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Genre: Otome Fantasy, Adventure, Romance, Comedy
WARNINGS: swearing, blood, death, and a little psychological

Synopsis:
Long ago, when the world was still young and humans had only just learned how to write,
Legends of mythical beings spread over the continents.
Tales of dragons, griffins, unicorns, and many other mythical beings were prevalent in folklore.
Some of these beings even possessed human characteristics, such as the centaurs or Kinara Kinari.
But there is one legend, lost and forgotten...
...for there are none alive today who remember the tale.

This is a story about birth and death, peace, war...and love.


How it all began from the gift of Blue Crystal
Both a blessing and a curse from the Goddess.
And now,
The Legend shall be unfolded by a human girl.

Game Features:

- 3 Love Interests
- 6 Endings
- Strong, Independent Female Lead
- Branching Dialogue Choices
- 20+ CGs
- Original Backgrounds 
- Mini Encyclopedia

Walkthrough link: https://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=...

The routes can be played in any order but, for maximum effect in terms of build-up and plot, we recommend playing as follows:
- Mitra
- Rama
- Reksa

Questions for you:
I'm always looking for ways to improve so here are also some optional questions for you to answer! ^.^-

    1. Which guy did you like the most and why?
    2. Do you play a lot of otome/visual novels? What made you choose to play Nusantara?
    3. Which element of the game would you say was the best and which ones would you say need work? Consider story, art, characters, music etc.
    4. Do you have any other questions, comments or constructive criticism? 

Now without further ado, have fun and enjoy the adventure!
xoxo,

SweetChiel

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I really love this storyline. But I also love the soundtrack. I would pay decently for the soundtrack to this. Its really well done. I am looking forward to your second game. When I can I will absolutely donate.

Thanks for dropping by and telling me your thoughts, Risalseri! 

I'm very glad to hear you enjoyed Winged Ones and looking forward to Bermuda!

And yes, I'm very lucky to have met amazing composers ^.^- I'll consider distributing the soundtrack as a DLC pack after I ask their permission~

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Hello! I wanted to say that I really enjoyed this game! I'm so picky when it comes to VN and usually, I end up being frustrated by the main character but Tamara was definitely one of the best aspect of the game. More than once I ended up laughing at her antics and reactions. I also loved that you choose an universe that wasn't set in England/European-like country. It was such a nice change! 

Concerning the routes, I loved each one of them but I have to say that Reksa was definitely something! 

Thank you for bringing us such a nice, clever, funny - and much more - game!

Hi frogscollector!
Thanks for coming by and sending me this warm support! >///<
I'm very happy to hear you like Tamara and the Indonesian culture I've applied here! I see that Reksa is still the most popular bachelor out here x'D

Thanks again for dropping by and hope to see you again at Bermuda, my second game!
xoxo,

SweetChiel

This was amazing!! You did a really good job with this game,definitely one of my favourite otome games^.^ I gotta say that every route was amazing and each one of them had different aspects that I enjoyed but the truth is that Reksa has won my heart >.< I really liked the way the relationship between him and the MC escalated,I just loved it in general. I can't wait to try your new game as well^_^ <3

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Thamks for coming by and drop me this lovely comment, jimin_trash_here! ^.^-

Congrats on finishing the game and I'm really glad to hear you love all three routes! I see that Reksa is still the crowd's favorite x'D 

My second game is still in progress, but I hope you'd be patient with me as I progress slowly but surely! Thank you for your support and see you around!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Absolutely love this game!! One of my all time favorites next to Cinderella Phenomenon!! The story was amazing, and much much deeper than I had originally anticipated. My favorite was definitely Reksa, but I absolutely adored Rama's ending! I'm so happy that he was able to overcome his dark past and find happiness with the MC! Although in the other routes besides his own, he ended up dying, and I was so sad...Reksa's route was definitely my favorite though! Their relationship development was amazing, and it did not feel rushed at all. I love how protective and caring he was, despite having trust issues at first! This was such an AMAZING quality game! Amazing job:)

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Hi, coconutcreampie!
Congrats on finishing the game and thank you for playing! >///<
I'm really happy to see you love my game! Even more so after I hear you like Rama's ending! 
After all, not many people have the patience to stand Rama's 'unique' behavior ><

I still have rooms for improvement though. For one, I'm very slow at writing scripts and if not for your reviews/enthusiasm, Winged Ones won't be as good as today! 

That's why my team and I would like to thank you for your support!
I hope you'll come again to try our second project after it's finished! ^.^)/

xoxo,

SweetChiel

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That's strange o.o
Have you followed the exact choices? The crucial part is you have to save Reksa, but then Be Honest. << This is a part of requirements to unlock the choice to give him other item besides the explosives.

You also cannot raise the affection of other bachelors ><

Really?  I did that, but still didn't get the choice to give Rama anything else besides the explosives (since I'm guessing that's what you're talking about).  Are you sure you don't have to do anything else? I know there's an ending for Reksa, but I don't know how to get there.

Really! o.o;
There should be no problem with the programming since a lot of people get Rama's good end. 
As for Reksa's route, you need to save him and then lie to him. That way, you'll lead Reksa to a cave. To get into his route, you'll simply have to visit Reksa whenever there's a choice to do that.

Oh, have you taken a look at my old walkthrough? OuO 
https://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?t=36095

It's old, but the important points are there~

oh, thanks

Thank you for such a wonderful game! I spend about 2-3 days on it, I didn't really think I'd get too much into it because I'm a modern gal, but GODDESS did I love it! Not only was it extremely lengthy, detailed, and fun; I had fun with every ending!! And that says something because I usually avoid bad endings when it comes to visual novels, but not only did I enjoy the bad endings, even the normal ending was fulfilling! 

I can't wait for your next project, you've got +1 supporter!


Not gonna lie, I'm really gonna miss these boys now that I completed the novel...

Hi Fruity! Congrats on finishing all the routes and thank you for playing! 

I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed yourself thoroughly and spent 2-3 days on my game ^///^ that's quite fast--and yes! Thank you for the support! Nothing makes me happier to see someone love my boys as much if not more than I do!

My 2nd project still has quite some ways to go but I hope you'll walk beside me as we walk step by step to completion!

Stay tuned with the weekly updates and see you around!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Hey SweetChiel, 

I have played and loved your game and I am eager for the new release coming soon, im hoping to either get into animation or 3D animation soon and I was wondering if I could try animating come of your characters or even some scenes from the game, the art style is gorgeous but I would love to see it in a new format,


Seeing this is your baby (which u did a great job on btw) I thought it would be best to ask permission before trying anything, Good luck with any new projects oh and Happy new year btw =)

Reoku <3

Oh btw I forgot to ask which of the guy's route would you consider to be the true canon route thanks again ^_^

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Hi Reoku Maurer! Thank you for playing and glad to hear you enjoyed yourself thoroughly!

And yes! Merry Christmas and Happy New Year! *blows a horn

Wow, I would be so happy if you decide to animate one of the bachelors or one of the scenes! Thank you for asking for my permission first--and yes you can! Please give me the link to it later so I can boast about my boys in one of my weekly updates >\\\<

As for who I consider the true canon route... hmm, this is a difficult question. Each bachelor is unique and have their own strengths. They are all my babies, but if I have to choose... it would be Rama. He needs Tamara the most ><

You are very welcome, I feel like its always best to ask the original creator when making something new of there work, just a policy of mine =)

As I said tho i'm only just starting to learn so it may take a while, but I hope you look forward to it <3

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Hey I'm back and sorry I didn't follow your advice and play yet another 4 hours on this game. I did what you said: Play Reksa route for the last.


I DID NOT REGRET DOING THAT!!

I love him and his possessiveness and I love love the 'Chase' at the end. I really love that kind of thing where they do the 'predator and prey' thing. I love it. I love him. I love you and I love this game!

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Hi Eddie!
Congratulations on finishing all the routes!

Now you can rest your mind and body in peace lol x'D
Oh and Winged Ones has launched on Steam! We need players and reviews to unlock the Achievement and Trading Cards system so if you don't mind, come by and visit me there :'3

But in any case, thank you for playing and I hope you have a great week!
xoxo,

SweetChiel

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Absolutely love this game. One of my all time favourites.  A Very detailed and enjoyable world and people.

Is it possible to get a steam key for this? my email is athenasarah4@hotmail.com

Hi athenasarah4!
You're lucky 'cause I still have a few steam keys to giveaway!
I've sent it so check your inbox or spam folder!

You are awesome! Thank you very much

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this was,,,bRILLIANT!!
+i rlly love the names,,that small touch of making them seem indian,,<3
((also did u mean 'raksa' instead of 'reksa' bc raksha means protection,,or am i just pronouncing it wrong?? idk but Rama is Best Boi

there was a quirky storyline and it was nice to see it not fall into any stereotypical dating sim tropes and just wOW on the character sprites and backgrounds!! (i could never have that much patience to draw anything lolmao)

also -- it's rlly rare to see dark-skinned love interests (in my experience) and i loved that! and though i love the design of the protag,, i think not having a set design for them would be best bc it gives the player an opportunity to imagine themselves there -- but still amazing anyway!! great plotline, cute characters, coolio music, and overall just brilliant to play and replay!! keep up the good work!!

((also,,may I please have a steam key?? my email is janani.a.balaji@gmail.com


i can't wait to see more of ur work!! 

Thanks kryouma!
In Javanese, Reksa means 'keep' so yeah, I think it's similar to 'protection' or 'guardian' ^.^- and yes! We need more games with dark skinned men! x'D *or maybe it's just my fetish *cough

Patience and effort are the key here, but I'm mainly grateful to my supporters because they have a seemingly endless patience, waiting for my game to complete! >///< I'm honestly a slow writer, so really, thank you for being awesome and waited for me! 

and of course, thank you for suggestion! I also feel it would be great to have a customize-able protagonist, but in terms of work, it's a bit too much since I'll also have to customize the CGs @@ if there's 3 eyes, 3 hair color, 3 hair style, 2 skin, there would be... 18 variations just for 1 CG? *cough* so... for the sake of my sanity, I would put down that idea for now :'))

Lastly, I sent the steam key to your email just now!
Please check your inbox or spam folder! 

xoxo,

SweetChiel

CHOCOLATE BOIZ ARE THE BEST!

just to clarify,,i meant a protag that's NOT SEEN on the screen so the CGs would just be of the romance-able character! i think it also gives you the feeling of actually being there bc it's like a 'complete the scene' kinda thing,,yanno? also,,in terms of work that might be harder bc you'd like to put a lot more detail into just that one character -- but i think its better than two fullbodies (bc those kill me)! just a suggestion -- making it a little more LGBT+ suportive (like choosing pronouns, female/non-bianary/genderfluid love interests as well) would help the game reach larger audiences! also can't wait for the next game -- lmao wish i had enough money rn to support,,but def ask me if ya need any help with beta-ing, ideas for CGs or story-line revision! as always,,love ur work,,and thanks for giving ppl like me a chance to feel loved!! 

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Time to drop my mini-testament here~:

Like, this ones is ones ofe my favorite stories ever, I love it and enjoy it lots! 

Mi first route was Mitra, had to agree it was such a fluffy route mostly but that it's the charm on his route I gotta say. I can recall how many time I was like "Oh my lighhht~ my heart!" and those were many xD. He kind of remind me to a character I know by far but gezz Mitra sure is a sweet.

