I fell for Mitra INSTANTLY!! >//m//< Love him so much! It won't let me skip (I don't know how to skip.) I died when I followed Granny into the woods, when I think I was going to marry Mitra? Maybe. He proposed (I think). I CRIED when Rama died OmG. Love this game. I'm replaying it now hoping, not to get a 'Bad End' hopefully .
Thanks for playing and glad to hear you likr the boys x'D to skip just press 'ctrl'! And it will stop automatically when the texts are new ones you haven't read. I hope this helps :"3
I dont know if this has happened to anyone else but when I exit and enter the game all my save files are GONE! I can't play it! It says in the begging "invalid zip file" or something like that. And I was almost done with Mitra's route too, and I dont know if ill ever be able to play this game if this keeps happening!! ＼(>o<)ノ
And I really wanna play it, cuz its wonderful so far!
Ah thank god it worked! I think its because now I somehow dowloaded the one with renpy, even though I clicked the same link that I dowloaded the first time... i think?
And that bug message I just closed it and it let me play the game O.o
But now that all is well, its time to play the game and enjoy that beautiful story!^^
THIS... is hard lmfao, I really like all of them to be honest? cause they are all well written characters, I ended up falling for all of them, Rama worried me at first but nope, loved him to. First was Mitra so FIRST LOVE <3 but then Rama needed a hug and someone then dear god, Reska. I seriously can't pick, good job!
What makes you consider to play this game?
I passed it by at first cause I wasn't into otome games but boy am I glad I came back to actually click on it, looking at the pictures of the wonderful backgrounds and characters made me hope it was really good writing too, I was not disappointed.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Again, this is hard. I like all of it, I admit at some point i was kinda wondering what was gonna happen so I'll say the plot/story kept me hooked (other than the hotties with the bodies)
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I actually don't? I mean some parts felt like it dragged on but not really anything that was like OH GOD FIX IT so, thumbs up!
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
I WILL PAY FOR THIS WHEN I CAN cause I want to support your games and this one <3 I really loved it and it left a mark on me, so thank you and everyone who worked on this, may you have a good day!
Hi Statdrops! thanks for visiting and reviewing! ^.^
1. Aww, thank you for giving them all a chanve and loving them in return QuQ this is the best answer you could give me!
2. YAY! happy to hear you enjoy the story that much >\\\< I still have lots to learn, but I'll do my best to lvl up in my next project and hope to see what you think of it >:'D
3. Amen! You have no idea how much you've made my day by saying that QuQ I tried my best to keep a story interesting -I don't want you guys to fall asleep mid-way x'D
4. lololol, I know how you feel! Sometimes, I really want to skip it and went straight for the beef, but character development is like building a house so we need to build a strong base first :"3 but hey, thanks for pointing it out!
5. Aww, thank you very much for your support! Here, have a cyber cookie :'D and thank YOU for playing and reviewing!
I don't know if I can even put into words how much I love Rama. I did not expect to get so attached to him as the sample images didn't paint him as a character that I would normally like. But the first meeting changed that. "Maybe trying to figure him out will be quite interesting in the future." My thoughts were practically the exact same as Tamura's. God, I love characters like that, who hide their true selves under a mask of endless cheer. And his backstory - 👌👀 good shit go౦ԁ sHit👌 thats ✔ some good👌👌shit right👌👌th👌ere. Ever since I learned about the Sati ceremony, never knew it was also used in Indonesia though, I've always wanted to meet a character with that incorporated in his/her backstory. Thank you so much for creating Rama.
What makes you consider to play this game?
I clicked on this game because of the art was up to my standards. I downloaded it because the summary and characters seemed interesting.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
I'd say it's one of the better otome games I've played. The plot is well written, with both serious and comedic moments. The combat scenes are not boring to read, and most of all, while there is a healthy sprinkling romance - it is an otome game after all - it never drowns out the other aspects of the story. While they can be sorted into standard groups, the characters all have distinctive characteristics and are developed to the point that you can tell who is speaking just by the dialogue.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
For someone who has only just recently learned a language, Tamura uses quite a lot of slang and complex words when speaking. And there are also a few modern terms that I didn't expect to find in an ancient setting that are used pretty often. Those two were the main things that bothered me, preventing me from being able to completely settle in the story. And as for questions, is that recurring dream about Rama when he when he went over to the Komodo's territory? It's the most resonable explaination I can think of, but it still doesn't seem right. Please enlighten me.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Oh, definitely. As long as it's $20 or less and I'm not strapped for money at the time, you can count me in.
tldr; you've got the basics of otome games/visual novels down, but be careful with the small things: they can make or break a creation.
also just know that i've only cried twice over a character's death and this is one of them. i hope you're happy
1. You're welcome and thank YOU for loving Rama :'D Many people said he is a character you either love or hate :') He was a challenge to write and I sometimes wanted to pull my hair in frustration when writing his scenes but even so, I love him very much. His backstory is the most complicated than my other babies and tbh, I'm still learning how to potray them better >.<;
I'm relieved to hear you like his story and I will do my best to make more interesting stories in the future! >:'D
2. Amen for first impressions!
While we're on it, what do you think about my new project; "Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle"? O.O Is the art and synopsis interesting?
3. Thanks :'D I want to do my best to not let the readers get bored. You flatter my writer's ego so much here >///< I think I'll need a needle to deflate it hahah~ *cough* but I still have rooms for improvements so I'll do my best to lvl up!
4. Ah yes, language barrier is one of the awkward/loopholes I still try to fix so thank you for pointing it out! As for the recurring dreams; *SPOILER*
Sari is the one who showed it to Tamara. It was an immersive image of Rama's mental condition; he felt betrayed and felt like many people were laughing, mocking at him, and the pain for losing Ayu was killing him slowly in the inside. It also potrayed one of his suicide attempts; falling and breaking his wings. Remember the crunchy sound effect? I was trying to find a broken bone SFX with a little 'splat' and that is the closest I can find :'D did it make you cringe? I hope so x'D *cough*
I hope this answer your questions? o.o I'll try to do better in potraying things in my next project! >:'D
5. YAY!! Thank you for your support and your suggestion! :'D Yes I agree that small details needs more attention than most -elements can break or make a story depending how you execute it so I'll try to be more patient with it and take my time constructing the story ~
and wow -you just gave me the most flattering praise :'D I made you cry *sobs* thank you for liking my story so much! I will definitely deliver your love to Rama <3
If I may ask, what is the other character death that made you cry? o.o
While we're on it, what do you think about my new project; "Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle"? O.O Is the art and synopsis interesting?
Part of the reason I'm so hyped about it is because the art is gorgeous. You seemed to have improved in that field, and I'm really looking forward to the CGs. I think the summary is fine? It's not convoluted but it doesn't give away too many plot points either. But if I can assume that the italic text is the prologue, I think that that portion needs more work. I understand that there will be art to go along with it, but the words along can apply to half a million works and to me, isn't half as interesting as LotWO's prologue. But as you haven't finished developing BT's plot, it's safe to assume that it'll just develop on it's own in time. What I really like about it, though, is the protagonist. She's so different from most otome games' protagonists in how she clearly doesn't excel at everything, has a completely different appearance (short hair!? what a travesty!). That, and her quote speaks to what's left of my soul.
About the dream.
oh god that hurts my heart more;; While the sound effect didn't make me cringe, I did start because I wasn't expecting something like that to happen at all. And I think you did really well portraying things in the dream! This is the sort of thing that fandoms spend too much time agonizing over and creating theories before the creator takes pity on them and gives an explanation. The mysteriousness of the dream adds to the build of tension.
If I may ask, what is the other character death that made you cry? o.o
It's not animated yet, so if you watched Rokka no Yuusha and don't want to be spoiled, please ignore this. Pardon my language, but I fucking lost it when Hans Humpty died in the LN. But unlike when Rama died, those were mostly angry tears, not sad tears. Anyways, he got better. He died a little, but he got better.
also can you plsplspls tell me who the fourth love interest is-
Which bachelor you like the most? and why? Reksa. He made a lot more sacrifices than the other characters in the plot; I liked how much he had to struggle, especially with Purba which you don't get to see as much with the other two. You can't stop worrying about him, and you can't not trust him after your trust in him has been tested (and rewarded) so many times. Well, he did break a promise at the end, but I guess it...was un-broken?? When he screamed out in pain, I felt pure horror and was completely immersed. Maybe it's because I played him first, but I didn't feel that with Mitra (although I may have admittedly swooned some more with him haha). I'm honestly not all that sure why Reksa was so memorable for me, but he is definitely the character that has really stuck to me more than any character from any other game, including popular commercial ones. He seems like a real person, so I end up thinking of him as one.
What makes you consider to play this game? The art made me curious, me being an art hobbyist, but what really made me want to play was the cultural aspect. I wasn't disappointed, plus some of the terms have actually stuck with me. I liked the mini encyclopedia. As a person who's naturally inclined to academics, it was interesting to see the real life roots of things that happened in the visual novel, in addition to your inspirations.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?) The art, story, and character was all amazing. xD I wasn't sure about the writing style when I first began playing the game, but the way you build up relationships between characters is magical. The characters actually have a deep, non-shallow relationship (cough Amnesia cough) where they "KNOW" know each other. The conversation with Mitra about his life's ambitions, the conversation where Reksa reveals a very personal weakness (self-consciousness about his figure lol), and the conversation with Rama where both his own well-hid and personal background and Tamara's are revealed were some of my favorite moments. I loved that the side characters also played a major role in the story and had a fleshed out personality. I loved that it felt like there was a reason you wrote this story other than purely for romance (cough Amnesia cough), as it largely irks me when writers do that. I was very pleasantly surprised during Rama's route when I discovered the heroine had a backstory of her own. It really made me think they were a good match for each other, as they could relate.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft. For Rama's route, there's no option to give him the crystal. I tried clicking above and below the button furiously, but nothing happened. Also, the random events in Mitra and Reksa's routes with Rama in it were kinda spoiler-ey. I didn't do Rama's route first, so it was a little confusing when the main character suddenly knew Rama really well when I didn't.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD) Yes. I'm shocked this game was free, I actually feel guilty because it feels like I cheated you out of at least ten bucks that you should have gotten. xD I've played commercial VNs before, but none of them had stuck in my head for long (with an exception for Anon from X-Note).
Thanks for visiting and wow I'm so happy to read your review! :'D
1. Yes I agree that Reksa's route has more content; that's why I suggested to play his route last x'D but hey! I'm really flattered that you thought Reksa feels like a real person and immersed yourself in his story enough to share his pain/happiness :'D
2. Ah, sweet 1st impression <3
Glad you like the mini encyclopedia! Indonesia has so many cultures that I sometimes have a hard time to choose :")) I want to introduce them little by little so you can expect another mini-encyclopedia in my next game as well x'D
3.Aw you're going to spoil me rotten with all those praises :"D I still have rooms for improvements (like, I need to be more patient and I should hint at Tamara's past better in the other routes) so I will try my hardest to do better next time!
And yes, I also think relationships and roles between minor characters are important -communication is the key!
4. As for Rama's route; he is a little tricky to please x'D
- You can't lie. Ever. So when you meet Reksa for the first time, you have to be honest; not pretend to be some spy. If this condition is not fullfilled, the option to give him the crystal is locked.
- you have to focus on him, don't increase other bachelors affection x'D
And yes, I think I need to make more small events to cover it so it wont be spoiler-ey x'D
5. YAY! Thanks for your support! :'3 you seriously make me blush >\\\< to think it's better than commercial ones are just... QuQ no words can tell you how grateful and flattered I am to hear that.
I hope with this you can unlock Rama's good end and see you around ~
Thank you for the advice on Rama's route, I know the ending to his route is going to be good as well! :3 I'm looking forward to Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle-- Arya's character design looks like something that could be from Zeiva Games, if you've ever heard of them.
Thank you for your support! x'D Ah, I can't wait to make the demo to see if you'll still love Arya after meeting him :')) and yes, I know about zeiva games ~ I played X-Note, Area-X, and still waiting with bated breath the moment Dragon Essence is going to be released! >.<;
I just finished the game at this very moment and I must admit I'm crying while writing this. Thank you so much for creating such a masterpiece - my emotions are simply overflowing right now. I'll leave the spoilers about that for the end, and I'll answer your questions, for now
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
It's a very difficult question, actually... I felt attracted to both Reksa and Rama since t he very moment I saw them. Usually I can define my number one favorite easily in otome games, and logically it should be Reksa here - he's exactly my type of character, both personnality and physically. And I really loved him and his route beyond words, even more than expected! But, I also have a soft spot for disabled or mentally ill characters, and Rama is both, because of his wings and his mental state - I didn't know about that before meeting him in-game. As I said before, I loved Reksa and his route beyond words, but Rama's route just blew my mind. So... if I really have to choose between the two of them, I guess it would be Rama. (sorry Mitra, you're not my type haha!)
What makes you consider to play this game?
I was looking for otome games, and I directly noticed Reksa and Rama when stumbling upon this game. After seeing them, I wanted to know what is the game about, and the story seemed nice too, so I've just decided to play.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
I loved it. I loved every tiny bit of it. I did the three routes, with both bad and good endings when I managed to find both (I didn't get any bad for Mitra). Each route I did, I liked it even more than the previous one (Mitra - Reksa - Rama). What stands out the most... well, obviously, the characters, the pretty art, the engaging story... all of that is very good. But to be honest, if I had to pick ONE thing... I'd be back at Rama, again. Why? Because including a character like him is something... I don't think I've ever seen a character like him being included in the romance options of any dating sim ever. In some games you have characters with issues... but issues so heavy... this is my first time seeing that. So... for the originality, the boldness, and the amount of emotions it brings, including him is the best thing about the game in my opinion.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Well, the game has some typos and weird phrasing sometimes so it would be good to check things like that even more often (well, I shouldn't say that since English isn't my language and my phrasing is often wrong too). But I think the one thing you should be really careful about are the sound effects. The falling sounds made me cringe every single times, because it was a very comical sound, in sometimes very serious scenes. Also, I've noticed that Tamara's sprite looks different (the art style) compared to the other characters, and it looks a bit weird because of that. It isn't too bothersome, but still weird. On the bright side, it was very nice to see a game use inspiration sources most people don't know about - it was very original thanks to that! You should kee making these kind of stories, and also using really nice characters like the ones from this game.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
I tend to forget about kickstarters, unfortunately, but if I'm reminded of it, I'd be glad to help. The same way, I could totally buy a visual novel like this one! The only reason I didn't pay for this one is that I don't have the money right now, but I strongly consider paying at least 15$ once I'll get some money to spare, even if I finished the game.
