama or you'll get the bad ending. Yep, he is jealous very easily & very possessive. - Choose everything - Spend time with Asih - Spend some time with the kids - Spend some time with Rama - Go to the Herb forest >>> Try it - Spend some time with Rama - Take a rest in Herb forest >>> Ask Rama about his action - Spend some time with Rama - Take a walk - Talk with Asih about Rama - Ask the villagers about Rama - Automatic event >>> Don't avert your eyes - Go help Granny - Automatic event - Visit Rama - Visit Rama
GOOD END: Give him the Pink Chrystal Bad End: Give him the explosives
I read that this walkthrough gets you confused O.O; hmm, but the important note is: Avoid other bachelor as much as you can and spend time with Rama as much as you can!
And yes, one mistake will end up with Rama's bad end :'D I know it's harsh, but that's they way Rama is hahah -please forgive this creator ><
2. lol, it always when I see people stumble upon my 'baby' & ended up loving them x'D
3. ...Which word? lol, now you're making me curious x'D nevertheless, I'm happy you like the story & Rama so much! I was worried at how people will take my story since it's entirely new and not-so-mainstream, but I'm glad you like it!
4. I hope this problem is already resolved ><
5. Don't worry, your enthusiasm & support is already more than enough at this point QuQ I do have a new project that is now LIVE in Indiegogo though >>> https://www.indiegogo.com/proj... I know your difficulties since I also don't have a credit card until recently :'D but just help me spread the words & I'll be very happy <3
Once again, thank you for playing & showing me how much you love Winged Ones! I hope you get to see all the scenes/endings & hope to see you again! xoxo,
I don't get it...I've picked what you typed in your walkthrough EXACTLY every time, yet I can't get a good ending. I experimented with how I met the bachelors and what choices I picked after your walkthrough ends but NOTHING WORKS! I REALLY like Rama's story so far, but I'm starting to hate him because of his route... (Also, "Ask Rama about his action" is a combination of both choices so I have no idea which one you actually meant)
That's weird O.O; I have another person asking the same thing but after choosing 'Be Honest' with Reksa, it worked.
As for "Ask Rama about his action"... I mean "Ask Rama for his condition" sorry >< I thought I already explained to ignore Mitra and Reksa if you want his good ending? x_x
Rama is a very jealous person and hates liars, so you won't get his happy ending if you miss one of his scenes or see one of Mitra's scenes. I admit that his route is quite tricky though ^^;
Played this game again after playing the old version a few years ago. I still love Reksa's route and ending the most and Mitra's is a close second. I like Rama but his ending just feels incomplete to me. I love how you've used your own country's stories to create your own, kudos to that. And yes, I would I would consider buying another VN you make if the story interests me enough. :D
Hi tangerineWhimsy! Thanks for playing & telling me your thoughts! I'm sorry for this late reply though ><
First, I'd like to thank you for giving all my 3 boys a chance & loving them in return :'D I have to admit that I feel like I can do better with his route -some people commented that some scenes were a bit vague & that's where I need to polish my writing-skill! I will definitely try to do better next time! >:)
and yes, I love to add Indonesia elements! x'D the mini-encyclopedia will stay forever in my feature.
I made an account just to post on the comments, because this game was. freaking. AWESOME.
MY HEART. *grips chest and keels over dramatically*
This is one of the best games I've EVER played!! I'm so glad I was bored enough to look for otome vn's for three consecutive days because I would've regretted not knowing that Nusantara existed. I stayed up till 4 AM for two days straight just to play and replay all the routes!
Edit: I just realised my post is unnecessarily and excessively long... Sorry in advance!
1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Gah! Choices, choices...
Mitra is kind, considerate, and sweet, but he's also freakin' HOT when he shows his fierce side (i.e. when fighting to protect Tamara.) He also has a great physique. O.o Also an all-round easygoing guy. Reksa is adorable in his contrasting childishness and maturity, and working past his wildness to the subtle softness (and passion!) underneath is exceptionally satisfying. And Rama.... Whew! He is somethin' else altogether. There's so much pain beneath his cavalier actions, but there's also, in a way, so much love. I wish we could save him outside of his route, but sigh. It's so hard to see his sincere side and genuine smile, so his last CG is... *sniff*
Really. I love all three of them. I wish there were more guys like them in real life. Well, maybe less Rama's, or there would be suicidal maniacs all over, but... :P If I really had to choose.... ... .... hm... probably Mitra. While I love Reksa's devotion and wildness and Rama's indifferent-to-all-but-you personality, Mitra's budding/blooming feelings and how he expresses them (that Wings Ceremony? *swoons*) win me over in the end ... Also, can't hurt to mention that I'm a sucker for "tall, dark, handsome" guys. xD
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
I was bored and looking for free Mac games online (it is surprisingly difficult to find otome games for mac that have good visuals), and, the moment I saw the profile picture for Nusantara, I knew I wanted a closer look. Not only were there three love interests, the graphics looked great. I hate to say it, but, for otome games, appearances are everything, because what's the point of playing visual novels if guys aren't handsome? :P Also, the description? "Birth, Death, Peace, War, Love"? Plus guys with wings? Hook, line,and sinker.
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Totally gameworthy. You really get involved in the game and bond with the characters. The soundtrack is amazing, and I especially love the art, because I'm a very sight oriented person, and Nusantara really seemed like a believable place (great background, portrayals of people, etc.). Also, LOVE THE CG's. :'-) (Even the bad endings were beautiful. Oh, Rama!) Thank you for taking the time to flesh out the guys and making them realistic enough to be lovable. The tiny details you invest in their characters are very much appreciated. I loved how the story is atypical, in other words, not at the workplace and not at school. The guys also don't show interest in you right of the bat, so it's authentic, too. And did I mention that I'm a huge fan of fantasy? Huge, huge fan.
4. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Critique/Suggestions: As some other people have mentioned, there are times when the grammar is off. :) I also think that while the art is great, it could be polished a bit more because, for example, Rama and CG Rama don't really look alike (CG Rama is HOT; normal Rama... less), and Rama looks like he's flickering around the edges. Just me being picky, but I would've loved for some final strings to be tied off, because while I can guess that Rama is the one in Tamara's nightmares, we don't really get complete closure. Also, Yuda's earring seems to change sides depending on his pose... and Mitra doesn't always have white paint on his face in his CG's. An insignificant thought: While playing Mitra's route, before being told the significance of Asih and Yuda's earrings, I had already guessed their purpose (also proof of how good the art/details are), so I was expecting some kind of similar exchange between Mitra and Tamara, because Mitra seems like the kind of guy who would stick with tradition (he did, after all, participate in Omed-Omedan, the Wings Ceremony, and officially invite Mitra to his house). I figured that since Tamara didn't have wings, she could exchange bits of her hair made into an earring with his feathers, since her hair is a unique color and all. But that's just a thought. :) Also (sorry for the many add-ons!), I totally wouldn't mind bonus paths/extras, for example having some kind of extra path once you've finished all the possible existing routes.
Questions: In the scene where Tamara and Mitra are grooming his wings, what were the implications of Mitra's wings moving without his knowledge? What was he muttering before he ran off? How did Rama break his wings? We know that he tried to commit suicide plenty of times, but what are the specifics? Is there any way I could find a picture of Mitra with his wings spread open during the wings ceremony? It's like an itch I can't scratch. The CG is wonderful, but I'm trying to picture what Asih described - him showing his power, his size, his everything. Ahhh.
I think I had a few other questions, but I can't remember them right now... T_T
5. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
HELL YES! Please tell me you're making another one. <3 I have to confess, though, that I've gotten used to finding games for free, so I probably wouldn't pay more than $15 for one. (: but YES! I would pay, because Nusantara was totally worth it. I'll probably be daydreaming about Mitra and Reksa for the following days...
Now that I've finished Nusantara, what am I going to do with my free time?? *sniff*
Hi jordanyak! Thanks for taking your time writing this very long review! I enjoyed reading it bery much x'D
I'm happy to hear you love my VN so much until you sleep so late for 2 days straight but... please take care of yourself more >< I don't want you to get sick/tired when there is work/school tomorrow! We all need our beauty sleep ~ but still, I'm flattered :"))
1. Awww, thank you for giving all three of them a chance! And yes, I agree that the wing ceremony + omed-omedan is one of the very romantic scenes in game <3 >\\\< it's one of my favourites and I'm glad you think so too!
Ah I'm also happy to read how you describe the other bachelors. You sound like you've thoroughly enjoyed yourself and there's nothing makes me happier than to hear that :")
2. Yup, I agree that first impression is very important x'D heck, I also usually get interested in a game if there's a handsome guy I like in there lol. We're on the same boat!
3. Me too! I love fantasy genre; I think it has something to do with Inuyasha since it was the first anime I watch. Not to mention Hayao Miyazaki's movies are probably my forever favourites ><
4. Yuup... I noticed that Rama's CG is the most different ones than the others x_x I think it's because I leave CGs production last and I forgot a little how to draw Rama and I even forgot the white lines on Mitra's face in some CGs! //shame on me
Also, thanks for pointing out Winged Ones' flaws! I have quite a lot of people say the dream is very ambigue >< it's a dream about Rama's mentality. In the dream Rama thought that the villagers were laughing and mocking him. It drove him to the edge and it pictured the scene where he broke his wings (the loud CRACK noise). As for how he broke them, I think I mentioned it in the scene where Rama got his legs tied down by Mitra? O.o He jumped off a cliff as a last resort but instead of dying, he just broke his wings & one of them didn't heal properly because Rama could care less bout himself in the past.
As for Mitra's wings acting by itself... well I was trying to say that the wings leaning toward Tamara means that he likes her touch & unconciously asked her for more x'D Mitra was embarassed and ran away after realizing that lol. That was when he realized his feelings for her too. He was muttering something along the lines of"I had no idea...", cursed himself, & 'scolding' his own wings lol.
As for Mitra spreading his wings picture... you see, I was cheating a bit in that scene :")) I used Mitra's fighting sprite. The best picture I can point out is at the CG where his wings are folding around Tamara and the half spread one in his happy end CG
5. I do! My 2nd project's demo is out now along with its Indiegogo campaign <3
Thank you for the support and love you gave me! I know I still have lots to learn, but I'll do my best to improve! It will be baby steps I think, but I hope you'll be patient with me ><
I adore this game and ive spent the last two days telling everyone i know about it and i think theyre getting sick of it but! oh well!
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Hm its a tossup between Mitra and Reksa honestly, dont get me wrong i love Rama too its just, some of his actions and how he views the world hits a little too close to home for my liking ;;. Anyway back to Mitra and Reksa, i adore them both but I think my heart will always belong to Mitra with reksa being a very close second.
What makes you consider to play this game?
The artwork and the story! The artwork is lovely and the story is unique and exciting, i keep a pack of screenshots with me (nothing like to use for profit i just like showing my frends the games i play so i take out of context screenshots so they dont get spoiled for the story but can gush with me about it). The story itself i feel is unique! How its handled, going for the peacable route instead of going all out and destroying the Komodos and trying to live in peace and I loved it!
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Lord I dont have the words to describe how this VN made me feel. Like by the end all the characters felt Real, like Yuda, Asih, and Sukma were actually my family, Mitra was like my favorite older brother (when i wasnt romancing him) and Rama... I was sad that we couldn't save him outside his route. His deaths would always hit me hard. I'm also sad (but understanding) when we couldn't interact with Reksa outside of his route. I guess its the characters and their interactions that really sold me, they all felt like family and tried to bring the MC in with them and I believe it was one of the stronger aspects of this story.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
The only thing I can think of is getting a beta reader for your text lol there were a few grammatical mistakes throughout the game (nothing that made it unplayable, just a bit confusing when my brain stuttered over one)
As for questions, well I really loved seeing Rama's and Mitra's reactions and reassurances to Tamara about her past and her own trauma, and was a little disappointed that it wasnt addressed by Reksa? I mean i get it there really wasnt a good place or time to talk about themselves like that within the games timeline but still id have liked to see how he'd have handled it
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Hi sheanio! Thanks for visiting and reviewing :'3 I see this first thing in the morning and it made me laugh when I hear you spent the last 2 days telling people about how much you love this game x'D
What a great way to start the day <3
1. I can understand that x') thanks for giving all three of them a chance though! And awww, more people are loving Mitra! Does this mean his time has finally come!?
*cough*
Anyways ~ I will deliver your love to Mitra & Reksa for you.
2. It touched me to hear you're bringing some screenshots with you! Maybe not all the time but I'm happy to hear you love it enough to do that >\\\<
I'm also glad you like the art & story! Thanks! :'D I still have lots to learn though but I'll do my best to improve and make you happier ><
3. That's the best thing you can say to me about my characters! Q_Q thank you!
4. Yep, grammar is likely to be my nemesis in my next game too :")) I have 2 proofreaders in my 2nd project now, but if there are still some grammar errors in it, I apologize in advance >< my raw script is... quite a challenge to edit for them I think O.O;
As for why Tamara's trauma is not mentioned in Reksa's route: *SPOILER ALERT*
To be honest, I was trying different approaches:
In Mitra's route, her trauma was solved nicely and calmly. In Rama's route, her trauma was solved a bit forcefully *she throws them at Rama's face lol*.
In Reksa's route, Tamara doesn't feel the need to tell him about it. She moves on and left it in the past when she decided to stay.
However, thanks for pointing this out! I will take note and it's definitely a good idea for my next project about how each bachelor will react about the MC's special circumstances :"3
5. I love how forward you are x'D YAY! Thanks for your support! <3
I love this game! I actually first played it a while ago but swapped computers and though I could remember the game I could never remember the name of it until a couple of days ago. I'm so glad I found it again! :D
1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Ahhhh start with the hardest question ;_; It's a toss up between Mitra and Reksa - it depends which route I'm doing at the time :p Mitra would prooobably steal my heart like 0.01% more than Reksa. Rama's...his mood shifts are little too uncomfortably familiar for me to really like him that much.
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
Pretty boys with wings! It's rare to find a VN with winged people and even rarer to find one where they're not angels (i was raised kind of small-town catholic so flirting with angels is suuuuper uncomfy for me so im extra glad to find a game where they're not angels). Also, the art samples are gorgeous and I really wanted to see how the whole game looked.
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what elements stand out the most? (art? story? character?)
The art is absolutely beautiful, I mean genuinely breathtaking. The characters were very well-written; Not only the bachelors but Granny Sukma, Asih, and Yuda also all felt like family members by the end.
4. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Tamara's comments about Ayu being weak for committing suicide were a bit...um, they touched a raw spot? I don't really know to phrase it? It seemed very harsh given the nature of it?
5. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Absolutely! I'm really looking forward to Bermuda Triangle!
Hi, keystring! Thanks for visiting and reviewing! Glad to hear you found this page after swapping computers x'D
1. Ah yes, I can understand that. His mood swings also a challenge and made me uncomfortable at times :"D -and finally! Another Mitra lover <3 he needs more love since the majority of girls chose Reksa x'D
I'll deliver your love to them ~
2. Yup, I agree that we need more fantasy VNs :"3 I'm also a catholic and flirting with an angel will be... *coigh* awkward *cough*
3. Awww thanks! I'm glad you like my art >\\\< I still have rooms for improvement though! I'll do my best to keep taking your breath away x'D
4. Yes, I agree about that. *SPOILER ALERT*
However, Rama has to face the harsh reality -even by force since the easy/soft way has failed. Granny Sukma, Mitra, and the others spent years to try convincing him but to no avail :'( if this continues, Rama will keep walking on a wrong path. I also think it's better to be blunt about it than having to say it in a roundabout/white lie since Rama will think you're lying/unsure about it and he will keep making excuses later.
*ahem, but I'll admit that I have no experience in this field (psychology). So this is all based on my logic and from reading various fictions ><*
5. Yay! Me too! I feel both excited and scared for Bermuda's campaign later lol x'D
Okay so I finally finished playing all the routes, I had a glitch that meant I didn't have a visible option to give Rama the crystal and therefore couldn't find his good ending for ages, but I got there eventually :)
This was so great, I am actually a little sad that it's finished now, kind of like the first time you read Tolkein's The Hobbit, and you want to stop reading it because you don't want it to be over.
The artwork was absolutely beautiful, the characters are very well written, plausible and engaging. The attention to detail in even the small aspects of their daily lives, their costumes was wonderful.
1.Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
First off they were all wonderful, Ah Mitra, so adorable, so warm. I'd have to say Reksa was probably my favourite though, there is just something about his possessiveness while still accepting Tamara will do whatever she wants anyway is very cute and also he is probably the most passionate character which I liked about him......though like I said they are all great in their own way, I can kind of tell how much you care about each of them.