The it came Reska, I will admit I feel bad lying but I was really wantes to help him, and see what it was like his route. I have sucha a hard time completing otomes since I normaly stick to one route and leave it there once I get over with the one i choose but the story in general was so catching that I need to know! I have such a hard time since I feel bad for Mitra but will sa it: WORTH IT! I end really amaze by Reska's route > <, love the boy I am touched on my tiny heart, [to this day I debate a bit but suprisingly I end loving Reska's route a bit more than Mitra's]

Then Rama came, I have already got 2 routes and I really was curious what was his story, need to know. They may say curiosity kill the cat but they forget how satisfaction brought it back! I was a bit conflicted with his route, I wanted to help him but sure he is a hard one to deal with [Bless guide bc I was kind of lost many times] Was worth it though, I am glad I play his route to end, That answer many of my little questions that I was really curious for a while. It was great know how he get there and why all was as it was for him on his case, really something!

Th characters side the boys were really amazing love how you develop them and chain all, it was really amazing! 

I may talk on how I get some bad endings but I guess I still got some to try and really I guess there is still a bit left for me around [Let's go and hurt my heart~ (will be fine I have to live for more stories) xD]

In resume love the work you did here, is really wonderful thank you for all so far! The art, the story and all is amazing so thank you for you great work!

It may be random but may I get a steam key too? My email is luzpacorap@gmail.com > <

Thanks again and looking forward to any other story you have there for us! 

Take care and see ya!

Hi RomyAkari/Romy350!

Thank you for giving all 3 bachelors a chance and glad to hear you enjoyed all the routes! ^///^ thank you for loving all my boys *hugs*

Nothing makes me happier than hearing people enjoying and completed all 3 routes <3

And yes! Aside from Mitra's route, the other 2 are quite tricky especially Rama's >< Good to hear the walkthrough helped you to get all the good endings though! 

oh and no problem about the steam key! I'm giving away steam keys until Winged Ones is officially released on Steam ^.^- 

I'll send you one now so keep an eye on your inbox/spam folder!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

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Okay can I just write some things?

1. I freaking love you, your game, your art, your creativity ! I came here from Queen's Crown and I do not regret it!

2. I played a total of 4 hours and got 3 endings, the normal end, Mitra's good end and Rama's Bad End(Why why whyyyy??!)

3. Favourite guy? It's Mitra. And also the first guy I got when I first played. I don't know how to get Rama's good end nor the Komodo Guy. Looking in the comments, I now know his name is Reksa :')

4. You're adding this to Steam!! May I have a steam key please? Here's my email qistinaeddieq@gmail.com

5. Read no. 1

6. Rama's story is really sad. 

7. Best birb? Sari

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Hi, EddieQue!
Thank you for dropping by and write to me!

1. Aww thank you! I'm very glad to hear you like my art and game >///< gosh, I'm nervous about Queen's Crown since it's my first time doing CGs commission, but you'll surely enjoy Agashi's writing! She's an awesome writer! OuO)b

2. Whoa there, it's alright to slow down, you know? x'D Don't forget to take some rest and eat in between!
Oh, and if you're having some trouble with the routes, here's the link for the walkthrough: https://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?t=36095 

Just click and drag your mouse over the white space ^.^- I hope it helps!

3. Bwahahah! Reksa's name is unusual so it's normal for you to forget x'D people also sometimes mistype his name into Reska, but I can feel their love for him just fine! Thank you for loving my boys and I hope you'll be able to get all the endings!

4. Sure! I've sent the steam key just now so please check your inbox or spam folder!

5. Oh lol x'D thanks!

6. Yes, his psychology is the most complex of all :'D It's to balance Mitra's fluffy route and Reksa is the 'medium' difficulty with some spices here and there. Oh and I recommend you do Reksa's route for last.

7. Lol, thank you! 

Thanks for coming and I hope you'll be with me on Steam later! x'D
xoxo,

SweetChiel

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Favourite guy was Mitra! I love nice, kind guys <3 plus his route and how he convinces MC that staying in their world is better than the modern world with its stress and anxiety and worry, I related to that because it's exactly what I've been feeling. Now I just need to get magically transported to another world... 

I just wish there was a way of saving Rama in Mitra's route because I want bae to be fully happy. 

Hi theknightedcat! 

Thanks for playing and giving Mitra your love! >\\\\< I'm glad to hear you could relate with Tamara and I hope, by playing, it helps alleviate the stress and worries we've been having daily :'D

Ah, I agree, I wish there's a way to save Rama without having to go to his route, but alas, his psychology wouldn't allow it >< 

Oh but here's a good news for you! Winged Ones is coming to steam! There's going to be a major grammar fix, achievement system, and trading cards later in the future when we've reached certain threshold of reviews/players!

I'm giving away steam keys so drop your email address below if you want one ~

Hey! Of course I need an excuse to replay :p

Here's my email: samfaheem.pak@gmail.com

YAY! Sent!
Yup, we need to reach a certain threshold to unlock trading cards on Steam so spread the love! ;)

Thank you for the hard work and dedication to work on and improve the game to it is now. It was really a delightful experience while playing this visual novel and I humbly wish to say a few (hopefully, just a few) words about it.

1. My favourite bachelor? Rama. You don't even have to ask, haha. How do I say this? I feel him as a rather more in-depth character although I can't deny I blinked a little at the reason for his agony. Taking a second to digest and step into his shoes, well, it certainly is a painful experience. His gradual character development along the way really came off rather appealing. He feels close as a character, his jester-like nature and the slight twist is  a good touch that I certainly won't mind to see in future games. Drifting off to other bachelors, I didn't regret choosing Mitra to start off this serious, yet light-hearted visual novel. His gentlemanly and rather predictable nature really allowed me to ease into the game and adore him well enough for a start. Changing perspectives slightly from Mitra's and Rama's stories, Reksa really ended the whole experience with a more refreshing insight. His relatively mature handling of different sides and personality really sets him apart to be attractive as well. Regardless, Rama still resonates most with me out of this game.

2. What made me considered this game? I have to admit seeing a new version makes me feel the dedication and passion of the creator's. A skim pass the summary and the pleasant art style and I'm in.

3. I really enjoyed this visual novel. For it to be free is really a gift and blessing. I would say the art is different from my usual preferences but I certainly have a feeling that this game is not one I should passed. Definitely, no regrets. I really like the gallery and the mini encyclopedia. Reviewing them after each playthrough is pretty fun. What stands out the most is really the characters and thank you-a big appreciation-for not stopping after the "romancing" part and forget about the whole war and story. I really like the start-to-end follow through that the game has. Did I mention that Rama's bad end is so heart-wretching and badass? I actually didn't played this oneshot surprisingly, probably because of busy schedules, but picking it up on my first route with Mitra isn't an issue at all, in fact, I simply get more intrigued. I find this little, would I say, immersive aspect really commendable. It feels like there is more to offer, not just romance options or anything, the detailed development really just gives me more to anticipate.

4. I can deal with minor grammar errors and so on. I am rather curious about Purba to be honest. While I get what might happened to him in the end, I do wish for a more in-depth hint for a more proper closure, maybe it's just me. Another thing might be the fact that how Rama just suddenly get back with the village in his route feels a bit too rushed and sudden, while it's fine but I'll certainly welcome more development in this. Oh, can I have a chibi gallery too? Haha, they are so adorable. Mitra could hopefully afford a bad end too, because it's Mitra. Let me just randomly comment that I really like Tamara's CG in the normal end. Yes, Yuda is very entertaining, Granny is also so understanding and-my goodness, my appreciation for this game may never end.

5. Definitely. I really like this one and I do look forward for the next one. I understand that you are currently working on another project so I'm really eagerly looking out and hoping to support or purchase it one day. Not anytime soon but as soon as I get over my student's phase, I look forward to.

Thank you for this wonderful piece of creation. If anything, I hope my humble comments may bring you some useful thoughts or at least, a pleasant read. A few words, indeed, I'm afraid even after all these I still cannot express how much I enjoyed this. Sincerely, thank you.

Wow, so many comments tonight! I feel blessed >////<

Hi, hayashi!
Thanks for dropping by and telling me your thoughts!

1. YAY! Another Rama fan! I'm so happy -this boy really needs more love QuQ
Thank you for taking your time to get into his shoes and finished off all three routes! I didn't post the recommended route playing order here, but you pretty much hit the nail by leaving Reksa's route for last x'D
I'm very glad to hear you picked Rama in the end though! His psychology is the most complex and borderline, if not already tackling the issue of depression. I wanted to convey the message of devotion and patience. Sometimes, when facing our troubles, all we need is someone to stay and sit beside us until we're ready to open ourselves to them >< It's simple but challenging to write, but I'm happy to see more people understand my intention!

2. Aww thank you!
First impression counts after all! x'D

3. Thank you! Gosh, you're making me blush now with all the praises >///<
The encyclopedia is a gamble for my part, since I didn't know whether people will find these things interesting or not --but man, knowing my novel is interesting enough for people to play from start to the end made me so happy!
And yes! I have to admit that Rama's bad end turned out better than I expected! It's one of my favorite scenes in the novel :'3

I still have much to learn though -particularly about grammar since my proofreaders are hammering me down with how many errors are there :'D However! I will definitely do my best to keep up the good work and improve the quality little by little!

4. I agree! Honestly, if not for Tamara, Rama wouldn't want to place a foot back to Loma Village :'D the pain and the awkward misunderstanding are just too much to fix in reality. That's why, I'm thankful for the weekly time skip! *I know, I cheated a bit here ><*
Ah now that you mention it... I forgot to put a chibi gallery here and in my 2nd project *facepalm*
Thank you for mentionin this! I'll see what I can do about that!

5. Yes! Thank you so much for your support and this kind review! Your feelings came through and definitely made my day!
No rush about trying to give me your support though, I understand the difficulties of a student too well :'D this review is enough for now!

Oh, but the good news is Winged Ones is coming to Steam really soon!
I'm giving away free Steam Keys so please drop your email here if you want it ^.^- There will be a major fix on the grammar, an achievement system, and trading cards in the future if the game is doing well and reached certain threshold of good reviews and such!

Thanks again and I hope to see you in the future!
xoxo,

SweetChiel

Hello SweetChiel~ Thank you too.

Indeed. I still feel like I can go on and on about the entire, delightful experience. Rama is too unique yet sincere a character to look over in my case. I'm pretty sure he will continue to make his impression on me for a while even after the game. Regardless of the minor errors here and there, I really had a good time with this, so don't push yourself too hard. If anything, I'm really grateful for your best efforts. Rama's bad end is one of my favorites too. The other one will be somewhere in Reksa's route where he just smiled a moment in the cave after warming up to Tamara, I think. I'm truly humbled that my little comment can help you in anyway. Thank you for the kind offer, allow me to just drop my email (hayashi.cas@gmail.com). I'll really be happy to be able to play this again with all the trading cards and improvements you made! Once again, thank you. I'll certainly continue to check out your new work(s) and support them in the near future!

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1. The bachelor I liked most was definitely Reksa. While all three of the bachelors' stories were compelling in their own way I liked Reksa in the way he handled both aspects of good and evil (though I could do without him calling Tamara woman all the time). He was good but he wasn't afraid to toe the boundary between the softer and rougher sides of him and that's what I find most intriguing and exciting about him. Because his reactions/emotions were so intense it made the story more exciting for me. That in combination with his moral stance when it came to his character really made me adore the guy - it wasn't just me he protected, he worked to protect the villagers and even in Rama's route he came back to warn Tamara of the oncoming Komodo attack. I felt like Reksa was somebody who gave you the best of both worlds: he would never hurt anyone unless they were a threat and his chracter (outside of where Tamara's concerned) is admirable and interesting independently because of all the different aspects of his personality; at the same time he's not afraid to be rough with Tamara which let us see Tamara's rough side (referring to how Tamara was punching him in his good ending to try and escape loll) and that was really funny to see. I did Reksa's storyline first so even when I played Rama's and Mitra's it was easy to spot the differences and it just made me love Reksa's character even more ^.^

I also really liked how he diverted from the sort of ordinary stereotype of the man being the dominating power and the woman being the meek one  - Mitra was a family man and he was an incredibly good person and he preferred Tamara fulfill the roles of a gentle homemaker and mother rather than her developping the skills of a warrior (which is okay and i understand that he doesn't want to see Tamara getting hurt) but I really wanted to see Tamara being all badass on her own lol even though she really didnt have much fighting skill, its really refreshing seeing an empowered heroine (when seeing her display her CPR skills with Reksa -- i mean even though it didn't work just seeing her out there in the field demonstrating what she was capable of was great and with Reksa it felt more like a team effort when they were taking down the Komodo's).