Now, I want to tell a couple of things about the routes, that are a bit spoilery... so yeah... -----SPOILERS AHEAD-----
Both Reksa's and Rama's routes made me cry. In Reksa's, I had a bad feeling about giving him the bombs, so I did it first. I wanted to see the bad ending too, and since it was more plausible in my mind of this leading to a disaster, I tried that. His bad ending was heartbreaking. But then, I did the good one, and wow, somehow it was worse. The bad ending, well, at some point it gets obvious you got the bad one, so you KNOW the characters will die. But when Reksa died in the good one, it really made me panic - I didn't know if the game had more than one bad ending per character, so I really freaked out about getting another one. But at the same time, that battle was great, and what happened at the end only added to the awesome and powerful moment.
As for Rama's route... well, obviously the route is SAD AS HELL. One thing I did notice is that in both Reksa's and Mitra's routes, Tamara managed to get closer to them and to awaken their feelings long before the festival. It was fast and obvious with Mitra, slow and with a lot of denial with Reksa, but still there. In Rama's route, they weren't really that closer than in the other routes, until the moment Rama ran away and ended up talking about his past. I really like that touch - it's interesting to see how hard it is to break his shell. When he died in Mitra's route, I directly understood he was one of those characters who only can be saved in their own route, so I did Reksa second on purpose. I didn't want to deal with Rama dying after doing his own route once. As for his endings, the choice was obvious for wich one is good and wich one is bad, so I did the bad first too and wow, it was hellish, but at the same time VERY well done, in my opinion. Maybe one of the better scenes of the game - doing it from Rama's perspective, and showing him fall into the depts of madness was so horrible. But his good ending was as beautiful as his bad ending was horrible. It was a perfect conclusion, so warm and powerful - and the last CG was magnificent. It was long, painful, full of tears, but the fact they managed to reach happiness was heartwarming. The funny thing is I didn't learn from my mistakes - after what happens at the end of the battle in Reksa's route, I should have known it would be okay somehow... but no, I freaked out again, because with how tragic is the character, I was almost sure it couldn't end well!
I'm very sorry for the lenghty comment, I hope you had the patience to read it! What I want to say with that whole spoilery addendum is that you really played with my emotions all along. Usually I can predict quite well how things turn out in otome games, but not this one, except for Mitra's route. Mitra is a cute and great character, and his route is very good. I would have loved it in another game, I think, But the two other routes (and characters) were so awesome and perfect that they outshined poor Mitra.
Well, again, thank you for this game, and if you ever do another visual novel, I'd be delighted to play it!
You're welcome and thank YOU for visiting and reviewing! :'D Here's some tissue.
Your heartfelt review blew me away with how long it is -but I definitely enjoy every second of it! x'D
1. I agree; both of them are intense in their own ways. Rama's route was very challenging for me to write >.< it was like riding a roller coaster; with me trying to control where and when will the roller coaster go 'up' or 'down' without crashing it.
I have to say that his bad ending is probably one of the most emotional scenes I've ever wrote :")
However, the story has a dark-element and people tend to avoid such topic so I worry about Rama a lot -but now that I read your review; I gained more confidence to write more stories like Rama's :'D Thank you!
2. Glad you tumbled upon my VN and gave it a try! x'D
3. YAY! Thanks for giving all 3 bachelors a chance! xD
I was making a small experiment with this VN: Mitra is 'Easy', Reksa is 'Medium', and Rama is 'Hard' to see people's reaction. I'm happy to hear you think the complication & boldness is the best thing in Winged Ones x') My next project is... a bit heavier than this one ><
4. Yes, I know that my grammar is very delightful x'D Multiple people keeps reminding me of this -but fear not! I have 3 proofreaders for my next project!
Oh and about Tamara looks different with other characters: Is it because of her blue hair? O.O; I was trying to make her easy to notice so I went and gambled with blue hair :'))
I will take note of it and try to make my next MC character have more similar physical qualities with other characters ~
5. Aww, thank you for the warm support! *hugs*
Now onto the Spoiler Stage:
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*evil chuckles* so my plot to make you anxious in his good end is a success! x'D
At first, I was not planning to make it like that. But as I write, characters tend to change his/her mind; one thing led to another and then VOILA!
Hahahah, that battle scene took a lot of me though. I grinded my brain to make each battle as interesting as they can since I don't want it to be repetitive. Very happy to see such appreciation from you QuQ
For Rama... his route is very slow-paced and he is hard to open up due to his psychology -I often find myself in a headache since he pushed the MC again and again x_x; I'm happy to hear it's well-done from you since other people tend to get impatient with him x'D As I said, his bad route is probably one of the saddest and angsty chapter that I've ever wrote :'( I don't like angst but I can't deny that they're good and sometimes needed at some right moments!
I also agree that Mitra's route is not as intense as the other two x') it was supposed to be a very light story; but now I noticed that I can't make it too light or it will get overshadowed with other routes. Thank you for reminding me of this!
-And don't worry about lengthy review! I enjoy reading them and they always made my day brighter! x'D
Hey! Sorry for not answering before - itch.io didn't notify me of you answer...
Yeah, you shouldn't be worried about using characters like Rama - dating sims of all sorts are full of characters with lighter stories and less tortured minds. While a character like him is uncommon and I understand the doubts you may have felt before the release, I think it's nice to have such a change of pace from the usual formula, and all of my friends I talked to about the game liked the concept of that character.
Angst isn't a bad thing in a VN game about romance - it's nice to see it taken really seriously. The only thing that should, in my opinion, be avoided is not allowing a character to have a good ending. I mean, in a game where the whole point is to reach a happy ending, it's always very sad if one or more character doesn't get that. A good example is the BL game Kuro no Tsuki - it isn't a very good game to be honest, even if I like it because of fond memories related to it. But one character in the game dies if you do his ending, while he lives in every other route. That's the kind of things that shouldn't be done haha!
I kinda understand why some people would think Rama's route is too "slow", but I think it's necessary for a character like him, and his route doesn't lack events - the only thing that is slow paced is the romance progression itself, not the amount of encounters with the character. So yeah, in that case I'd rather say it was not a route suited for the people who said that rather than a weakness in the route itself - I'm fairly sure lots of people like it as much as I do! It would have been very "random" if suddenly the romance appeared at the moment when he may die in the forest after not progressing much before. But even at that moment, while he opened up a bit, it wasn't quite there - it was subtle enough to make it a logical progression. At the same time, I actually did see Tamara's feeling growing stronger and stronger before that point, wich is some kind of progression, even if Rama wasn't showing the same things. I think some people discard the MC a bit too much and focus only on the love interst they're pursuing. I think the MC's feelings are important too for the progression of a story.
Hi Konoi, and no problem! I'm often late at replying too ><
As for Rama, I'm glad to hear you like his concept! In the future, there will be more uncommon characters -I read and watch a lot of genres, but somehow, the ones that stuck in my head are always either angst/fluff :") you can expect a strangely angst but also fluffy stories from me lol
Oh, and don't worry, I won't make tragedy stories like in your example, Kuro no Tsuki. That is just a big NO o.o; If there is, I will definitely make an U-Turn and make it a happy end ASAP X'D
But to be honest, Rama's route made me impatient as well hahah >< the process is slow and we want to hurry in order to get to the good stuff, yeah? :")) however, his psychology didn't allow it ~
This is one of the reasons why my second VN will be a lot more longer x'D
This is suchhh a great game! I love it to bits! Like, the story was great, the art was amazing and I had such a blast playing it.
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
I like all of them for different reasons, but my favorite has to be Reksa, His grumpiness is too cute and his protective streak is something that I really like. His possessiveness at the end of the epilogue was something I found attractive. I was amazed at how much more there was to him, too. He had insecurities, which was a very nice surprise and his obivous love and care for his people gave him even more depth. His animal like qualities where also something I really liked about him.
What makes you consider to play this game?
Well, the fact that this game features a winged race and a reptile like race had my interested. It also helped that the three love interests had my attention with there designs.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Overall, this visual novel was great! I had such a fun time playing it and learning more about the characters. The art was amazing and looked so well done, a lot of love and care was put into it.
The story was something else, each route had emotions in it, though I must say my favorite story had to be Rama's, with how much raw emotion there was and the fact that you touched on such heavy topics without weighting down the story was just amazing. Though, I still feel sad that Rama could only be saved in his route.
Tamara was so great. She's strong and independent, her kindness was something I immediately latched on to. The fact that she had flaws also made me like her even more.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques?
Nothing, really. The only thing I can think of was how after each route (expect Mitra's, his route ending where I think it should have) I felt like there should be more but I guess that goes to show how much I enjoyed the game. I did miss a few CGs in the gallery and I really want to go back and find them but I don't even know where to begin.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
Oh, yes definitely. Judging from what I just played through, I'm sure any of your other works would be just as amazing!
Such an amazing game! I hope this helps you with future games!
Thanks for visiting and reviewing! :'D I'm sorry for the late reply tho; I was busy preparing my next project >.<;
1. Thank you! I'm glad so many people loves and understands his character so well x'D he is a very lucky man indeed ~
2. Ah, sweet first impression *u*
3. You're making me blush >///<; I do my best to apply emotions into each chapter; it's my way to keep people from getting bored quickly. I still have rooms to improve in grammar and details tho! I'll do my best too next time >:'D
4. Oh, did you skip the epilogue or bad ending? o.o The epilogue should play automatically once you passed the credits. For bad endings, you just have to give each bachelors the bombs :'3
5. Thank you for your warm support! x'D the next project is near but I still have some preparations to make.
**Warning** This contains minor spoilers! *Warning**
I am absolutely in LOVE with this game~! It took my breath away and made me really FEEL the stories!
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
You know after reading a lot of the comments below, I was surprised to see that not many people were fond of Rama. But actually he is my favorite! He intrigued me with his personality and background story more than the other guys, and even in Mitra and Reksa's routes I was devastated at his suicide. So i saved him for last and damn, he is so amazing. I love the complexity of his past and character, and even his drawn out epilogue (poor Tamara, three years?!). But it was so worth it! His route made me feel the strongest and the epilogue literally had me crying along with Tamara out of happiness. Happy endings always get me~! <3
I especially enjoyed how raw and emotional his route was, while still remaining realistic (well as much as it can for a fantasy visual novel). I thought how he grieved, his pain, his reactions to Tamara, and how long it took him to get over Ayu (but he finally did hehe, i ship RamaXTamara SO HARD) were all very REAL and I appreciated that so much. I connected with him in a lot of ways!
I could go on all day about that fine piece of man meat but I won't. X'D
What makes you consider to play this game?
Well I mean, it's a very interesting premise! You sold it on this page really well too, the description got me hooked and then reading people's comments and seeing how much they loved it? I knew I had to try and DAMN am I glad I did! So many sexy men. X'D
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most?
Overall, I am simply amazed at the detail and love that went into this visual novel. I'm still stunned that this is free! Holy cow, I am so lucky lol. The characters were all very different and complex, each with their own unique backstory. But they all managed to be woven together perfectly. The amount of creativity and dedication that obviously went into this is why I wanted to comment so badly, something I rarely do. You deserve to know that you are amazing.
The art was beautiful, once again details are KEY here. And you sure know how to make attractive characters, hot damn. X'D
I think my favorite part is definitely the stories. I admire you for being able to touch on such heavy topics such as suicide and rape without it weighing down the stories, in fact, in my opinion it added to them! Because once again that brings in the emotions, this visual novel made me feel for the characters (including even minor characters and the MC!) like no other visual novel has done before, and I don't say that lightly. Especially Rama, and yes I loved Tamara. Sometimes it can be hard to like the character you're playing, in fact a lot of visual novels suffer from poor MC depth and characterization. I don't know how many times I've come across an MC who is weak and wimpy and pathetic or on the other spectrum, so amazing in every way. =.=
Tamara was very refreshing. She was weak in body yes, but she had her moments where she kicked ass. Her spirit was strong, she was kind and everyone loved her and YET she definitely had flaws. I think her kindness is what i loved the most about her (aside from her sense of humor and not taking anybody's shit lololol), especially in Rama's route. *Squeal* I absolutely adore them, I know I'm gonna replay this game~!
Reksa was the first one I played and I liked him a lot, gotta say there's just something about a manly man that gets me all hot and bothered. X'DD But normally I actually don't go for the brooding bad boy type so I was pleasantly surprised when his character turned out to be MUCH more. His past, the fact that not all Komodo's were bad, the truth behind the war that really shocked me (that's another thing i must applaud you on, i love me some drama!). And during his epilogue when he was all possessive ('you're mine!') I nearly died, god so sexy~! <3
Mitra was my least favorite, though that in no way means I disliked him! He is an amazing character like the rest, I suppose he was just a little too predictable for me. I still thoroughly enjoyed playing his route, so sweet and charming (and hot!). <3
And you already know I'm head over heels for Rama LOL. XD <3
I love how much detail went into the minor characters too though! Asih and her husband Yuda, both of whom I adore, and Yuda is just downright hilarious. Granny, and the triplets and I think my favorite, Reksa's fellow Komodo, Purba. Purba has to be all time favorite villain (and oh my god he's sexy~!) in a visual novel lol, yeah he's horrible and I love him. XD I love how his defeat in each route kind of implied that there was more to him then meets the eye and I feel like there could have been a great opportunity to explore his depth. I totally would have played his route if that were, you know, a thing. XD But that would probably be really hard to do, so he'll just stay mysterious~
Looks wise, i at first thought Reksa was the best looking but Rama's CG's were SPOT ON and ugh, I have never been so attracted to blonde hair before LOL. Especially the epilogue CG where he's sleeping? Oh, so cute~! <3 Overall though, all very attractive characters and that is in part due to the amazing art. :)
Do you have any question or constructive critiques?