2.What makes you consider to play this game?
Chance really that I stumbled across it, I am pretty new to this genre, but the image of the beautiful boys with wings......sold.
3.Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
It is absolutely beautiful! honestly I am in awe of your talent for both the character design, art and story writing.
4.Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I actually liked that the characters don't speak at all like some otome games, frankly when they do if you don't like the voice they use for a character it can put you off a bit, whereas when they don't have a predetermined voice each player can imagine them to sound how ever they would like, it's more relate able that way.
As for questions I have 3, How old is Reksa? I couldn't work it out though you hint he may be a bit younger.
Who was the person Tamara kept dreaming about being tortured?
And lastly were you a part of the Ball Jointed Doll community? your name SweetChiel seems familiar somewhere in the back of my mind.
5.Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
Welcome back and I'm so glad to hear you managed to finish all routes :'D
*SPOILER ALERT*
Rama's route is the most tricky of all three >< if you pick false things in the begining, his good route will be locked (yup, it's not a glitch but intentional, sorry :"D)
The things are:
- if you pick to save Reksa, you have to be honest. Never lie since Rama hates liars.
- you have to meet Rama a lot (pick the choices that ends up with Tamara meeting him and ignore other bachelors) since you needs a lot of affection points to fulfill another of his good end requirement.
I have to say that I'm surprised you managed to find his good end without a walkthrough x'D
1. Aww thank you! :"D they are like my babies and hearing how you like all of them makes me all warm and soft inside x'D
And yup, Reksa is the most passionate than the others :")) it's a bit surprising for me too... I sometimes still blush whenever I reread his route hahah
2. Yay! I notice that not a lot of VNs have boys with wings in them x'D glad to see you like them -and welcome to the visual novel world!
3. Now you're making me blush O///O
I still have lots of room to improve compared to all the big guns up there, but I'll do my best to be better in my next project ><
4. I agree! Even if I want to add voice acting, it's very hard to find a voice that truly clicks with the characters!
As to how old Reksa is, he is 20 years old. 7 months younger than Rama while Mitra is the oldest, 22 years old. Tamara is 19 :"3
As to who the one in Tamara's dream is; Rama. It's visualizing the moment of Rama's mental torture. In his mind, everyone is laughing and mocking him. It also pictures the moment of his last attempt of suicide (the loud CRACK is the sound of bones breaking)
Aand nope, I'm not in a joint-doll community :"3 maybe similar nicknames?
It keeps jamming and closing on the part where tamara is talking to mitra about the picture of his parents. Is there something I can do to fix this? or will I have to download it again?
Hmm... this is new o.o the renpy version shouldn't have this bug... I suggest to re-download and try playing it in window mode not full-screen mode. It should make it lighter for our computer's RAM ><
My formal bahasa indonesia sucks to be honest :"D I intentionally chose foreigners as my market so I can share Indonesian unique traditions with them.
Also, I work alone; I don't know how to localize it except from programming it again from scratch after translating. It will consume too much time and I prefer to use that time to make a new story.
Omg, this visual novel is just amazing, especially how you mixed the Indonesian culture with ancient and modern. It's just SO beautiful. No words can describe how much I've loved it.
Oh, can I know what piece you used for the title screen? I really love the music, it's very soothing~
*I haven't read Reksa's route yet so I'll be editing this as soon as I'm done, I promise. xD*
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Hm.. I can't say for sure seeing as I've only read two routes. There's some other decision I want to try on Rama's as well to see what will happen. If I had to just pick from those two, I'd probably say Rama's? I'm not quite sure why. Mitra is very much someone I've always looked up to as a man seeing that he's the ideal life partner and all but there's something about Rama that makes him really special.
What makes you consider to play this game?
The first thing that drew me in was the aesthetics, so basically the beautiful drawings. That's the big picture. Then there were these small intricate details that were linked to the culture that drew me in even more. I'm really clueless about it but I think I've learned quite a lot about the culture through this VN and I'm glad I know now. It's really amazing. Then the plot. When I read it on the website, I was interested almost immediately.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Overall, I think it's definitely something you could even sell with a pricetag on it. The whole experience was very immersive with the background music and noises, making it seem like you were really experiencing it in the moment. I think what stands out the most is the story. Each character has their own story to tell and I feel that Rama's is the one that's most interesting to me so far. (I have yet to read Reksa's. :P)
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Hm.. I can't say I do. This novel was a package. Sure, it lacked voice acting since most novels introduce in their pieces to make them stand out more but to be completely honest, I doubt this VN even needed it. It's perfect. It didn't need anything extra to make it anymore perfect than it already is.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
I'm happy to know you enjoyed the Winged Ones very much! ^///^ The title screen's music is from soundimage.org titled "RPG Theme". The title is very creative isn't it :"))
1. Aah I see o.o Mitra does based on an image of ideal partner we've always wanted though so you're right :'3 I'll look forward to hear which one is your favourite after you've read them all! >\\\<
2. Aww thanks! I'm glad to hear you like my art :"3 but I do have a lot more to learn and improve -the Fantasy genre is flexible and there are lots to explore! However, I'm planning to have the mini encyclopedia permanently and will always apply some indonesian element if possible x')
3. Thank you :"D you noticed the small details! I'll do my best to make more interesting VNs in the future to meet your expectations! My 2nd project is a lot longer and complicated than the Winged Ones, so I hope you'll give it a chance later ><
And yup, I believe that every character will have their own stories to tell and roles to fill. That's why NPCs deserves at least a silhouette :"D Rama has the heaviest story from the other two and some people don't have the patience with him so I'm glad you like him! X'D
4. ... I'm touched you call my baby perfect QuQ I did my best, but to be objective, there are still some loopholes and things I can to improve! Do wait for my 2nd project and see if I've lvl-ed up or not!
5. YAY! *hugs* I'll be counting on you to share the love when my 2nd project's IndieGoGo campaign come to life! :"D
Thanks for visiting and see you in the near future!
So I finally managed to finish all the routes, I can't seem to get 3 CG's from Tamara, Rama and Reksa. No idea what I'm doing wrong, lul. Anyway! I read Reksa's route and I think I've finally decided who I love the most. Reksa~ xD He's just extremely adorable. Rama has this tendency to push you away before finally giving in whereas Reksa draws you in from the getgo and doesn't let you go after that. (/ *0*)/ That's really sweet. He's my fave, woo. >///< 'MINE!' xD (I still love Rama too but Reksa more, haha)
Welcome back Arisa! Wow you're quite fast x'D and you're welcome. The musics in soundimage.org are free so feel free to download them but credit the creator ~
The 3 CGs are probably the sad endings. I know that all of you want only the happy ends but if you want to complete the CGs, try and read the sad ends x'D
Aaand Reksa got himself another fan! Hahahah, I'll deliver your love to him :'3
Thanks for playing and hope to see you again in the future!
I love it so much, so far i've only been able to play Mitra but the feels in his route got to me. The art is gorgeuos too, I love all the characters ,and am living for Tamara's hair. Spoiler alert but does Rama die no matter what in Mitras route? Because when I played I was like damn I killed him , what did I do wrong.
There's a couple of Grammatical errors, and I'm usually very picky about them ,but I loved the story so much It was easy to ignore. Also there's some issues for I assume the Mac version. I am unable to click options without it bugging out ,and bringing to an programming looking window . I also cannot fast foward.
I may be jumping the gun a little to soon, for i've only played one route so far. But when you finish your other Visual Novel if the price is reasonable! Heck yes I will buy it.
Thanks TheRosetteWolf! I'm flattered you love the story enough to ignore the flaws :"D really, that's so sweet of you. Even to the point you support me by wanting to buy my 2nd VN >< I'll do my best to improve my programming skill!
I'll also look forward to hear your thoughts after finishing all 3 routes! ^,^
As for Rama's route...
*SPOILER ALERT*
Yes, he will die except if you managed to get into his route >< his route is the trickiest of all 3 so I suggest you save often or see a walkthrough.
As for the option error... nope, that error also appeared in PC & Linux version just because I forgot to download a font and put it into the 'game' file ^^;
If you want to fix it, read the error message and look at what file is missing (I'm sorry, I'm ashamed to say I forgot which font it is since it's a long time ago OTL...), download the font, rename it like the error's file name wanted, put it in 'game' file, and it should run.
Again, I'm sorry for such amateur-ish mistakes ^^;
As for the cannot fast forward... it should be automatically fast forward when you press CTRL in PC version so it should be either pressing CTRL or CMD. I can fast forward using CTRL in my mac though O.O; pls inform me again if you still can't fast forward when you pressed those buttons.
Okay i've played all the routes ,and gosh i'm at a lost for words. I enjoyed and loved playing it so much! I wanna start by saying I loved all the guys ,but I do have favorites.
While I did love Rama (his little 'stalking' escapades warmed my heart.) I'd have to say my favorites are Mitra ,and Reksa.
Mitra: This guy right here! Just like described is like a big ole teddy bear, he is such a precious cinnamon roll, and despite his giant stature is the most gentle of characters. He's also very easy on the eyes XD I was shocked at how sweet ,amiable, and understanding he was , especially in Reska's route.
Reska: I legitimately squealed near the end of his route , it was slightly more mature of an ending than the others (which if you want to make it even more mature you know ;) i'm not complaining). I loved how possessive he was of mc , and it never came off as being creepy or rude which is good considering Tamara's traumatic past. It just made my heart flutter even more when he would huskily growl "mine" at Tamara ahhh boy did I enjoy his route.
Rama: Omg poor baby, seriously there's only one thing that made me like the other guys route a little more than his ,and it wasn't too big of a deal. Because I mean at least he told her he loved her in the end ,and they shared a few super sweet kisses. Also he got closure which his also a nice touch ,and i'm a huge fan of unrequited love being reciprocated. So his route would of been right up my ally ,however this is just me being picky; Near the end of his route, I was craving a strong establishment of a relationship between him and Tamara. Because, In Mitra's route he "courts" her , and in Reska's route he makes her his "mate" perhaps I just expected it. With Rama we surmise-no wrong word- we know that they will end up together. However, ugh i'm just so persnickety about certain things, and I wanted him to court her just like Mitra. Or exchange something that would promise themselves to each other, like he gives her one of his feathers and she gives him a lock of her pretty blue hair. For Rama because his route is sad ,and extra sad in the others route, omg i'm so bad with tragedy, but because of this I wanted and extra happy ending. I know he has circumstances that probably make him reluctant to court Tamara, he mentions all the time being unworthy of her. But, its the fact that his route is so sad, that I wanted to see him super happy, with some cute blue haired kiddos , with brown wings, and icy-blue eyes. Okay sorry I went a little overboard, but honestly I still really enjoyed his route. It was still a very happy ending which always makes a game worth it. Also I loved how tsunderish he was at times, refusing to admit he has feelings for Tamara, but when someone tries to flirt or court her he's ready to rip their wings out XD
Also the side characters, we also so lovable, Granny Sukma, Asih , and Yuda. I loved them so much too!
Ahh I would love sequels , or epilogues for this game. Ugh just blue haired babies with cute little wings, or mask on their heads. I know it's not possible , but just so you know the fact that I'm asking just shows how much I loved your game.
Thank you so much for giving us the wonderful game to play for free. I can't wait for your next game.
Oh also you already know how much I like your art, but I'll mention it again here. The whole game was beautiful, also when I have time I don't mind helping you with any grammatical errors, only if you want. I'm not 100% confident that i'll be able to make every thing correct, but i'm not too terrible at finding grammatical mistakes.
YAY! You came back so fast! X'D I thought it will need another day or two for you to finish lol.
Your review made me smile first thing in the morning! Thanks! :'D
Aww, I'm so happy you gave the three of them a chance and loved every one of them :'D and yes, Mitra is the most fluffy-sweet route compared to the others! I enjoyed writing them too, but somewhat sad when he got overshadowed by the other bachelors. I'm happy that you noticed his worth :'D
While Reksa... *cough* I often asked myself how did his scenes became so... more mature than the others x'D I sometimes became embarassed when I read his scenes hahahah. I'm glad that a lot of people like this tho :'3
And Rama... I think I know exactly how you feel!
Even I sometimes wanted to pull my hair off whenever Rama became so nitpicky/standoff-ish with Tamara. Heck, she was probably a saint at how patient she was in Rama's route :")) if she didn't relate so much with Rama, I think she will pull off HIS hair hahah x'D his stalkering scene was also one of my favorites <3
Anyways... I'm also a fan of making fluffy/romantic scenes, especially strong ones, but sadly, Rama's psychology won't allow him to be able to accept another person in his heart so fast and he will need a lot of time to get out of his self-depreciating mentality :'( but thanks for the input in this one! You didn't go overboard at all, I'll take note and consider a longer epilogue/extra scene if I create another bachelor with similar circumtances.
Lastly, thanks for liking my art and even offered to be a proofreader >\\\< Currently, I have 2 active proofreaders in my 2nd project. I'll let you know if I decide to get another one/for my next project in the future ^///^
Haha omg i'm laughing because you are so right! I loved the game so much I played through it all night ,and when I got back home from class played it again. I was a zombie in class today XD but it was worth it. Also i'm glad I made you smile, can't wait for your next game.
Which bachelor you like the most? and why? (spoilers)
After playing through all 3, Mitra is still my favourite (I chose him first). Reksa and Rama each have their own appeals, but I feel the deciding point was when Mitra was the only one who helped Tamara to let go of her past. In this way, the relationship had felt more equal in a sense. (Not to mention, Mitra is a huge cuddly cinnamon roll that makes me laugh at his courting attempts) In addition, from the stand point of Tamara being almost raped, Reksa and the Komodo's culture might not be so suitable for her. I'm pretty sure Reksa would never intentionally hurt her or force her into anything, just that I feel Tamara and him have a few hurdles to go through before 'that' happens.
The crazy amount of patience Tamara shows with Rama doesn't seem very realistic. Though I feel sympathetic towards Rama, ultimately that's all I feel there is. Pity. Which Rama also pointed it out in the game and I thought it was pretty ironic. There wasn't enough moments between Rama and Tamara that make me feel their connection is real.
I also notice Rama has the most amount of CGs in the game and Mitra has the least! Being a Mitra (and Reksa) fan, maybe in the next game, you may want to consider balancing it?
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
Art. And I'm aiming to play every VN offered in Itch.io. The beautiful cover art of Reksa definitely helped too.
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
The real life tradition references. This is one part that I feel no other VNs have managed to convey very well. The story telling is pretty amazing either, I honest to good burst out laughing when the aunties and even the guards were speculating on the relationship between Mitra and Tamara. This buildup make the final part of Omed-omedan very believable that the 2 villages are all in it to matchmake them to be together. I thought it was also important that Asih, Yuda and Granny are extremely likable and realistic. As I have a few Indonesian friends, and based on their stories, this is exactly how their family works, very loving and cohesive. Their local community is also very close-knitted and warm, and my friends had also draw parallels how Jarkarta with its lack of trees, frequent heavy traffic congestion and how modern it is, had lack the 'soul' or the 'kampong' spirit. Your VN is a very beautiful callback to Indonesia's old ways (though of course it still exist in modern times), and it's an absolute delight for an non-Indonesian to see it. Good work!
4. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Answer as per point 1. But I need to mention this is an amazing game (this is the only game in itch.io that I review and that says a lot), one that I truly appreciate as a fellow South East Asian, especially because the traditions are real that makes it even more relatable and give an extra depth to the story. I hope in the next VN you are making, has real world references too! It really make your game 'pop out' in the sea of VNs out there.
Finally, it may be a bit misleading but based on the prologue, I had thought there is more to it between the distance conveyed between Tamara's parents. How her mother grew cold, but it only ended with a footnote that her father died and her mother died later (out of depression?). This isn't very well-explained.
5. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Of course! Just not exorbitant crazy prices. :p Your players also need to eat, for electricity to play your VN, etc)
Your review really made my day! You pointed out the flaws I've been itching to know and this is definitely constructive for my future projects :"D
1. Congrats! You're the first person to notice and tell what's differences in Mitra's route compared to others! It was a hard topic for Tamara, but she did mention it in Rama's route, remember? X') Hmm... I'll discuss Rama's route more in answer number 4.
Yes, thanks for reminding me! I did want to balance it, but unexpected things happened in editing Rama's route and before I knew it, the numbers grew O.O; I'll do my best to balance the numbers in the future but no promises >< I edit the script very often and the characers sometimes act on their own *is this makes sense to you? :'D if not, don't worry, I'm surprised too about how this happen*. But usually, I'll always make CGs for important scenes/moments.