2. I really love games that dive into the past. Something about history and the lives of those who lived before us has always fascinated me and so this VN's spin on that spiked my interest from the beginning. I also really like the fighting/action that's often woven into stories that dive into the past (i'm a sucker for a good action scene) so that (and of course the romance aspect) kept me interested throughout all the storylines. 

3.  Honestly I really loved it - and I know it's a simple thing to say but what I mean by that is the best stories are those that succeed in creating a new world for you to live in and be a part of as you read the lines of the tale. I was able to step out of my own world and join Reksa, Mitra, Rama, Granny, Asih and Yuda in theirs and it was really fun. Plus I became pretty emotionally invested in the VN - I mean the shock, the horror, the laughs, the sadness - I experienced it all. The art was beautiful and intensified and brought to life the words written for the story so that was definitely something that stood out to me each time Tamara had a moment with one of the characters, but I mean the story and the art went hand in hand for me - neither could be made so wonderful without the other. The endings were really fulfilling, they put a soft end to the story - it wasn't like the characters were ripped away from you and you were rid of the world, instead the stories and the characters kind of stayed with you which I thought was a pretty surprising effect that the story managed to have on me. (The music was fantastic too btw - I have the piano melody playing in the background as I write this - it makes me feel so at peace aha)

The Indonesian aspect of it was really refreshing to see. For me, the books/movies/tv shows I have available to me to read are based in primarily in America so it was great seeing a change in setting and culture. I'm really interested in Indonesian culture too (even though I don't know a whole lot about it) so I was pleasantly surprised when the story drew from there so thank you for including that. It was nice seeing that part of you woven into the story. 

3. I'd really want to know about the process behind the novel - what you were thinking when you decided to create it, how the story came together, what influences in your life influenced how the story turned out, what you love most about your own story and what you're thinking in terms of VN's for the future? (I know these are a lot of questions but i'm really curious!)

Critique wise -hm, I think it would be awesome to see a more skilled female lead (though Tamara was adorable and I loved her lol) it would be cool to see someone more capable and independent (though I did admire Tamara's emotional skill when it came to handling these relationships). That's all I can think of right now! Seriously the story was great :3


4. yES!

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Hi ExcellentDoughnut4!
Glad to see you've finished all the routes and returned here! ^.^-

First of all, thank you for writing this detailed review! From the meticulous writing, I can feel how you poured your passion and love to it -and I couldn't ask for a better review >///<

1. Ah,  Reksa once again claimed the first spot! 
I don't have much to say since you've practically already said everything that needs to be said! You even noticed the moment where Reksa returned to warn Tamara about the oncoming war QuQ I get really happy when players notice those small things! And yes, each route has their own weakness & strength, but I have to admit that Tamara is more badass in Reksa's route. There are soft and rough moments here, a lot more balanced compared to Mitra's easy-soft route or Rama's hard-psychology route. 

Hmm, maybe I'm a little biased? >< Reksa is the first character I created for this novel so... oh, you asked about how the process behind the novel? Let's continue this later on number 3, okay? x'D

2. Me too! Aside from diving into the past, I also love fantasy genre so Winged Ones is kinda like a mix of those two + an experiment whether I can pull this off or not >< fortunately, it worked! I didn't expect the fighting scenes to be so intense though. Maybe because I watched a lot of movies and animes? But overall, I'm very happy to be able to keep the readers interested from the beginning to the end!

3. Okay, so I told you that Reksa is the first character I created, right?
This visual novel is supposed to be my college's final project. I was experimenting about how to mix anime style with Indonesian culture and create an original character design from it. I already liked VNs back then, so I thought it would be nice to have a demo for a representation. 

And so, that's where it all started. 
At that time, the inspiration for the story came from a movie called 'A girl that leapt through time',  'Harry Potter', and my love for Angels/Winged People. After lots of revision, trials, and errors, the demo is done and I posted it on lemmasoft for fun. I didn't expect to have so many people like it though >< as more and more people came and ask when is it going to be completed, I decided to YOLO and finish the project.

 At first, I used Novelty (A free software, easier than Ren'Py  but still in alpha mode). It took me a little more than a year to complete it, but the result is quite bad. This software have bugs in it and there were crashes everywhere. 
With no other choice, I decided to learn Ren'Py from scratch and managed to finish the Ren'Py version in a long year of sweat and blood.

After seeing the positive comments, I decided to walk the path of becoming an indie VN developer x'D

*cough*

I hope I didn't bore you with my text wall o.o;
But thanks for asking and I hope you get to become a great programmer! If you want to be a game dev, you'll need dedication and commitment, but after that? It's very fulfilling to see our characters came to life :'D

Oh, and here's some good news for you:
Winged Ones is coming to Steam really soon! There's going to be a major fix on the grammar, achievement system, and trading card later in the future if the game is going well and reached certain threshold on reviewers! But because Steam is a commercial platform, I decided to put a price of $4.99 there >< However! I will give away Steam Keys for loyal supporters, so please drop your email down here so I can send it to you later ~

I'm also in the middle developing my 2nd project called 'Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle'. It's not a sequel; it's a new story but the setting is the same yet, much, MUCH, broader than just an island. More info can be seen by clicking my profile and click the game page ^.^-

Last but not least, thank you for your support and warm review! I guess I'll see you around? ;)
xoxo,

SweetChiel

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Unfortunately I can't get Reska's happy ending at all since there was no option for me but to give him the explosives. I read on a site i was supposed to click above or below the option (if the alternative didn't appear) so that i hand him the pink crystal instead but sadly it doesn't seem to be working for me. Any idea on how I can fix this?


btw, love the game! i really enjoyed playing it - lol i actually played it nonstop because it was so good ^.^ (rip my sleep schedule)

Hi ExcellentDoughnut4!

Thanks for coming by and I'm sorry to hear you can't seem to unlock Reksa's good ending >< 

The reason could be because you don't have enough affection points. Have you tried following the walkthrough? The link is here: https://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?t=36095 (click and drag your mouse over the white box to see its content).

I hope this could help you to get it and so you can catch up with your rest ^.^-

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

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Hi SweetChiel!

Thanks for responding! It was my first time playing a game like this - the walkthrough helped a lot aha. I got to experience all 6 endings and man I loved the story. (Reksa's my favourite!) Thanks for you help and for creating this. It must've taken a lot of work and I really did enjoy it. 

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Honestly?? This game was absolutely amazing and though the only problems I saw were ones in grammar, this has been one of the absolute best otome games I have ever played!!

From the encylopedia page to the amazing art and cg's, this game is absolutely of stellar quality! The tiny bits of humor are adorable and I'm just so amazed by how awesome you are as a person- you made this game entirely by yourself and even tackled such a serious issue such as Rama's! More on that later!!

Tip: recommended playing order is Reksa, Mitra, then Rama

*MAY INCLUDE SPOILERS*

1.)  Rama. Rama's absolutely my favorite, but I have to say that ALL of the boys were absolutely fantastic. Reksa will always have a special and soft spot in my heart for being the first man I went after and for being absolutely adorable and caring in his route, and Mitra is honestly so good, though sadly he's a bit overlooked due to his clearly-best-option-boy-next-door personality rip hahaha. I love each and every one of these boys and the characters in the story because of how they really did feel like a family, especially after Rama finally told Tamara about his past. Mitra, Yuda and Rama's bantering is one of the best things ever.

MOVING ON TO ACTUALLY TALKING ABOUT RAMA, Rama absolutely stole my heart in his route. Not to say the other boy's routes aren't as valid, but there are usually 'true' routes in otome games and Rama's route is clearly it. I did Reksa, Mitra, and saved Rama for last and honestly,  it was the best decision I've ever made. It built up the story just so nothing in any of the stories were spoiled for me other than the common automatic events and it set up Rama's story as a real treat.

Rama's a sweet guy and he's so cute and protective of Tamara. I also loved observing the parallels between Mitra's route and Rama's route. I'd say Rama wouldn't be very proud of his wings, so even if the festival for declaring one's intention was placed later into the story, I don't think he'd participate. That, and he was still sorting things out at the part of the story where it might've happened before the final decisive battle.

I saw him taking care of Tamara with food and protection (similar to an adorable wife, I love him so much) as his way of courting her. Not the village's tradition, but Rama's way. He's always been quirky and funny in that way and I'd say you truly did tackle the subject well. Rama's unpredictable, and though he'd started to get better, he still had major doubts about himself and insecurities on whether or not he really did deserve to be happy again. He thinks of himself like a bad charm.

I'd better wrap this section up since it's already five paragraphs long but long story short, Rama's my definite choice above all and I'm so glad he finally allowed himself to be happy in the end. and APPARENTLY he's the only gentleman out of the three since he left the room when Tamara went to sleep! Though I know that was (partly?) because he didn't trust himself and he still didn't sort out his feelings yet hahaha.  He's also super cool, have I mentioned that? He's got a really huge heart, and it's fragile after everything he's been through... I know I can entrust him with Tamara.

Side note: Mitra is the broest of bros and the clear mvp of the game. Best wing (heh) man ever, 100/10, give him the wife he deserves. He and Tamara would make the best parents ever. I'm sad he wasn't really as emphasized as the others :'(

2.) I considered playing this game because poc characters?? Yes. ANTHROPOMORPHIC AWESOME BIRD PEOPLE WITH WINGS??? YES. MYTHOLOGY-ESQUE AND INTERESTING FOREIGN CULTURE???? HELL YES. I'm a sucker for these kinds of things and honestly that was the only reason I needed. The art is also super pretty and when I realized this was based in Indonesia while playing the game, it made me even happier. More representation for Asia ftw!

3.) Absolutely one of the best games I've ever played, period. Some people are grammar nazis and so might have trouble overseeing that, but if they do, I believe they'll find this game very enjoyable, though maybe not as much as I did hahaha. What stood out to me was how loyal the game was to elements of actual Indonesian tradition and that made me really really happy. It wasn't just 'oh it's based in Indonesia, anyway have this American stuff' no. It was loyal in its myths and portrayals and I found the way the traditions were woven into this ancient world very creative.

Also I just have to add that Rama's bird species was especially funny to me because my class held a book fair with an Indonesian theme for Filipino class and we had to translate stories and stuff and I just so happened to have to take charge of the big book we were reading. The folktale of Cendrawasih was one of the stories I read about and may I just say that it was a pretty disturbing and messy story. I mean a woman and her dog eating fruit because the woman wanted to get pregnant? Fun times. Not even scratching the surface. I mean no offense though, so I hope I didn't offend!

The elements that stood out the most was family and friendship. Finding the fault in our actions, revenge, acceptance and forgiveness as well.  One of the scenes that really stand out to me is when Mitra and Yuda speak to the villagers, pinning all the blame on Purba, but Granny immediately put a stop to that and scolded the both of them. This game has a very well thought out story that touches on ideas I believe not a whole lot of people really grasp or understand until a certain moment. Thus, I'd say that this game has rather a lot to offer.