Honestly, not much! When I say this game is one of my favorite ever and I'm in love with it, that's the truth! I read over the comments before I started the game and so I was expecting the shaking. At first it was a little hard to get used to I admit, especially because it was just a constant thing even in instances where I thought it wasn't really necessary. However, as I played the visual novel more I became used to it and in fact, in certain ways I think it really enhances the story and I can definitely see what you were going for. I just think that maybe there should be an option in the menu to turn off the shaking? That way for people who don't care or enjoy it like me, they can just play through but those who don't like it, they can turn it off without it affecting their game play, and hence, their opinion on the game. But other than that, nope I loved this visual novel, 10/10!
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
Oh HELL yes! Like i mentioned earlier, I'm still shocked at the fact that this was free! Simply because of the amount of work and dedication I can clearly see went into this. You could have easily charged money for it and it would have been so, so worth it! But then again, when I first found this I was strapped for cash (LOL couple days ago, haven't stopped playing since I installed it) so super glad it was free lol. But yes, because I have seen what you are capable of, if you come out with another visual novel that obviously interests me (demo included), then I would definitely buy it because I know you won't let me down. :D
This game is so original and beautiful and sexy and amazing. XD Thank you so much, and I hope this helps~! <3
Thanks for visiting and reviewing! I enjoyed reading this very much :'3 I apologize for the late reply; I was busy preparing my next project you see >.<;;
1. Aww, I agree that Rama needs more love :'3 but it's okay since everyone has their own tastes ~
But I'm very happy to hear how you immersed yourself in Rama's route! It was a challenge writing his story -but I'm glad I did! Even though it involves me playing lots of angst songs/instrumentals to get my muse :'))
But seriously, his bad end is probably one of the most emotional scenes I've ever written Q_Q
Thank you for loving this little child of mine <3 I'll make sure to deliver your love ~
2. Thanks! I tried my best x'D
3. You're spoiling me rotten *cough* but I'm not complaining! I'm very happy to see all my boys are being loved >////<
I think I have more room for improvements; the details are a bit unclear at some events (like, Tamara's past). I think I got a bit impatient in the middle of the story and skipped some important things; much to my dismay; but I'll definitely do better next time to make you and other readers happy :'3
Though... it will involve a lot of waiting in your part >.<; I hope you'll be patient with me :'3
As for Purba... lol, I know that feeling! I love antagonist characters too and wish to date them in some games; like Kuja and Sephiroth from Final Fantasy Series? x'D They sometimes attracts me more than the MC/protagonist *swoons
4. Thank you~ I'll do my best to meet your expectation in my next game :'3
First off I loved playing Nusantra! The story, world, and characters are all interesting and I love the art. This is going on my favorites list.
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
I really like Reksa. I'm a sucker for dark hair+green eyes and the hostile type. But I love Mitra! He's pretty much the kind of man I want to marry (why are they always fictional?).
What makes you consider to play this game?
I love fantasy and otome games so when I saw this I had to play.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Overall I love it! I'm not sure which element stands out the most. I think each play-through is different.Like when you start out the artwork and story stands out but as you get to know each character the characterization stands out (especially after doing Rama's path).
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I read through some of the comments and someone mentioned the shaking. Although it does add to some scenes (for instance when Tamara falls or during the cave-in) those who are more sensitive may stop playing because of it.
Also, I enjoyed reading through the encyclopedia and learning where your inspiration for certain scenes and character designs came from. ^^
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
I would totally buy it if/when I have the money. That seems to be life's theme: If I had/have the money... (too bad we can't pay bills with our imagination)
First, I want to apologize for this late reply due to me being busy preparing my next project >.<;; but boy, I feel touched to hear my VN is going into your favourite list! :'D
1. lololol, so many people like hostile bachelors x'D I can't say anything since we're on the same boat tho, lol.
2. High five! I also love fantasy related stories/otome :'3
3. You noticed! x'D Yes, I made each route unique since I don't want to be repetitive and bore you guys to lala land ~ You spoil me too much tho >.< I still have rooms for improvement and I'll do my best to meet your expectation in the future! :'3
4. Oooh, so maybe the 'shake' effect is a bit intense in some parts O.O; I'll take note and tone it down a bit next time; thanks for pointing it out! and glad you like the mini-encyclopedia! I'm going to keep that feature for sure~
5. Nah, I understand. We have bills to pay and life changing from adolescent to adulthood can be a bit overwhelming x.x thanks for the support tho!
hello! just wanted to say thank you for sharing this game! the graphics are beautiful, the story is well-written, i enjoyed the characters although rama was a bit... different sometimes (his bad end made me feel REALLY sorry for him though Q O Q!!). and i just. man this is one of my favorite if not the most favorite free otome game i've stumbled upon. i look forward to any future releases!
as for the questionnaire. .. .
Which bachelor you like the most? and why? my favorite is reksa!!! i'm a sucker for the hostile-then-friends-then-lovers type, and he didn't fail to deliver. also he's so cute and rather feisty at the same time? does that even make sense? hahaha. i also did enough mitra, though. he was the first route i went for - i enjoyed how down-to-earth he was.
What makes you consider to play this game? honestly, i was looking for a otome game to play and saw this one listed and decided to give it a shot since the premise seemed interesting enough. i'm glad i decided to try it out, lol.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?) overall, i do like the visual novel! the element that stood out to me in the beginning was the story, and the artwork sealed the deal since it's really beautiful.
aside from that, while he's not my favorite bachelor, rama's story was... really different and had a lot of sensitive topics. i don't mean that in a bad light, rather - it was really nice to read as it's so distinctively different from mitra and reska. i felt really bad for rama if you don't take his route that he never fully heals/recovers from his past experiences and well... hits the bucket, so to speak. qq i was glad that in his route at least mc shares her own burdens with him and they both move on with their past together.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft. the [SPOILER] rape mention in mitra's route [/SPOILER] i found so out-of-the-blue, or rather i wasn't expecting it since that was the first relatively-dark mention in that route iirc. regardless, mitra's response to her confession was 100% A+++++. i wanted to applaud you on how you wrote his response to that scenario.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD) yes yes and yes!!!! i'd be glad to show any support! throws my wallet your way tbh ♥
Thanks for coming and reviewing :'D I'm really sorry for this late reply; I was busy preparing my next project (and still is) I'm very happy to see more people is still coming and reading Nusantara tho QuQ
1. lol, I understand what you mean x'D Reksa turned out better than I expected! I'm also a fan of cold or a bit antagonistic characters... so that might be why :'))
2. YAY! and thank YOU for giving this little one a chance x'D
3. Thanks! I tried my best to make things interesting :'3 and I was quite worried too at the beginning since some events are a bit dark while my art has bright color palette -but thank God they worked well x'D
-and Yes, I created 3 different bachelors to see how you guys will react :') (easy, medium, hard?) I'm also glad that even though Rama is not your favourite, you also gave him a chance and understood his story well! *hugs*
4. lol, yeah, that part of the story is cringe-worthy >.<;; I didn't put enough events to hint on Tamara's past -I'll definitely try not to repeat the same mistake! >:'D thanks for pointing it out!
5. D'aww thank you for your support! :'D
Thanks again and I'll see you around! my next project is going nicely~
Which bachelor you like the most? and why? Oh, this is hard. It's honestly a toss-up between Mitra and Reksa. I'm tempted to just go with Mitra, but that's a bit biased since I played his route last. I actually cried towards the end of Reksa's route when a certain spoiler-y thing happened, and he was so sweet, and I was just overcome by all the feels....
What makes you consider to play this game? Well, lets be honest: the art was the first thing to catch my eye. What made me continue to play this game was the story and characterization. The story is unique and engaging, and the characters feel like people rather than archetypes or cardboard cut-outs.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?) This is a beautifully done VN. 9/10, would play again (and again and again and...).
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft. I did find some of what I assume were errors in word choice, which I assume are there because English isn't your first language. They weren't so bad that I didn't know what you meant, but they created some unintentionally funny moments. I commented on your DevArt regarding this, so I won't go into that further here.
Another thing that would be nice is some closure at the end. I was hoping for a Big Damn Kiss or some sort of lovey scene after choosing to stay, but I never got one; I chose to stay, and the game ended. I kind of felt like that dumped me out of the story rather than letting me down gently (for lack of a better metaphor). It's not a huge issue or anything, but there you are.
I think it would be nice if there were more variation in the story itself when you play different routes. I realize that this would be a LOT of extra work for you, and it's not really a big deal, but, hey, you asked.
I don't know if this is a flaw or not, but it kind of seems like Tamara is supposed to end up with Mitra (considering a few scenes that were constant throughout all three routes and some Tamara-backstory-revelation that only occurs in Mitra's route). I'm not sure if you intended for that or not (or if I'm just reading too much into it, which is entirely possible).
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD) I will definitely buy it! You've shown in this VN that you are a pretty masterful storyteller (and heartstring-puller...), and you said that it would probably be around $10-15. That's definitely worth it! I can't wait! <3
I'm very happy that you like my art-style and even say the story is good >\\\< I'm also happy that Mitra is getting quite popular <3 but I guess Rama is not your type? XD
Grammar is still my biggest enemy and I still have rooms for improvement in my writing skills so I hope you'll be patient for my next project since I'm going to take my time learning >:')
Oh and after the credits, there should be epilogues for each bachelors o.o; I have no idea how you missed it since everyone else seems to get it x.x
Oooh, I hope it's not a bug since Ren'py is not supposed to have many bugs ><;
Also, thank you for your support! I'll do my best to reach your expectation and more in my next project! :")
Yeah, I'm not terribly fond of Rama. Sorry. I just don't have the patience for his shenanigans, and there was one point where he did something that REALLY pissed me off that I won't mention because of spoilers. After that point, though, I was just like, "NOPE. DONE." I just felt so outraged by it, and it was never really addressed afterwards (which I understand, since it was done at a point of super high tension towards the end of the plot, but it doesn't stop me from getting worked up about it).
Your grammar didn't actually bother me or keep me from enjoying the story, so please don't be too self-conscious about it. There were just a few instances that I noticed where the words you used were a little strange for the context of what was happening (and those times were mostly because of alternate meanings of those words and slang terminology). If you like, I would be happy to help you with things like that. Then again, no one else seems to have noticed, so maybe I only noticed because I'm kind of a word nerd. Honestly, I have so much respect for everything you've done already; this is a very minor thing.
Ahh, I see about the epilogues now. The credits rolling is usually a signal to me that the game/movie is over. My mistake. Thanks for letting me know, though! Now I have an excuse to play it again right away! Heehee! <3
OMGG!!! i LOVE LOVEEE YOUR GAME!! (pardon my caps lel) Reksa is BAE I KENNOT honestly when i first started playing your game i was like mehh..its probably gonna be those boring visual novel games but im SOO GLAD your game prove me wrong!! and my gawdd when the game included melay words i was like HEYY MY NATIVE LANGUAGE YUSSS!! i seriously cant wait for your upcoming games im so excited!! i hope more people will check out your creations >.< (p.s Rama is cute but EURRGGGGHH I WANT TO SLAP HIS FACE SOMETIMES)
Also the walkthrough isn't showing up. I'm taken to the site but the words don't show up.....I'm not looking for a how-to-win thing I just want the CG i'm missing for Mitra.
It's a really good game and I know how much projects like this mean to the creators, however I do have some small critiques for future reference....
1. Don't do so much with visual shaking and flashing of the screen, it can become annoying and distracting to some readers if overdone. When shaking or vibrating the screen it should be done in moderation and typically when certain actions are done. Flashing the screen is the same, if you use it try not to overdo it. Flash the screen 4 or 5 times and then either keep screen black or clear the image but if it's constantly flashing it will become very distracting to readers and it can take away the sense of "Immersion" within the story.
2. adding more music, even if it's just soft background noise is usually helpful. It's better it have more music in a VN than very little. (not that there was that much of a lack, but the beginning could've used a bit more music.)
3. Try not to do scrolling or auto continue words and dialogue unless you have a voice actor to go with it. people read at there own pace and when the words change on their own it can become frustrating to the reader if it goes too fast.
4. Make the credits skip-able, this is because if the reader has accidentally scrolled back (Like my smart self did) they will have to re-watch it, that can be a bit annoying.
Now before you get all critical and whatnot (not saying you'll get upset but just in case you do I want to clear thing's up) I just wanted to tell you that this is an amazing game and I adore it. The music that is present in the game is perfect, (I only wish there was more of it) and the CG is beautifully drawn. It's hard to find a VN with a good story line and gorgeous CG. I love the language barrier at the beginning, it's different and very creative. Not many people would think about adding that to their stories. I adore the game and the story, I love the fact that every choice you make has a direct impact on all three of the Boys and that you can get a wonderful ending but experience a heartbreaking scene.
I look forward to more of your creations and I hope you put the same amount of creativity, hope, and love into all that you do.
I think you're talking about the beginning of the story when the legend story is being told? (auto-text) and there ARE lots of shaking and flashing when Tamara 'fell' ...even more so in the endings :"))
Oh and I take it for granted that people know how to skip text/credits with ctrl button O.O; really sorry about that.
In my next VN, I'll try to tone down the shaking/flashing ><; I tend to get carried away :"))
About more songs; this is a good idea and I was considering to hire a composer for more original musics (I'm quite a picky author and it took forever to get musics which are compatible with some scene's situation >.<). But I do thought about using Indiegogo for getting funds o.o I'm focusing on preparations atm tho -pray so my campaign in indiegogo will go well! XD
Again, thanks for your concern and support! See you around in the future!
No problem, I always enjoy a good VN and I love helping others make them even better. This one was absolutely amazing and I enjoyed every bit of the story including the bad endings. I can't wait to see what else you come up with, and yes I was talking about the auto-text at the beginning.