2. Yay! Thanks for liking my art ^///^
3. Yes, I agree! I believe that every character in a VN have their own purpose, and their relationships with each other are one of the elements which will make our VN 'alive', yes?
I also thought that traditional Indonesia has the most 'charm' compared to modern indonesia now >< the beautiful nature, simple life style, close knitted community, how they 'work together' with nature, etc etc... when I went to a mountain/beach/Tidung island for vacation, I always thought; how wonderful it would be if I live there. That's what I want to convey in Nusantara and I'm very glad you caught it!
4. Yes, thank you! I also want to keep having the mini encyclopedia feature in every of my VNs :") my 2nd project will try a mixture of modern-traditional-cross-country next, so i hope you can try it and see if I pulled it off or not ><
As for Rama's route... yep, I agree that Rama is so frustrating and sometimes, I just want to wring his neck or pull his hair until he is bald :")) Tamara is probably a saint to be able to bear it. But the major factor is that she has 'related' herself and Rama. Their past are like heaven and earth and she was dumbfounded at how Rama could just throw it all away when there was a chance/hope that it was all a misunderstanding. I hope this helps? X'D as for Reksa's route, she didn't reveal it because there was no need for it and she left it in the past along with her world when she decided to stay there.
Wow this is very enlightening O.O I think my story-telling skill needs to be polished until I can convey all that in paragraphs x.x
Thanks again for pointing this out! <3
5. Good point x'D thanks for the support and the price I'm thinking of is kinda in the middle area and there will be early birds in he IndieGoGo so... I hope you can get it! X')
There are two ideas regarding this; Tamara could use her hair by braiding a small amount of it and made it into an earring OR she could make the earring herself by choosing the materials herself. The important thing is that the earring should symbolize 'TAKEN' and the people who see it should roughly be able to guess who is his/her spouse.
In my mind, the bachelors would first suggest the braided hair since it's simple and the most obvious choice since she is the only bluenette there (Rama would be the most enthusiastic about this lol x'D).
1. I thought Rama would be my favorite, but then I played Reska's route, and now I am so torn.. I guess Rama has me on a most emotional level, but Reska was my overall favorite in terms of route. I like jerks who become soft around the right people.. (though Mitra is ultimate husband material....... / aka all of them were great)
2. I saw if was a free-to-play, visual novel, where you could date cute boys. That's all it takes. I also liked what I saw in terms of screenshots, so I decided to play it.
3. I like the art, and overall look of it the most. The characters are really amazing, though I wish the MC was a bit more.. well... toned down in term of colors (aesthetic reasons) - also the concept/story is pretty great.
// Skipped question four because I don't have any questions. My only "critique" is kinda mentioned in number four, but that is just my own visual preferences setting in.
5. I would definitely consider buying a visual novel done by you.
This game is just AWESOME!!>< As an Indonesian I'm very proud of it and you are basically introduce Indonesian culture in a good way to everyone who played this game :) You deserve my deepest gratitude lol ^.^
Oh god, this was good. I just...wow. It felt like a journey. I laughed at parts, I cried at parts, and I even fangirled at others. This game was just amazing.
NOW ONTO THE QUESTIONS (warning- possible spoilers):
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
This was a bit hard to choose, but my favorite would definitely be Reksa. I think it was mostly because of his character development. Witnessing him turn from an unapproachable jerk to reluctant friend and then to possessive boyfriend was really nice. It felt realistic and was paced perfectly.
What makes you consider to play this game?
I saw this on my recommended list on this site, and after reading some of the reviews, I decided to try it out.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Um, I LOVED it??? :DDD It was just amazing. I felt a lot of things. Honestly, I haven't played through the bad endings yet because I just got attached to all of the bachelors.
Specifically though, I loved the characters and character development of all of the characters, not just the bachelors. It makes it feel like I could meet people like them in real life. I also liked how Tamara had her own story too, unlike the other heroines from other otome games. The overall plot I thought was very creative. This game also teaches valuable life lessons, like to strive for peace instead of war (some people really need to know this if you know what I mean).
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
How long did it take you to make this?
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Probably? It really depends on the cost. Also, I haven't played your other games, so I don't have a really good idea of your style yet.
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AHHHHH I REALLY DON'T WANT TO PLAY THE BAD ENDINGS BUT AT THE SAME TIME I KIND WANT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS BUT I DON'T WANT TO SEE BAE SUFFER AHHHHHHHHHH what a dilemma
Thanks for visiting and your kind review :"D I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed my VN and got immersed until you laugh and cry along with it ><
1. Aww thank you :"D a lot of people love Reksa hahahah, but I'm so relieved when you say the pace is perfect! I'm quite worried about it ><
2. Oh gosh, my baby is on someone's recommendation list! *bounceonthewallinhappiness*
Ah I'm so glad to know there are people still giving this a try, enjoyed it, and share it to others ^///^ it's all I ask and more!
3. I don't think I can smile any wider now lol x'D
Characters development is very fun and if I can help it, I want to make colored NPCs and not just their silhouettes but unfortunately, I only have a pair of hands :'(
I'm also happy to know you like the story! I like stories with some meaningful values in it, like Hayao Miyazaki's movies >< of course, mine is still not perfect and I still have a lot to learn but wait and see! I will try my best to make more interesting stories in the future ^///^
4. I made the demo during college for my final exam and then continue making it alongside college... I think around 2 years? Take and give some months since I re-make it using ren'py too hahah. The novelty version has too many bugs ><
5. So far, Winged Ones is my only completed VN x'D my second one is called Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle and currently in progress! Take a look if you can, but fair warning, if you've saw Winged Ones bad endings and thought it's scary, Bermuda Triangle will be... much darker so... :"D
Last but not least, thanks for visiting and your warm support!
OMFG IT WAS SO GOOD! I JUST FINISHED MY FIRST PLAY THROUGH AND I GOT MITRA'S GOOD END AND JHDH GJVHEFGJVFYHDCR
Which bachelor you like the most? and why? okay, so I've only played once so Mitra is currently my fav, but Rama and Reksa both seem pretty interesting so it's subject to change lol but Mitra will always be first bae
What makes you consider to play this game? What got me interested at first was the artwork. It looked really cool.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?) After one play through, definitely characters. They're the strongest element, but story is a very close second. I fell in love with this and got attached soooo quick. (Slight spoilers! And I was attached enough that I cried when Rama died. I was like, Mitra's lying, he's going to pop up later, maybe he was just captured but darn it he's not dead! I was sad to find out he really was. And I felt mildly guilty for it.)
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.I can't really think of any critiques, no xD It was really good, and not chock full of cliches like a lot of VNs. I will admit that I'm curious about your inspiration for it. I assume some of it comes from Southeast Asian folklore since you mentioned Malin Kundang in the beginning?
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD) Probably lol this one was great. Color me impressed! And good job!
Thanks for visiting and wow, I can feel your love and enthusiasm all the way from there x'D
1. Ah, I'm so proud that Mitra finally got another fan! Hahah, he needs more love x'D things will get milder when you go to Rama's and Reksa's route though so prepare yourself! :')
2. Aww you flatter me! Thank you >\\\<
3. I'm a but touched when I hear this ^///^ at first you got attracted by my art but then the story hooked you -there's nothing I can ask for more <3
*and yes, Rama's route made me so sad when I first write it :'( I thought I can find another way, but Rama's psychology simply won't allow it T_T
4. Yuuup, I'm a chinese-Indonesian and I love the various cultures here even though I havent experience the majority of them ><
I got inspired whenever my brain decided to go to lala land and popped an idea or two lol. It's usually late at night or at inappropriate places such as the toilet x'D
5. Aww thank you! Look forward to my next project called Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle! ^///^
Here's some cyber cookies and hope to see you around :"D
(NO PLOT SPOILERS, BUT...KIND OF. KIND OF SPOILERS. BEWARE!!!!)
First off... OH. MY. ASDFGHJKL. I literally almost started crying like .5 minutes ago because I realized that I just finished nearly all of the routes and I really don't know what I'm going to do with my life now because NUSANTARA! >.<
-Which bachelor you like the most? and why? So, first off...your characters. Absolutely beautiful, I loved them all, from the MC and her spunky quirkiness - I personally connected with the MC on a spiritual level lol xD - to the side characters to the bachelors. Frick, I wanted more, so much more, because they were all so frickin amazing! If I had to choose one bachelor, however...I would have to settle with Mitra. -- *Mitra :: 12.521343/10Overall my absolute favorite, and that's saying something. I'm usually all over the tsundere or cold, aloof types, definitely not one for the sweet, loving gentleman. And to be honest, I was really surprised that not many liked him as much - Reksa and Rama ranking the highest, although Reksa looked like he took gold with Rama a close second xD He had both weaknesses and strengths that came across to me as I was playing, whether you intended them to or not, and a lot of those strengths were also some of his weaknesses. I'd keep going, but being a writer, I could write my fingers raw discussing these points and all the character development. Also, his story was light, sweet, and engaging, I literally played it for like...2+ hours straight? *Reksa :: 8/10 Really enjoyed Reksa's story, probably my favorite route due to the story itself and the insight we got on the Komodo tribe and culture. I really loved your Avians and fell more in love with learning about the Komodos too. I wasn't the biggest fan of Reksa himself - although the level of sexuality in this route was considerably higher than the other ones, I didn't mind that c: -, as I thought he was a little too forceful and pushy, too bossy. He also felt a little sexist, constantly calling you woman when he was irritated you or stressed or whatever, and I wasn't all over that. Although I did think I got a sort of feel that the Komodo tribe seems to value men over women, so that sort of sexist behavior could be explained through that sort of cultural outlook? Maybe?? Lol maybe I just imagined it????? xD (Again, it's that author thing, I read too in between the lines sometimes) Again, I loved Reksa's route a ton, and his possessiveness of the MC might/kind of/sorta/maybe have been hot. Maybe. :> Plus, I keep forgetting to mention, your CG's and GUI's and every other piece of artwork is simply beautiful~ *Rama :: 5/10 *shiver* Oh my Rama. Rama, Rama, Rama...I love dark and heavy material, it makes one think and it takes one to the edge of feeling but...holy crap Rama was messed. I found his character to be incredibly intriguing, although mentally unstable and unpredictable. His route terrified me, mostly because I accidentally got the bad ending at 11 at night and just stared, mouth agape with a high-pitched whine, as he...did...what he...did...in that bad ending. *double shiver* He was incredibly interesting though, and I'd love to know more about him. I'm sure he has an incredibly intriguing backstory; lol like I keep saying, I'd love to know more about him - and now I can't stop wondering what Ayu and his twin look like, or at least, how you'd design them.
OVERALL, YOUR BACHELORS WERE 15/5, THEY WERE SO FRICKIN AMAZING, I APPLAUD YOU!! *cue raucous applauding and fangirl screaming*
-What makes you consider to play this game? The art interested me. The art and the 10,000 downloads I saw when I clicked on this game's synopsis. I was like, 'Well, it can't be all that bad then'. And then. The wings. I've got a thing for shirtless men with wings and skirts. xD And then at some point, it became the bachelors and story that hooked me, and I've been addicted ever since.
-Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? I still can't believe it's over. Sigh. This VN was phenomenal, and believe me, I've played quite a few. Absolutely wonderful, a 5/5, 10/10, 5 stars, two thumbs up, a Nobel Peace prize winner and a candidate for the Grammys. The elements that stand out the most...frick, all of them. The artwork was fantastic and simply marvelous, what more can I say there? The characters were so real for me, that I actually felt for a brief second that, yeah, they're like a 2d virtual family, what the heck? And the story? Wonderfully unique and intriguing. The Indonesian culture was a very nice way to spice it up, really added some wonderful cultural aspects that I just ate up. Also, your design of their distinct societies - the Komodos and Avians - was incredibly innovative, I just loved it! I was disappointed that there weren't anymore bachelors because honestly, you wrote everything so well, I wanted more to play through~ xD Plus, the music. THE MUSIC.
-Do you have any question or constructive critiques? What are your plans for coming back to this world? Will you be making a sequel, or are you considering it? Because I'd be all over that. Also...epilogues or spin-off stories or...or something for our feathery bachelor friends, you've gotta have more in the works. Right??? :) Regarding constructive critiques...I'd simply have someone go over the text one more time. :) You did a fantastic job, though, there were only a few grammatical and verb conjugation errors.
-Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? I WILL BE THERE WITH ALL THE MONEY.
P.S I may or may not want to create a tumblr for headcanons now?? You've literally ruined my life, but thank you, thank you for doing so c:
Lol your nickname made me thought there's something wrong with itch.io for a sec x'D
First of all, Thank you for your warm support and appreciation! <3 >\\\< your post today made my day and I think will help me with today's progress ^///^
1. Wow you evem made a rating for each of them! I'm even more humbled when I knew that both of us are writers ><
- Mitra: Yup, the girls here likes bad boys the most but we have to admit that Mitra would be the one we'd likely to choose irl, right? X'D *cough*
And yes! His route is exactly as you described *light, sweet, and engaging*. I kind of stacking the fluff there >< both intended and not. Whenever I write a bachelor's route, the dialogues often changes and adapts by itself.
- Reksa: yes! I'm a bit sad myself that I can't write more about the Komodo's daily life like in Avians >< they're interesting by itself.
And yes lol. Indonesian tend to be traditionalists especially the older generations x'D even now, there might still a belief where women just need to work at home and care for children or 'the more children we have, the more wealth' lol. Ah it depends on each individual and certain places but the culture is very thick over here!
Rama: oh lol I get this a lot x'DD
Rama is definitely scary and the most roller-coaster route from all 3! A pat to your shoulder who played his route late in the night :")
I, myself, often question his character and laughed in embarrassment when the music changes a lot like a PMS-ing girl in some scenes (why and how did I write it :"D).
His route is the most challenging too but the result is better than I thougt though o.o
oh, but fair warning; if you got scared by his route, be warned that my next project; especially the Antagonist's route, will be darker than Rama's route >< there will be some... gorey details and actions *cough*
And aww, you flatter me too much with that 15/10 rate >\\\\< I still have much to learn and it was certainly not easy to polish their character and scenes x_x you can definitely do it too with enough time!
2. Lol we're on the same boat! I like anything that involves fantasy... especially wings and topless... and I remember in the past where men still wear *Sarung* or skirt tied to their waist at night and went out with other men to play cards. The skirt apparently longer than it seems, could be untied, and wrapped around their bodies instead when they're cold O.o
3. Aww you flatter me so much to the point I'm grinning myself like a fool x'DD I need my needle to deflate my big head later *cough*
4. Hmm I'm not sure about spin-offs but I'm considering more epilogues in the future since a lot of people asked for that :"D as for new project... check my account! My 2nd project is called Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle <3 I update every Monday in lemmasoft and facebook fanpage~
5. Last but not least, thanks for your warm support! >\\\\< this definitely made my day early in the morning ~
And feel free with the headcannons! Maybe more people will get to enjoy Nusantara if you do that ^////^
lol I was so worried for a second that you'd be rolling your eyes at my humongous post and be all like, 'Man, another critic,' because unfortunately I tend to get a little wordy lol :>
I'm actually so pumped for your next game (gore and all lol c:); also about those epilogues you mentioned *cue fangirl squealing*. I'm going to try to go for Rama's good route later this week, because intense and as 'feels'y as he is, I have to see some sort of happiness for the little rascal. ^^" (He is kinda PMSy, but like in the good way. xD ...Maybe all he needs is a good chocolate bar and everything will be better).
I know I hashed this enough, but thank you again for this game, your characters are already finding their way in my sketchbooks lol :) I'm glad I was able to make your day all those days ago with my review lol, we writers need that sort of boost!! (*level up*) :D If you need anyone for editing or testing or any sort of writing brainstorm ideas or anything, please feel free to shoot me a message or anything. :) I'd love to help your beautiful masterpieces come to life somehow - since I'm clueless myself to programming and can't bring my own ideas into VN form, might as well help others, right? :D :D
Anyway.
Thank you again for bringing this into the world. :D
Oh god, Reksa. Definitely Reksa. From the work it took to gain his affection, to the intensity of his romantic scenes. His playthrough was a goldmine for giggles and awkward blushing. (hard to play nonchalantly in public)
What makes you consider to play this game?