4.) What was the undecipherable look on Purba's face before he leaves in Mitra and Rama's route? Was it interest? Does it point towards what could have possible been if he wasn't a jerk? Ho ho, who knows? Reksa's route seems to point a bit towards that in his route though or maybe it's something completely different.

I also noticed that Mitra wears quite a lot of feathered accessories! In Rama's route, he said that  wearing the feather of your beloved as an earring is their equivalent of a wedding ring. So what does Mitra's accessories signify? Do other feather accessories have particular meanings? Who was the pained person in Tamara's reoccuring dreams? Even after I've played all the routes and all the endings (Reksa should be drawn with his hair down more, btw) it never really becomes clear though I assume this person to be Rama. Another thing I noticed was that Mitra had less cg's than the two others, which is understandable, but I just wanted to ask about it? Is it because he only has one ending? (My poor homeboi :'( )

As for the game itself, the major problem I found were in the grammar as stated before. Other than that, it's been a fantastic game! Oh, and I found a bit of a glitch? After finishing Mitra's route, I went to look at the gallery and when I looked through Rama's, the cg for his good ending was there. Luckily I forgot it by the time I actually did do Rama's route, but it'd be a pretty sad experience to have such a gorgeous and lovely cg spoiled.

Another problem is how Rama's automatic events kind of mess with the stories of the other routes. It's still understandable in Mitra's route since their best friends, but it doesn't make as much sense in Reksa's route because you barely spend time at the village at all. It would be pretty normal if Tamara just came back after a while and found out Rama went missing without knowing why because she's spent all of her time with Reksa. It would also hint more towards Reksa's route being an opening route before doing the others. Hides a bit of the mystery.

5.) Absolutely. If any extra content was made for this game I'd probably buy it, tbh.

That's about it for my super long comment! Apologies for the long rambling, and I'd still like to talk more about the characters, so I'll put a small indication where you can skip right over it.

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The parts I loved the most in Rama's route were when he finally made himself face his problems and the ugly truth. The other was how he got a bit bad again towards the ending of the game. Some people might say 'hey, but he was getting better!' but I was actually looking for that part and I'm glad it wasn't overlooked. Issues as deep as Rama's don't go away as easily as that, and I'm glad it was clearly stated that Rama would need lots of time to sort himself and his thoughts and feelings out.

Mitra. Ya homeboi, the true mvp, the guy who would drop his coffee if you ran at him and jumped into his arms. I love him, I really do. I hope he gets the wife he deserves, and he's also absolutely adorable in his route?? I love how it goes into his personality showing he isn't actually perfect. and I get it. The Perfect Guy option in otomes usually have that arc in them. But while that was happening, Mitra's confrontation of this was also very.. down to earth and real.

He was ashamed that he'd shown that side of himself to Tamara especially after he'd declared his intention and of how this would change her opinion of him. Enough for him to want to leave, even for just a bit. It was honest in how Mitra said he wouldn't be opposed to trying to forgive the Komodos so everyone could live in peace but at the same time there was still the bitterness over what the Komodos had done. They'd taken his parents and countless brethren and Mitra loves his people.

He has the perfect image thing down but he's also so very human?? Like he isn't sure if sharing some kinds of personal information is okay because he really doesn't have a lot of people who he's close with and the first one after Asih is Tamara. He kind of views his sensitivity as a negative thing too and I just want to hug him sweetie, don't let toxic masculinity get to you,,,, He's so awkward around girls too, sometimes, and at first he isn't sure what to do with his feelings for Tamara which is adorable...... He isn't used to showing his more personal sides, his 'weaknesses'...... I've noticed that while perfection is the trope for his character, it actually tackles 'perfect images' as a whole and how, at the end, Mitra and Tamara see each other's flaws but still love each other for it... They are similar in how they are afraid the over will stop viewing them favorably after the ugly truths come out but even then they choose to help each other with their respective issues...

Mitra also doesn't like dishonest people, I noticed. Or being manipulated, but who does? I just felt that it was a very human moment in his route, one that was sorely needed. (Also why yall sittin on an absolute Meal like Mitra, it's his boy-next-door personality I know but cmon)

It was also interesting how he was the only love interest who opposed to Tamara going to destroy the blue crystal BUT THEN AGAIN he also wasn't the OTHER TWO LOVE INTERESTS WHO ALMOST GOT THEMSELVES KILLED IN THE ENDING (I'M LOOKING AT YOU, RAMA AND REKSA. YOU GOT LUCKY RAMA, REKSA ACTUALLY DIED FOR A WHILE-)

Moving on, I gotta confess. I thought the woman Rama was referring to as 'her' was Asih and that was why he and Yuda would always fight. Nope. Just a regular case of 'people who are very similar to each other tend to disagree with each other'.

I also found it super interesting how Sari and the other bird actually turned out to be Ayu and Teja! Perhaps they were actually different birds since Sari has a completely different personality than how Ayu was described, but I digress. I immediately realized that the two angels that came to Rama's aid was them. Mainly because of how much his brother actually did look like him rip.  (To be expected since they were identical twins, but still)

y'know, for a person who absolutely loved Reksa after first finishing his route, I surprisingly don't have a lot to say about him. Huh. Reksa's a sweetheart, and I'm sure a lot of people could understand how he constantly looked for validation from his dad. Reksa's not built like the usual Komodo should be because of his mom (whom I assume to be of similar species to human for the time) but even so he pushes himself to be the best he possibly can be, for his village, and for his dad's approval. I'm just really happy that by the end of the story, he found that he was enough. He didn't need anyone else's validation (though he still enjoyed it) to know he was strong. I suppose out of all the characters, I relate to Reksa the most. I'm glad he found a person he could trust and depend on in Tamara. A person he can love and protect and who would do the same back...

Purba was also a very interesting character. I feel that he was misguided along the way, though perhaps not by another person, but by his own emotions. It's a shame that the things that happened occurred but no one can change back time. In the end, I suppose jealousy was his demise.

Asih's great, I love her. Especially how she rears Yuda in when needed and how much of a big sister figure she is to the girls she meets. She's got a huge heart! Though that's kinda needed if you ever have to love someone like Yuda, I suppose, rip.

Yuda.. What an ass lmao. I love this guy, he's a total big brother figure. Kinda reminds me of my own brother. He's got a lot of feelings about the stuff the Komodos have done which is understandable but I'm glad he has Asih. They deserve each other.

I just realized something. The spikier the hair outline of a character, the more jaded/edgy they are.  Rama = ultimate jaded, Asih = an actual marshmallow. 

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Thank you so much for creating this game! All of your time and effort haven't gone to waste and I surely hope you never feel this way about your games. It's amazing and beautiful and stellar, definitely one of the best otome games I've ever played. I really love how it tackles the personal issues the characters have, particularly Tamara and Rama's. They're both given time in Mitra and Rama's route respectively to decide what it is they really want in life. The trio (Tamara, Mitra, and Rama in both of the boy's routes) also trust each other enough to share deeply personal and scarring memories and thoughts and it's just so good and healthy I love it... They (depending on the route) were there for each other when one of them really needed it and it's so good how they let themselves feel and look their weakness in the eye...

I can' t say much other than THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS GAME!!! I'm excited about the new game you're working on, especially since it's in the same world as this one! And how Tamara's in the banner of that game hehehe

If Tamara and the boys gets even a little bit of a mention in the game I'd die of happiness, honestly. Keep up the super awesome work! And sorry for all my rambling, this is undoubtedly the longest comment there is, hahah.

Anyway, please accept my humble tributes...

https://imgur.com/a/ki9AzBL

https://imgur.com/a/CKmpXum

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OMG, I'm so sorry for the late reply!
I have been pretty much drowned by Steam this week so I haven't have the time to check until tonight ><

Thank you for the detailed review, matchmakingdove1028!
Seriously, nothing makes me happier to see someone love my VN and really passionate about it ^.^- Thank you for being an awesome person and sharing your thoughts with me!

*SPOILER ALERT*

1. Rama -aaaaaa, finally! Rama needs more love! >////<
I've never been so happy to read 5 paragraphs about Rama alone!  Thank you for loving this boy so much until you're able to describe him so vividly! You even noticed the small things, like how Rama 'courted' Tamara with his own way. 
Rama is fragile by nature and we need to be extra careful and patient when dealing with him. His psychology is the most complex of all three and depression is a hard theme to tackle, but overall, I wanted to convey the message of devotion or maybe 'just talk and stay beside him in hard times is enough'. Depression is hard to understand, but I think he don't need sympathy or opinions -he just needs someone to be beside him and listen when he's ready to tell you about his troubles/trauma.

And yes, I agree that Mitra is the best wingman ever! x'DD

2. YES! Bird people/angels has been my fetish every since I saw Yue from Cardcaptor Sakura *cough*
Glad to hear we're on the same boat! x'D Fantasy ftw!

3. rofl, what's the story title? Is it Sangkuriang? That one has a dog too and there's another story about a woman somehow gets pregnant after drinking coconut water(?) we have many strange stories like that so no worries x'D

And thank you! Mitra's speech scene is very hard to pull off, I think I spent many days editing it back and forth -I even went to youtube to look for good speech with keywords like 'general speech to soldiers' or 'worldwar speech' lol. So I'm very happy to hear you like it!

4. Aaah, the one in the ending? Who knows what Purba was thinking ;) it could be that he was regretting his decisions, it could be that he regretted that he didn't kill Tamara and the others earlier when he got the chance... or maybe he was just depressed because his plans didn't work as well as he thought it would be. It's up for the readers to decide x'D

Yup, lol, Mitra has the most accessory compared to the others x'D
Komodos usually wear the fangs of their preys on their neck to showoff, but Avians usually wear accessories to attract a mate or just because they like it. But the white marks on his face, hands, and legs are from a reference from New Guinea... I think, if I remember correctly -it's been years so forgive me if I'm wrong ><

As for the dream, that is Sari calling for someone to help Rama. Sari/Ayu felt bad after leaving Rama in that state and after becoming a Servant, she knew that if no one saves him, he will die. She sent dreams about Rama's hallucinations to Tamara then; how Rama thought about the villagers betrayal, how they laughed and tortured him. The CRACK noise is Rama's last attempt at suicide, which resulted in his broken wing.

And yes again! Thank you for telling me about the glitch, I already fixed it so Rama's good ending should be locked now x')
Kii*Anima and I also fixed some of the automatic events. We decided to make the event where Rama was tied down as a compulsory event so people would at least be able to guess why he acted weird and went missing.

5. Thank you -and don't worry about your ramblings! I had one heck of a time reading it and I can't stop smiling now, grinning like a horse x'D
Again, thank you for telling me your thoughts on each and every character here! I'm really flattered you think they're very human and with their own strength & weaknesses... though I laughed so hard when you pointed out how Mitra wasn't like the other 2 who almost got themselves killed x'DD You also hit the nails on their heads about Yuda and Asih! 

Lastly, thank you so much for playing and enjoying this novel thoroughly!
I've never had a livelier review before and I will definitely treasure this QuQ

Ah, and here's a good news for you:
Winged Ones is coming to Steam very soon! There's going to be a major fix on the grammar, achievement system, and even trading cards later if the game is going well and reached certain threshold of reviewers! But because Steam is a commercial platform, I decided to put a price of $4.99 there >< but for loyal supporters, I'm planning to give out free Steam Keys, so please drop your email here in the comments ^.^-

Aww and thank you so much for the memes! *automatic right-click & save* they're so precious and adorable! >////< I will definitely show them in my update next Monday and cherish them!