I just made an account so I could comment. This game really awed me. I'm speechless after playing it... IT WAS SO GOOD. I cried, laughed, was angered... I felt so many things that I can't even fully explain myself. So I will answer your questions!
1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Tough question. I love Mitra and Reksa equally. If I could, I wanted both of them LMAO. Mitra because he is so trustworthy... He is like that big protector that would give everything to his girl. He was the first route I played... yeah, loved him right away.
Now, Reksa is a interesting character. After I played Mitra I was thinking "Reksa seems very similar to Pubra... is he Pubra? :o" When I played Rama route, I already knew he wasn't, but it was a nice suspense haha. So, back to Reksa, that beautiful specimen: I liked how he would growl, purr, be angry but in the end he was really a big wolfy puppy. LOVED THE GOOD END - the best, in my opinion. I just wanted a sequel to that ending haha #hornybastard. OH and he is not just a pretty face, he is a character with a personality and troubles - he is not perfect.
2.What makes you consider to play this game?
When I want to play a VN I look at the art first then the characters. I loved how you portrait things, and the characters were yummy, so I gave it a go.
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
I love all the elements in this VN. Love the art, the story, the characters.I just found some kissing CG weird, but overall it was great.
4. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I wanted routes with stories a little different. I felt that they followed the same boat, just a few differences. I wanted bigger endings... to know more about what happened after her decision. More endings
5. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
If it's not too expensive, I'd buy :) And of course, if it could be delivered to Brazil~
Hi sayuk! And thank you so much for being so supportive QuQ I'm touched to hear you make an account just to comment here ~
1. Lol so gentleman vs hornybastard for you x'DD hahahah I laughed in the morning when I read this -I'm glad you like their routes! It was definitely fun to write them (tho some people get turned off by Reksa's possessiveness and horniness 8'D /hammer)
But really, I'm very happy to hear you like their personalities and stories :"3
2. Lol, yup, first impression is important! I'm glad you like my art style >\\\<
3. Lol you must be talking about Mitra and Tamara's Omed-omedan kiss? X'D well to be honest, I was confused about How to portrait Mitra kissing Tamara's chin in that angle -but thanks for the concern, I'll make sure to look for more kissing pose reference :"3
4. Hmm so probably longer and more epilogues? O.o okay ~ I'll consider and learn how to make satisfying epilogues for you xD
5. I'm not sure about hardcopies -maybe a digital copy for you to download O.O I've never sent items overseas so I'm afraid it will get lost somewhere x'D
I must agree, I recently play it about 3 days ago and made an account today to share my thoughts. I'll be honest the most awesome plot and heart felt moments, I played it blind and got rama route without even knowing and started to develop feeling for him. I really wanted to help him but end it with a bad ending, I did saw it coming when I felt like something is wrong but I accept since I did a bad job. Sorry rambling on owo;;.
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
At First it was rama when I first play blind The feels for his backstory wants me to help heal him to see better days but reksa growling and purring takes the cake because I find that when a male got into their instinct is pretty hot and makes my core pools hahaha xD.
What makes you consider to play this game?
At first I wanted a good time, I played many otome that was on here and this was the next on my list, compare it to the others this by far have the best story line for teens if added a little more like intention hentai then adult as well :3.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
The art work, seriously caught my eyes, next would be the sound effective for the dialog, and after looking back again, I now value a good story line as long it still keep my attention and allow me to make hard choices without looking at walk through. I'm more then happy.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
If their anyway to get a bouns ending? For intercourse and foreshadowing kids? Also can we input in our own name for the character? Also for the next game can it be another human but still part of the same game world? (I'm not good at explain owo;;) Any chance for some of them to have a voice actor?
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
I would be sad but if its like this then yes. I just pray that its not overly prices.
Mitra, is an awesome and hot person, he is the dream guy every GOOD girl should have but let's just say I'm NOT a good girl sooo, he could add a little more *wink wink* kinks~. Here how I images if a guy alike from mitra/rama (yeah a knew a werid combo) In the public he is both serious/cheery playboy that look like he couldn't keep it in his pants. While at nice, he one of those that werids a mask and have nightmare that would go out find a cliff or a tree near the cliff watching the ocean till he fall asleep. but hey that just me xD
Thanks for stopping by :'3 I'm touched when you said my story is good enough to push you to comment QuQ
1. lol I know that feeling too well dear x') I'm glad we have the same taste /facepalm in embarassment*
2. Aww thank you O///O but I think I will keep my works PG15 since I never wrote PG17+ stories :")) close... but hentai? Uhh nope. (Except if people pushes me and fund me enough to cover my embarassment -but I seriously doubt it! X'D)
3. Hmm, hmm Ia agree that first impression is very important! Glad that you like my art style dear :"3 I'll also do my best to make more interesting stories for you.
4. Oh lol, if you follow my facebook page (Nusantara Visual Novel Series) you'll get a small info about my next project (same universe but entirely new story; and probably some cameo) ;)
Intercourse? Uhh.. like I said before, nope x'D hints about their activities maybe but a detailed chapter for it? Nope. Future children? O///O I'll consider it ~
I've thought about bonus ending/mystery character for my next project tho ;)
5. Don't worry, it will probably range arpund $10 for early birds and $15 at most :"3
You know, I really love this game. Played the older version n this version. You don't know how many times I played the game on and on and on. I kept rambling and praising your fantastic works to my siblings but, they just ignored me, saying I kept on repeating the same thing over and over...Hahahaha... >///>
can't blame them tho, I sounded like a broken record... @////@ and I created this account just to comment...I think a lot of people did this too! ^.^)/
will you be making another game? or the continuation of this game? 0.0)/ I'm so looking forward to it! ...hopefully free? 'coz I'm always broke these days...sorry! I'm only rich with ideas. If you're planning on making another game, n in need of ideas, I'd be happy to help! Hahaha... ^w^)/ Anyway, to answer the questions~
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
REKSA! then Mitra and finally Rama~ :3 why? well, let's just say he's attitude tied us together... >///>
What makes you consider to play this game?
Actually, I love playing visual novels. Especially one with otome as a genre~ Tho, I'm not really picky since I also played vns that targeted males. :p
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
The story and characters! I really like this game because I can somehow relate? The fantasy theme is not too far-stretched and I always love bad ends. The arts too~ Nice arts but, if you do a lil more touch up, it'll be much better. :3 But, I'm never picky with arts in the first place. Tehee~ Seriously, a lot of commercial vns have beautiful arts but with stories that's a little...yeaaa~. But yours, wow...awesomez! And the protagonist is not dumb and hopeless like in most vns! That's a major relief! My goodness! My mind is saved! ^.^)/ Like I said, the story's good. Arghhh...why is it when I wrote comments, I never managed to tell what I feel clearly?! T^T Am I shy? O.o w-well..., let's forget about me n on with my comment! :3
umm, I'll try to buy your games, when I have money~ :3 Hopefully... ;.; I'll manage! :3 I think this is all... well, umm, do your best and keep up the good work! ^.^)/
lol I'm touched to hear you try to tell your siblings about this game x'D there's nothing can make me more happy than to see someone loves this VN as much as I do :'D
I think your wish have just came true a few weeks ago x'D I'm preparing a new VN called; Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle.
It's an entirely new story but set in the same universe (only bigger). This time you'll have a chance to travel and visit other places :'3 and maybe some cameos lol. Follow my facebook page for early news xD but sadly, it's gonna be commercial u.u
But It will be awhile until I post a WIP thread on lemmasoft/FB/dA since I'm flooded with work atm :S
and lol, Reksa is still the most popular I see x'D glad to meet fellow VN lover! (tho, I'm picky about VNs targeted at males :'D maybe you can recommend me something? last thing I played is ever-17).
Aww and thanks for saying my story is amazing! (-OuO-) I think I still have rooms for improvements -but I'll do my best to create more interesting stories in the future! but again, thanks for the healthy dose of stroking my artist's ego x'D
- and Hahahahh, lol! so you'd like to romance Purba :')) now, that's a first! but I can't blame you since I often find myself attracted to antagonist character hahahahahah, welcome to my boat! x'D But sadly, I'm not planning to make a sekuel u.u (pardon the grammar mistake, I can't press the 'kiu' button)
Overall, thanks for your support! Hope to see you around! :'3
awww, commercial...Owh well, I'm gonna start working next year so it's fine~ X3
owhh, in this vn, will the new protagonist meet with Tamara and the bachelors in the last game? or in an entire different place?
0.o owhh, I'm asking for spoilers already! XDDD please don't mind me!
Yes, yes~ Reksa is still dayum~ X333 there's no end to my flirting, it seems! XD
too bad there's no route for Purba~ :3 but, will there be route for antagonist in the next vn? o.o)/
hmmm, a recommendation...hmm, I like them with rpg, strategy and stats raising so, Kamidori Alchemy Meister for now. Owh, there's this vn that was said to challenge the manliness of ze guys called Lucy: The Eternity She Wished For~ I haven't checked it out yet tho! Too many assignments to send this year~ XDDD I feel like I'm gonna die of insomnia~
umm, well, I guess this is all? I can't really think right at the moment. hahaha...three more assignments to go until I'm set for this semester~ XDDD so,...sorry for rambling~! ;.;)/
well, I'll be seeing you again! Always support you, sweetheart~ <3
Dan ceritanya bagus, love the Indonesian-reference and cultures. Nanti mau planning bikin sequel nggak? atau spin-off? #akhirnya-ketemu-programer-indonesia
tp sygny sy gk rencana mau bkin sekuelny u.u mnurut sy crita yg ini ud resmi tutup buku tp mngkin akan ada cameony d projek brikutny :'3
projek brikutny lg in progress preparationny, dan jdulny Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle. Set in the same universe but an entirely new story + a chance to travel and explore more of Nusantara's archipelagos xD
Follow page FBku mungkin u/ news2 awal :'3 tp WIP update spertiny bkal bru muncul Desember, soalny kerjaan lg numpuk @@
Have only played Mitra's route, will answer this after I finish all, but he was so lovable. Ramma seems a bit too dangerous and dark for my liking... I will still play his route though. Reksa seem really really cute too but I will leave him for the end.
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
Story, also I like the idea of the avian race. I like Otome in general, but Im used to the more shoujo bishonnen type so this was a nice surprise
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
The story then the art
4.Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Kissing GC need a bit of practicing, thats all. Also, a random question that I do not know if it is already asked, would Tamara be able to have children with the boys? kinda asking since Mitra is so family oriented I feel sad that she might not be able to have children with him and make his dream come true... if so I would rather prefer the ending where she returns home and leaves him behind, at least he could find a woman that could make his dream come true. I mean I know children aren't needed to make a couple loving each other happy... just felt bad giving Mitra no children lol
5.Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs
If the story and art catch my attention :) , I actually didn't think I would enjoy it this much, it didn't call my attention until I played it
Hi mooninlove! Thanks for stopping by and reviewed!
1. lol, okay I'll look forward to your reactions after playing them all xD
2. Yup, a refreshing theme I guess? :'3 we've had so much in high-school/modern themes these days so I'm glad to provide something different xD
3. Aww thank you! >///<
4. *cough* thanks for the suggestion >< I guess that means I need to find more kissing references ^///^
well, this is an interesting uestion, but yes, Tamara will be able to cross-breed have children with the Avians/Komodos! >:D it's actually a minor part of the Goddess's idea to fast forward the progress of her creation's evolution; but not by much. The general idea in this story is that the 'myth' in our world about anubis, angels, centaurs, kinara kinari (humans part animals) is true and does exist but long forgotten. If there's a smoke, there's a fire.
Thank you for your reply :,) I have finished all routes and Reksa ended as my favorite, though sometimes he is too rude he ends being sweet; but I would actually marry a guy like Mitra in rl sounds like a more safe marriage -giggles-
I have just finished playing Nusantara and I really liked this game.
It is very captivating and I felt absorbed in that place with the main character which to me made me enjoy this game that I wanted to help answer some of your questions.
I enjoyed them all as each had a great backing story and they were all very unique characters.
I would have to say Rama's story sticks in my mind more than the rest I guess it struck a chord with me as It is emotionally good.
I was interested with the setting of the game and the cultural setting that made me curious. I love ancient settings/fantasy and rich culture.
The way the story is written keeps you engaged with all the characters I didn't find any dull moments. I guess that would be the great story telling and I also think the art is so good, seeing each viewpoint of the characters made the story more well rounded. The added Encyclopaedia and the history and reading about what inspired you on the Extra section was nice touches to read.
If anything it would be a few minor grammar confusion while playing considering though I can't fault the rest of the game.
There's nothing makes me more happy than to hear you enjoying my game so much -so thank you! :'D
I have to agree with you there about Rama. His route is the most challenging for me to write; probably because of its dark theme. But I'm glad to hear it makes a lasting impression on you!
You definitely stroke my artist's ego here with saying everything is good >///< but I think I still have rooms for improvement and I'll do my best to create more interesting characters and stories for you! >:D Oh and if you like the encyclopedia and the indonesian cultures, expect more in the future ;)
and lol, yes, I think grammar mistakes will be forever be my nemesis ><;
once again, thank you for your warm support! :'3 those supports always keeps me going!
I play your fantastic game again in your new version and this version is a bit better as the other, because it don't crash anymore. The second thing I can run other programmes without crash.
But your game was also good before.
And I love all your guys again, it's difficult to decide who I like the most but
1. Reksa, he's the best, sexy and possessive, and so NAUGHTY, i love this
2. Rama, I like him too, his emotional and sad together, and he is in his kind of...sweet? Yes I think so
3. Mitra, gentle and kind.^^
I love this 3 guys but the best are Reksa and Rama because the storys are deeper, also the good as well as the bad endigs are very beautiful and sad too (the bad endings).
I like your art very well also this beautiful storys. ^^ But also your characters are very good implemented. I must laugh and cry buy sthis story an characters.
Critic?...ehm longer storys? until the crash problems in your other version I don't have any critic. ^^
Yeah I would buy other games from you via kickstarter.