Honestly, the art is what interested me to begin with. As I read about it though, the story really intrigued me and I just HAD to know more. Wasn't disappointed either.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
With gorgeous art and a fantastically written story, this game was a winner. The characters have wonderfully complex backstories that only add to the charm of the game. 12/10. I played every route to experience all the game had to offer and am far from dissapointed!! The character depth definitely stood out the most to me. I need more Reksa to go on living, though.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques?
I have nothing to complain about. Nothing at all. Questions? hmm... could you supply more Reksa at some point? maybe standalone epilogues of the good routes?
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
Yes. I am an independent white woman who don't need no man (besides Reksa). I am totally willing to pay for these wonderful works of art. $10? $20? bring it on. Your'e worth it! I'll donate to and buy whatever you throw my way. For real though. Standalone epilogues. Hell, make em 99 cents a piece and bring in some money on the deal. It'll add up before you know it.
Hi Autumn Fawn! I love your nickname and profile pic! >\\\\< so adorable... *I'm so weak to cute things lol*
1. Thanks! I'm starting to think I might be a bit bias with Reksa's story looking at how steep the popularity difference now x'D
2. Aww glad to hear you like both my art and story! :"D I'm still have a lot to learn and improve though!
3. You give me too much credit, my head is going to bloat lol x'D *prepares a sharp stick to deflate it later*
Thanks! I'll do my best in my 2nd project too for you :"D
4 & 5. Lol a lot of people asked me this, I'm starting to think that maybe it's a good idea to make anothes set of epilogues for them x'D at least I have all the assets ready so I just need to do the writing.... hmm... I'll think about it :"D
Thanks for visiting! Also for the love and chance you gave to my boys!
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1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
I absolutely adored Mitra and knew that I would right from the start. He is just that honorable, sweet, loving man every woman deserves. The way he courts Tamara is so beautiful. Everything about him is just awesome. I loved the other two as well, just not quite as much. Reksa is passionate and possessive, but not overly so, just enough to make him hot. I also thought Rama's story was beautifully written and executed. He was someone that I felt an instant connection with and also someone that I could relate to. I did his path first and that made it much harder for me when he died in later paths. I may have cried a few times.
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
I was looking for a visual novel I knew I wouldn't want to immediately put down and this one caught my eye. The artwork stood out right away, but I think the description sold it for me. I got the impression that the story would be engaging enough to keep me interested and I was not disappointed. From the very bottom of my heart, thank you for being original.
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
This VN is a masterpiece. The thing that stood out the most for me were the characters, all of them. I fell in love with Asih and Yuda very early on and Sukma felt like family. I was really invested in trying to make their world better for them. It says a lot about your story-telling abilities that I cared so much about them. The avians will forever hold a special place in my heart.
4. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I know others have already stated as much, but the grammar is off in parts and it took me a minute to understand what was being stated sometimes. It isn't the spelling, just the way things are worded that threw me a bit. It's not off enough for it to affect the way I feel about the story or characters, just enough that I noticed it was a problem. Also, I don't think I enjoyed Reksa's path quite as much as I should have simply because I didn't get as much interaction with the other characters and I felt wrong lying to and stealing from people who were genuinely good to me. I understand the reasoning behind it, it just made me feel so guilty that I found it difficult to really invest in his route the way I would have wanted.
5. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Absolutely, I would buy it. You deserve to be paid just like any other game creator. I am aware of your Bermuda Triangle project and am keeping a close eye on the development of that game:) That being said, thanks so much for making this one free so that I could discover you and your talents.
Edit: Spelling error.
Hi luvmyboyz!
Thanks for spraing some time to review!
1. First of all, I'm sorry for this long overdue reply and thank you for giving all three bachelors a chance!
I'm happy to see Mitra getting popular lately, but I agree that the way he courted Tamara was very beautiful! It was very fun to write and I sometimes blushed whenever I re-read that particular event... *sigh* and thank you! There's nothing that can make me happier to hear my story managed to touch your heart until you cry :') thanks for playing & thanks for enjoying this game thoroughly from beginning until end!
2. You're welcome! I was pretty skeptical at first but I'm glad to see many people welcoming my concept with open arms!
3. You flatter me >< I still have lots to learn and there are rooms for improvement -however, I do believe that every character is important. After all, everyone has a story to tell and their relationships with each other are one of the elements that will make my VN feels 'alive'. Thank you for giving so much love to Yuda, Asih, and Sukma :'D
4. Yuup, my nemesis from the past years until now is still grammar x_x I have proofreaders and despite the multiple checking, there're always some things we fail to notice. I just hope it's not too awkward/disturb your experience ^^;
and yes, I noticed that Reksa's route is much more 'desolate' compared to the others >< and sorry for making you feel guilty but the situation demands it u.u
5. Thanks for your support luvmyboyz! I progress much slower compared to other teams though so I hope you can be patient and walk beside me until it's finished :'3
Thanks again and see you again in the future!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
WARNING SPOILERS.
So...I was replaying Reksa's route and I found this while almost falling out of the tree with Rama..
Nice. I re-found the typo.
Edit: When I got to the Reksa vs Puba scene I found a minor thing, but its a line that moved above Reksa when he moved and it vanished a couple of times. Im going to the Good End btw too. Lol It kinda looks like a bird or cloud. While Im watching them fight, it might follow Puba instead? No clue.
Oh, my! Thank you 69;)!
Hahah, I keep missing small things like these x'D
That thing above Reksa's head is a colour in his sprite that I forgot to erase. So yup, it's from the sprite file x_x
Thanks for telling me about it & I'm sorry about my clumsiness ><
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Lol its okay! We are all human we make mistakes! I was amused when I found it too
Im also excited about your new game. Too bad it aint a sequel, I really would enjoy one!
Edit: I was looking at your typo and laughed. You have the word pun in there . Thats a great pun too! Haha.
I loved this game SO much! Also, what is the music on the main menu screen called? Also, Reksa is amazing and HOOOOOOTTT!!
Thanks Frostfire175!
The title of the music on main menu is RPGTheme_v001 by Eric Matyas! He made a lot of free musics in soundimage.org!
thx<3
RESKA IS BAE! XD
i would love to see a sequel of this game.You have done an incredible job on this Sweet! Keep up the great work ☺
Thanks rebelxpure!
Lots of people suggested it but I'm still somewhat skeptical >< let's just see in the future whether I will get a vision or inspiration to write small sequels for the boys ~
no problem, and if there is no sequel and I am looking forward to the new games you create.
I did have a question would you ever consider hearing ideas from your gamer fans. ^^
no problem, and if there is no sequel and I am looking forward to the new games you create.
I did have a question would you ever consider hearing ideas from your gamer fans. ^^
Do you have any plans to have the characters be voiced? And if so, would I be able to audition?
No disrespect by the way. This is in my top 5 favorite otomes (I've played a great many of them >.>). I just have this overwhelming desire to know what exactly was meant here, or maybe I'm just dumb.
lol no problem at all ivyThesaurus x'D thanks for dropping by and ask!
That is just Tamara and her awful sense of rhyme. Really :")) she thought 'no strength to figHT because of an empty stomaCH" those two sounds similar in a forced way lol.
Finished all three routes yesterday and I have to say, I'm really impressed with how well done this visual novel is. What I love the most is how it is based on Indonesian culture (including the character design of the bachelors) and I learned quite a bit about it. I'd love to see more games with non-white characters and real world cultures. Also Reksa is best guy, don't even try to convince me otherwise.
Hi triquester! Thanks for visiting and telling me your thought!
I'm really happy to hear you finished all routes & enjoyed yourself ^///^ I was quite worried since I'm still learning how to mix Indonesian cultures with Fantasy, but gosh, I was so relieved by your warm welcome!
My next project (Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle) also have Indonesian cultures, but this one will be more complex since I'm assimilating it with fantasy AND another culture. If you're still interested in the future, please give it a try and tell me if I'm doing good or not.
Thanks again and hope to see you again!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
I didn't think you would reply omg I'm- (O//A//O)
I think you did a great job with mixing Indonesian culture with fantasy and I already have your next project on my watch list! <3
(The part below this contains spoilers, read at your own discretion)
I forgot to mention in my last comment that I also really liked Rama's route (
but Reksa is still my waifu) because of your depiction of mental illnesses. I liked that it took him long to accept his feelings for the MC and that she didn't pressure him into anything and stayed by his side. As a person who has a mental illness, it made me really happy because these kind of things aren't a joke and what we need is not advice, but love and support from the people who mean most to us.(end of spoiler)
Anyway, great game and you'd best be sure that I'll play every single one that you churn out because you are AWESOME :D
AAHH! This is,by far,my favourite visual novel ever. ^^ And keep in mind,I've yet to complete the entire game,having done only one of the routes.The thing that caught my eye was definitely the story,it's a really cool,and I also like the art style.Haven't seen anything like it before,so I like it a lot.All in all,a good game.
P.s. Reksa is bae. :3
Hi vnlover! Thanks for your enthusiasm x'D I see Reksa strikes again hahah
I still have a lot to learn and improve but I'm very happy to hear you like my art & story QuQ
Take your time finishing it & I hope you enjoy it thoroughly until the end!
Hope to see you again,
SweetChiel
Wuh.
Let me say this first. Greetings from Planet Bekasi! XD
I'm SOOO GLAD I finally found another Indonesian VN creator!! ^_^ Now I have more motivation to actually write my own VN. Thank you soooooo much for daring to brave the (non-urban) fantasy genre! You give me hope as a fantasy would-be writer!
I also love how you're not using Wayang as primary inspiration. Not that there's anything wrong with that - it's just that... it's been done like, *forever*, and I'm reaaally tired of seeing Ramayana-Mahabarata characters being recycled in Indonesian fantasy fiction. Like, our country is rich with history and mythology! Wayang isn't the only good source of inspiration, surely XP Thank your for being innovative!
I'll answer your questions once I've finished Rama and Reksa's routes. I chose Mitra first because he's such a sweetheart! I'm a sucker for sweet, gentle guys. I don't know, I feel really... safe around him. He's probably the kind of guy I'd want to marry IRL lol.
On a side note, one of my leading characters' name is Yuda, so it's quite funny to see your Yuda! My Yuda is probably your Yuda's polar opposite lol (he's more like Mitra in terms of personality). And somehow both their lady's names begin with A and only consist of 4 letters (well, at least the nickname). XP Asih and Yuda are sooo cute together, I won't even dare to want Yuda as love interest, heheheh.
Waaah, so sorry for this late reply ><;
Hi CuriousCat and Planet Bekasi! *high five*
I'm so excited to see fellow Indonesian creator! -and yes, you have no idea how much I worried about how people will receive my story x'D After all, there is little to no visual novels that implements Indonesian cultures. But thankfully, the people here have big hearts and the warm welcome astounds me! Be confident with your own story and just do it! x'D yes, people will give you critiques/comments, but as long as it's interesting & you did your best, there will be no regrets!
And lol, Yuda is certainly a good name x'D I spent quite a lot of time browsing javanese names + asking my friends lol
As for Wayang... sadly, I haven't had the chance to watch Wayang so I have no idea what it is about :')) if I do and find something good, I might try and implement it lol -but of course, we must find a good way to tell the readers!
I'm really interested to hear your thoughts so l'lll wait patiently until you finish all the routes :'3
See you again!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Wow. I played this game quite a long, long time ago and just noticed that i actually never left a comment about it even though i could have sworn that i did. To be honest, i don't remember much of the details anymore but i just wanted to thank you for creating such a great game. Cuz even though i may not be able to talk about small details, i remember how much work you obviously put into this game and how much i loved all of the characters, especially Reska since he's still one of my fav characters out of all the hundred otome games i've played so far. The story or at least the choiches that you, as the maincharacter, could make didn't always make sense since i was obviously just interested in Reska but still had to go trough many useless conversations with the other boys and missed out opportunites to talk to Reska, but this may be just my fault cause i could have made one wrong choice and caused these unneccesary events though this. Still, this really is a great game and i'm so gonna play it again these days to fresh up my love for Reska, haha. Thanks for creating this game, seriously! :)
You're welcome komaekabane!
I'm so happy to hear you remembered about WInged Ones even though you played it a long time ago!
Reksa's route is pretty quiet when you first meet him so I understand your 'frustration' about not interacting enough with him & wanting to talk to him more than to the other characters x'D
Again, you're welcome & I'm so very happy to see people still coming & dropping a few comments here and there giving me your support & warm encouragements! It's what pushing me to go forward :'3
Keep up the excellent work (>.<)/
Hi Sora Album!
First of all, let me apologize for this very late reply Q_Q I often forgot to take a look at my itch.io notification. However, I'm really thankful for you to show me the bugs in Winged Ones!
I will definitely fix Asih's sprite + Rama's final CG -it's really intriguing o.o I thought I already reset the CG album but I guess I missed one!
1. Aww thank you! Believe me, I was trying to be as fair as possible & not bias to my babies x'D gotta say that Mitra's route IS the most light-hearted and sweet though. I was experimenting a little you see; Rama's route is complex/hardest, Reksa's is medium, while Mitra is the easy/light-hearted one. I was trying to see which one people likes more :'3 and if my story telling is good enough for all 3 types.
I'm also happy to hear you feel connected to Rama & motivated by his development! *hugs & kisses to you hun, for pulling through that phase!* He definitely needs more love and I was trying to potray depression; to make other people understand how it feels/looks like.
and lol, Yuda sure is more popular than I thought x'D sadly, Asih is already beside him </3 *slapped by Asih along with you*cough*
2. Amen! I also hope to bring more Indonesian culture in the future x'D
3. Aww now you're making me blush >////< I still have lots to learn & improve, but I'll do my best so you won't be disappointed!
4. Yup, noted! I will fix & re-upload the files once my internet stops PMS-ing. I swear it's getting worse when rainy season arrives u.u;
5. No problem at all! I have received your love and thoughts -which is already precious enough to me :'3 good luck with college! stay strong and do things one by one & you'll be surely finished with final project!
See you again in the future!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Hello, there.
I finished your game with the three characters in 24 hours, so here I am...
To begin with, you have to know that I'm french and that we don't have many otome games in our language (and excuse the faults in this message haha). That's why I first came here and looked for a good game, without waiting time to play.
I LOVED it. My god, just addictive.
1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
I support... MITRA !! Yay, Mitra is my looover ! <3 <3 <3 Oh my god, really, at first I was not interested in him, he was too « good-guy » and, frankly, I'm not a fan of kids, while he's always talking about family, projecting himself, etc.... That's the only negative point about his character, to me. The fact is, I totally fucked up with the Reska's route the first time (I couldn't even get to know him, haha, because I chose to be honest) and I always picked up the good choices so I would meet Mitra, without especially wanting it. Hehe, that's the proof I was meant to be his lover. Gradually, I learned to like him. He's sooo sweet (with his little feathers in his hair, aaawh <3), caring, kind, protective without being annoying, comprehensive. Oh, and I find that most of the romantic scenes were in his route, like the wing's performance (<3 !!) and the discussion in the burnt forest, you know after the first attack. Besides, after playing with all the guys, I feel a lot more close to everyone in Mitra's route, because we spent time with Avians, with Yuda, Asih, etc... since Mitra is a chief.
On the contrary, in Reska's route, I really felt like we didn't give a shit about Avians, we never spent time with them, we lied to them, we stole, ... that was too bad. I have to say, I was a little decieved by the story with Reska. I read so many commentaries which sayed that they loved Mitra before meeting with Reska ! He's cute too but nah. Maybe to possessive and that attitude annoys me. I mean, we're free to do what we want... However the love story is a bit more « mature » in his route, when we can't have that with Mitra (grr).
Then, there is Rama. Rama was a good surprise too. His background is really sad and coherent, I didn't expect that (and I didn't expect his fate in others guys'route ! I was like « What. No way, whaaaat »:O when Mitra came back with a piece of his loincloth.
2. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Ah, I don't know what to begin with ! This was really good ! I NEED to say it : the Avians are beautiful ! Asih is magnificient as hell ! I fell in love with her the minute she appeared on the screen.
I didn't like Tamara's design, with blue hair (yurk) and the colors of her clothes that didn't match. Besides, her pony tail and her scarf which were flotting in the air... I know that you probably wanted to make her like a manga heroin, but it's just that I don't like mangas anymore, so it's personnal. :) But if we compare with Asih, her design seems less worked.
The bachelors were great, especially Mitra (omg, his wings !! Omg, his eyes ! Mitraaa <3). Howerer I found them a little slim, even Mitra, who is supposed to be a warrior.