Hope to see you again!
xoxo,

SweetChiel

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Aahh, I'm glad my comment was able to make you so happy! If anything, I'm glad my feelings were able to reach you, hahaha

Hahaha, I don't think it was Sangkuriang, but that was one of the stories I read for the book fair! When I tried to find the story again to see if I was correct, it seems the website for Indonesian stories had already went down.. It was a pretty good site, too.

It's really amazing to hear how much you researched how to write inspirational speeches! Lol
I know the speech I was talking about was the one where Mitra and Yuda pinned all the blame on Purba but can I just say that the speech Mitra gives right before the final battle is also one of my favorites? There's just a really heavy fantasy vibe to it! "May the goddess guide our arrows true" and such?? THAT'S the good stuff.

Ooh, but now the question remains, where do the avians get their feathers for their accessories? lol

I think that's the first explanation I've ever read for Tamara's dream sequence, and that's really interesting! So my guess was right! I thought the person saying "it's alright, at least he's with us now..." after Rama dies in the other two endings was the goddess, but turns out that was Ayu too, hahaha

No problem! It was an honor to play such an enjoyable game!

That's super exciting!!?!!?! I can't wait to replay it there! My email is missingknightace@gmail.com. Truly, thank you for all of your hard work on this game! I know I say you're amazing a lot, but I really do find it outstanding that, two years into the future, you're still working on this game. It's really easy to see the love and dedication you have for this game... Thank you so much..

No problem! I hope to deliver more memes when Bermuda Triangle comes out, so look forward to that! Hahaha

See you around!

Aah, that's a shame >< 

And yes! After all the work, Mitra's speech was one of my favorite scenes -also, after some grammar fixing by Kii*Anima, I think it became better x'D can't wait to hear your thoughts about it later!

As for the feathers... thank you for asking! Avian women usually used the feathers from their last molting. Of course, they will use only the best-looking feathers to make her look prettier. As for Mitra, he's a pretty sentimental man so can you guess where he got his from? ;) *hint: his family photo~

And YAY! X'D e-mail received! I will deliver the steamkeys sometime this week. Today's update will have sneak peeks about the badges/trading cards system. Do come by and take a look since Steam has some requirements to activate those :'3

See you around!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

HI I JUST WANNA SAY I LOVE YOU AND THIS GAME SO MUCH <333 I've first played this game like a year ago but I didn't have a itch account then, but I enjoyed it so much I played it again and I had to leave a comment uwu

1) After playing every route I have to choose Reksa. I think he's more my type ? I always tend to go for the "seemingly bad boy that's actually really sweet" lmao. I loved his route and his personality as a whole he's just a cutie. But I do like all of them & I have such a soft spot for Rama (I actually cried during his route but shh don't tell anyone)

2) What struck me first was the character design and I found the story really interesting and refreshing so I decided to play it

3) It's definitely one of my all time faves, I really enjoyed it. The story was compelling, sometimes dark and sometimes really funny, very enjoyable overall. I loved every character as well, including the MC, they were all very lovable. The art & music complimented the story and atmosphere really well, I still fangirl over the CGs. What stood out the most to me was the inclusion of Indonesian culture, which I wasn't too familiar with. I found it really unique for a VN and I'm glad I learned new things about such a wonderful culture thanks to this game :)

4) I would have liked if we could get more interactions and backstory to every character even if we're not on his route, since some scenes (especially Rama's) felt very out of place in the other routes, and kind of disrupted the flow of the story. I don't think I have other critiques than that? I usually get so engrossed in the story I don't notice any "mistakes" and stuff but this stood out. Besides that, I really enjoyed it and I can see you improved in the Bermuda Triangle demo :) 

5) I'm really looking forward to your new game, and while I'm not able to buy it right now (I'm in my last year of high school & I have no money to spend T_T ) , I definitely will when I get my personal card! I understand how hard and time-consuming it is to make a game and I really want to support you as much as I can. Keep up the good work!!

Hi, ๐“๐“ท๐“ท๐“ฒ๐“ฎ! I can't read your name but I'm so glad to hear you love this game until you re-played now even after such a long time! >\\\<

I love you too and thank you for playing my game!

1. Aww thank you! It makes me so happy everytime I hear people got immersed in the story QuQ *you even cried for Rama and that's so sweet of you! I see Reksa is still number 1 in the polling x'D

2. Thank you! I was quite skeptical with my designs since they're not common, but hearing you say this really boosted my confidence >\\\< I'll work hard to make more interesting games in the future!

3. Thank you! I didn't expect so much people will like the Indonesian elements so this is a huge plus for me! And glad to hear you like my art -you made me blush so much first thing in the morning x'D

4. Yup, I notice a lot of people saying Rama's scenes sometimes out of place and disturbed the flow >< I'll try not to make the same blunder in Bermuda so thank you for telling me this! More interactions with the bachelors is also a good idea -which is why Bermuda is twice as long as Winged Ones x'D you got your wish over there!

5. No problem at all! Bermuda still has a long way to go before I could even publish the complete version so take your time~ even so, your commenting here is already a big support for me!

Thank you for coming and telling me your thoughts ^^- I also hope to see you again in the future!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Oh it's Annie but in a weird font haha. I'm a very empathetic person even when it comes to game characters so I tend to cry sometimes lol. Your game was really fun and kept me immersed and I'm sure your next project is gonna be even better. I'm glad I boosted your mood even a little with my comments, thank you for responding and for being so sweet, I'll keep supporting you <33 Have a nice day!

Aah, it looks like boxes from my phone so I can't see the font >< 

Yes! Thank you for your support! *hugs* I'll do my best to meet your expectations and thanks for trusting me! 

You too, I hope you have a great week! ^.^-

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-whoa, it's rare to see this kind of thing made in Indonesia, or... maybe this is the first? XD 

-If only this gets more attention in many people here instead of the 'game' that got popular for no reason in Indonesia, you know, ML! 

-and i didn't know that otome game could fit so well with indonesian culture!

-i just can't believe you made such beautiful game! The characters, the story, and especially the artworks done here, they are so breathtaking to see! Even for an novice artist like me can't do it!

-fun fact : this reminds me a lot of the delayed version of Fate/Stay Night Visual Novel! Called 'Fate/Prototype' welp, it later became a light novel instead of VN tho, 

-and... i am an Indonesian :D 

P.S : i honestly found this accidently while i was searching for the Fate-related-things i needed for making my Fanfic Manga for Fate Franchise, lol and then a pic of 'nusantara' appeared! 

Hi EXLuckBakaputradewa!

Yes, visual novels are rare in Indonesia that's why I'm glad to find a warm welcome here in international market >\\\< 

I have a few people asking for Indonesia translation/language added to the game, but I'm embarassed to say I'm not that good writing in Bahasa :")) English just suits me better because I've seen and played more games in English to develop my own sense of story flow. I wish there will be more Indonesians playing my game in the future though!

And thank you! I'm really happy to hear you like my art >\\\< there are rooms for improvement, so I'll do my best to level up the quality bit by bit!

Ah unfortunately I don't watch Fate/Stay Night so I don't know the similarties @@ I'll check it out if I stumbled upon it later though! 

In any case, I'm glad our accidental meeting becomes a great fun to you! I hope you enjoyed yourself thoroughly :'3

Thanks again for coming and for your kind support! I hope to see you around ~

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

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1. My favorite? idk, maybe Reksa? But in the other hand Mitra still makes me goes fangirling so much xD, but with Reksa my fangirling are much worse... specially that the epilogue when they doing this thing called "claiming" if i'm not wrong xD lol... it kinda gives me like a werewolf fantasy or alpha beta omega dynamic things when he claim our character... aaaakkkkk xD so, it's Reksa hehe...

2. well, because I'm an Indonesian, so its kinda makes me curious how the otome game story goes with our culture in it... and really, it makes me satisfied so much xD thank you for making this!!!

3. hmmm... first of all I'm drawn to the game title actually, when I played this, the story was the next thing that catch my eyes, so I keep playing this. And the last will be the art, the art is so amazing that sometimes I don't know how to react... the emotion that really looks natural to them... aahhh xD I fell in love.

4. idk what is happening, but when I'm in the Rama's route, the only choice that I can choose is the one to give him the bomb... maybe i need to do something about it? I didn't use your guide thou in Rama's route, so I think that I do something wrong in the earlier chapter :/ hmmm... I should play it again from the beginning *sigh* eh... gonna do it anyway... can I have a suggestion? why there is no like skip button that takes us to the next choice? this button can only function when the player had read some perticulars part before they decide to start it all over? its just a suggestion thou.. no need to consider it hehe... overall the game is good =w=b

5. sure thing, but i kinda need time to buy it thou :/ I think it will be kinda pricey for rupiah since I think Patreon or kickstarter using dollar *sigh* and I still need to finished my college and find a job ehe... 

thank you for creating this game!

p.s : I'm still thinking what if Purba is being one of the route? Imagine the happy ending they will get, with Purba needs to pays off his sins first and then proclaim love to our main character... and how the story more dark and twisted than Rama but there still have happy moments in there, how our main character have more struggle to knock some sense into him, telling him her past and etc, nah it's just a dream... not gonna happen anyways... But really, he needs a second chance :< Anyway, He kinda remind me of Kagami from Kurobas thou, eh just coincidence maybe...

HAVE A NICE DAY!

Hi Reiya Sapphire! Thanks for stopping by and dropping me your review!

1. Oh lol glad to hear you like Reksa's epilogue x'D it's also one of my favorites -and yes! Mitra's route is so sweet, I'm having cavities! Thank you for giving these 2 lots of love ^^-

2. Oooh, sama2 org indo toh x'D makasih ud main ya kak! Jarang2 ada org indo yg mainin *pasar VN d indo masi kurang soalny ><

And no -thank YOU for giving this game a chance!

3. Aww thanks! >\\\< glad to hear you like my art! I still have a lot to learn though, but I'll do my best to improve -especially in the grammar department *cough

4. Yup, Rama's route is tricky so I suggest you to follow my walkthrough >< hmm, if not, the best hint I can give you is: You need to give ALL your attention to Rama. Ignore Mitra and Reksa, because the slightest increase in other's affection meter will result in losing his trust. 

As for the skip button, you only need to press 'ctrl' x'D but for a skip button to directly skip to a choice? I don't know about that, it feels weird to me and it will affect a reader's immersion in the game so... my apologies, but no, I won't have that function ><

5. It's no problem at all, I know how hard and time consuming college could be! Not to mention how dollar still going up these days :'3 

Regardless, thank you for sparing some time to play my game and thank you for giving me your support!*hugs

Thanks again for coming by and see you around!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

P.S.

As for a Purba route...

This is actually one of the reasons why I decided to add an antagonist route in Bermuda, my latest game :")) I also have this strange attraction to antagonists in general so I decided to try and make one there. 