Keep up the good work!!!!
Rinaria
Ps. Your new picture from Reksa is amazing. ^^ 'fangirling'
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I fell for Mitra INSTANTLY!! >//m//< Love him so much! It won't let me skip (I don't know how to skip.) I died when I followed Granny into the woods, when I think I was going to marry Mitra? Maybe. He proposed (I think). I CRIED when Rama died OmG. Love this game. I'm replaying it now hoping, not to get a 'Bad End' hopefully .
Hi xAkiChanx!
Thanks for playing and glad to hear you likr the boys x'D to skip just press 'ctrl'! And it will stop automatically when the texts are new ones you haven't read. I hope this helps :"3
I dont know if this has happened to anyone else but when I exit and enter the game all my save files are GONE! I can't play it! It says in the begging "invalid zip file" or something like that. And I was almost done with Mitra's route too, and I dont know if ill ever be able to play this game if this keeps happening!! ＼(>o<)ノ
And I really wanna play it, cuz its wonderful so far!
Hi Moomoo!
Now this is the first time someone reported such bug O.o if in the beginning it said 'invalid zip file', how did you manage to play it? @@
I suggest to re-download the file, but if the problem still exist then I really don't know what is wrong with it ^^;
Ah thank god it worked! I think its because now I somehow dowloaded the one with renpy, even though I clicked the same link that I dowloaded the first time... i think?
And that bug message I just closed it and it let me play the game O.o
But now that all is well, its time to play the game and enjoy that beautiful story!^^
Yay! Glad to hear it worked! OuO
Take your time and I hope you don't meet the same problem again >.<
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
THIS... is hard lmfao, I really like all of them to be honest? cause they are all well written characters, I ended up falling for all of them, Rama worried me at first but nope, loved him to. First was Mitra so FIRST LOVE <3 but then Rama needed a hug and someone then dear god, Reska. I seriously can't pick, good job!
What makes you consider to play this game?
I passed it by at first cause I wasn't into otome games but boy am I glad I came back to actually click on it, looking at the pictures of the wonderful backgrounds and characters made me hope it was really good writing too, I was not disappointed.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Again, this is hard. I like all of it, I admit at some point i was kinda wondering what was gonna happen so I'll say the plot/story kept me hooked (other than the hotties with the bodies)
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I actually don't? I mean some parts felt like it dragged on but not really anything that was like OH GOD FIX IT so, thumbs up!
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
I WILL PAY FOR THIS WHEN I CAN cause I want to support your games and this one <3 I really loved it and it left a mark on me, so thank you and everyone who worked on this, may you have a good day!
Hi Statdrops! thanks for visiting and reviewing! ^.^
1. Aww, thank you for giving them all a chanve and loving them in return QuQ this is the best answer you could give me!
2. YAY! happy to hear you enjoy the story that much >\\\< I still have lots to learn, but I'll do my best to lvl up in my next project and hope to see what you think of it >:'D
3. Amen! You have no idea how much you've made my day by saying that QuQ I tried my best to keep a story interesting -I don't want you guys to fall asleep mid-way x'D
4. lololol, I know how you feel! Sometimes, I really want to skip it and went straight for the beef, but character development is like building a house so we need to build a strong base first :"3 but hey, thanks for pointing it out!
5. Aww, thank you very much for your support! Here, have a cyber cookie :'D and thank YOU for playing and reviewing!
I hope to see you again in the future ~
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
I don't know if I can even put into words how much I love Rama. I did not expect to get so attached to him as the sample images didn't paint him as a character that I would normally like. But the first meeting changed that. "Maybe trying to figure him out will be quite interesting in the future." My thoughts were practically the exact same as Tamura's. God, I love characters like that, who hide their true selves under a mask of endless cheer. And his backstory - 👌👀 good shit go౦ԁ sHit👌 thats ✔ some good👌👌shit right👌👌th👌ere. Ever since I learned about the Sati ceremony, never knew it was also used in Indonesia though, I've always wanted to meet a character with that incorporated in his/her backstory. Thank you so much for creating Rama.
What makes you consider to play this game?
I clicked on this game because of the art was up to my standards. I downloaded it because the summary and characters seemed interesting.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
I'd say it's one of the better otome games I've played. The plot is well written, with both serious and comedic moments. The combat scenes are not boring to read, and most of all, while there is a healthy sprinkling romance - it is an otome game after all - it never drowns out the other aspects of the story. While they can be sorted into standard groups, the characters all have distinctive characteristics and are developed to the point that you can tell who is speaking just by the dialogue.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
For someone who has only just recently learned a language, Tamura uses quite a lot of slang and complex words when speaking. And there are also a few modern terms that I didn't expect to find in an ancient setting that are used pretty often. Those two were the main things that bothered me, preventing me from being able to completely settle in the story. And as for questions, is that recurring dream about Rama when he when he went over to the Komodo's territory? It's the most resonable explaination I can think of, but it still doesn't seem right. Please enlighten me.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
Oh, definitely. As long as it's $20 or less and I'm not strapped for money at the time, you can count me in.
tldr; you've got the basics of otome games/visual novels down, but be careful with the small things: they can make or break a creation.
also just know that i've only cried twice over a character's death and this is one of them. i hope you're happy
Welcome back and thanks for reviewing ktensei <3
1. You're welcome and thank YOU for loving Rama :'D Many people said he is a character you either love or hate :')
He was a challenge to write and I sometimes wanted to pull my hair in frustration when writing his scenes but even so, I love him very much. His backstory is the most complicated than my other babies and tbh, I'm still learning how to potray them better >.<;
I'm relieved to hear you like his story and I will do my best to make more interesting stories in the future! >:'D
2. Amen for first impressions!
While we're on it, what do you think about my new project; "Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle"? O.O Is the art and synopsis interesting?
3. Thanks :'D I want to do my best to not let the readers get bored. You flatter my writer's ego so much here >///< I think I'll need a needle to deflate it hahah~ *cough* but I still have rooms for improvements so I'll do my best to lvl up!
4. Ah yes, language barrier is one of the awkward/loopholes I still try to fix so thank you for pointing it out! As for the recurring dreams; *SPOILER*
Sari is the one who showed it to Tamara. It was an immersive image of Rama's mental condition; he felt betrayed and felt like many people were laughing, mocking at him, and the pain for losing Ayu was killing him slowly in the inside. It also potrayed one of his suicide attempts; falling and breaking his wings. Remember the crunchy sound effect? I was trying to find a broken bone SFX with a little 'splat' and that is the closest I can find :'D did it make you cringe? I hope so x'D *cough*
I hope this answer your questions? o.o I'll try to do better in potraying things in my next project! >:'D
5. YAY!! Thank you for your support and your suggestion! :'D Yes I agree that small details needs more attention than most -elements can break or make a story depending how you execute it so I'll try to be more patient with it and take my time constructing the story ~
and wow -you just gave me the most flattering praise :'D I made you cry *sobs* thank you for liking my story so much! I will definitely deliver your love to Rama <3
If I may ask, what is the other character death that made you cry? o.o
While we're on it, what do you think about my new project; "Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle"? O.O Is the art and synopsis interesting?
Part of the reason I'm so hyped about it is because the art is gorgeous. You seemed to have improved in that field, and I'm really looking forward to the CGs. I think the summary is fine? It's not convoluted but it doesn't give away too many plot points either. But if I can assume that the italic text is the prologue, I think that that portion needs more work. I understand that there will be art to go along with it, but the words along can apply to half a million works and to me, isn't half as interesting as LotWO's prologue. But as you haven't finished developing BT's plot, it's safe to assume that it'll just develop on it's own in time. What I really like about it, though, is the protagonist. She's so different from most otome games' protagonists in how she clearly doesn't excel at everything, has a completely different appearance (short hair!? what a travesty!). That, and her quote speaks to what's left of my soul.
About the dream.
oh god that hurts my heart more;; While the sound effect didn't make me cringe, I did start because I wasn't expecting something like that to happen at all. And I think you did really well portraying things in the dream! This is the sort of thing that fandoms spend too much time agonizing over and creating theories before the creator takes pity on them and gives an explanation. The mysteriousness of the dream adds to the build of tension.
If I may ask, what is the other character death that made you cry? o.o
It's not animated yet, so if you watched Rokka no Yuusha and don't want to be spoiled, please ignore this. Pardon my language, but I fucking lost it when Hans Humpty died in the LN. But unlike when Rama died, those were mostly angry tears, not sad tears. Anyways, he got better. He died a little, but he got better.
also can you plsplspls tell me who the fourth love interest is-
Hi melocule!
Thanks for visiting and wow I'm so happy to read your review! :'D
1. Yes I agree that Reksa's route has more content; that's why I suggested to play his route last x'D but hey! I'm really flattered that you thought Reksa feels like a real person and immersed yourself in his story enough to share his pain/happiness :'D
2. Ah, sweet 1st impression <3
Glad you like the mini encyclopedia! Indonesia has so many cultures that I sometimes have a hard time to choose :")) I want to introduce them little by little so you can expect another mini-encyclopedia in my next game as well x'D
3.Aw you're going to spoil me rotten with all those praises :"D I still have rooms for improvements (like, I need to be more patient and I should hint at Tamara's past better in the other routes) so I will try my hardest to do better next time!
And yes, I also think relationships and roles between minor characters are important -communication is the key!
4. As for Rama's route; he is a little tricky to please x'D
- You can't lie. Ever. So when you meet Reksa for the first time, you have to be honest; not pretend to be some spy. If this condition is not fullfilled, the option to give him the crystal is locked.
- you have to focus on him, don't increase other bachelors affection x'D
And yes, I think I need to make more small events to cover it so it wont be spoiler-ey x'D
5. YAY! Thanks for your support! :'3 you seriously make me blush >\\\< to think it's better than commercial ones are just... QuQ no words can tell you how grateful and flattered I am to hear that.
I hope with this you can unlock Rama's good end and see you around ~
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Thank you for the advice on Rama's route, I know the ending to his route is going to be good as well! :3
I'm looking forward to Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle-- Arya's character design looks like something that could be from Zeiva Games, if you've ever heard of them.
Thank you for your support! x'D Ah, I can't wait to make the demo to see if you'll still love Arya after meeting him :'))
and yes, I know about zeiva games ~ I played X-Note, Area-X, and still waiting with bated breath the moment Dragon Essence is going to be released! >.<;
I just finished the game at this very moment and I must admit I'm crying while writing this. Thank you so much for creating such a masterpiece - my emotions are simply overflowing right now. I'll leave the spoilers about that for the end, and I'll answer your questions, for now
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
It's a very difficult question, actually... I felt attracted to both Reksa and Rama since t he very moment I saw them. Usually I can define my number one favorite easily in otome games, and logically it should be Reksa here - he's exactly my type of character, both personnality and physically. And I really loved him and his route beyond words, even more than expected! But, I also have a soft spot for disabled or mentally ill characters, and Rama is both, because of his wings and his mental state - I didn't know about that before meeting him in-game. As I said before, I loved Reksa and his route beyond words, but Rama's route just blew my mind. So... if I really have to choose between the two of them, I guess it would be Rama. (sorry Mitra, you're not my type haha!)
What makes you consider to play this game?
I was looking for otome games, and I directly noticed Reksa and Rama when stumbling upon this game. After seeing them, I wanted to know what is the game about, and the story seemed nice too, so I've just decided to play.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
I loved it. I loved every tiny bit of it. I did the three routes, with both bad and good endings when I managed to find both (I didn't get any bad for Mitra). Each route I did, I liked it even more than the previous one (Mitra - Reksa - Rama). What stands out the most... well, obviously, the characters, the pretty art, the engaging story... all of that is very good. But to be honest, if I had to pick ONE thing... I'd be back at Rama, again. Why? Because including a character like him is something... I don't think I've ever seen a character like him being included in the romance options of any dating sim ever. In some games you have characters with issues... but issues so heavy... this is my first time seeing that. So... for the originality, the boldness, and the amount of emotions it brings, including him is the best thing about the game in my opinion.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Well, the game has some typos and weird phrasing sometimes so it would be good to check things like that even more often (well, I shouldn't say that since English isn't my language and my phrasing is often wrong too). But I think the one thing you should be really careful about are the sound effects. The falling sounds made me cringe every single times, because it was a very comical sound, in sometimes very serious scenes. Also, I've noticed that Tamara's sprite looks different (the art style) compared to the other characters, and it looks a bit weird because of that. It isn't too bothersome, but still weird. On the bright side, it was very nice to see a game use inspiration sources most people don't know about - it was very original thanks to that! You should kee making these kind of stories, and also using really nice characters like the ones from this game.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
I tend to forget about kickstarters, unfortunately, but if I'm reminded of it, I'd be glad to help. The same way, I could totally buy a visual novel like this one! The only reason I didn't pay for this one is that I don't have the money right now, but I strongly consider paying at least 15$ once I'll get some money to spare, even if I finished the game.
Now, I want to tell a couple of things about the routes, that are a bit spoilery... so yeah... -----SPOILERS AHEAD-----
Both Reksa's and Rama's routes made me cry. In Reksa's, I had a bad feeling about giving him the bombs, so I did it first. I wanted to see the bad ending too, and since it was more plausible in my mind of this leading to a disaster, I tried that. His bad ending was heartbreaking. But then, I did the good one, and wow, somehow it was worse. The bad ending, well, at some point it gets obvious you got the bad one, so you KNOW the characters will die. But when Reksa died in the good one, it really made me panic - I didn't know if the game had more than one bad ending per character, so I really freaked out about getting another one. But at the same time, that battle was great, and what happened at the end only added to the awesome and powerful moment.