The writing was surprisingly good. No offense but in France, we don't find a game with this quality very often. I was so immersed in the story ! Sometimes I laughed, I shivered, my eyes got wet, I was chocked, I fangirled, ... That's a very good point, to manage to reach the fellings of your players by your work. Bravo ! What else... ? The story is addictive. A little simple but addictive. Simple because I think that the « war » goes too quick and is simply resolved. Tamara didn't do miracles by her own. At the end, we don't understand WHY the goddess chose her. She just threw a rock, what anyone could have done, and yet this is in Mitra's story ; with Reksa or Rama, her intervention is a little more useless.
Last but not least, the MUSICS were magic ! The game wouldn't be what is it, if the soundtrack wasn’t there. It really created an ambiance and fitted with the scenes. I have shivers when I rethink to some moments with Mitra... Maybe I'll download them later, if I can find them.
3. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Yeah, it's a fact that french people are known to complain a lot. So here are my questions and critics to maybe help you to improve your work in the future :)
I noticed some incoherences or mysteries unsolved. What with the dream in which Tamara hears someone being tortured ?! When I was with Mitra, I thought that maybe this was part of Reska or Rama's route, but no.
Then, there is the past of Tamara. She confesses it with Mitra and Rama but this is completely forgotten in Reska's story. Is that normal ?
Something else : when I played with Reska, Tamara didn't give a shit about Rama, and then we end up helping him and bringing him meat. That was strange. ^^
On this matter, it's a shame that we can't have some informations if we're not playing with the right bachelor. For example, the explanations around Rama's death. Rama is forgotten some days after it, and we can never discover why he wanted so much death. It would be great to speak about it, but not entirely of course...
I have nevertheless a last critique. So, here, I don't know if I react like that because I'm french (and annoying) or not, because no one spoke about the following subject until me xD One thing bothered me in your story : the women's condition. God, we really have an image so that the wife is here to cook, to do laundries, etc... Each time we saw Asih, she talked about house chores : « dinner is almost ready », « ah ! come one, breakfast is ready ! » like she does nothing else, and she's so weak, not physically but in her personality too... I hated that. I felt sometimes some observations from our protagonist, with a little irony (« it was like she taught me to be a good wife »), but it wasn't enough. Maybe it's their society to live this way – traditionally - , but Tamara seemed not really bothered. And the guys are sooo paternalist !
I finish this part on this : in my mind, the love story is too « cuty ». I mean the sexuality seems a taboo, when all the blood, the fights, the deaths and the war subject are for a mature public, so I don't understand this choice x)
I hope that my last remarks will not upset you. I really loved your game and I just wish that my commentary will help you for – maybe – another project.
4. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Yeah, of course, if I have time to. I discovered english otome games ;)
THANK YOU for your work. Really. I lived a great adventure, which I won't forget and I'm sad to think that my commentary will conclude your wonderful story ! (I already miss Mitra :( hehe, I'll replay it one day)
Bye. :)
Hi Kioku!
Thanks for visiting and giving me your honest comment! I'm really happy when I read it ^.^- now, I will do my best to answer your questions -*SPOILER ALERT*-
1. I'm always glad to hear people giving their effort & time to read all the routes, so thank you -and WOW, just 24 hours? O.o you read fast! Did you skip sleep? Take care of your health! ><
2. Hahahah, glad to hear Mitra grew on you, dear <3 his omoed-omoedan event is also one of my favourites! It was so much fun writing it ^^- and yes, in Reksa's route we are encouraged to break some rules since the circumstance is the Komodos are the Avians' enemy and Tamara couldn't afford to tell anyone that she is helping the said enemy >< and yep, Rama's story managed to shock the majority of readers *happy dance*
As for the slim proportion, I'm sad to say that I haven't seen any real-life Indonesian guy who is buff/at least lithe with enough muscles to use as references... OTL a lot of the guys over here is skinny so it might affect my art even though I have photos references by my side.
I'm flattered to hear you think my writing-style is good >\\\< I still have a lot to learn though since I still have loopholes here and there -which you pointed out some x'D I will definitely work hard to improve it!
3. And thank you for liking Asih's design! She is one of the first designs I finished. As for Tamara's I was trying to make her pop up with her blue hair *cough* but I learned my lesson since some of my friends also said she looked unnatural ><
As for her dream, it was a dream sent by Ayu. She was illsutrating Rama's past mentality, where he was suffering & in his mind, people were laughing & ridiculibg him. In the last sequence where there is a loud CRACK, it was the time where he attempted his last suicide. Yep, I got a lot of questions about this & I took notes that I need to be more clear about this ><
Ah and of course, the timeline issue where some event about another bachelor pop out when you're inside another bachelor's route. I'm still trying to figure this out to be honest. I sometimes mixed them ><;; I thought it would be okay to get people read more about Rama since; Tamara basically lived in the village, so she would spend some time with him. At least, she would feel the need to try and help Rama out when he suddenly 'caged' himself and not eating. Welp, at least that was what I thought but then again, yeah, if might be weird to do that if you're not close to him. So this is an error from me maybe? Hmm... I will be more careful next time!
As for the women condition... in Indonesian past tradition (still is actually depending on which area where you live), women tend to be a housewife where the one who work and has a career is the husband. Despite Tamara's heritage(half British, half Indonesian), she grew and live in Indonesia since birth so she already knew about this and thought it is normal since she doesn't really have any ambition besides getting away from her uncle. This past about her and her uncle's family is not pretty, hence she grabbed at the first chance she got to move away. At Mitra & Rama's routes, the circumstances & mood affect her to tell them about it. In Reksa's route, she simply locked the memory deep within her heart & moved on because she felt like she doesn't need to tell him about it since she has decided to stay. She was also too busy helping him, keeping him a secret, following him to the village, war, etc so I think it's logical to say the thought never occured to her? X'D hahahh at least that was what I think.
Ah and about the story too 'cuty' despite the mature theme... *cough* Indonesian tradition is about keeping your virtue until wedding night so.... yup, not gonna go too far from kissing x'D hahahah (I'm also too embarassed to write them *cough*)
5. Thank you for your support!
I hope my answers satisfy you? >\\\< I really enjoyed reading your comment & replying them -sorry for the text wall though O.O;
This will greatly help me to revise & polish my 2nd project! timeline & managing the small events are my deepest concern besides the programming, but I will do my best to improve!
Hope to see you again,
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Ah I almost forgot *SPOILER ALERT*
As for why the Goddess chose Tamara... hmm... this actually will be explained later in my 2nd project; Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle, but I'll do my best to explain while keeping it spoiler-less as much as I could.
It has something to do with her personality, traits -everything that defines her and most importantly, She chose her because she is an outsider -someone who doesn't have a real link to Her 'world'; who can change the future posibilities & fix the problem the Goddess created Herself. No one is able to touch the Pink Crystal besides Tamara and her chosen one remember? Because She cannot directly interfere with fate and that's why She needs some help from 'outside'.
Um... do I explain well? I sometimes have a hard time with how to explain this particular element ^^;; as I said, more information will be explained in my 2nd project; Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle. It will explain the whole island's history & I think you will understand better after you play it in the future. I'm in the middle of making it now ~
Hey ! Thanks for answering, it's a really cute attention that we don't see everywhere ! Yep, I slept 3 hours but it worthed it, hehe. I read more comments since yesterday and I see that I'm not the only one who was such attracted by your story to play aaaall the night.
Oh, I'm really sorry if I offended you. I didn't know that you were Indonesian (or almost), and everything makes sense now. I really didn't replace the story in the right context and, well, when I finally read the encyclopedia given with the game, I felt a little embarrassed for saying what I said. And I didn't know either Tamara was from the same culture >< So, excuse me.
I saw that you worked on an other project more or less linked with "the Winged Ones". I don't want to play the demo since the game isn't finished yet and I'm afraid to become a big fan too early haha (and to live with furious impatience until it's out). But I'm so glad that there will be some informations about "the Winged Ones" ! I admire your universe and I want to learn more and more.
I wish you to succeed in your projects. All of the critics are throwing to improve it, but it's an amazing job for a game meant to be free. By the way, I wanted to really thank you for making it free ! It was such an adventure, you deserve to be known and to have some contributions (I'll talk about you with some of my acquaintances but I don't promise you a new public if they don't like playing in english :P)
So, see you again. :)
WHAT DID YOU USE TO CREATE THIS? THIS LOOKS AMAZING!
Whoa thanks for the enthusiasm, Thenamesfamous x'D
I use Ren'Py; it's free and there are lots of tutorial about it in lemmasoft forum
Sadly this game is very difficult for me to play because there is no way to turn off the flashing background images. The flashing backgrounds are very bad for people with epilepsy and other neurological conditions. Can you add an option in the settings to turn off the background flashes? Or, please limit them to 3-4 flashes instead of having them last 10-15 clicks. That way I can read your VN without becoming physically ill. What I've managed is very good so far. :)
Ah, you mean the fade in & fade out effect? O.O;
I didn't know that background flashes are bad for epilepsy or other neurological conditions >< I'm very sorry for the discomfort you experienced u.u; sadly, I haven't learned how to make a button to turn it of yet.
My tip is that maybe you can click it fast when the background started to flash? It will skip it immediately and if you miss something, you can roll back with your mouse >< that's the best I can say for now, sorry Yukiko!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Yes, that is the one I speak of! Thank you for caring! >//< I do enjoy the affect, it was thoughtful of you to put in for immersion. If it is repeated too often at one time it can become harmful though. Please keep it in mind for future games! I asked my friend to read the screens I could not. It was embarassing but worth it! hehe. Of course I'd prefer to read your words with my own eyes! I did finish Mitra's route and it was super cute and a little epic! It helped me be excited for the other routes. Good job :D
Oh! And thanks for making the characters shake when they laugh loudly. It helped me to laugh out loud too, otherwise I would have just smiled. ^-^
I was super impressed. I really loved the writing, may I may not have cried a little bit with the Rama ending. I'm glad that the main character was able to be an active story participant, not just a side character. A lot of female characters don't get to be a badass in romance stories. I really enjoyed the artstyle and character designs, I thought the use of color was AWESOME. A couple nits: Question A: What program did you use? I was curious, as I'm only proficient in HTML and CSS. Question B: If you make another VN, do you think it will be similar in tone? I loved the humor, but the psychological bit really stood out as well. Lastly, I would probably buy the next one (fingers crossed), and I wish I could now. I'm broke af atm.
Hi CazCatra! Thanks for visiting and telling me your thoughts! ^.^- I'm very happy to hear you like ny writing & art-style -and yes! I already started my 2nd project called; Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle. It's a brand new story but set in the same world, albeit with a wider horizon. Fair warning, this one has darker theme than Winged Ones >< It's also going to be A LOT longer so I decided it to be commercial.
The campaign has ended but you can still pre-order via my paypal shop :"3 (see game page for more info ~)
As for your other question:
At first, I use Novelty, it's a great software for beginner programmer because it's more like drag and click rather than typing the program, but sadly, it's still in beta version and I think the creator dropped it u.u
Next, I use Ren'Py and although it's more difficult, it's free and it's like a magic item once you understand its functions x')
And take your time buying it if you want to ~ the completion of Bermuda is still far in the future :"D until then, maybe keep up with the weekly update!
Hope to see you around~
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Is this made by Indonesian people~?!
Cuz I'm from Indonesia(some other countries call it Nusantara tho~!) XD
Yes! I'm chinese but born and grew up in Indonesia :"3
How do you get Reksa endings
Hi AstralNova!
Here's the complete walkthrough for Winged Ones!
>>>> https://lemmasoft.renai.us/for... (click and drag to uncover the text ^.^)
Other than that, I suggest you to visit Reksa as much as possible!
.....Well....I did it, I went through and I played all the routes In a day. Do I regret it? Absolutly, I shouldnt have been so greedy, I should have savoured how amazing this game was. I absolutly adored the art, the music, and of course the characters and I experianced them all in a day.....But I can redeem myself, with the sequel...That I just found and have downloaded and am going to start now soooooooo yeah. :D Really love your work.
Hi Anira!
Thanks for playing and telling me your thoughts! Whoa, you're a fast reader O_O finished them all in one day! I hope you didn't sacrifice your sleep hours >< of course, I'm very happy to hear you love my work, but don't push yourself too hard, ok? X'D
Bermuda is not really a sequel, but yup, there are tid bits of Winged Ones in it lol.
Have fun and don't forget to take a rest! X'D
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
I didnt loose any sleep lol( iusually stay up to 4am my time but i finished around 1am my time) and yeah I read really fast XD Bermuda Game Talk: I saw in the bermuda game its not really a sequel but its none the less interesting lol I started it last night and finished a chapter before going to bed trying to take it a bit slower though in the beginning of it all i can say is my favorite color: blue, favorite animal: wolf. I didnt have to think twice on what I chose XD
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
I...I cant pick at all. All three of them are amazing , I played in this order: Mitra, Reksa and Rama. Tba I just went with my own knowledge with Mitra using every choice in the game to go bother him (and at the time I dident like Rama). When there was no choice about Mitra, I'd just pick whatever and go with it. So, basically with Reksa, *bam!* walkthrough. (yes my abilities with picking are useless). I loved Reksa because how he was, his primative nature was so adorable, TBH i love possesive people like Reksa but just not to the point where It becomes yandere and kills all my friends like in anime! :D . Anyway, with Rama...I found out I actually liked his char when I was heartbroken when he died in Mitra's route. I was all like TTTTTTTTTTT>TTTTT. I know, im sensitive! Even then IM STILL FIGRURING OUT HIS ROUTE RIGHT NOW! I keep getting the option for ONLY the explosives and im just like determed AF to get his good route. EVEN THE FREAKING WALKTHROUGH HAS ME CONFUSED. In the Walkthrough it says:
Ask Rama about his action. In game it says: Ask Mitra about his action. So, I picked that and I think thats my mistake. Im going back RN to pick the other one. At this point I've memorized almost everypart of the Walkthrough.
What makes you consider to play this game?
TBH I was on a spree on finding stories like this one in itch.io that has some element of dating in it. (I was mostly looking for gay ones shhh)
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most?
Oh. My GOSH! The most thing that stood out for me was this ONE WORD in one of the choices, I cant even rember what choice at this point! (damn you rama) It says: suppsed or somethng along thoes lines but it bothered me. But I LOVED this novel regardless! My daydreams are filled with Mitra, Reksa and Rama! I blame it on my love for reading.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
All I ask: Help me with Rama. The freaking walkthrough confuses me. And I dont think Im the greatest person to ask for critiques , I'm blinder than a blind person. I love everything in this novel
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Yes, FRACK yes. Either one, IDK. I dont have a credit card and Im not going up to my parents and be like : "hey can I buy a visual novel" parents: "whats it about" me:" NEVER MIND"
I just Need help with Rama. Its bothering the heeeck otta me. I hope you make a series otta this!
Edit: YES YES YES I GOT IT. YOUR WIKI CONFUSED ME TOO MUCH BUT I FOUND IT. im so happi x.x
https://www.indiegogo.com/proj...Hi Sixtynine -and whoa, I feel your struggle with Rama's route x'D
I was preparing to post the walkthrough here, but I guess you already found his happy ending? O.O Ah but I'll post the important points here just in case ><
*SPOILER ALERT*Rama's walkthrough:
1. - Learn Language w/ Granny Sukma
- Poke/Knock/Throw
- When you first time meet Mitra, Rama, & Reksa:
>Mitra: Choose anything
>Rama: Be friendly
>Reksa: To unlock Rama's good end you have to choose >>> Don't leave him >>> Be honest or just don't save Reksa at all :'D You have to focus all your affection to Rama or you'll get the bad ending. Yep, he is jealous very easily & very possessive.
- Choose everything
- Spend time with Asih
- Spend some time with the kids
- Spend some time with Rama
- Go to the Herb forest >>> Try it
- Spend some time with Rama
- Take a rest in Herb forest >>> Ask Rama about his action
- Spend some time with Rama
- Take a walk
- Talk with Asih about Rama
- Ask the villagers about Rama
- Automatic event >>> Don't avert your eyes
- Go help Granny
- Automatic event
- Visit Rama
- Visit Rama
GOOD END: Give him the Pink Chrystal
Bad End: Give him the explosives
I read that this walkthrough gets you confused O.O; hmm, but the important note is: Avoid other bachelor as much as you can and spend time with Rama as much as you can!
And yes, one mistake will end up with Rama's bad end :'D I know it's harsh, but that's they way Rama is hahah -please forgive this creator ><
2. lol, it always when I see people stumble upon my 'baby' & ended up loving them x'D
3. ...Which word? lol, now you're making me curious x'D nevertheless, I'm happy you like the story & Rama so much! I was worried at how people will take my story since it's entirely new and not-so-mainstream, but I'm glad you like it!