It's hard to write a route where they 'pays off their sins' though, because it's easier said than done *cries* not to mention how stubborn an antagonist character could be. They could adopt a 'no regrets' mood and it will give me a headache :"))

I've closed Winged Ones' book though, so I'll have to disappoint you... But! Maybe you can give Bermuda a try? Here's a fair warning; Bermuda would be a lot darker and not for the faint heart ><;

okay... thanks to you I can finally get a happy ending for Rama's route :> and its make me giddy xD I need mooooooorrreeee this kind of game aaakkkkk... RAMAAAAAA REKSAAAA MITRAAAA TT_TT if they just ever exist in real world *sigh* or our world was like in the game, that be wonderful... tapi aku gak mau ikut perang =3= maunya hidup bahagia aja wkwkwk, aku bingung gak bisa move on dari Reksa atau Rama xD tau ah wkwkwk... grammar department mah emang dari dulu susah wkwkwk, mesti banyak belajar dan disini aku yang ngomong pake bahasa inggris pake feeling xD and wkwkwk I understand why antagonist character would give their creator a headache if there was a route about them, kinda hard adapting the antagonist to the story biar gak melenceng ceritanya, lol... sungguh ku belum bisa move on dr game ini... bagus banget... sekali lagi makasih udah buat game nya xD *hugs*

  1. Reksa. If you asked me before I finised both of Rama's endings I would have said Rama, but he ended up being a... little weird... to say the least. He seemed to be insane, and normally I don't mind that, but he wasn't like a good type of insane, he was like a "please kill me I have no idea why any of us are alive what is life yada yada yada". I really liked Reksa and his personality and really wanted to punch Purba for being a d*ck.
  2. I played this game because I have played your other stuff and also I am obsessed with otome games and romance.
  3. I thought it was an amazing game and I would say mostly the art stood out to me as it was really good, and with Reksa his personality really stood out since it was so different to what you would think it would be.
  4. Yes, I would consider buying it, despite the fact I'm not allowed to buy games with my own money despite being 16 unless I beg to buy them.
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Hi, Cittycool! Thanks for dropping by and answering my questions >\\\<

1. I understand x'D Rama's route is the most complicated from all three and the depression with the suicide tendecy is one hella combination. But thank you for giving him a chance! I see Reksa is still the top of thr popularity poll ;)

2. Me too --we need more romance and otome! X'D

3. Thank you! I hope you enjoyed yourself thoroughly :'D and yes, that's why I recommend doing Reksa's route for last since it has the complete version of the main story + Purba's perspective ~

4. You're the first one to put an empty answer x'D I do think I still have a lot to improve tho.

5. O///O thank you for your support! I know how hard it is to buy games online without our parents knowing -but if not, I will still be grateful for your warm acceptance of my high-fantasy visual novel ^^-

Bermuda still has some ways to go before it could be considered completed tho, so take your time and hope to see you around!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

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I loved this game so much!! The characters are all wonderful. I loved the story and the romance.

1. My favorite character would have to be Reksa. I loved his romance and his story. Mitra is a close second because he is just so sweet and very dependable.

2. I considered playing this game cause I loved the demo for your new game that I had to see what a finished game from you would be like. I was not disappointed. 

3. Out of the art, story, and characters I loved the art the most. I loved the characters and how they were presented to the player. But really I loved all of it.

4. I loved the mix of romance and story, it was a perfect blend. I love how each interest told a different side of the war. I do have to say that I was very confused on the reason the war began.  I know the Komodos stole the blessing but I am not sure way. (Though I have only played the good ending so far. I am probably missing something that I have not seen yet.) 

5. Yes I will definitely pay for your next VN, Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle.

P.S- Sorry for long comment. <3 

Hi SkyDragon3564! 

Thanks for stopping by and leaving me this warm review! 

1. Thank you for giving all my boys a chance! X'D Reksa is still the reigning champ I see~ and yes! Mitra has a very sweet route I get embarassed now that you remind me >\\\<

2. Oh wow, thank you! I'm really glad to hear you like both my new and old works! 

3. Aww, you flatter me too much >\\\< I think I'll need to stick a needle in my bloated head later //hammer --I'm still working on the quality control tho, but hearing you like my art, I'll definitely do my best to make it better and better!

4. It's alright, the reason why they steal it is very vague at first after all :'3 

SPOILER ALERT*

The first thing that may came to your mind is maybe 'greed' since the crystal has multifunctions --but the real reason is Purba manipulating Chief Silva behind the scenes with Purple Crystals ;) he gave it to him in small doses and with time, Chief Silva became addicted to it and with that, Purba managed to 'control' him to do things with muddled head.

5. Thank you so much for your support! 

And no problem at all! I like reading comments so please, type away! X'D

If there are things you'd like to ask again, you can find me here or message me in my facebook fanpage ;) 

Hope to see you again in the future!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

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So far only in like Chapter 2  I think, but I am loving this game too! But I'm just a little confused though like does Asih, the little kids, Mitra, the komodo dude, Rama (just to name a few) understand Tamara's English? Or did she master their language within a few days?

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Hi angelinachea! Thanks for coming by!

Well, at first, only Tamara understand them, but as the game progressed, Tamara re-learned Indonesia language in a few weeks (with lots of stuttering, slow talks, & Granny Sukma's totulage).

Tamara's father is Indonesian so she has somekind of a base already. The lessons mainly serve as a reminder so I guess it's fair to say she learn pretty quickly? ><

I hope this answer your question & please, take your time & enjoy the game!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Ah i see okay cool. I just wanted to make sure I understood what was going on c'x but yeah thanks for answering my question :D

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Ahhhh i just finished my first playthrough and it hit me in the feels! I love this game and i am definitely gonna go back to try to get the other endings later :D

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Good luck! X'D 

Really glad to hear you like it and hope you enjoy it thoroughly~

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My favourite occurred to be Rama. I liked his story and dynamic of his character and I think that his the guy that needed heroine the most. The psychology of him was pretty well created.

I also really enjoyed the world. The things taken from Indonesian folklore was also an extra valour for me.

Thank You for the game!

Aww, thank you for loving Rama, Jowisz! 

Rama's psychology is certainly the most complex and challenging out of all three! I'm also really happy you don't mind the dark theme and chose Rama as your favourite ^.^- he needs more love

As always, thank you for dropping by and giving me your support!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Yuda and Tamara are funny when they argue with each other it is like they are siblings. Yuda being the annoying older brother.

Thank you! 

I also had a lot of fun making Yuda's scenes ~

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I didn't have an account, but because I want to leave a comment, I made it XD As a fellow Indonesian, I want to help you a little hehe

1. My favorite would be Reksa, because... I don't know? Lol He's just so cute HAHAH He puts stern and sour face, but he's very affectionate and I really like that wkwk

2. I downloaded because I was bored as hell LOL I actually had seen your game in itch.io since months ago, but only played it now, because I dislike... how to put it... tribal and traditional settings? But I'm not disappointed :)

3. I really like it. I think it's really worth reading. It's fun to know and be familiar with both language in this VN wkwkwk At first, I dislike the tribal and traditional settings, but now I really, really like it and the characters that now I almost don't want to read another VNs with modern settings! HAHA And I want more Reksa! I find -cough- his tradition of mating -cough- really interesting... COUGHCOUGHCOUGH

4. Hm... Throughout my VN playing hobby, I really find it weird that the quality of the character sprites are a lot better than CGs. Oh, I know that drawing IS hard, I'm sorry, I can't even draw myself! But just I just hoped that CGs have consistency and quality. I know tho that drawing high quality CGs are hard... I'm sorry...

Also, I don't really remember which ones - because I played the last two characters skipping seen dialogues, but some scenes are not really flowing. I'm sorry I can't specify which ones!

When I played my first character (it's Mitra) and when it finally got to Rama-killing-the-Komodos scene, I was really confused. Was it Mitra's route I was pursuing or was it Rama's? It is one of the main plot, I understand, but it really stood out in another character's route, and it made me frowned for a while. I think you can smoothen major plots involving another main characters next time so it is not really stood out and shadowing the in-route character! But I think, it is just me... playing too many same-structured other otoge VNs...

And other players point out the grammar errors... and I must say, I feel you! XD I'm really bad at grammar, but just do your best! 

5. Ah... I can't support anyone via Kickstarters and Patreon and other web, I'm sorry! But I CAN definitely buy the finished VNs if you put it on Steam, I have my ways hehehe Depends on the price and my wallet, that is...

I think that's all? And good luck working on the other projects!! I'm really looking forward to Bermuda (I will have a hard time moving on Mitra, Rama, and Reksa tho) and Queen's Crown (your artwork is amazing, especially your character sprites)!

P.S. I got really curious, and did some stalking... You live in Tangerang?! We are so close!! I live in Tangerang too because I'm in uni rite now XD

Hi, PangHerHeart! Wow, fellow Indonesian! Makasih bnyk ud dtg & komen yaa x'D

1. Reksa once again prevails lol. He's still the most popular out here ~

2. I'm glad to hear it didn't disappoint you :'3 thank you for giving it a chance!

3. Oh lol, unfortunately the rating needs to be maintained at PG15 *I'm too shy to write more about the mating ceremony*cough* happy to hear you enjoyed yourself thoroughly!

4. Yup, I know >< my quality control is not that good yet -hence, I'm trying hard to upgrade the quality in Bermuda :'D and it's okay! Thank you actually, I like constructive comments!

As for Rama's scenes *SPOILER ALERT*

Yes, he's part of the main story. Remember the nighmare Tamara had? Sari was encouraging Tamara to save Rama or he'll succumb to the darkness in his heart (You know about Sari's true identity, right? And what happened if you didn't enter his route). Also, his 'crazy' streak will need some 'venting' sometimes so the poor Komodos became his victims.

But yes, I get what you're trying to tell me >< I admit that some scenes feel out of place --I'll do a better job intergrating the routes next time! Thank you for the heads up :'3

5. No problem at all! Just knowing you like my VNs and willing to follow to Bermuda is already a gift for me ^.^-  oh and I'm doing th CGs in Queen's Crown x'D the sprites sre done by someone else ~

And yes! I live in Tangerang lol. Which uni are you in? I was in UMN Gading Serpong but I'm working freelance at home now ~

Thanks you again and hope to see you around!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Hello, SweetChiel! I'm sorry for the very late answer >.< I wanted to reply sooner, but I just kept forgetting. Hope you are doing fine, and sama-samaaa wkwk XD

- I'm sure Reksa was born to be popular lololol But the other characters are charming also! It was just so fun figuring out their character hehe Rama is so fun to talk to, even if with his... sad past.

- I'm glad I gave it a try as well! And I'm glad you made this game!

- PG15 haha lol No problemo, The tradition was just unexpected and interesting. I just think there are more in the universe! Hope I can see it someday~

- Aaah yeah, I know about the whole Sari and Rama story, and you make it a lot more sense. I think, I was not paying attention very well (since I was playing it in a Semester Test night LOL (I didn't study in the end, anyway... sooo...)), but I still think you can smoothen it up. Still a good job tho!

- Oh no, oh no. You only draw the CGs??? I'M SO SO SO SORRY. It's been long since I played the demo, and I only played it once, since I don't want to overplay it before the official release. I just remember that you are one of the artists, and the artwork is so nicely done! I'm sorry for not rechecking!

I'm in holiday right now, so I'm back in my hometown ^^ But I go to UPH, it's quite near haha

Your welcome!

PangHerHeart

 

I'm not sure if I've already commented this, but I have started a playthrough of this VN!

Wow! Thank you very much, Sophia! QuQ 

Here's praying for a smooth sail for your playthrough! I have no words to describe how happy and flattered I am to see someone likes my game enough to shoot a video of it TvT

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

I really enjoyed playing this! I've only played Reksa so far (and maybe forever? I don't think I can let the other boys woo me now that I've done Reksa's route. I probably should've saved him for last lol), but it's been an amazing experience. The art (both CG, bg, and sprites) are breathtaking and the sounds are complimentary to the story. I greatly enjoyed the lore you've written up for the characters. I'm grateful I got to play this and I look forward to your next project! I'm certain whatever you work on will be amazing!

Thank you, jaegermeister24! I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed yourself! >\\\< 

I'm flattered to hear you love the overall of my game ^^- I still have lots to learn & improve, but I'll do my best so you can return here and enjoy yourself again! 