As for Rama's route... well, obviously the route is SAD AS HELL. One thing I did notice is that in both Reksa's and Mitra's routes, Tamara managed to get closer to them and to awaken their feelings long before the festival. It was fast and obvious with Mitra, slow and with a lot of denial with Reksa, but still there. In Rama's route, they weren't really that closer than in the other routes, until the moment Rama ran away and ended up talking about his past. I really like that touch - it's interesting to see how hard it is to break his shell. When he died in Mitra's route, I directly understood he was one of those characters who only can be saved in their own route, so I did Reksa second on purpose. I didn't want to deal with Rama dying after doing his own route once. As for his endings, the choice was obvious for wich one is good and wich one is bad, so I did the bad first too and wow, it was hellish, but at the same time VERY well done, in my opinion. Maybe one of the better scenes of the game - doing it from Rama's perspective, and showing him fall into the depts of madness was so horrible. But his good ending was as beautiful as his bad ending was horrible. It was a perfect conclusion, so warm and powerful - and the last CG was magnificent. It was long, painful, full of tears, but the fact they managed to reach happiness was heartwarming. The funny thing is I didn't learn from my mistakes - after what happens at the end of the battle in Reksa's route, I should have known it would be okay somehow... but no, I freaked out again, because with how tragic is the character, I was almost sure it couldn't end well!
I'm very sorry for the lenghty comment, I hope you had the patience to read it! What I want to say with that whole spoilery addendum is that you really played with my emotions all along. Usually I can predict quite well how things turn out in otome games, but not this one, except for Mitra's route. Mitra is a cute and great character, and his route is very good. I would have loved it in another game, I think, But the two other routes (and characters) were so awesome and perfect that they outshined poor Mitra.
Well, again, thank you for this game, and if you ever do another visual novel, I'd be delighted to play it!
Hi Konoi!
You're welcome and thank YOU for visiting and reviewing! :'D Here's some tissue.
Your heartfelt review blew me away with how long it is -but I definitely enjoy every second of it! x'D
1. I agree; both of them are intense in their own ways. Rama's route was very challenging for me to write >.< it was like riding a roller coaster; with me trying to control where and when will the roller coaster go 'up' or 'down' without crashing it.
I have to say that his bad ending is probably one of the most emotional scenes I've ever wrote :")
However, the story has a dark-element and people tend to avoid such topic so I worry about Rama a lot -but now that I read your review; I gained more confidence to write more stories like Rama's :'D Thank you!
2. Glad you tumbled upon my VN and gave it a try! x'D
3. YAY! Thanks for giving all 3 bachelors a chance! xD
I was making a small experiment with this VN: Mitra is 'Easy', Reksa is 'Medium', and Rama is 'Hard' to see people's reaction. I'm happy to hear you think the complication & boldness is the best thing in Winged Ones x') My next project is... a bit heavier than this one ><
4. Yes, I know that my grammar is very delightful x'D Multiple people keeps reminding me of this -but fear not! I have 3 proofreaders for my next project!
Oh and about Tamara looks different with other characters: Is it because of her blue hair? O.O; I was trying to make her easy to notice so I went and gambled with blue hair :'))
I will take note of it and try to make my next MC character have more similar physical qualities with other characters ~
5. Aww, thank you for the warm support! *hugs*
Now onto the Spoiler Stage:
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*evil chuckles* so my plot to make you anxious in his good end is a success! x'D
At first, I was not planning to make it like that. But as I write, characters tend to change his/her mind; one thing led to another and then VOILA!
Hahahah, that battle scene took a lot of me though. I grinded my brain to make each battle as interesting as they can since I don't want it to be repetitive. Very happy to see such appreciation from you QuQ
For Rama... his route is very slow-paced and he is hard to open up due to his psychology -I often find myself in a headache since he pushed the MC again and again x_x; I'm happy to hear it's well-done from you since other people tend to get impatient with him x'D As I said, his bad route is probably one of the saddest and angsty chapter that I've ever wrote :'( I don't like angst but I can't deny that they're good and sometimes needed at some right moments!
I also agree that Mitra's route is not as intense as the other two x') it was supposed to be a very light story; but now I noticed that I can't make it too light or it will get overshadowed with other routes. Thank you for reminding me of this!
-And don't worry about lengthy review! I enjoy reading them and they always made my day brighter! x'D
See you again in my next project!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Hey! Sorry for not answering before - itch.io didn't notify me of you answer...
Yeah, you shouldn't be worried about using characters like Rama - dating sims of all sorts are full of characters with lighter stories and less tortured minds. While a character like him is uncommon and I understand the doubts you may have felt before the release, I think it's nice to have such a change of pace from the usual formula, and all of my friends I talked to about the game liked the concept of that character.
Angst isn't a bad thing in a VN game about romance - it's nice to see it taken really seriously. The only thing that should, in my opinion, be avoided is not allowing a character to have a good ending. I mean, in a game where the whole point is to reach a happy ending, it's always very sad if one or more character doesn't get that. A good example is the BL game Kuro no Tsuki - it isn't a very good game to be honest, even if I like it because of fond memories related to it. But one character in the game dies if you do his ending, while he lives in every other route. That's the kind of things that shouldn't be done haha!
I kinda understand why some people would think Rama's route is too "slow", but I think it's necessary for a character like him, and his route doesn't lack events - the only thing that is slow paced is the romance progression itself, not the amount of encounters with the character. So yeah, in that case I'd rather say it was not a route suited for the people who said that rather than a weakness in the route itself - I'm fairly sure lots of people like it as much as I do! It would have been very "random" if suddenly the romance appeared at the moment when he may die in the forest after not progressing much before. But even at that moment, while he opened up a bit, it wasn't quite there - it was subtle enough to make it a logical progression. At the same time, I actually did see Tamara's feeling growing stronger and stronger before that point, wich is some kind of progression, even if Rama wasn't showing the same things. I think some people discard the MC a bit too much and focus only on the love interst they're pursuing. I think the MC's feelings are important too for the progression of a story.
Hi Konoi, and no problem! I'm often late at replying too ><
As for Rama, I'm glad to hear you like his concept! In the future, there will be more uncommon characters -I read and watch a lot of genres, but somehow, the ones that stuck in my head are always either angst/fluff :") you can expect a strangely angst but also fluffy stories from me lol
Oh, and don't worry, I won't make tragedy stories like in your example, Kuro no Tsuki. That is just a big NO o.o; If there is, I will definitely make an U-Turn and make it a happy end ASAP X'D
But to be honest, Rama's route made me impatient as well hahah >< the process is slow and we want to hurry in order to get to the good stuff, yeah? :")) however, his psychology didn't allow it ~
This is one of the reasons why my second VN will be a lot more longer x'D
This is suchhh a great game! I love it to bits! Like, the story was great, the art was amazing and I had such a blast playing it.
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
I like all of them for different reasons, but my favorite has to be Reksa, His grumpiness is too cute and his protective streak is something that I really like. His possessiveness at the end of the epilogue was something I found attractive. I was amazed at how much more there was to him, too. He had insecurities, which was a very nice surprise and his obivous love and care for his people gave him even more depth. His animal like qualities where also something I really liked about him.
What makes you consider to play this game?
Well, the fact that this game features a winged race and a reptile like race had my interested. It also helped that the three love interests had my attention with there designs.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Overall, this visual novel was great! I had such a fun time playing it and learning more about the characters. The art was amazing and looked so well done, a lot of love and care was put into it.
The story was something else, each route had emotions in it, though I must say my favorite story had to be Rama's, with how much raw emotion there was and the fact that you touched on such heavy topics without weighting down the story was just amazing. Though, I still feel sad that Rama could only be saved in his route.
Tamara was so great. She's strong and independent, her kindness was something I immediately latched on to. The fact that she had flaws also made me like her even more.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques?
Nothing, really. The only thing I can think of was how after each route (expect Mitra's, his route ending where I think it should have) I felt like there should be more but I guess that goes to show how much I enjoyed the game. I did miss a few CGs in the gallery and I really want to go back and find them but I don't even know where to begin.
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
Oh, yes definitely. Judging from what I just played through, I'm sure any of your other works would be just as amazing!
Such an amazing game! I hope this helps you with future games!
Hi AbigailsDomain!
Thanks for visiting and reviewing! :'D I'm sorry for the late reply tho; I was busy preparing my next project >.<;
1. Thank you! I'm glad so many people loves and understands his character so well x'D he is a very lucky man indeed ~
2. Ah, sweet first impression *u*
3. You're making me blush >///<; I do my best to apply emotions into each chapter; it's my way to keep people from getting bored quickly. I still have rooms to improve in grammar and details tho! I'll do my best too next time >:'D
4. Oh, did you skip the epilogue or bad ending? o.o The epilogue should play automatically once you passed the credits. For bad endings, you just have to give each bachelors the bombs :'3
5. Thank you for your warm support! x'D the next project is near but I still have some preparations to make.
See you again!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
**Warning** This contains minor spoilers! *Warning**
I am absolutely in LOVE with this game~! It took my breath away and made me really FEEL the stories!
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
You know after reading a lot of the comments below, I was surprised to see that not many people were fond of Rama. But actually he is my favorite! He intrigued me with his personality and background story more than the other guys, and even in Mitra and Reksa's routes I was devastated at his suicide. So i saved him for last and damn, he is so amazing. I love the complexity of his past and character, and even his drawn out epilogue (poor Tamara, three years?!). But it was so worth it! His route made me feel the strongest and the epilogue literally had me crying along with Tamara out of happiness. Happy endings always get me~! <3
I especially enjoyed how raw and emotional his route was, while still remaining realistic (well as much as it can for a fantasy visual novel). I thought how he grieved, his pain, his reactions to Tamara, and how long it took him to get over Ayu (but he finally did hehe, i ship RamaXTamara SO HARD) were all very REAL and I appreciated that so much. I connected with him in a lot of ways!
I could go on all day about that fine piece of man meat but I won't. X'D
What makes you consider to play this game?
Well I mean, it's a very interesting premise! You sold it on this page really well too, the description got me hooked and then reading people's comments and seeing how much they loved it? I knew I had to try and DAMN am I glad I did! So many sexy men. X'D
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most?
Overall, I am simply amazed at the detail and love that went into this visual novel. I'm still stunned that this is free! Holy cow, I am so lucky lol. The characters were all very different and complex, each with their own unique backstory. But they all managed to be woven together perfectly. The amount of creativity and dedication that obviously went into this is why I wanted to comment so badly, something I rarely do. You deserve to know that you are amazing.
The art was beautiful, once again details are KEY here. And you sure know how to make attractive characters, hot damn. X'D
I think my favorite part is definitely the stories. I admire you for being able to touch on such heavy topics such as suicide and rape without it weighing down the stories, in fact, in my opinion it added to them! Because once again that brings in the emotions, this visual novel made me feel for the characters (including even minor characters and the MC!) like no other visual novel has done before, and I don't say that lightly. Especially Rama, and yes I loved Tamara. Sometimes it can be hard to like the character you're playing, in fact a lot of visual novels suffer from poor MC depth and characterization. I don't know how many times I've come across an MC who is weak and wimpy and pathetic or on the other spectrum, so amazing in every way. =.=
Tamara was very refreshing. She was weak in body yes, but she had her moments where she kicked ass. Her spirit was strong, she was kind and everyone loved her and YET she definitely had flaws. I think her kindness is what i loved the most about her (aside from her sense of humor and not taking anybody's shit lololol), especially in Rama's route. *Squeal* I absolutely adore them, I know I'm gonna replay this game~!
Reksa was the first one I played and I liked him a lot, gotta say there's just something about a manly man that gets me all hot and bothered. X'DD But normally I actually don't go for the brooding bad boy type so I was pleasantly surprised when his character turned out to be MUCH more. His past, the fact that not all Komodo's were bad, the truth behind the war that really shocked me (that's another thing i must applaud you on, i love me some drama!). And during his epilogue when he was all possessive ('you're mine!') I nearly died, god so sexy~! <3
Mitra was my least favorite, though that in no way means I disliked him! He is an amazing character like the rest, I suppose he was just a little too predictable for me. I still thoroughly enjoyed playing his route, so sweet and charming (and hot!). <3
And you already know I'm head over heels for Rama LOL. XD <3
I love how much detail went into the minor characters too though! Asih and her husband Yuda, both of whom I adore, and Yuda is just downright hilarious. Granny, and the triplets and I think my favorite, Reksa's fellow Komodo, Purba. Purba has to be all time favorite villain (and oh my god he's sexy~!) in a visual novel lol, yeah he's horrible and I love him. XD I love how his defeat in each route kind of implied that there was more to him then meets the eye and I feel like there could have been a great opportunity to explore his depth. I totally would have played his route if that were, you know, a thing. XD But that would probably be really hard to do, so he'll just stay mysterious~
Looks wise, i at first thought Reksa was the best looking but Rama's CG's were SPOT ON and ugh, I have never been so attracted to blonde hair before LOL. Especially the epilogue CG where he's sleeping? Oh, so cute~! <3 Overall though, all very attractive characters and that is in part due to the amazing art. :)
Do you have any question or constructive critiques?
Honestly, not much! When I say this game is one of my favorite ever and I'm in love with it, that's the truth! I read over the comments before I started the game and so I was expecting the shaking. At first it was a little hard to get used to I admit, especially because it was just a constant thing even in instances where I thought it wasn't really necessary. However, as I played the visual novel more I became used to it and in fact, in certain ways I think it really enhances the story and I can definitely see what you were going for. I just think that maybe there should be an option in the menu to turn off the shaking? That way for people who don't care or enjoy it like me, they can just play through but those who don't like it, they can turn it off without it affecting their game play, and hence, their opinion on the game. But other than that, nope I loved this visual novel, 10/10!
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it?
Oh HELL yes! Like i mentioned earlier, I'm still shocked at the fact that this was free! Simply because of the amount of work and dedication I can clearly see went into this. You could have easily charged money for it and it would have been so, so worth it! But then again, when I first found this I was strapped for cash (LOL couple days ago, haven't stopped playing since I installed it) so super glad it was free lol. But yes, because I have seen what you are capable of, if you come out with another visual novel that obviously interests me (demo included), then I would definitely buy it because I know you won't let me down. :D
This game is so original and beautiful and sexy and amazing. XD Thank you so much, and I hope this helps~! <3
Hi Jeelyn!