4. I hope this problem is already resolved ><
5. Don't worry, your enthusiasm & support is already more than enough at this point QuQ I do have a new project that is now LIVE in Indiegogo though >>> https://www.indiegogo.com/proj...
I know your difficulties since I also don't have a credit card until recently :'D but just help me spread the words & I'll be very happy <3
Once again, thank you for playing & showing me how much you love Winged Ones! I hope you get to see all the scenes/endings & hope to see you again!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
I don't get it...I've picked what you typed in your walkthrough EXACTLY every time, yet I can't get a good ending. I experimented with how I met the bachelors and what choices I picked after your walkthrough ends but NOTHING WORKS! I REALLY like Rama's story so far, but I'm starting to hate him because of his route... (Also, "Ask Rama about his action" is a combination of both choices so I have no idea which one you actually meant)
That's weird O.O;
I have another person asking the same thing but after choosing 'Be Honest' with Reksa, it worked.
As for "Ask Rama about his action"... I mean "Ask Rama for his condition" sorry >< I thought I already explained to ignore Mitra and Reksa if you want his good ending? x_x
Rama is a very jealous person and hates liars, so you won't get his happy ending if you miss one of his scenes or see one of Mitra's scenes. I admit that his route is quite tricky though ^^;
Good luck!
Played this game again after playing the old version a few years ago. I still love Reksa's route and ending the most and Mitra's is a close second. I like Rama but his ending just feels incomplete to me. I love how you've used your own country's stories to create your own, kudos to that. And yes, I would I would consider buying another VN you make if the story interests me enough. :D
Hi tangerineWhimsy!
Thanks for playing & telling me your thoughts! I'm sorry for this late reply though ><
First, I'd like to thank you for giving all my 3 boys a chance & loving them in return :'D
I have to admit that I feel like I can do better with his route -some people commented that some scenes were a bit vague & that's where I need to polish my writing-skill! I will definitely try to do better next time! >:)
and yes, I love to add Indonesia elements! x'D the mini-encyclopedia will stay forever in my feature.
As for my other project, currently I have another VN on Indiegogo >>> https://www.indiegogo.com/proj...
Come & try the demo! :3
I made an account just to post on the comments, because this game was. freaking. AWESOME.
MY HEART. *grips chest and keels over dramatically*
This is one of the best games I've EVER played!! I'm so glad I was bored enough to look for otome vn's for three consecutive days because I would've regretted not knowing that Nusantara existed. I stayed up till 4 AM for two days straight just to play and replay all the routes!
Edit: I just realised my post is unnecessarily and excessively long... Sorry in advance!
1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Gah! Choices, choices...
Mitra is kind, considerate, and sweet, but he's also freakin' HOT when he shows his fierce side (i.e. when fighting to protect Tamara.) He also has a great physique. O.o
Also an all-round easygoing guy. Reksa is adorable in his contrasting childishness and maturity, and working past his wildness to the subtle softness (and passion!) underneath is exceptionally satisfying. And Rama.... Whew! He is somethin' else altogether. There's so much pain beneath his cavalier actions, but there's also, in a way, so much love. I wish we could save him outside of his route, but sigh. It's so hard to see his sincere side and genuine smile, so his last CG is... *sniff*
Really. I love all three of them. I wish there were more guys like them in real life. Well, maybe less Rama's, or there would be suicidal maniacs all over, but... :P If I really had to choose.... ... .... hm... probably Mitra. While I love Reksa's devotion and wildness and Rama's indifferent-to-all-but-you personality, Mitra's budding/blooming feelings and how he expresses them (that Wings Ceremony? *swoons*) win me over in the end ... Also, can't hurt to mention that I'm a sucker for "tall, dark, handsome" guys. xD
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
I was bored and looking for free Mac games online (it is surprisingly difficult to find otome games for mac that have good visuals), and, the moment I saw the profile picture for Nusantara, I knew I wanted a closer look. Not only were there three love interests, the graphics looked great. I hate to say it, but, for otome games, appearances are everything, because what's the point of playing visual novels if guys aren't handsome? :P Also, the description? "Birth, Death, Peace, War, Love"? Plus guys with wings? Hook, line,and sinker.
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Totally gameworthy. You really get involved in the game and bond with the characters. The soundtrack is amazing, and I especially love the art, because I'm a very sight oriented person, and Nusantara really seemed like a believable place (great background, portrayals of people, etc.). Also, LOVE THE CG's. :'-) (Even the bad endings were beautiful. Oh, Rama!) Thank you for taking the time to flesh out the guys and making them realistic enough to be lovable. The tiny details you invest in their characters are very much appreciated. I loved how the story is atypical, in other words, not at the workplace and not at school. The guys also don't show interest in you right of the bat, so it's authentic, too. And did I mention that I'm a huge fan of fantasy? Huge, huge fan.
4. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Critique/Suggestions:
As some other people have mentioned, there are times when the grammar is off. :) I also think that while the art is great, it could be polished a bit more because, for example, Rama and CG Rama don't really look alike (CG Rama is HOT; normal Rama... less), and Rama looks like he's flickering around the edges.
Just me being picky, but I would've loved for some final strings to be tied off, because while I can guess that Rama is the one in Tamara's nightmares, we don't really get complete closure. Also, Yuda's earring seems to change sides depending on his pose... and Mitra doesn't always have white paint on his face in his CG's.
An insignificant thought: While playing Mitra's route, before being told the significance of Asih and Yuda's earrings, I had already guessed their purpose (also proof of how good the art/details are), so I was expecting some kind of similar exchange between Mitra and Tamara, because Mitra seems like the kind of guy who would stick with tradition (he did, after all, participate in Omed-Omedan, the Wings Ceremony, and officially invite Mitra to his house). I figured that since Tamara didn't have wings, she could exchange bits of her hair made into an earring with his feathers, since her hair is a unique color and all. But that's just a thought. :)
Also (sorry for the many add-ons!), I totally wouldn't mind bonus paths/extras, for example having some kind of extra path once you've finished all the possible existing routes.
Questions:
In the scene where Tamara and Mitra are grooming his wings, what were the implications of Mitra's wings moving without his knowledge? What was he muttering before he ran off?
How did Rama break his wings? We know that he tried to commit suicide plenty of times, but what are the specifics?
Is there any way I could find a picture of Mitra with his wings spread open during the wings ceremony? It's like an itch I can't scratch. The CG is wonderful, but I'm trying to picture what Asih described - him showing his power, his size, his everything. Ahhh.
I think I had a few other questions, but I can't remember them right now... T_T
5. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
HELL YES! Please tell me you're making another one. <3 I have to confess, though, that I've gotten used to finding games for free, so I probably wouldn't pay more than $15 for one. (: but YES! I would pay, because Nusantara was totally worth it. I'll probably be daydreaming about Mitra and Reksa for the following days...
Now that I've finished Nusantara, what am I going to do with my free time?? *sniff*
Hi jordanyak! Thanks for taking your time writing this very long review! I enjoyed reading it bery much x'D
I'm happy to hear you love my VN so much until you sleep so late for 2 days straight but... please take care of yourself more >< I don't want you to get sick/tired when there is work/school tomorrow! We all need our beauty sleep ~ but still, I'm flattered :"))
1. Awww, thank you for giving all three of them a chance! And yes, I agree that the wing ceremony + omed-omedan is one of the very romantic scenes in game <3 >\\\< it's one of my favourites and I'm glad you think so too!
Ah I'm also happy to read how you describe the other bachelors. You sound like you've thoroughly enjoyed yourself and there's nothing makes me happier than to hear that :")
2. Yup, I agree that first impression is very important x'D heck, I also usually get interested in a game if there's a handsome guy I like in there lol. We're on the same boat!
3. Me too! I love fantasy genre; I think it has something to do with Inuyasha since it was the first anime I watch. Not to mention Hayao Miyazaki's movies are probably my forever favourites ><
4. Yuup... I noticed that Rama's CG is the most different ones than the others x_x I think it's because I leave CGs production last and I forgot a little how to draw Rama and I even forgot the white lines on Mitra's face in some CGs! //shame on me
Also, thanks for pointing out Winged Ones' flaws! I have quite a lot of people say the dream is very ambigue >< it's a dream about Rama's mentality. In the dream Rama thought that the villagers were laughing and mocking him. It drove him to the edge and it pictured the scene where he broke his wings (the loud CRACK noise). As for how he broke them, I think I mentioned it in the scene where Rama got his legs tied down by Mitra? O.o He jumped off a cliff as a last resort but instead of dying, he just broke his wings & one of them didn't heal properly because Rama could care less bout himself in the past.
As for Mitra's wings acting by itself... well I was trying to say that the wings leaning toward Tamara means that he likes her touch & unconciously asked her for more x'D Mitra was embarassed and ran away after realizing that lol. That was when he realized his feelings for her too. He was muttering something along the lines of"I had no idea...", cursed himself, & 'scolding' his own wings lol.
As for Mitra spreading his wings picture... you see, I was cheating a bit in that scene :")) I used Mitra's fighting sprite. The best picture I can point out is at the CG where his wings are folding around Tamara and the half spread one in his happy end CG
5. I do! My 2nd project's demo is out now along with its Indiegogo campaign <3
https://www.indiegogo.com/proj...
Thank you for the support and love you gave me! I know I still have lots to learn, but I'll do my best to improve! It will be baby steps I think, but I hope you'll be patient with me ><
Hope to see you again!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
I adore this game and ive spent the last two days telling everyone i know about it and i think theyre getting sick of it but! oh well!
Hm its a tossup between Mitra and Reksa honestly, dont get me wrong i love Rama too its just, some of his actions and how he views the world hits a little too close to home for my liking ;;. Anyway back to Mitra and Reksa, i adore them both but I think my heart will always belong to Mitra with reksa being a very close second.
The artwork and the story! The artwork is lovely and the story is unique and exciting, i keep a pack of screenshots with me (nothing like to use for profit i just like showing my frends the games i play so i take out of context screenshots so they dont get spoiled for the story but can gush with me about it). The story itself i feel is unique! How its handled, going for the peacable route instead of going all out and destroying the Komodos and trying to live in peace and I loved it!
Lord I dont have the words to describe how this VN made me feel. Like by the end all the characters felt Real, like Yuda, Asih, and Sukma were actually my family, Mitra was like my favorite older brother (when i wasnt romancing him) and Rama... I was sad that we couldn't save him outside his route. His deaths would always hit me hard. I'm also sad (but understanding) when we couldn't interact with Reksa outside of his route. I guess its the characters and their interactions that really sold me, they all felt like family and tried to bring the MC in with them and I believe it was one of the stronger aspects of this story.
The only thing I can think of is getting a beta reader for your text lol there were a few grammatical mistakes throughout the game (nothing that made it unplayable, just a bit confusing when my brain stuttered over one)
As for questions, well I really loved seeing Rama's and Mitra's reactions and reassurances to Tamara about her past and her own trauma, and was a little disappointed that it wasnt addressed by Reksa? I mean i get it there really wasnt a good place or time to talk about themselves like that within the games timeline but still id have liked to see how he'd have handled it
*slams hands on table* Y E S
Hi sheanio! Thanks for visiting and reviewing :'3 I see this first thing in the morning and it made me laugh when I hear you spent the last 2 days telling people about how much you love this game x'D
What a great way to start the day <3
1. I can understand that x') thanks for giving all three of them a chance though! And awww, more people are loving Mitra! Does this mean his time has finally come!?
*cough*
Anyways ~ I will deliver your love to Mitra & Reksa for you.
2. It touched me to hear you're bringing some screenshots with you! Maybe not all the time but I'm happy to hear you love it enough to do that >\\\<
I'm also glad you like the art & story! Thanks! :'D I still have lots to learn though but I'll do my best to improve and make you happier ><
3. That's the best thing you can say to me about my characters! Q_Q thank you!
4. Yep, grammar is likely to be my nemesis in my next game too :")) I have 2 proofreaders in my 2nd project now, but if there are still some grammar errors in it, I apologize in advance >< my raw script is... quite a challenge to edit for them I think O.O;
As for why Tamara's trauma is not mentioned in Reksa's route: *SPOILER ALERT*
To be honest, I was trying different approaches:
In Mitra's route, her trauma was solved nicely and calmly. In Rama's route, her trauma was solved a bit forcefully *she throws them at Rama's face lol*.
In Reksa's route, Tamara doesn't feel the need to tell him about it. She moves on and left it in the past when she decided to stay.
However, thanks for pointing this out! I will take note and it's definitely a good idea for my next project about how each bachelor will react about the MC's special circumstances :"3
5. I love how forward you are x'D YAY! Thanks for your support! <3
I hope to see you again in the near future~
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
I love this game! I actually first played it a while ago but swapped computers and though I could remember the game I could never remember the name of it until a couple of days ago. I'm so glad I found it again! :D
1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
Pretty boys with wings! It's rare to find a VN with winged people and even rarer to find one where they're not angels (i was raised kind of small-town catholic so flirting with angels is suuuuper uncomfy for me so im extra glad to find a game where they're not angels). Also, the art samples are gorgeous and I really wanted to see how the whole game looked.
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what elements stand out the most? (art? story? character?)
Hi, keystring! Thanks for visiting and reviewing! Glad to hear you found this page after swapping computers x'D
1. Ah yes, I can understand that. His mood swings also a challenge and made me uncomfortable at times :"D -and finally! Another Mitra lover <3 he needs more love since the majority of girls chose Reksa x'D
I'll deliver your love to them ~
2. Yup, I agree that we need more fantasy VNs :"3 I'm also a catholic and flirting with an angel will be... *coigh* awkward *cough*
3. Awww thanks! I'm glad you like my art >\\\< I still have rooms for improvement though! I'll do my best to keep taking your breath away x'D
4. Yes, I agree about that. *SPOILER ALERT*
However, Rama has to face the harsh reality -even by force since the easy/soft way has failed. Granny Sukma, Mitra, and the others spent years to try convincing him but to no avail :'( if this continues, Rama will keep walking on a wrong path. I also think it's better to be blunt about it than having to say it in a roundabout/white lie since Rama will think you're lying/unsure about it and he will keep making excuses later.
*ahem, but I'll admit that I have no experience in this field (psychology). So this is all based on my logic and from reading various fictions ><*
5. Yay! Me too! I feel both excited and scared for Bermuda's campaign later lol x'D
I hope to see you around ~
Okay so I finally finished playing all the routes, I had a glitch that meant I didn't have a visible option to give Rama the crystal and therefore couldn't find his good ending for ages, but I got there eventually :)
This was so great, I am actually a little sad that it's finished now, kind of like the first time you read Tolkein's The Hobbit, and you want to stop reading it because you don't want it to be over.
The artwork was absolutely beautiful, the characters are very well written, plausible and engaging. The attention to detail in even the small aspects of their daily lives, their costumes was wonderful.
1.Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
First off they were all wonderful, Ah Mitra, so adorable, so warm. I'd have to say Reksa was probably my favourite though, there is just something about his possessiveness while still accepting Tamara will do whatever she wants anyway is very cute and also he is probably the most passionate character which I liked about him......though like I said they are all great in their own way, I can kind of tell how much you care about each of them.
2.What makes you consider to play this game?
Chance really that I stumbled across it, I am pretty new to this genre, but the image of the beautiful boys with wings......sold.
3.Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
It is absolutely beautiful! honestly I am in awe of your talent for both the character design, art and story writing.
4.Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I actually liked that the characters don't speak at all like some otome games, frankly when they do if you don't like the voice they use for a character it can put you off a bit, whereas when they don't have a predetermined voice each player can imagine them to sound how ever they would like, it's more relate able that way.
As for questions I have 3, How old is Reksa? I couldn't work it out though you hint he may be a bit younger.
Who was the person Tamara kept dreaming about being tortured?
And lastly were you a part of the Ball Jointed Doll community? your name SweetChiel seems familiar somewhere in the back of my mind.
5.Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
Absolutely I would. Where can I stalk you? ;)
Hi raewhitewolf04!
Welcome back and I'm so glad to hear you managed to finish all routes :'D
*SPOILER ALERT*
Rama's route is the most tricky of all three >< if you pick false things in the begining, his good route will be locked (yup, it's not a glitch but intentional, sorry :"D)
The things are:
- if you pick to save Reksa, you have to be honest. Never lie since Rama hates liars.
- you have to meet Rama a lot (pick the choices that ends up with Tamara meeting him and ignore other bachelors) since you needs a lot of affection points to fulfill another of his good end requirement.