And I see my boy, Reksa, is still occupying the number 1 in popularity x'D 

My next game is called "Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle". It's set in the same world but broader horizon --not a sequel mind you :'3 it's still in progress but I hope you'll come again later when it's finished!

Thank you for the warm support and see you again! 

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Ah, yes! I have your next game on my list of to-play! I look forward to seeing the finished product and good luck! (and yes, Reksa is best bae, sorry Rama and Mitra, I'm just attracted to his Tsundere nature)

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THIS IS A GREAT GAME! *squeeeeels* IT WOULD BE GREATER IF THE GROWL OF REKSA IS HEARD IN THIS GAME! HAHAHAHA LMAO I LOVE MITRA ND REKSA SO MUCH! KINDA HESITANT ABOUT RAMA SINCE I HAVE SHORT TEMPER FOR IN DENIAL GUYS~ HAHAHA MORE POWER TO YOU AND I HOPE THERE WILL BE A SEASON 2 OF THIS GAME ;_;

Woah --Power received! X'D

Thanks for visiting, ladyhunale19! Your enthusiasm just made my day! I just wake up and your comment is like fireworks in the morning! 

Hahahahaha! Glad my power been received! Aaah! I'm so happy I found your game! โคโคโค

Hello,

I downloaded this visual novel and found the visuals to be astoundingly beautiful! The music was lovely and I was impressed in general by the layout and the controls in the options menu. I was enjoying the storyline for the short time that I kept with it. Unfortunately, there were two things that bothered me enough that I stopped reading. I would like to share this feedback with you, and I hope you will find it helpful to your growth as a VN creator.

The first problem I encountered was that the English does not flow well. This usually happens when the writer speaks English as a second language, and I'm guessing this is the case here? I am a native English speaker and a person who appreciates the beauty of language used to its best potential. I am worried that you will read this review and feel defensive, and be angry for this criticism. Of course I wouldn't demand that anybody have a masterful grasp on a second language, but for the VN this is a problem that can be resolved by asking for help from other people. I also acknowledge that for many readers the grammar and flow is probably good enough.  For me, the awkward phrasing, unnecessary explanations, and occasional but noticeable mistakes kept pulling my mind away from the story, and sadly I couldn't let myself fall away into the unfolding world of Nusantara. The help of a talented editor who is a native speaker could have brought this VN to its full potential!

The other thing that I found uncomfortable was less important to me, but I'll mention it anyways. That was the visual effect of the fast-paced in/out fade of the picture (for example, during the dream scene and the drowning scene at the beginning.) It did accomplish a feeling in my body of suspense, but I found it to be a bit too stimulating. It hurt my eyes and I wondered if I'd get a headache from watching it. It would have been comfortable for me if either the pace was slower, or the blinking happened for maybe half the time, or possibly both. 

On that subject, I found the shaking screen to be a really cool effect--but devastatingly overused. If the picture only shook at the most important of times, it would really draw attention to those moments. Instead, it was happening every minute or two, and the novelty wore off quickly. There are many different ways to convey the shock of less important surprises.

Again, I hope my feedback is constructive to you as a creator. The art you have made here is beautiful, and to judge by other reviews on the page, the storyline sounds engaging. I wish you the best on your future projects!

Hi rlynnz! Thanks for dropping by and for the very kind advices! ^.^-

As you've guessed, yes, my native language is not English and I've been struggling with grammar errors/mistakes/flow for a long time now x_x 

I have 2 proofreaders to help with Bermuda's script now, but due to the very long story and duration, our eyes seemed to have grown dull or maybe it's just us missing a few mistakes here and there :"D (ah, I'm sure my proofreaders have their hands full with my less-than-tody raw script ><)

Hmm, I also often edited the script during the programming so yup, a lot of factors affecting the script x_x

Of course, I'll do my best to minimize the grammar error, but I do hope you'll bear with me if some still escaped our radar ^^;; 

As for the effects in the game; yes! Thank you for pointing it out! I usually check them myself and I admit, the shaking effect is a bit overused. Hmm I have half a mind to slow down the fade in and out effect from 1 second to 2 seconds, but some readers might find it a bit too slow since the story pace is already slow lol x'D 

Ah, but I'll take care so there are more effect variations available and hopefully, the time skip won't feel too dull!

However, if you maybe have a friend who you feel would be glad to volunteer as a proofreader, can you introduce them to me? I always look around for someone of native English that have some free time in their hands >< to help me and maybe teach me as time goes by :')

Thanks again and hope to see you around!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

SweetChiel, 

Thank you for your gentle and genuine reply!

This strikes me as a good time to switch to a private messaging system, but I am new to Itch and I don't see a function for that?

I would like to tentatively offer myself as a resource to help you with proofreading. I need to think about how much time I want to offer, but I do have extra time and I enjoy editing and story creation. Please let me know what you think about that, and if there is a way for us to continue this conversation without taking up more space on the comment board.

:)

rlynnz

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Ah sorry for the late reply! My internet is having ups and downs these days ><

Itch.io doesn't have a messaging system, but do you have facebook? I'm really active over there!

If you do, please add me : Cecilia Sabrina Susanto. My profile picture is the same is this one.

Or maybe you can leave me your email? Since proofreading will take a lot of your time, how about becoming a beta tester when the game is almost complete? You can give me some notes about how to improve some specific scenes/pacing advices and I will edit them accordingly/adapt it better that way!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Hai SweetChiel ^^

Shock and amaze at the same time when I played the winged ones, because this otome game is the first Indonesian theme I've played ! I'm so proud of u ^^

Since finish playing this game, I always wondering what will happen with the heroine after choose to stay and a day to day life with her choosen love interest >_<

I really hope there's a sequel of the winged ones, and I totally love the story and character, same goes with the bermuda triangle otome ^^ (Secretly hoping there's another otome game with Indonesian theme) and I honestly love one of your otome project the Queen's Crown

Hope u stay healthy and keep up the good good good goooood work >_<

Hi n_ice05!

Thanks for playing and three cheers for you liking my game! x'D 
I'm honestly relieved; it was quite a challenge mixing Japanese and Indonesian culture together, but with people coming and telling me they like it like you, it makes it all worth it!

I don't think there would be a sequel for Winged Ones but I'm working on Bermuda right now so stay tuned!
Oh andQueen's Crown is my friend's game, not mine :'3 I'm just the CG artist~

You know every project I involve myself in and it's quite flattering >////< Thank you for your support!

Hope to see you around~
xoxo,

SweetChiel

I really, really love this game and YOU, yes, you, SweetChiel, the developer.

I'm so proud, glad and happy that I can finally play otome game that has an Indonesian theme! I love the way you introduce our exotic animal (Reksha *cough*), traditional clothes and even our language, too.

The story itself is also very interesting and all the characters are well-developed, my fav is the cutie Reksha my bby //w// 

I'm looking forward to your next projects, especially the Bermuda Triangle. I wish you the best luck, and sorry that I can't really put a thorough review because it has been a long time since I played this game uwu

Anyways, semangat mbak sweetchiel! :3

Wow! Makasih, otomefreak!

I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed my game thoroughly! Moreover, quite a few Indonesians are playing my game my game now >///< I'm embarrassed, but glad to hear you likeit! ><

I mean, I thought no Indonesians play my game :'D VNs isn't that popular yet in my community and when they do want to read, a lot is asking me for Indonesia localization. But my goal is to introduce our culture to foreigner so... sadly, there's little to none I can do for localization and that means I don't get much of reviews from Indonesians *cry

Sekali lagi, makasih untuk supportny & stay tuned ya! >///<

xoxo,

SweetChiel

Ahh! I just downloaded this a few days ago and at first, I was hesitating on downloading this, but after I did, I def did not regret it. The artwork, story, and characters are beautifully done, plus the guys are.....*cough cough* very cute. My favorite must be Mitra >////<, My second fav would be Reksa, and my third favorite would be Rama xD. I am very excited for your other game, I've already played the demo and I can't wait for more! 

Please update soon <3 I love your works so much

Hi again, Sugar~! 

Aww thank you for giving it a try and loving it in return >\\\< congrats on finishing and I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed yourself thoroughly! 

Another Mitra fan! Yay! X'D he often got overshadowed by Reksa so I'm happy you picked him! Thank you for giving all three of them a try tho :'3 

I update every Monday, but I write scripts very slowly so I hope you'll be patient with me :'D

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Hey! I played this a few months ago and I can't believe I forgot to leave a review on this masterpiece ;-;


1.  I love how you integrate Indonesian culture! I'm not Indonesian myself, but Filipino culture has quite a few similarities from what I know so those aspects of the game were still quite relatable!


2. The art, music, writing, e v e r y t h i n g-- the game was absolutely beautiful! This was one of the few free games I played where most characters had their own story. Though some scenes were a little out of place such as the one where Tamara suddenly decided to visit Rama only to find him bounded by Mitra. It was especially out of place when playing Reksa's route. Also, I think someone mentioned this but it was also something I noticed. There weren't a lot of references to Rama's past other than the fact that there was "tragedy". Other than those two, it's all good. 


3. The routes themselves were wonderful! Though I had a lot of trouble on Rama's since I couldn't get his good ending for awhile. Reksa was my favorite haha. He was so protective of Tamara and I felt so guilty when he seemed betrayed by Tamara's "I'm a komodo from the north" lie. His protectiveness is just so adorable-- Reksa is just adorable. I remember his route the most because of how sweet he was. Don't get me wrong, all them were hella sweet but damn, Reksa was sweet in his own way. The way he seemed so panicked by the images from the pink crystal made my heart go dokidoki.

Rama and Mitra were great too. Rama kept pushing Tamara away at first but when he accepted her, the boy would have done everything for her. Rama's bad end was especially heart breaking as in. He suffered so much in the past and when Tamara died he just b r o k e. Poor dear, I really felt bad for him. As for Mitra, he was just so sweet. So sweet, I could've gotten cavities. His endings were great and super fluffy but I wonder how a bad end would gone. Pretty cruel, but I really do love my angst haha.


4. I heard about your upcoming game Bermuda and would like to ask when you think it would be completed. I know these VNs take a lot of time and effort to make so I'm willing to wait. I would just like to know when to check back because I don't really like being left hanging in demos haha.


Love your work! Keep it up :)

Hi, MegHazBottlz! 

Thanks for visiting and telling me your thoughts >\\\< 

First of all, thank you for playing and congrats for finishing all 3 routes! You made me blush and I smile from beginning to end ^^-

1. Thank you! It was a challenge, but I'm glad to see it all worked out in the end >< I don't know much about Filipino culture, but to hear there are some similarties and you enjoy how I write it is a honor! 

2 & 3. Ah, Reksa's fanbase is growing everyday lol why am I not surprised? X'D

You might've guessed it, but I'm a sucker for fluffs lol I hope you don't get diabetes when you finished all the routes x'D 

I'm also glad that you don't mind the 'dark' elements I slipped here and there :'3 I've been... attracted to dark fantasy these days and I think it will stay that way *cough* 

And yes, I see that Rama's events could be somewhat strange especially if you're not in his route o.o I'll take note of this so I can improve myself!

4. Hmm... this is a difficult question >< the script is around 65% finished (progress is at Winter Arc right now, still need to write Spring & Antagonist Route) so taking  account of making CGs, programming, and other small details, I'm hoping it will be finished at winter 2018. I'm a slow writer tho (slower than expected) so... unfortunately, I can't say for sure :'(

However, I do update every week at Monday so you might want to check it out now and then to see the progress ;)

Thanks for asking and thanks again for the warm support!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Now that I finally had an account, I need to review this game! Played without walkthrough at first, then I decided to use one when I can't get Rama's happy ending no matter how much I replay it urgh >///<

1. MITRA IS LOVE MITRA IS LYFE honestly I'm so betrayed whenever I play the rest of the game because he's too nice to me why can't boys be like Mitra aaahh~ and why kissing people at the chin is way more attractive than the lips? Sweetchiel please cure me :( Reksa came closely as the second place, though! His character slightly reminded me of Hak from Akatsuki no Yona. And although Rama's story is the most interesting, I somehow can't really love him like the rest of the boys, sorry! I consider him as the little brother I would like to protect with my life and along with Mitra (although Rama's bad ending is my favorite!)

2. My lecturer joined the Indonesian VN creator FB group and mentioned your game in the class. Since I need references to finish my project, I decided to look up your game to enjoy Mitra's godly bod, and I reallllyyy wish I could integrate Indonesian culture as good as yours, like, dang gurl the culture integration was well done! Not a cringe-fest! Yay!

3. the art, since there's so many six packs and glorious wings i wish angels in heaven look like this the story! I thought Mitra's was already good but the more I play, the more I got captivated! basically I only played Rama because of the story I'm sorry

4. Just like your next game Nusantara: Bermuda, I dislike the UI design (too clutter-y?) and the crowd's animation (too crowded!). There's also some serious problem with the game flow. For example, since I played Mitra first, I wonder when did I agree to look out for Rama ...? Turns out it was a Rama-oriented event.

5. After playing the last demo, and considering how you write Rama's route, YES. I'lll give you my money (preferably if you sell it in Steam because the price in Indo market will be cheaper? I'm still a broke college student and saving 3 bucks means a lot T_T)

Hi chocochino! Thanks for coming by and reviewing!

1. Yay! A new chin fetish is created! I'm really glad to hear Mitra is getting more love from you :'D and thank you for giving all 3 bachelors a try! I haven't read/watch akatsuki no yona yet, but I'll take note to look for the similarties -And wow, quite a lot of people is liking Rama's bad end x'D 

2. This. Just this sentence from you is making my day :"D I never thought a lecturer would mention my game! It's such an honor and thank you for choosing mine as a reference! 

Hahah, I was really worried, y'know? I also experiment a lot in Winged Ones and sometimes I wing it, I'm really relieved with the warm welcome you guys give me ^^- thank you!

3. Hahah, you flatter me >\\\< I know that I still have lots to learn as a writer and I have rooms for development, but I'll do my best to lv up for you!

4. Yeah, I agree u.u I sometimes wonder how to not make the UI so clutter-y (I think I have no self control :"D like a squirrel stacking up nuts?)

As for the crowd... hmm, would it be better not to animate them and let the sillhouette stay still in the background? O.o I notice the animation could be confusing, but I thought it would make readers focus more on the colored characters x'D

Thanks for pointing this out! I'll try to decrease the crowd animation (make it slower) or maybe just make them stay still!

And yes, a reader told me that Rama would sometimes pop up by himself x'D I was trying to integrate Rama into the main story, but I guess making him pop when you're not in his route is not natural. I'll take note of this!

5. Thank you for your support! And yes, I'm planning to try steam for Bermuda. But I'll have to learn how to upload it over there and write many papers. So it will probably take more time instead of uploading it in itch.io

Thanks again for coming, chocochino! Nothing makes me happier than the return of a satisfied reader :")

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

Played this over a year ago, I think, so now that I have an account, I'm making sure to comment on my favorite visual novels!

I really like the worlding and lore of this game, along with the visuals. It's difficult for me to choose which among the three is my favorite, as they all strike me in different ways. Even the non-romanceable characters are captivating, and most everyone there was really like family. (I forgot their names and don't have enough data to re-download right now but) I find it adorable when the couple with whom Tamara stays bicker. The story is also funny in just the right places, as I remember the brother figure being protective of his wife when things got bad.

In terms of areas for improvement, I think other comments have already brought up Rama's characterization. I guess something that could be done to help us empathize with Rama more is to spread out more hints of his former love throughout the other routes, or in the general route. Think of something as small as villagers comparing Tamara to a girl "who used to live here" or a child wondering "why does Rama wear a feather when he's not married?"

I suppose right now your focus is on your new game, but just in case this suggestion ends up worth something one day. :) 

I also played the demo for Nusantara: Bermuda and the art is as amazing as ever, if not better. It's definitely funding-worthy. :) Good luck, SweetChiel!

I forgot to mention: an appeal of your VNs is how they're both family-oriented. It's seen in Nusantara: Bermuda, but it's also present in the first Nusantara, it just so happens Tamara's family isn't the uncle(?) but her parents and the people she met after being sent to another world. I personally like this orientation because it's true to life, it's realistic. I'm not against individualism exactly but sometimes when we write stories, we tend to focus on the character journeying out that building their family's story becomes forgotten or a burden. I once scoured the entirety of the games listed on Ren'Py's site and most of them lacked this balance. I'm hoping that the MC in Nusantara: Bermuda stays true to her original motivation, despite her family being out of picture for most of the story, but since that was the reason why she agreed to Fate in the first place, I think you'll do fine and she'll follow through it eventually.

Hi there, DiskartetHaraya! 

Wow, a returnee from a year ago! QuQ I feel special and touched that you still remember this game and came by to drop me your review >\\\<

I'm really happy to hear and see that you enjoyed Nusantara thoroughly despite its unique elements -and you flatter me >\\\< I still have much to learn in order to make a good story, but yes, I believe that no minor character is unimportant. Everything have their purposes and they weave the story -no, breathes life into the story.

Ah and I agree that I should put more hints regarding Rama's feather! It just hits me that I only remember the old man that only said 'it was a tragedy' and your idea about making innocent question coming from a child idea really could be included in the scene to strengthen the impact -gah! 

I'll take care to re-examine my current script so I won't make the same mistake, and thank you for the insight! m(_ _)m

I'll do my best, but just in case -I'll apologise in advance if I do make the same blunder :"D especially the thing about the grammar. My proofreaders and I are apparently getting a bit 'numb' due to my textwall-like-script *cough

Oh and I'm so glad to hear you like Bermuda too! ^///^ some people dislike the slow paced opening about Maya's family so it cheers me up to see new people enjoying and understanding the appeal I was trying to convey. 

Lastly, thank you for the warm support! It had been rough lately so your encouragement just made my day...!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

I have played through all of the routes already and have dubbed the nicknames for the bois XD

Reska = Loki because hell it works XD

Rama: SPN Lucifer 

Mitra = Thor because honestly he is a giant teddy bear. 

Now out of all of them Reska is still meh favorite. God damn that snake is a possessive flirt ahhhhhhhhh XD be still my beating heart. The part were he licks the main characters would i died. Like actually fell off my chair and passed out lol XD

I do have a few questions to ask though. 

One why is it that in Rama's route the main villian (forget his name sorry) calls him a brother? ???? 0-0 That is what was curious about all of this. 

Secondly I think the only thing that would make this game even better is being able to insert  your name into the story itself. Aside from that this game is amazing. I loved it.

Hi MariaDarkchild! 

Thank you for playing and glad to hear you enjoyed yourself thoroughly >\\\< I'm very happy to hear you played all three routes!

Reksa is still the most popular I see ;) hahah, I sometimes blush when I remember what I've written... (what was I thinking when I write those scenes? *squirm)

As for your questions:

1. Purba doesn't literally mean Brother x'D he meant that he felt a connection with Rama. Therefore, he calls him Brother, it's half to provocate him and half happy that he met the same kin. 

I mean, Rama is pretty dark. Rama explains this in his Happy End epilogue, remember? ;)

2. Yes, some people also gave me the same advice as yours, that's why I made the name change-able in my 2nd project, Bermuda! X'D

Thanks again for the love and hope to see you around! (Hopefully in my 2nd game!)

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

More games YASSSSS XD also don't worry about the Reska route to much. He was a well built character and I applaud your team for not only the artwork but the game itself. 

Rama is dark and i can agree xD hence the reason the nickname Lucy fits but he is such a sweet cinnamon bun deep down (admin cried when Rama Senpai died)

In any case I can't wait to see the next game you come out with I am sure it will be as great and as romantic as the first Nusantara. x3 Anyway Forever a fan and hopefully now Friend 

Maria Darkchild x3

Yuup, the script is half-finished right now x'D 
The demo for Bermuda is also up in my page if you're interested <3 but it's still a long way to go for the complete ver. *I'm working on Script + programming + CG/BG with the exception of sfx/bgm, so the progress is slow but sure~ you're really too kind with the compliments >////< you made me blush *cough*

Oh and all of my dear readers -plus the ones that are lurking behind the shadows & bushes -are my friends already the moment they decided to give Nusantara a try x'D 

See you around, MariaDarkchild! 
You're free to come and go, but a visit always brighten my days, so thanks!

xoxo,

SweetChiel

Heh No problem SweetChiel I am happy to give input on your games. x3 Its kinda what makes gaming visual novels fun yah know? Being able to talk with your followers.  So you use Script+ instead of Renpy to code this game? 0-0 I have never heard of it though -.- To be honest I have been trying to make a fan game based on a famous actor known as hiddleston but sadly my art is not as good as my writing. XD But yeah. Again I love your games so continue doing great. x3 Anywho. If I can ever be of any other help let me know. x3 

Hmm? I'm using python in Ren'Py to code/program it later x'D I also don't know what script+ is lol what I mean by 'script + programming + CG...etc' is that I'm doing lots of work now *cry

I never heard of Hiddleston ><; -or honestly, I don't know many famous actor's names due to my ignorance. I only remember about Johny Deep and Benedict due to their unique characters lol 

I usually dont watch tv often so forgive me that I didnt know of him :"D 

But I'm sure you can do it! Keep on practicing and do it little by little ans it will be done befor you know it! 

Let's do our best together :'3

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

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I have been so excited to finally finish the game and write this! This was such an amazing, interesting, and captivating story. I'm so glad I found it! The visuals were beautiful, the characters were beautiful, it's all beautiful. 

I'm so in love with every guy, they all have their own unique personalities and traits. But, I think Reksa is my favorite (I do love reptiles a lot lol). I especially love how you used Indonesia as an inspiration! I loved learning about their customs.

Besides the grammatical errors, the writing was spectacular. Honestly, I'd love to play a sequel to the game, maybe, where we get to revisit Loma Village and the characters!

I would definitely pay for the next game you decide to make. I loved it so much. Have you considered putting it on Steam? I don't know what's all involved, but I know it would get a lot of attention there. 

(Rama reminds me of Natsu from Fairy Tail!)

Hi Eilonwy! Thanks for visiting and reviewing! I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed Winged Ones thoroughly >\\\<

I see Reksa is still the champ of the popularity poll x'D yes, I think most of my games will have Indonesia elements in it -I was a bit worried about it at first,but I'm so glad you like it!

The grammar error is certainly my eternal nemesis :"D I've been fighting it with my proofreaders since forever, but plese excuse us if some escaped our radar >< 

And yes! I've been thinking about adding this game to Steam along with Bermuda. But we'll see, I'm focusing on finishing Bermuda first ~

I don't know about revisiting Loma village, but there is a cameo of Rama/Mitra/Reksa in Bermuda ;) 

Thank you for your support and hope to see you again in the future!

Xoxo,

SweetChiel

P.S. Lol really? X'D I don't read/watch Fairy Tail, but Natsu is the one with red hair, right? I think I'll check it out in my free time :'3 

I do have something to ask, though. Is it okay if I message you on tumblr and ask there?

Hmm, how about via my facebook fanpage? 

https://m.facebook.com/SweetChielVNs/

I haven't opened my tumblr for a long time because of internet problem (takes forever to load tumblr!) and I'm usually very active in facebook x')

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