Thanks for visiting and reviewing! I enjoyed reading this very much :'3 I apologize for the late reply; I was busy preparing my next project you see >.<;;
1. Aww, I agree that Rama needs more love :'3 but it's okay since everyone has their own tastes ~
But I'm very happy to hear how you immersed yourself in Rama's route! It was a challenge writing his story -but I'm glad I did! Even though it involves me playing lots of angst songs/instrumentals to get my muse :'))
But seriously, his bad end is probably one of the most emotional scenes I've ever written Q_Q
Thank you for loving this little child of mine <3 I'll make sure to deliver your love ~
2. Thanks! I tried my best x'D
3. You're spoiling me rotten *cough* but I'm not complaining! I'm very happy to see all my boys are being loved >////<
I think I have more room for improvements; the details are a bit unclear at some events (like, Tamara's past). I think I got a bit impatient in the middle of the story and skipped some important things; much to my dismay; but I'll definitely do better next time to make you and other readers happy :'3
Though... it will involve a lot of waiting in your part >.<; I hope you'll be patient with me :'3
As for Purba... lol, I know that feeling! I love antagonist characters too and wish to date them in some games; like Kuja and Sephiroth from Final Fantasy Series? x'D They sometimes attracts me more than the MC/protagonist *swoons
4. Thank you~ I'll do my best to meet your expectation in my next game :'3
5. YAY! thank you so much for the support! x'D
see you around!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
First off I loved playing Nusantra! The story, world, and characters are all interesting and I love the art. This is going on my favorites list.
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
I really like Reksa. I'm a sucker for dark hair+green eyes and the hostile type. But I love Mitra! He's pretty much the kind of man I want to marry (why are they always fictional?).
What makes you consider to play this game?
I love fantasy and otome games so when I saw this I had to play.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
Overall I love it! I'm not sure which element stands out the most. I think each play-through is different.Like when you start out the artwork and story stands out but as you get to know each character the characterization stands out (especially after doing Rama's path).
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I read through some of the comments and someone mentioned the shaking. Although it does add to some scenes (for instance when Tamara falls or during the cave-in) those who are more sensitive may stop playing because of it.
Also, I enjoyed reading through the encyclopedia and learning where your inspiration for certain scenes and character designs came from. ^^
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
I would totally buy it if/when I have the money. That seems to be life's theme: If I had/have the money... (too bad we can't pay bills with our imagination)
Hi FlamingDiva!
First, I want to apologize for this late reply due to me being busy preparing my next project >.<;; but boy, I feel touched to hear my VN is going into your favourite list! :'D
1. lololol, so many people like hostile bachelors x'D I can't say anything since we're on the same boat tho, lol.
2. High five! I also love fantasy related stories/otome :'3
3. You noticed! x'D Yes, I made each route unique since I don't want to be repetitive and bore you guys to lala land ~ You spoil me too much tho >.< I still have rooms for improvement and I'll do my best to meet your expectation in the future! :'3
4. Oooh, so maybe the 'shake' effect is a bit intense in some parts O.O; I'll take note and tone it down a bit next time; thanks for pointing it out! and glad you like the mini-encyclopedia! I'm going to keep that feature for sure~
5. Nah, I understand. We have bills to pay and life changing from adolescent to adulthood can be a bit overwhelming x.x thanks for the support tho!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
hello! just wanted to say thank you for sharing this game! the graphics are beautiful, the story is well-written, i enjoyed the characters although rama was a bit... different sometimes (his bad end made me feel REALLY sorry for him though Q O Q!!). and i just. man this is one of my favorite if not the most favorite free otome game i've stumbled upon. i look forward to any future releases!
as for the questionnaire. .. .
my favorite is reksa!!! i'm a sucker for the hostile-then-friends-then-lovers type, and he didn't fail to deliver. also he's so cute and rather feisty at the same time? does that even make sense? hahaha. i also did enough mitra, though. he was the first route i went for - i enjoyed how down-to-earth he was.
honestly, i was looking for a otome game to play and saw this one listed and decided to give it a shot since the premise seemed interesting enough. i'm glad i decided to try it out, lol.
overall, i do like the visual novel! the element that stood out to me in the beginning was the story, and the artwork sealed the deal since it's really beautiful.
aside from that, while he's not my favorite bachelor, rama's story was... really different and had a lot of sensitive topics. i don't mean that in a bad light, rather - it was really nice to read as it's so distinctively different from mitra and reska. i felt really bad for rama if you don't take his route that he never fully heals/recovers from his past experiences and well... hits the bucket, so to speak. qq i was glad that in his route at least mc shares her own burdens with him and they both move on with their past together.
the [SPOILER] rape mention in mitra's route [/SPOILER] i found so out-of-the-blue, or rather i wasn't expecting it since that was the first relatively-dark mention in that route iirc. regardless, mitra's response to her confession was 100% A+++++. i wanted to applaud you on how you wrote his response to that scenario.
yes yes and yes!!!! i'd be glad to show any support! throws my wallet your way tbh ♥
Hi arusenu!
Thanks for coming and reviewing :'D I'm really sorry for this late reply; I was busy preparing my next project (and still is) I'm very happy to see more people is still coming and reading Nusantara tho QuQ
1. lol, I understand what you mean x'D Reksa turned out better than I expected! I'm also a fan of cold or a bit antagonistic characters... so that might be why :'))
2. YAY! and thank YOU for giving this little one a chance x'D
3. Thanks! I tried my best to make things interesting :'3 and I was quite worried too at the beginning since some events are a bit dark while my art has bright color palette -but thank God they worked well x'D
-and Yes, I created 3 different bachelors to see how you guys will react :') (easy, medium, hard?) I'm also glad that even though Rama is not your favourite, you also gave him a chance and understood his story well! *hugs*
4. lol, yeah, that part of the story is cringe-worthy >.<;; I didn't put enough events to hint on Tamara's past -I'll definitely try not to repeat the same mistake! >:'D thanks for pointing it out!
5. D'aww thank you for your support! :'D
Thanks again and I'll see you around! my next project is going nicely~
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Oh, this is hard. It's honestly a toss-up between Mitra and Reksa. I'm tempted to just go with Mitra, but that's a bit biased since I played his route last. I actually cried towards the end of Reksa's route when a certain spoiler-y thing happened, and he was so sweet, and I was just overcome by all the feels....
What makes you consider to play this game?
Well, lets be honest: the art was the first thing to catch my eye. What made me continue to play this game was the story and characterization. The story is unique and engaging, and the characters feel like people rather than archetypes or cardboard cut-outs.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
This is a beautifully done VN. 9/10, would play again (and again and again and...).
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
I did find some of what I assume were errors in word choice, which I assume are there because English isn't your first language. They weren't so bad that I didn't know what you meant, but they created some unintentionally funny moments. I commented on your DevArt regarding this, so I won't go into that further here.
Another thing that would be nice is some closure at the end. I was hoping for a Big Damn Kiss or some sort of lovey scene after choosing to stay, but I never got one; I chose to stay, and the game ended. I kind of felt like that dumped me out of the story rather than letting me down gently (for lack of a better metaphor). It's not a huge issue or anything, but there you are.
I think it would be nice if there were more variation in the story itself when you play different routes. I realize that this would be a LOT of extra work for you, and it's not really a big deal, but, hey, you asked.
I don't know if this is a flaw or not, but it kind of seems like Tamara is supposed to end up with Mitra (considering a few scenes that were constant throughout all three routes and some Tamara-backstory-revelation that only occurs in Mitra's route). I'm not sure if you intended for that or not (or if I'm just reading too much into it, which is entirely possible).
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
I will definitely buy it! You've shown in this VN that you are a pretty masterful storyteller (and heartstring-puller...), and you said that it would probably be around $10-15. That's definitely worth it! I can't wait! <3
Hi Briling thanks for reviewing!
I'm very happy that you like my art-style and even say the story is good >\\\< I'm also happy that Mitra is getting quite popular <3 but I guess Rama is not your type? XD
Grammar is still my biggest enemy and I still have rooms for improvement in my writing skills so I hope you'll be patient for my next project since I'm going to take my time learning >:')
Oh and after the credits, there should be epilogues for each bachelors o.o; I have no idea how you missed it since everyone else seems to get it x.x
Oooh, I hope it's not a bug since Ren'py is not supposed to have many bugs ><;
Also, thank you for your support! I'll do my best to reach your expectation and more in my next project! :")
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Yeah, I'm not terribly fond of Rama. Sorry. I just don't have the patience for his shenanigans, and there was one point where he did something that REALLY pissed me off that I won't mention because of spoilers. After that point, though, I was just like, "NOPE. DONE." I just felt so outraged by it, and it was never really addressed afterwards (which I understand, since it was done at a point of super high tension towards the end of the plot, but it doesn't stop me from getting worked up about it).
Your grammar didn't actually bother me or keep me from enjoying the story, so please don't be too self-conscious about it. There were just a few instances that I noticed where the words you used were a little strange for the context of what was happening (and those times were mostly because of alternate meanings of those words and slang terminology). If you like, I would be happy to help you with things like that. Then again, no one else seems to have noticed, so maybe I only noticed because I'm kind of a word nerd. Honestly, I have so much respect for everything you've done already; this is a very minor thing.
Ahh, I see about the epilogues now. The credits rolling is usually a signal to me that the game/movie is over. My mistake. Thanks for letting me know, though! Now I have an excuse to play it again right away! Heehee! <3
OMGG!!! i LOVE LOVEEE YOUR GAME!! (pardon my caps lel) Reksa is BAE I KENNOT honestly when i first started playing your game i was like mehh..its probably gonna be those boring visual novel games but im SOO GLAD your game prove me wrong!! and my gawdd when the game included melay words i was like HEYY MY NATIVE LANGUAGE YUSSS!! i seriously cant wait for your upcoming games im so excited!! i hope more people will check out your creations >.< (p.s Rama is cute but EURRGGGGHH I WANT TO SLAP HIS FACE SOMETIMES)
lololol, thanks RhinoDino!
I can feel your enthusiasm all the way here x'D I'm still preparing my next project but glad to see someone is waiting for it! :'3
Also the walkthrough isn't showing up. I'm taken to the site but the words don't show up.....I'm not looking for a how-to-win thing I just want the CG i'm missing for Mitra.
The walkthrough needs you to click and drag your mouse over it xD
It's invisible to avoid spoilers.
ah that's cool, thanks
It's a really good game and I know how much projects like this mean to the creators, however I do have some small critiques for future reference....
1. Don't do so much with visual shaking and flashing of the screen, it can become annoying and distracting to some readers if overdone. When shaking or vibrating the screen it should be done in moderation and typically when certain actions are done. Flashing the screen is the same, if you use it try not to overdo it. Flash the screen 4 or 5 times and then either keep screen black or clear the image but if it's constantly flashing it will become very distracting to readers and it can take away the sense of "Immersion" within the story.
2. adding more music, even if it's just soft background noise is usually helpful. It's better it have more music in a VN than very little. (not that there was that much of a lack, but the beginning could've used a bit more music.)
3. Try not to do scrolling or auto continue words and dialogue unless you have a voice actor to go with it. people read at there own pace and when the words change on their own it can become frustrating to the reader if it goes too fast.
4. Make the credits skip-able, this is because if the reader has accidentally scrolled back (Like my smart self did) they will have to re-watch it, that can be a bit annoying.
Now before you get all critical and whatnot (not saying you'll get upset but just in case you do I want to clear thing's up) I just wanted to tell you that this is an amazing game and I adore it. The music that is present in the game is perfect, (I only wish there was more of it) and the CG is beautifully drawn. It's hard to find a VN with a good story line and gorgeous CG. I love the language barrier at the beginning, it's different and very creative. Not many people would think about adding that to their stories. I adore the game and the story, I love the fact that every choice you make has a direct impact on all three of the Boys and that you can get a wonderful ending but experience a heartbreaking scene.
I look forward to more of your creations and I hope you put the same amount of creativity, hope, and love into all that you do.
Hi Ashylan!
Thanks for your critiques and suggestions! X'D
I think you're talking about the beginning of the story when the legend story is being told? (auto-text) and there ARE lots of shaking and flashing when Tamara 'fell' ...even more so in the endings :"))
Oh and I take it for granted that people know how to skip text/credits with ctrl button O.O; really sorry about that.
In my next VN, I'll try to tone down the shaking/flashing ><; I tend to get carried away :"))
About more songs; this is a good idea and I was considering to hire a composer for more original musics (I'm quite a picky author and it took forever to get musics which are compatible with some scene's situation >.<). But I do thought about using Indiegogo for getting funds o.o I'm focusing on preparations atm tho -pray so my campaign in indiegogo will go well! XD
Again, thanks for your concern and support! See you around in the future!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
No problem, I always enjoy a good VN and I love helping others make them even better. This one was absolutely amazing and I enjoyed every bit of the story including the bad endings. I can't wait to see what else you come up with, and yes I was talking about the auto-text at the beginning.
I just made an account so I could comment. This game really awed me. I'm speechless after playing it... IT WAS SO GOOD. I cried, laughed, was angered... I felt so many things that I can't even fully explain myself. So I will answer your questions!
1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
Now, Reksa is a interesting character. After I played Mitra I was thinking "Reksa seems very similar to Pubra... is he Pubra? :o" When I played Rama route, I already knew he wasn't, but it was a nice suspense haha. So, back to Reksa, that beautiful specimen: I liked how he would growl, purr, be angry but in the end he was really a big wolfy puppy. LOVED THE GOOD END - the best, in my opinion. I just wanted a sequel to that ending haha #hornybastard. OH and he is not just a pretty face, he is a character with a personality and troubles - he is not perfect.
2.What makes you consider to play this game?