I have to say that I'm surprised you managed to find his good end without a walkthrough x'D
1. Aww thank you! :"D they are like my babies and hearing how you like all of them makes me all warm and soft inside x'D
And yup, Reksa is the most passionate than the others :")) it's a bit surprising for me too... I sometimes still blush whenever I reread his route hahah
2. Yay! I notice that not a lot of VNs have boys with wings in them x'D glad to see you like them -and welcome to the visual novel world!
3. Now you're making me blush O///O
I still have lots of room to improve compared to all the big guns up there, but I'll do my best to be better in my next project ><
4. I agree! Even if I want to add voice acting, it's very hard to find a voice that truly clicks with the characters!
As to how old Reksa is, he is 20 years old. 7 months younger than Rama while Mitra is the oldest, 22 years old. Tamara is 19 :"3
As to who the one in Tamara's dream is; Rama. It's visualizing the moment of Rama's mental torture. In his mind, everyone is laughing and mocking him. It also pictures the moment of his last attempt of suicide (the loud CRACK is the sound of bones breaking)
Aand nope, I'm not in a joint-doll community :"3 maybe similar nicknames?
5. Yay! Thanks for your support! x'D you can stalk me on my facebook fanpage or patreon!
Thanks again for visiting & reviewing! I hope I answered your questions ^,^
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
It keeps jamming and closing on the part where tamara is talking to mitra about the picture of his parents. Is there something I can do to fix this? or will I have to download it again?
Hi raewhitewolf04!
Hmm... this is new o.o the renpy version shouldn't have this bug... I suggest to re-download and try playing it in window mode not full-screen mode. It should make it lighter for our computer's RAM ><
I'm sorry for the discomfort!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Thank you, I was playing it in the smaller window, but I will give your suggestion a go. Thank you by the way, it is beautiful :)
My formal bahasa indonesia sucks to be honest :"D I intentionally chose foreigners as my market so I can share Indonesian unique traditions with them.
Also, I work alone; I don't know how to localize it except from programming it again from scratch after translating. It will consume too much time and I prefer to use that time to make a new story.
Omg, this visual novel is just amazing, especially how you mixed the Indonesian culture with ancient and modern. It's just SO beautiful. No words can describe how much I've loved it.
Oh, can I know what piece you used for the title screen? I really love the music, it's very soothing~
*I haven't read Reksa's route yet so I'll be editing this as soon as I'm done, I promise. xD*
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Hm.. I can't say for sure seeing as I've only read two routes. There's some other decision I want to try on Rama's as well to see what will happen. If I had to just pick from those two, I'd probably say Rama's? I'm not quite sure why. Mitra is very much someone I've always looked up to as a man seeing that he's the ideal life partner and all but there's something about Rama that makes him really special.
What makes you consider to play this game?
The first thing that drew me in was the aesthetics, so basically the beautiful drawings. That's the big picture. Then there were these small intricate details that were linked to the culture that drew me in even more. I'm really clueless about it but I think I've learned quite a lot about the culture through this VN and I'm glad I know now. It's really amazing. Then the plot. When I read it on the website, I was interested almost immediately.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Overall, I think it's definitely something you could even sell with a pricetag on it. The whole experience was very immersive with the background music and noises, making it seem like you were really experiencing it in the moment. I think what stands out the most is the story. Each character has their own story to tell and I feel that Rama's is the one that's most interesting to me so far. (I have yet to read Reksa's. :P)
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Hm.. I can't say I do. This novel was a package. Sure, it lacked voice acting since most novels introduce in their pieces to make them stand out more but to be completely honest, I doubt this VN even needed it. It's perfect. It didn't need anything extra to make it anymore perfect than it already is.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
YES!
Very big yes!
Hi Arisa ~!
I'm happy to know you enjoyed the Winged Ones very much! ^///^ The title screen's music is from soundimage.org titled "RPG Theme". The title is very creative isn't it :"))
1. Aah I see o.o Mitra does based on an image of ideal partner we've always wanted though so you're right :'3 I'll look forward to hear which one is your favourite after you've read them all! >\\\<
2. Aww thanks! I'm glad to hear you like my art :"3 but I do have a lot more to learn and improve -the Fantasy genre is flexible and there are lots to explore! However, I'm planning to have the mini encyclopedia permanently and will always apply some indonesian element if possible x')
3. Thank you :"D you noticed the small details! I'll do my best to make more interesting VNs in the future to meet your expectations! My 2nd project is a lot longer and complicated than the Winged Ones, so I hope you'll give it a chance later ><
And yup, I believe that every character will have their own stories to tell and roles to fill. That's why NPCs deserves at least a silhouette :"D Rama has the heaviest story from the other two and some people don't have the patience with him so I'm glad you like him! X'D
4. ... I'm touched you call my baby perfect QuQ I did my best, but to be objective, there are still some loopholes and things I can to improve! Do wait for my 2nd project and see if I've lvl-ed up or not!
5. YAY! *hugs* I'll be counting on you to share the love when my 2nd project's IndieGoGo campaign come to life! :"D
Thanks for visiting and see you in the near future!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
So I finally managed to finish all the routes, I can't seem to get 3 CG's from Tamara, Rama and Reksa. No idea what I'm doing wrong, lul. Anyway! I read Reksa's route and I think I've finally decided who I love the most. Reksa~ xD He's just extremely adorable. Rama has this tendency to push you away before finally giving in whereas Reksa draws you in from the getgo and doesn't let you go after that. (/ *0*)/ That's really sweet. He's my fave, woo. >///< 'MINE!' xD (I still love Rama too but Reksa more, haha)
Thanks for letting me know about the music too~
Welcome back Arisa! Wow you're quite fast x'D and you're welcome. The musics in soundimage.org are free so feel free to download them but credit the creator ~
The 3 CGs are probably the sad endings. I know that all of you want only the happy ends but if you want to complete the CGs, try and read the sad ends x'D
Aaand Reksa got himself another fan! Hahahah, I'll deliver your love to him :'3
Thanks for playing and hope to see you again in the future!
I love it so much, so far i've only been able to play Mitra but the feels in his route got to me. The art is gorgeuos too, I love all the characters ,and am living for Tamara's hair. Spoiler alert but does Rama die no matter what in Mitras route? Because when I played I was like damn I killed him , what did I do wrong.
There's a couple of Grammatical errors, and I'm usually very picky about them ,but I loved the story so much It was easy to ignore. Also there's some issues for I assume the Mac version. I am unable to click options without it bugging out ,and bringing to an programming looking window . I also cannot fast foward.
I may be jumping the gun a little to soon, for i've only played one route so far. But when you finish your other Visual Novel if the price is reasonable! Heck yes I will buy it.
Thanks TheRosetteWolf! I'm flattered you love the story enough to ignore the flaws :"D really, that's so sweet of you. Even to the point you support me by wanting to buy my 2nd VN >< I'll do my best to improve my programming skill!
I'll also look forward to hear your thoughts after finishing all 3 routes! ^,^
As for Rama's route...
*SPOILER ALERT*
Yes, he will die except if you managed to get into his route >< his route is the trickiest of all 3 so I suggest you save often or see a walkthrough.
As for the option error... nope, that error also appeared in PC & Linux version just because I forgot to download a font and put it into the 'game' file ^^;
If you want to fix it, read the error message and look at what file is missing (I'm sorry, I'm ashamed to say I forgot which font it is since it's a long time ago OTL...), download the font, rename it like the error's file name wanted, put it in 'game' file, and it should run.
Again, I'm sorry for such amateur-ish mistakes ^^;
As for the cannot fast forward... it should be automatically fast forward when you press CTRL in PC version so it should be either pressing CTRL or CMD. I can fast forward using CTRL in my mac though O.O; pls inform me again if you still can't fast forward when you pressed those buttons.
Oh okay the ctrl will solve the problem :) Also no problem I give credit when its due.
Ah, glad that one is solved! I know how annoying it is if we can't skip some of the scenes we already know ><
Okay i've played all the routes ,and gosh i'm at a lost for words. I enjoyed and loved playing it so much! I wanna start by saying I loved all the guys ,but I do have favorites.
While I did love Rama (his little 'stalking' escapades warmed my heart.) I'd have to say my favorites are Mitra ,and Reksa.
Mitra: This guy right here! Just like described is like a big ole teddy bear, he is such a precious cinnamon roll, and despite his giant stature is the most gentle of characters. He's also very easy on the eyes XD I was shocked at how sweet ,amiable, and understanding he was , especially in Reska's route.
Reska: I legitimately squealed near the end of his route , it was slightly more mature of an ending than the others (which if you want to make it even more mature you know ;) i'm not complaining). I loved how possessive he was of mc , and it never came off as being creepy or rude which is good considering Tamara's traumatic past. It just made my heart flutter even more when he would huskily growl "mine" at Tamara ahhh boy did I enjoy his route.
Rama: Omg poor baby, seriously there's only one thing that made me like the other guys route a little more than his ,and it wasn't too big of a deal. Because I mean at least he told her he loved her in the end ,and they shared a few super sweet kisses. Also he got closure which his also a nice touch ,and i'm a huge fan of unrequited love being reciprocated. So his route would of been right up my ally ,however this is just me being picky; Near the end of his route, I was craving a strong establishment of a relationship between him and Tamara. Because, In Mitra's route he "courts" her , and in Reska's route he makes her his "mate" perhaps I just expected it. With Rama we surmise-no wrong word- we know that they will end up together. However, ugh i'm just so persnickety about certain things, and I wanted him to court her just like Mitra. Or exchange something that would promise themselves to each other, like he gives her one of his feathers and she gives him a lock of her pretty blue hair. For Rama because his route is sad ,and extra sad in the others route, omg i'm so bad with tragedy, but because of this I wanted and extra happy ending. I know he has circumstances that probably make him reluctant to court Tamara, he mentions all the time being unworthy of her. But, its the fact that his route is so sad, that I wanted to see him super happy, with some cute blue haired kiddos , with brown wings, and icy-blue eyes. Okay sorry I went a little overboard, but honestly I still really enjoyed his route. It was still a very happy ending which always makes a game worth it. Also I loved how tsunderish he was at times, refusing to admit he has feelings for Tamara, but when someone tries to flirt or court her he's ready to rip their wings out XD
Also the side characters, we also so lovable, Granny Sukma, Asih , and Yuda. I loved them so much too!
Ahh I would love sequels , or epilogues for this game. Ugh just blue haired babies with cute little wings, or mask on their heads. I know it's not possible , but just so you know the fact that I'm asking just shows how much I loved your game.
Thank you so much for giving us the wonderful game to play for free. I can't wait for your next game.
Oh also you already know how much I like your art, but I'll mention it again here. The whole game was beautiful, also when I have time I don't mind helping you with any grammatical errors, only if you want. I'm not 100% confident that i'll be able to make every thing correct, but i'm not too terrible at finding grammatical mistakes.
YAY! You came back so fast! X'D I thought it will need another day or two for you to finish lol.
Your review made me smile first thing in the morning! Thanks! :'D
Aww, I'm so happy you gave the three of them a chance and loved every one of them :'D and yes, Mitra is the most fluffy-sweet route compared to the others! I enjoyed writing them too, but somewhat sad when he got overshadowed by the other bachelors. I'm happy that you noticed his worth :'D
While Reksa... *cough* I often asked myself how did his scenes became so... more mature than the others x'D I sometimes became embarassed when I read his scenes hahahah. I'm glad that a lot of people like this tho :'3
And Rama... I think I know exactly how you feel!
Even I sometimes wanted to pull my hair off whenever Rama became so nitpicky/standoff-ish with Tamara. Heck, she was probably a saint at how patient she was in Rama's route :")) if she didn't relate so much with Rama, I think she will pull off HIS hair hahah x'D his stalkering scene was also one of my favorites <3
Anyways... I'm also a fan of making fluffy/romantic scenes, especially strong ones, but sadly, Rama's psychology won't allow him to be able to accept another person in his heart so fast and he will need a lot of time to get out of his self-depreciating mentality :'( but thanks for the input in this one! You didn't go overboard at all, I'll take note and consider a longer epilogue/extra scene if I create another bachelor with similar circumtances.
Lastly, thanks for liking my art and even offered to be a proofreader >\\\< Currently, I have 2 active proofreaders in my 2nd project. I'll let you know if I decide to get another one/for my next project in the future ^///^
I hope to see you again in the future!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Haha omg i'm laughing because you are so right! I loved the game so much I played through it all night ,and when I got back home from class played it again. I was a zombie in class today XD but it was worth it. Also i'm glad I made you smile, can't wait for your next game.
After playing through all 3, Mitra is still my favourite (I chose him first). Reksa and Rama each have their own appeals, but I feel the deciding point was when Mitra was the only one who helped Tamara to let go of her past. In this way, the relationship had felt more equal in a sense. (Not to mention, Mitra is a huge cuddly cinnamon roll that makes me laugh at his courting attempts) In addition, from the stand point of Tamara being almost raped, Reksa and the Komodo's culture might not be so suitable for her. I'm pretty sure Reksa would never intentionally hurt her or force her into anything, just that I feel Tamara and him have a few hurdles to go through before 'that' happens.
The crazy amount of patience Tamara shows with Rama doesn't seem very realistic. Though I feel sympathetic towards Rama, ultimately that's all I feel there is. Pity. Which Rama also pointed it out in the game and I thought it was pretty ironic. There wasn't enough moments between Rama and Tamara that make me feel their connection is real.
I also notice Rama has the most amount of CGs in the game and Mitra has the least! Being a Mitra (and Reksa) fan, maybe in the next game, you may want to consider balancing it?
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
Art. And I'm aiming to play every VN offered in Itch.io. The beautiful cover art of Reksa definitely helped too.
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
The real life tradition references. This is one part that I feel no other VNs have managed to convey very well. The story telling is pretty amazing either, I honest to good burst out laughing when the aunties and even the guards were speculating on the relationship between Mitra and Tamara. This buildup make the final part of Omed-omedan very believable that the 2 villages are all in it to matchmake them to be together. I thought it was also important that Asih, Yuda and Granny are extremely likable and realistic. As I have a few Indonesian friends, and based on their stories, this is exactly how their family works, very loving and cohesive. Their local community is also very close-knitted and warm, and my friends had also draw parallels how Jarkarta with its lack of trees, frequent heavy traffic congestion and how modern it is, had lack the 'soul' or the 'kampong' spirit. Your VN is a very beautiful callback to Indonesia's old ways (though of course it still exist in modern times), and it's an absolute delight for an non-Indonesian to see it. Good work!
4. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Answer as per point 1. But I need to mention this is an amazing game (this is the only game in itch.io that I review and that says a lot), one that I truly appreciate as a fellow South East Asian, especially because the traditions are real that makes it even more relatable and give an extra depth to the story. I hope in the next VN you are making, has real world references too! It really make your game 'pop out' in the sea of VNs out there.
Finally, it may be a bit misleading but based on the prologue, I had thought there is more to it between the distance conveyed between Tamara's parents. How her mother grew cold, but it only ended with a footnote that her father died and her mother died later (out of depression?). This isn't very well-explained.
5. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Of course! Just not exorbitant crazy prices. :p Your players also need to eat, for electricity to play your VN, etc)
Hi sakuracream!
Your review really made my day! You pointed out the flaws I've been itching to know and this is definitely constructive for my future projects :"D
1. Congrats! You're the first person to notice and tell what's differences in Mitra's route compared to others! It was a hard topic for Tamara, but she did mention it in Rama's route, remember? X') Hmm... I'll discuss Rama's route more in answer number 4.
Yes, thanks for reminding me! I did want to balance it, but unexpected things happened in editing Rama's route and before I knew it, the numbers grew O.O; I'll do my best to balance the numbers in the future but no promises >< I edit the script very often and the characers sometimes act on their own *is this makes sense to you? :'D if not, don't worry, I'm surprised too about how this happen*. But usually, I'll always make CGs for important scenes/moments.
2. Yay! Thanks for liking my art ^///^
3. Yes, I agree! I believe that every character in a VN have their own purpose, and their relationships with each other are one of the elements which will make our VN 'alive', yes?
I also thought that traditional Indonesia has the most 'charm' compared to modern indonesia now >< the beautiful nature, simple life style, close knitted community, how they 'work together' with nature, etc etc... when I went to a mountain/beach/Tidung island for vacation, I always thought; how wonderful it would be if I live there. That's what I want to convey in Nusantara and I'm very glad you caught it!