Hi sayuk! And thank you so much for being so supportive QuQ I'm touched to hear you make an account just to comment here ~
1. Lol so gentleman vs hornybastard for you x'DD hahahah I laughed in the morning when I read this -I'm glad you like their routes! It was definitely fun to write them (tho some people get turned off by Reksa's possessiveness and horniness 8'D /hammer)
But really, I'm very happy to hear you like their personalities and stories :"3
2. Lol, yup, first impression is important! I'm glad you like my art style >\\\<
3. Lol you must be talking about Mitra and Tamara's Omed-omedan kiss? X'D well to be honest, I was confused about How to portrait Mitra kissing Tamara's chin in that angle -but thanks for the concern, I'll make sure to look for more kissing pose reference :"3
4. Hmm so probably longer and more epilogues? O.o okay ~ I'll consider and learn how to make satisfying epilogues for you xD
5. I'm not sure about hardcopies -maybe a digital copy for you to download O.O I've never sent items overseas so I'm afraid it will get lost somewhere x'D
Again, thanks for your support and concern sayuk!
See you around :"3
I must agree, I recently play it about 3 days ago and made an account today to share my thoughts. I'll be honest the most awesome plot and heart felt moments, I played it blind and got rama route without even knowing and started to develop feeling for him. I really wanted to help him but end it with a bad ending, I did saw it coming when I felt like something is wrong but I accept since I did a bad job. Sorry rambling on owo;;.
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
At First it was rama when I first play blind The feels for his backstory wants me to help heal him to see better days but reksa growling and purring takes the cake because I find that when a male got into their instinct is pretty hot and makes my core pools hahaha xD.
What makes you consider to play this game?
At first I wanted a good time, I played many otome that was on here and this was the next on my list, compare it to the others this by far have the best story line for teens if added a little more like intention hentai then adult as well :3.
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
The art work, seriously caught my eyes, next would be the sound effective for the dialog, and after looking back again, I now value a good story line as long it still keep my attention and allow me to make hard choices without looking at walk through. I'm more then happy.
Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
If their anyway to get a bouns ending? For intercourse and foreshadowing kids? Also can we input in our own name for the character? Also for the next game can it be another human but still part of the same game world? (I'm not good at explain owo;;) Any chance for some of them to have a voice actor?
Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)
I would be sad but if its like this then yes. I just pray that its not overly prices.
Mitra, is an awesome and hot person, he is the dream guy every GOOD girl should have but let's just say I'm NOT a good girl sooo, he could add a little more *wink wink* kinks~. Here how I images if a guy alike from mitra/rama (yeah a knew a werid combo) In the public he is both serious/cheery playboy that look like he couldn't keep it in his pants. While at nice, he one of those that werids a mask and have nightmare that would go out find a cliff or a tree near the cliff watching the ocean till he fall asleep. but hey that just me xD
Hi Yuuki!
Thanks for stopping by :'3 I'm touched when you said my story is good enough to push you to comment QuQ
1. lol I know that feeling too well dear x') I'm glad we have the same taste /facepalm in embarassment*
2. Aww thank you O///O but I think I will keep my works PG15 since I never wrote PG17+ stories :")) close... but hentai? Uhh nope. (Except if people pushes me and fund me enough to cover my embarassment -but I seriously doubt it! X'D)
3. Hmm, hmm Ia agree that first impression is very important! Glad that you like my art style dear :"3 I'll also do my best to make more interesting stories for you.
4. Oh lol, if you follow my facebook page (Nusantara Visual Novel Series) you'll get a small info about my next project (same universe but entirely new story; and probably some cameo) ;)
Intercourse? Uhh.. like I said before, nope x'D hints about their activities maybe but a detailed chapter for it? Nope. Future children? O///O I'll consider it ~
I've thought about bonus ending/mystery character for my next project tho ;)
5. Don't worry, it will probably range arpund $10 for early birds and $15 at most :"3
Thanks for visiting and see you around!
Is their a skip button somewhere?
press ctrl to skip over the parts you've read :'3
You know, I really love this game. Played the older version n this version. You don't know how many times I played the game on and on and on. I kept rambling and praising your fantastic works to my siblings but, they just ignored me, saying I kept on repeating the same thing over and over...Hahahaha... >///>
can't blame them tho, I sounded like a broken record... @////@ and I created this account just to comment...I think a lot of people did this too! ^.^)/
will you be making another game? or the continuation of this game? 0.0)/ I'm so looking forward to it! ...hopefully free? 'coz I'm always broke these days...sorry! I'm only rich with ideas. If you're planning on making another game, n in need of ideas, I'd be happy to help! Hahaha... ^w^)/ Anyway, to answer the questions~
Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
REKSA! then Mitra and finally Rama~ :3 why? well, let's just say he's attitude tied us together... >///>
What makes you consider to play this game?
Actually, I love playing visual novels. Especially one with otome as a genre~ Tho, I'm not really picky since I also played vns that targeted males. :p
Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
The story and characters! I really like this game because I can somehow relate? The fantasy theme is not too far-stretched and I always love bad ends. The arts too~ Nice arts but, if you do a lil more touch up, it'll be much better. :3 But, I'm never picky with arts in the first place. Tehee~ Seriously, a lot of commercial vns have beautiful arts but with stories that's a little...yeaaa~. But yours, wow...awesomez! And the protagonist is not dumb and hopeless like in most vns! That's a major relief! My goodness! My mind is saved! ^.^)/ Like I said, the story's good. Arghhh...why is it when I wrote comments, I never managed to tell what I feel clearly?! T^T Am I shy? O.o w-well..., let's forget about me n on with my comment! :3
umm, I'll try to buy your games, when I have money~ :3 Hopefully... ;.; I'll manage! :3 I think this is all... well, umm, do your best and keep up the good work! ^.^)/
umm...also, I hope there'll be a route for Purba? :3 I wanted to seduce him and see his reactions! O.o)/
>///> I'd been told by a lot of people that I'm naughty and sadistic~ Hahaha...
Hi Ayuni thanks for stopping by! :'3
lol I'm touched to hear you try to tell your siblings about this game x'D there's nothing can make me more happy than to see someone loves this VN as much as I do :'D
I think your wish have just came true a few weeks ago x'D I'm preparing a new VN called; Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle.
It's an entirely new story but set in the same universe (only bigger). This time you'll have a chance to travel and visit other places :'3 and maybe some cameos lol. Follow my facebook page for early news xD but sadly, it's gonna be commercial u.u
But It will be awhile until I post a WIP thread on lemmasoft/FB/dA since I'm flooded with work atm :S
and lol, Reksa is still the most popular I see x'D glad to meet fellow VN lover! (tho, I'm picky about VNs targeted at males :'D maybe you can recommend me something? last thing I played is ever-17).
Aww and thanks for saying my story is amazing! (-OuO-) I think I still have rooms for improvements -but I'll do my best to create more interesting stories in the future! but again, thanks for the healthy dose of stroking my artist's ego x'D
- and Hahahahh, lol! so you'd like to romance Purba :')) now, that's a first! but I can't blame you since I often find myself attracted to antagonist character hahahahahah, welcome to my boat! x'D But sadly, I'm not planning to make a sekuel u.u (pardon the grammar mistake, I can't press the 'kiu' button)
Overall, thanks for your support! Hope to see you around! :'3
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Yeay! A new vn~! :3
awww, commercial...Owh well, I'm gonna start working next year so it's fine~ X3
owhh, in this vn, will the new protagonist meet with Tamara and the bachelors in the last game? or in an entire different place?
0.o owhh, I'm asking for spoilers already! XDDD please don't mind me!
Yes, yes~ Reksa is still dayum~ X333 there's no end to my flirting, it seems! XD
too bad there's no route for Purba~ :3 but, will there be route for antagonist in the next vn? o.o)/
hmmm, a recommendation...hmm, I like them with rpg, strategy and stats raising so, Kamidori Alchemy Meister for now. Owh, there's this vn that was said to challenge the manliness of ze guys called Lucy: The Eternity She Wished For~ I haven't checked it out yet tho! Too many assignments to send this year~ XDDD I feel like I'm gonna die of insomnia~
umm, well, I guess this is all? I can't really think right at the moment. hahaha...three more assignments to go until I'm set for this semester~ XDDD so,...sorry for rambling~! ;.;)/
well, I'll be seeing you again! Always support you, sweetheart~ <3
You've got me cry in the Reksa end.. good job.
Dan ceritanya bagus, love the Indonesian-reference and cultures. Nanti mau planning bikin sequel nggak? atau spin-off? #akhirnya-ketemu-programer-indonesia
Iyaa? wah, makasiih >///<
tp sygny sy gk rencana mau bkin sekuelny u.u mnurut sy crita yg ini ud resmi tutup buku tp mngkin akan ada cameony d projek brikutny :'3
projek brikutny lg in progress preparationny, dan jdulny Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle. Set in the same universe but an entirely new story + a chance to travel and explore more of Nusantara's archipelagos xD
Follow page FBku mungkin u/ news2 awal :'3 tp WIP update spertiny bkal bru muncul Desember, soalny kerjaan lg numpuk @@
Have only played Mitra's route, will answer this after I finish all, but he was so lovable. Ramma seems a bit too dangerous and dark for my liking... I will still play his route though. Reksa seem really really cute too but I will leave him for the end.
2. What makes you consider to play this game?
Story, also I like the idea of the avian race. I like Otome in general, but Im used to the more shoujo bishonnen type so this was a nice surprise
3. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)
The story then the art
4.Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.
Kissing GC need a bit of practicing, thats all. Also, a random question that I do not know if it is already asked, would Tamara be able to have children with the boys? kinda asking since Mitra is so family oriented I feel sad that she might not be able to have children with him and make his dream come true... if so I would rather prefer the ending where she returns home and leaves him behind, at least he could find a woman that could make his dream come true. I mean I know children aren't needed to make a couple loving each other happy... just felt bad giving Mitra no children lol
5.Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs
If the story and art catch my attention :) , I actually didn't think I would enjoy it this much, it didn't call my attention until I played it
Hi mooninlove! Thanks for stopping by and reviewed!
1. lol, okay I'll look forward to your reactions after playing them all xD
2. Yup, a refreshing theme I guess? :'3 we've had so much in high-school/modern themes these days so I'm glad to provide something different xD
3. Aww thank you! >///<
4. *cough* thanks for the suggestion >< I guess that means I need to find more kissing references ^///^
well, this is an interesting uestion, but yes, Tamara will be able to
cross-breedhave children with the Avians/Komodos! >:D it's actually a minor part of the Goddess's idea to fast forward the progress of her creation's evolution; but not by much. The general idea in this story is that the 'myth' in our world about anubis, angels, centaurs, kinara kinari (humans part animals) is true and does exist but long forgotten. If there's a smoke, there's a fire.I hope this clears some things? :'3
Thanks for your support and see you around!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Thank you for your reply :,) I have finished all routes and Reksa ended as my favorite, though sometimes he is too rude he ends being sweet; but I would actually marry a guy like Mitra in rl sounds like a more safe marriage -giggles-
Hello, I hope you are well.
I have just finished playing Nusantara and I really liked this game.
It is very captivating and I felt absorbed in that place with the main character which to me made me enjoy this game that I wanted to help answer some of your questions.
I enjoyed them all as each had a great backing story and they were all very unique characters.
I would have to say Rama's story sticks in my mind more than the rest I guess it struck a chord with me as It is emotionally good.
I was interested with the setting of the game and the cultural setting that made me curious. I love ancient settings/fantasy and rich culture.
The way the story is written keeps you engaged with all the characters I didn't find any dull moments. I guess that would be the great story telling and I also think the art is so good, seeing each viewpoint of the characters made the story more well rounded. The added Encyclopaedia and the history and reading about what inspired you on the Extra section was nice touches to read.
If anything it would be a few minor grammar confusion while playing considering though I can't fault the rest of the game.
Yes! I would support you. Definitely.
I'm looking forward to your future creations.
Sumlee
HI sum11!
thanks for visiting and reviewing! :'3
There's nothing makes me more happy than to hear you enjoying my game so much -so thank you! :'D
I have to agree with you there about Rama. His route is the most challenging for me to write; probably because of its dark theme. But I'm glad to hear it makes a lasting impression on you!
You definitely stroke my artist's ego here with saying everything is good >///< but I think I still have rooms for improvement and I'll do my best to create more interesting characters and stories for you! >:D Oh and if you like the encyclopedia and the indonesian cultures, expect more in the future ;)
and lol, yes, I think grammar mistakes will be forever be my nemesis ><;
once again, thank you for your warm support! :'3 those supports always keeps me going!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Hi again ^^,
I play your fantastic game again in your new version and this version is a bit better as the other, because it don't crash anymore. The second thing I can run other programmes without crash.
But your game was also good before.
And I love all your guys again, it's difficult to decide who I like the most but
1. Reksa, he's the best, sexy and possessive, and so NAUGHTY, i love this
2. Rama, I like him too, his emotional and sad together, and he is in his kind of...sweet? Yes I think so
3. Mitra, gentle and kind.^^
I love this 3 guys but the best are Reksa and Rama because the storys are deeper, also the good as well as the bad endigs are very beautiful and sad too (the bad endings).
I like your art very well also this beautiful storys. ^^ But also your characters are very good implemented. I must laugh and cry buy sthis story an characters.
Critic?...ehm longer storys? until the crash problems in your other version I don't have any critic. ^^
Yeah I would buy other games from you via kickstarter.
Keep up the good work!!!!
Rinaria
Ps. Your new picture from Reksa is amazing. ^^ 'fangirling'
I feel you girl! Reksa is the best!, don't get me wrong, the other two are amazing too. But Reksa is just.. 'fangirling' :P
Hi Rinaria! Very sorry for this late reply ><; work has been hectic +I'm preparing for my new project :"D
I'm happy to know you enjoy the re-make with lesser crash :"D
1.IKR! He's much more naughtier than I thought x'D people said his route has more sexual tension than the other lol.
2. Yes, Rama is complicated and a challenge to write :D
3. Chivalry is not dead x'D (at least in this world lol)
I love the fact that you give all the bachelors a chance and how they managed to catch your attention :"3
I'm thinking about patreon/indieGogo in the future since kickstarter doesnt accept paypal unless I have a bank account in USA x'D
Thank you for the support! I'll do my best to make more stories in the future! :")
Also, lol thanks, I have to admit that Reksa's bonus pic is maybe a lil bias since I love autumn season x'D