4. Yes, thank you! I also want to keep having the mini encyclopedia feature in every of my VNs :") my 2nd project will try a mixture of modern-traditional-cross-country next, so i hope you can try it and see if I pulled it off or not ><
As for Rama's route... yep, I agree that Rama is so frustrating and sometimes, I just want to wring his neck or pull his hair until he is bald :")) Tamara is probably a saint to be able to bear it. But the major factor is that she has 'related' herself and Rama. Their past are like heaven and earth and she was dumbfounded at how Rama could just throw it all away when there was a chance/hope that it was all a misunderstanding. I hope this helps? X'D as for Reksa's route, she didn't reveal it because there was no need for it and she left it in the past along with her world when she decided to stay there.
Wow this is very enlightening O.O I think my story-telling skill needs to be polished until I can convey all that in paragraphs x.x
Thanks again for pointing this out! <3
5. Good point x'D thanks for the support and the price I'm thinking of is kinda in the middle area and there will be early birds in he IndieGoGo so... I hope you can get it! X')
I hope to see you around!
Have some cyber cookies and free hugs!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Thanks for replying! :) If you see this, as a small bonus to a Mitra fan, I hope you can answer this.
When Tamara and Mitra get married, what will Mitra wear on his ear since Tamara has no feathers?
No problem! x)
There are two ideas regarding this; Tamara could use her hair by braiding a small amount of it and made it into an earring OR she could make the earring herself by choosing the materials herself. The important thing is that the earring should symbolize 'TAKEN' and the people who see it should roughly be able to guess who is his/her spouse.
In my mind, the bachelors would first suggest the braided hair since it's simple and the most obvious choice since she is the only bluenette there (Rama would be the most enthusiastic about this lol x'D).
1. I thought Rama would be my favorite, but then I played Reska's route, and now I am so torn.. I guess Rama has me on a most emotional level, but Reska was my overall favorite in terms of route. I like jerks who become soft around the right people.. (though Mitra is ultimate husband material....... / aka all of them were great)
2. I saw if was a free-to-play, visual novel, where you could date cute boys. That's all it takes. I also liked what I saw in terms of screenshots, so I decided to play it.
3. I like the art, and overall look of it the most. The characters are really amazing, though I wish the MC was a bit more.. well... toned down in term of colors (aesthetic reasons) - also the concept/story is pretty great.
// Skipped question four because I don't have any questions. My only "critique" is kinda mentioned in number four, but that is just my own visual preferences setting in.
5. I would definitely consider buying a visual novel done by you.
This game is just AWESOME!!>< As an Indonesian I'm very proud of it and you are basically introduce Indonesian culture in a good way to everyone who played this game :) You deserve my deepest gratitude lol ^.^
Hi zlfxx09!
Thanks for visiting and tried my VN :"D
I'm also glad that I successfully combined the indonesian elements here <3 there will be more in my 2nd project so stay tuned! ><
Oh god, this was good. I just...wow. It felt like a journey. I laughed at parts, I cried at parts, and I even fangirled at others. This game was just amazing.
NOW ONTO THE QUESTIONS (warning- possible spoilers):
This was a bit hard to choose, but my favorite would definitely be Reksa. I think it was mostly because of his character development. Witnessing him turn from an unapproachable jerk to reluctant friend and then to possessive boyfriend was really nice. It felt realistic and was paced perfectly.
I saw this on my recommended list on this site, and after reading some of the reviews, I decided to try it out.
Um, I LOVED it??? :DDD It was just amazing. I felt a lot of things. Honestly, I haven't played through the bad endings yet because I just got attached to all of the bachelors.
Specifically though, I loved the characters and character development of all of the characters, not just the bachelors. It makes it feel like I could meet people like them in real life. I also liked how Tamara had her own story too, unlike the other heroines from other otome games. The overall plot I thought was very creative. This game also teaches valuable life lessons, like to strive for peace instead of war (some people really need to know this if you know what I mean).
How long did it take you to make this?
Probably? It really depends on the cost. Also, I haven't played your other games, so I don't have a really good idea of your style yet.
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AHHHHH I REALLY DON'T WANT TO PLAY THE BAD ENDINGS BUT AT THE SAME TIME I KIND WANT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS BUT I DON'T WANT TO SEE BAE SUFFER AHHHHHHHHHH what a dilemma
Overall: 5 stars
Hi mshen19!
Thanks for visiting and your kind review :"D I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed my VN and got immersed until you laugh and cry along with it ><
1. Aww thank you :"D a lot of people love Reksa hahahah, but I'm so relieved when you say the pace is perfect! I'm quite worried about it ><
2. Oh gosh, my baby is on someone's recommendation list! *bounceonthewallinhappiness*
Ah I'm so glad to know there are people still giving this a try, enjoyed it, and share it to others ^///^ it's all I ask and more!
3. I don't think I can smile any wider now lol x'D
Characters development is very fun and if I can help it, I want to make colored NPCs and not just their silhouettes but unfortunately, I only have a pair of hands :'(
I'm also happy to know you like the story! I like stories with some meaningful values in it, like Hayao Miyazaki's movies >< of course, mine is still not perfect and I still have a lot to learn but wait and see! I will try my best to make more interesting stories in the future ^///^
4. I made the demo during college for my final exam and then continue making it alongside college... I think around 2 years? Take and give some months since I re-make it using ren'py too hahah. The novelty version has too many bugs ><
5. So far, Winged Ones is my only completed VN x'D my second one is called Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle and currently in progress! Take a look if you can, but fair warning, if you've saw Winged Ones bad endings and thought it's scary, Bermuda Triangle will be... much darker so... :"D
Last but not least, thanks for visiting and your warm support!
Here, take some cyber cookies! <3
xoxo,
SweetChiel
OMFG IT WAS SO GOOD! I JUST FINISHED MY FIRST PLAY THROUGH AND I GOT MITRA'S GOOD END AND JHDH GJVHEFGJVFYHDCR
Hi olivegarden87!
Thanks for visiting and wow, I can feel your love and enthusiasm all the way from there x'D
1. Ah, I'm so proud that Mitra finally got another fan! Hahah, he needs more love x'D things will get milder when you go to Rama's and Reksa's route though so prepare yourself! :')
2. Aww you flatter me! Thank you >\\\<
3. I'm a but touched when I hear this ^///^ at first you got attracted by my art but then the story hooked you -there's nothing I can ask for more <3
*and yes, Rama's route made me so sad when I first write it :'( I thought I can find another way, but Rama's psychology simply won't allow it T_T
4. Yuuup, I'm a chinese-Indonesian and I love the various cultures here even though I havent experience the majority of them ><
I got inspired whenever my brain decided to go to lala land and popped an idea or two lol. It's usually late at night or at inappropriate places such as the toilet x'D
5. Aww thank you! Look forward to my next project called Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle! ^///^
Here's some cyber cookies and hope to see you around :"D
xoxo,
SweetChiel
(NO PLOT SPOILERS, BUT...KIND OF. KIND OF SPOILERS. BEWARE!!!!)
First off...
OH. MY. ASDFGHJKL.
I literally almost started crying like .5 minutes ago because I realized that I just finished nearly all of the routes and I really don't know what I'm going to do with my life now because NUSANTARA! >.<
-Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
So, first off...your characters. Absolutely beautiful, I loved them all, from the MC and her spunky quirkiness - I personally connected with the MC on a spiritual level lol xD - to the side characters to the bachelors. Frick, I wanted more, so much more, because they were all so frickin amazing! If I had to choose one bachelor, however...I would have to settle with Mitra.
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*Mitra :: 12.521343/10 Overall my absolute favorite, and that's saying something. I'm usually all over the tsundere or cold, aloof types, definitely not one for the sweet, loving gentleman. And to be honest, I was really surprised that not many liked him as much - Reksa and Rama ranking the highest, although Reksa looked like he took gold with Rama a close second xD He had both weaknesses and strengths that came across to me as I was playing, whether you intended them to or not, and a lot of those strengths were also some of his weaknesses. I'd keep going, but being a writer, I could write my fingers raw discussing these points and all the character development. Also, his story was light, sweet, and engaging, I literally played it for like...2+ hours straight?
*Reksa :: 8/10 Really enjoyed Reksa's story, probably my favorite route due to the story itself and the insight we got on the Komodo tribe and culture. I really loved your Avians and fell more in love with learning about the Komodos too. I wasn't the biggest fan of Reksa himself - although the level of sexuality in this route was considerably higher than the other ones, I didn't mind that c: -, as I thought he was a little too forceful and pushy, too bossy. He also felt a little sexist, constantly calling you woman when he was irritated you or stressed or whatever, and I wasn't all over that. Although I did think I got a sort of feel that the Komodo tribe seems to value men over women, so that sort of sexist behavior could be explained through that sort of cultural outlook? Maybe?? Lol maybe I just imagined it????? xD (Again, it's that author thing, I read too in between the lines sometimes) Again, I loved Reksa's route a ton,
and his possessiveness of the MC might/kind of/sorta/maybe have been hot. Maybe.:> Plus, I keep forgetting to mention, your CG's and GUI's and every other piece of artwork is simply beautiful~*Rama :: 5/10 *shiver* Oh my Rama. Rama, Rama, Rama...I love dark and heavy material, it makes one think and it takes one to the edge of feeling but...holy crap Rama was messed. I found his character to be incredibly intriguing, although mentally unstable and unpredictable. His route terrified me, mostly because I accidentally got the bad ending at 11 at night and just stared, mouth agape with a high-pitched whine, as he...did...what he...did...in that bad ending. *double shiver* He was incredibly interesting though, and I'd love to know more about him. I'm sure he has an incredibly intriguing backstory; lol like I keep saying, I'd love to know more about him - and now I can't stop wondering what Ayu and his twin look like, or at least, how you'd design them.
OVERALL, YOUR BACHELORS WERE 15/5, THEY WERE SO FRICKIN AMAZING, I APPLAUD YOU!! *cue raucous applauding and fangirl screaming*
-What makes you consider to play this game?
The art interested me. The art and the 10,000 downloads I saw when I clicked on this game's synopsis. I was like, 'Well, it can't be all that bad then'.
And then.
The wings.
I've got a thing for shirtless men with wings and skirts. xD
And then at some point, it became the bachelors and story that hooked me, and I've been addicted ever since.
-Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most?
I still can't believe it's over. Sigh.
This VN was phenomenal, and believe me, I've played quite a few. Absolutely wonderful, a 5/5, 10/10, 5 stars, two thumbs up, a Nobel Peace prize winner and a candidate for the Grammys.
The elements that stand out the most...frick, all of them. The artwork was fantastic and simply marvelous, what more can I say there? The characters were so real for me, that I actually felt for a brief second that, yeah, they're like a 2d virtual family, what the heck? And the story? Wonderfully unique and intriguing. The Indonesian culture was a very nice way to spice it up, really added some wonderful cultural aspects that I just ate up. Also, your design of their distinct societies - the Komodos and Avians - was incredibly innovative, I just loved it! I was disappointed that there weren't anymore bachelors because honestly, you wrote everything so well, I wanted more to play through~ xD Plus, the music. THE MUSIC.
-Do you have any question or constructive critiques?
What are your plans for coming back to this world? Will you be making a sequel, or are you considering it? Because I'd be all over that. Also...epilogues or spin-off stories or...or something for our feathery bachelor friends, you've gotta have more in the works. Right??? :)
Regarding constructive critiques...I'd simply have someone go over the text one more time. :) You did a fantastic job, though, there were only a few grammatical and verb conjugation errors.
-Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
I WILL BE THERE WITH ALL THE MONEY.
P.S I may or may not want to create a tumblr for headcanons now?? You've literally ruined my life, but thank you, thank you for doing so c:
Hi, <error-404>found!
Lol your nickname made me thought there's something wrong with itch.io for a sec x'D
First of all, Thank you for your warm support and appreciation! <3 >\\\< your post today made my day and I think will help me with today's progress ^///^
1. Wow you evem made a rating for each of them! I'm even more humbled when I knew that both of us are writers ><
- Mitra: Yup, the girls here likes bad boys the most but we have to admit that Mitra would be the one we'd likely to choose irl, right? X'D *cough*
And yes! His route is exactly as you described *light, sweet, and engaging*. I kind of stacking the fluff there >< both intended and not. Whenever I write a bachelor's route, the dialogues often changes and adapts by itself.
- Reksa: yes! I'm a bit sad myself that I can't write more about the Komodo's daily life like in Avians >< they're interesting by itself.
And yes lol. Indonesian tend to be traditionalists especially the older generations x'D even now, there might still a belief where women just need to work at home and care for children or 'the more children we have, the more wealth' lol. Ah it depends on each individual and certain places but the culture is very thick over here!
Rama: oh lol I get this a lot x'DD
Rama is definitely scary and the most roller-coaster route from all 3! A pat to your shoulder who played his route late in the night :")
I, myself, often question his character and laughed in embarrassment when the music changes a lot like a PMS-ing girl in some scenes (why and how did I write it :"D).
His route is the most challenging too but the result is better than I thougt though o.o
oh, but fair warning; if you got scared by his route, be warned that my next project; especially the Antagonist's route, will be darker than Rama's route >< there will be some... gorey details and actions *cough*
And aww, you flatter me too much with that 15/10 rate >\\\\< I still have much to learn and it was certainly not easy to polish their character and scenes x_x you can definitely do it too with enough time!
2. Lol we're on the same boat! I like anything that involves fantasy... especially wings and topless... and I remember in the past where men still wear *Sarung* or skirt tied to their waist at night and went out with other men to play cards. The skirt apparently longer than it seems, could be untied, and wrapped around their bodies instead when they're cold O.o
3. Aww you flatter me so much to the point I'm grinning myself like a fool x'DD I need my needle to deflate my big head later *cough*
4. Hmm I'm not sure about spin-offs but I'm considering more epilogues in the future since a lot of people asked for that :"D as for new project... check my account! My 2nd project is called Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle <3 I update every Monday in lemmasoft and facebook fanpage~
5. Last but not least, thanks for your warm support! >\\\\< this definitely made my day early in the morning ~
And feel free with the headcannons! Maybe more people will get to enjoy Nusantara if you do that ^////^
Xoxo and cyber cookies,
SweetChiel
lolol I get that a lot about my username xD
lol I was so worried for a second that you'd be rolling your eyes at my humongous post and be all like, 'Man, another critic,' because unfortunately I tend to get a little wordy lol :>
I'm actually so pumped for your next game (gore and all lol c:); also about those epilogues you mentioned *cue fangirl squealing*. I'm going to try to go for Rama's good route later this week, because intense and as 'feels'y as he is, I have to see some sort of happiness for the little rascal. ^^" (He is kinda PMSy, but like in the good way. xD ...Maybe all he needs is a good chocolate bar and everything will be better).
I know I hashed this enough, but thank you again for this game, your characters are already finding their way in my sketchbooks lol :) I'm glad I was able to make your day all those days ago with my review lol, we writers need that sort of boost!! (*level up*) :D If you need anyone for editing or testing or any sort of writing brainstorm ideas or anything, please feel free to shoot me a message or anything. :) I'd love to help your beautiful masterpieces come to life somehow - since I'm clueless myself to programming and can't bring my own ideas into VN form, might as well help others, right? :D :D
Anyway.
Thank you again for bringing this into the world. :D
Now go have a fantastic day~ xD
--SNOWY
Naww, I like critiques~ Gimme moreeee *u* lol. I'm pretty masochistic about this *cough*
Ohhh! I look forward to hear what you think about Rama's good end >< 50:50 percentage of people saying it's satisying and not so far :"D
If you get stuck, check out the walkthrough in lemmasoft forum! His route is the most tricky of them all.
Also, thanks for your offer <3 I'll message you if I need someone to proofread my script :"3 it will need a certain lv of commitment though.
And you're very welcome! <3
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Hi Autumn Fawn! I love your nickname and profile pic! >\\\\< so adorable... *I'm so weak to cute things lol*
1. Thanks! I'm starting to think I might be a bit bias with Reksa's story looking at how steep the popularity difference now x'D
2. Aww glad to hear you like both my art and story! :"D I'm still have a lot to learn and improve though!
3. You give me too much credit, my head is going to bloat lol x'D *prepares a sharp stick to deflate it later*
Thanks! I'll do my best in my 2nd project too for you :"D
4 & 5. Lol a lot of people asked me this, I'm starting to think that maybe it's a good idea to make anothes set of epilogues for them x'D at least I have all the assets ready so I just need to do the writing.... hmm... I'll think about it :"D
Thanks for visiting! Also for the love and chance you gave to my boys!
I hope to see you again in the future!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel