i have to say that i absolutely love your work, i will play all of your games if you plan on keeping this up, i know it is an amazing dating simulator if it makes me sad when it ends, and i keep thinking about your game even when i've finished it. you are just really good at creating these kinds of games, i played hours and hours of your last game (i love reksa, mmmm) i might even replay some of my fav scenes in it, and i only finished the game last night XD i'm very excited for your future games, they make me happy and i enjoy all of your game, keep it up!!
Hi! Sorry for this late reply, b00o! I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed my game thoroughly and my story managed to stick in your mind O///O
Ah! and now you're even following my next game >///< Thank you! I still have lots to learn and rooms for improvements, but I do hope you can be patient with me since I develop my VNs quite slowly compared to other teams ><
i absolutely LOVED nusantara: legend of the winged ones!!! I'm soooo excited for this one!! i can't wait for it to be finished!! seriously can't wait XD im too hyped now!! i normally never play demo's cuz i hate it when a game is good and u cant finish it :'(... but this game i have too!! im soo happy to see another game! thank you <3
I'm really happy hear you love Winged Ones & even gave so much hype + enthusiasm for Bermuda >////< I'm also excited to quickly finish & see your reactions/reviews <3 but as always, one step at a time x'D
I hope you can be patient with me and read the updates every Monday! See you again in the future~ xoxo,
SweetChiel
Edit: Ack, again, I'm sorry for the late reply Q_Q
Due to limited time and un-compatible voices (I'm looking for Indonesian voice actors unfortunately u.u) I decided to not include voices in any of my games. At most, there would be only chuckles/laughs/sighs.
I'll try to back you at the end of the month, my first backing for an otome, haha! Yours is totally worth it~ Also, leaving it to only chuckles/laughs/sighs and one or 2 words spoken from a sentence is a lot better because you leave it to imagination and that's the best part~ Imo at least. x: Good luck!
Halo mbak... ada tidak cara lain membeli game selain lewat paypal?? (Saya blm punya kartu kredit dan org baru di itch.io)
I played ur previous game and reaally into it .. and i reaaally want to play ur new one, i wonder if i had other way to purchase it without using paypal.. (never puchased anything with paypal)
Just finished the demo and can't wait for the game <3
*some spoilers ahead, read at your own risk*
As usual, I love how you mixed Indonesian elements to the game especially the little touches like the Coklang (if I spelled this wrong I'm sorry omg) and the pigeons. I actually come from the Philippines and we have a similar game (I'm assuming they're similar because they look exactly the same) called Sungka and it's also a common practice here to take care of pigeons and hold races with them. It makes me feel so happy to see South East Asian characters represented in video games, especially visual novels, because it's so rare to see an Asian character who is not Chinese/Japanese/Korean. So thank you for that!
Plotwise, I really liked it. I'm just curious how Maya ended up with tarot reading powers and stuff (I hope to read more of her backstory in the full game). I also loved her family, especially the babies WHO DOESN'T LIKE BABIES (>////<)/ Her parents are really cool, I love how caring they are. Hope to see more of Sarah, Baku, and Mr. Smith too.
For the bachelors I don't really have much comments, I'm just perplexed as to how Arya's laptop is still working. Is it somehow solar powered and doesn't require electricity? Did the goddess enchant it to have immortal battery life? Because if so can you introduce me to her? Khalil is too cute and optimistic, there's definitely a tragic story there I can feel it AND GUNTUR IS SO PRECIOUS OH MY GOD I CHOSE ARYA FIRST BECAUSE HE GAVE ME REKSA VIBES BUT GUNTUR IS A BABE WITH HIS FRYING PAN AND I'M DEFINITELY PLAYING HIS ROUTE FIRST WHEN WE GET THE FULL VERSION
Gameplay wise, I liked how you added casual stat-raising to the game. It's a little different from The Winged Ones but I liked it. Another addition that I saw was the relationship bars, I have a feeling that they're going to be important to the gameplay as well so looking forward to more updates! I also wish there was a note or something in the beginning of the game saying that if you click on the colored text they would be translated (I just read it in IndieGoGo after playing through the demo), I think others wouldn't mind a heads up. I could barely understand the Spanish but the Indonesian killed me. Also, is the gameplay going to be for the whole year that they're gone because that's a little long omg I don't mind but it would decrease the replay value for me (but then again I played all routes in Always Remember Me and it's pretty similar to this one so I'm just going to suck it up I guess)
Anyway, great work so far and I'm really looking forward to more updates!
Hi triquester! Thanks for visiting & giving me constructive suggestions!
I'm really happy to hear you like the demo *SPOILER ALERT* -especially when I heard about how similar Philipine is with Indonesia x'D I've been to Penang with my friends once for an anime event (um, like AFAID but smaller?) And I did notice the pigeons! I didn't know you have a similar game like Congklak though so this is really interesting!
I also like your suggestions about leaving a note or two about the hidden footnote (colored text). I think I will put it at the start of the game as a reminder or when the first colored text appeared.
Oh, and don't worry about the casual status raising ~ it won't be used for a whole year, I predict it would be used only until you reach the village in Autumn Area (4 or 5 months at most I think. The script is still at Summer area so this could still change ><)
After that, you will enter a bachelor's route. A lot of things will happen in the meantime. I just hope the programming will go smoothly x'D if anything changes, I will surely tell you through the weekly updates~
Lastly, lol, yes I noticed that Arya felt similar to Reksa, but eh, you'll see :'p meanwhile, Guntur seemed to get most of the votes this time! And thank you for giving Kahlil a chance too <3
You're always welcome to leave some comments below -I love reading them but forgive me if sometimes it took awhile before I reply ><
Hi! It really depends on your reading speed >< It's definitely longer than Winged Ones though; the total of Bermuda's demo word count is 48k+ words while Winged Ones' demo is only around 19.5k+ words. So just double the amount of time you use to read WInged Ones' demo x')
This demo is such a teaser; deeper approach of the Goddess's mysterious "mission" to human world, more diversed characteristic of the cast with dynamic interactions, emerging more Indonesian culture (I cheer up and laugh out loud when Guntur start using Javanese xD ) and so glad to see your previous work Easter eggs in this new one ;)
I'll definitely save up my money for this promising project (>_<)9
Hi Rinaria! Glad to hear you like the demo & all the guys >\\\\<
the final version will be $15, unless you want to buy a early bird pack($10) via my paypal shop (go to my indiegogo page & click on the paypal button below info. There is still some left ~)
I'm glad to hear you like both of my babies! X'D and yes! I've been watching musicals for awhile now and couldn't stop myself from quoting some :")) they're so fun! I wish I can find more of them with good english subtitle :'D
Thank you so much, rosedragon! And I'm so sorry for this very late reply Q_Q I sometimes missed a few comments and I've just noticed yours when I was scrolling down the comments!
Yes Iam still wating for you and the rest off the games your games are so good i like eveything about the game it is the best game i been playing and i also loved Legend of The Winged Ones
It makes me feel so glad, relieved, and touched to hear you're willing because you like my game!
Bermuda's script is 70% completed! SFXs and BGMs library is 95% completed! I only need to finish writing 6 climax scenes & antagonist route before I quickly draw the CGs and programming!
I'll definitely do my best for my readers, so stay tuned with the updates~
And I feel you there x'D I also personally don't like to play games that is not completed yet -but I hope you stay tuned with the updates! It will be finished before you know it :'3
Hi! This game is a really cool game! I really like the game and would be awesome if more features are added and I made a video on youtube in INDONESIAN! Check it out! TERIMA KASIH! PART 1!
Gamenya keren bangeeettt ga sabar buat ngelanjutin main gamenya :D bangga sekali ada orang Indonesia yang bisa bikin game sebagus ini! Lanjutkan terus game2nya! Ditunggu yaaa update2 di masa depaann :D
Wow, I can't believe you make youtube video for Bermuda :'D I mean, already? and you're a guy! *criesinhappiness* -no offence but not many guys play my VNs since they're otome :'D thank you so much for giving your effort into this video! *hugs*
dan makasiih! sy masi blm seberapa & msi bnyk yg bs d improve tp sy psti akn trus berjuang biar bs lbh bgus lg >< stay tuned sm update"ny d Indiegogo & hope to see you again!
Gahhhhh. This promises to be another great game! I noticed that it's quite a bit different from the original Nusantara -- the art style seems slightly altered, and the gaming style is also changed. However, I still love how you make the characters so real (especially the MC and her relationship with her family). So far, Guntur's the only one who's caught my eye. The guys in Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle seem slightly more stereotypical; even though Rama and Reksa were drastically different characters, they were both very adorable in their own way, but I feel like Kahlil and Arya are more... hm.... directed towards a certain audience group instead of towards girls in general. But in any case, I still loved the demo enough to buy the game! <3 Good luck during the production process, and I can't wait! Hope you garner enough financial support for the indiegogo campaign!
Cheers, :3
Jordanyak
P.S. LOVE how you drop in bits and pieces of Nusantara: Legend into Nusantara: Bermuda! :'-)
P.P.S. Oh yes! I forgot to ask -- did you remove the affection meter from Nusantara: Legend of the Winged Ones? I saw it in the promotional pics, but I couldn't find it in the actual game.
And yes, Winged Ones was made with my old laptop -the color balance in my old laptop is different with my current laptop so I guess it alters my art a little >< This is also the first time I try a status raising system -but I'm glad to hear you still love it though!
Meanwhile, Guntur is gaining more fans lol. As for Kahlil & Arya... hmm, I've just realized this recently, but does Arya fit into the stereotype of grumpy werewolf? x'D lol but don't worry, I have things planned for them *evil laugh*cough*
And YAY! Thanks for supporting! Stay tuned with the weekly updates & it will be finished before we know it! xoxo,
SweetChiel
P.S. lol, the tid bits about Winged Ones is a bonus for my old fans x'D glad you like them!
P.P.S. Ahh, I forgot to remove that screenshot x_x; that feature is from the old version of Winged Ones. It used Novelty, not Ren'Py and I have only just learned how to do that with Ren'Py now ><
When I clicked 'download' for this game, I knew I was going to do so with high expectations and without any regrets, as I had fell in love with Nusantara: The Legend of the Winged Ones! It's certainly beautiful (like most of your stories), and the story is A+++... I'm definitely looking forward towards the final release. Anyways, much love from a fairly new fan of yours <33
Hi clouds_xx! Thanks for downloading & loving this 'child' of mine x'D it always makes me happy to get such a warm welcome! I will work ward to meet your expectations, so stay tuned with the weekly updates and wait for me :'3
I actually gasped when I saw you were making another game! GASPED! Im really excited for this!! and while I basically never buy VNs (cuz im sad and broke) Im going to HAVE to buy this because I loved legend of the winged ones so much its like in my top 3 all time faves tbh. And I bet youll knock it out of the park again with this!!! ahh!!! it looks so cool already!!! Im not a demo person cuz of my severe impatience and tendancy to play entire games in one sitting, but I just needed to say how stoked I am about this!!!!!!!!!
Hi wolvesdaughter111! Your excitement is very appreciated! x'D It makes me very happy to see you love Winged Ones so much <3 your support literally made my day! I'm currently struggling with a village background you see, but I can do this for you guys! I can understand the impatience since I'm impatient too :')) I hope the weekly updates will help you cope though!
Ah but take care of yourself and don't do an all nighter with this one since this is gonna be VERY long ><
Hope to see you again! xoxo,
SweetChiel
P.S. don't worry about the exclamation points, I love them too! x'D
Whaa, i'm so sad rn lol. I downloaded quite a few games and game demos today, so i didn't remember that this was just a demo and not the full game. My heart broke at the "The Demo Ends Now" Screen, literally xD
So excited for the finished game now, i really hope i don't have to wait that long.
Thanks for visiting & telling me your thoughts! X'D I'm happy to hear you got immersed in it until the end of the demo ~
And wow, this is surprising OuO you still like Arya despite his obvious temper problem! I'm a little touched >\\\<
I will do my best to hasten the production progress, so pray that I won't have any writer's block later :"D really, I think the longest process is writing & editing the script! For now, follow my update every Monday and I hope the sneak peeks will be able to satisfy you/maybe help you bear the long wait ><
Okay, so Guntur is my all time fav but the others are so good too! Just like in the winged ones, all the love interests are so awesome! I honestly can't pick a second favorite, Kah'lil and Arya. I like the both!! I can't wait for more. I need it so bad. Seriously can't wait!!!!!!!
Chieeeeeel this is so greeeeaaaat I can't eveeeeen!!!
Erm.... yeah.
Yesterday I replayed Rama's route twice and I was frustrated because I wanted more of Nusantara content, and when I've checked itch.io... I see the Bermuda Triangle demo is out!!! Oh joy!
I've finished it right now, and now I obviously must comment and give some feedback!
It will contain some SPOILERS, but I don't know if anyone except the dev will have the courage to read such a lenghty comment XD
I'll start with the negative points, so it'll be out of the way, and then I'll resume the squealing haha! So yeah, a couple of mistakes or weird things:
- When characters are walking, the sound effect for the steps is... how to put it... Too fast / frequent. It sound like a group of people walking. That's okay when it's Maya and the boys, but with only two characters (like when she's walking alongside her dad), it's weird
- Couple of time mistakes at the beginning. When Maya says she has an appointment at 11:00, she says PM (when she talks about it for the first time), but then her mother says 11:00 AM during breakfast. And after breakfast ends, Maya says it's 11:20 so she must go, but I guess it was 10:20, right?
- Now, the one that really hurts... I'm sooo soooo sorry, but I'll be blunt here - the spanish bits are awful... I won't point out the mistakes and weird wording in english since I'm not confident enough in my english and I'm sure enough people will be able to help you. But in spanish at least I can help, so bear with me! When the girl asks for help in finding her mother, you put "ayúdame a encontrar a ella", but the correct form would be "ayúdame a encontrarla". A little while after that, the girl refers to Maya and Kah'lil as big sister and brother. You... really don't say that in spanish. Even actual siblings don't call each other like that, so random strangers... it's... really no. Same goes for the end of the event when Kah'lil speaks with the girl's mother. Even if spanish isn't his language, so he may actually make mistakes, you don't call a random woman auntie, so "tía" is a no-no (it's like calling someone "dude", in english, or something close to that, except if you're talking to your real aunt - or uncle - of course) - he should simply call her "señora". It's even worse since calling someone "tía" or "tío" is some kind of very familiar slang-like thing. It's not an insult, and same age good pals often call each other like that, but it would be disrespectful to call a random woman like that. Also, "¿Cómo podría pagarte alguna vez?" is REALLY weird. In case of an adult speaking to a stranger, the "-te" suffix is weird, you'd use the more formal "-le" ("pagarle"). You should also get rid of the "alguna vez" - it means "sometime", and the whole sentence would mean "how could I pay you (familiar or speaking to a kid) sometime". It would be correct to say "¿Cómo podría pagarle?" Or even "¿Cómo podría pagarle por esto?". "Usted es bienvenido tía, estamos felices de ayudar" is wrong too. "Bienvenido" is masculine, you'd use "bienvenida" for a woman. But it means literally "welcome" as in welcoming someone to a place, so it can't be used here anyway. You'd use "de nada" or "no hay de qué". The correct sentence would be "De nada señora (or "No hay de qué, señora"), estamos felices de ayudar" - and replacing the "tía" for reasons stated above. You might also want to recheck the exclamation and interrogation points, you missed a couple of the opening ones here and there ( ¡ / ¿ ) - I know it's a pain - spanish IS a pain - I lived in Spain for years and my mom still lives there, so yeah... I was fortunate to be very young when we moved there, otherwise I would have suffered a lot to learn it XD. If you ever need proofreading for spanish, french, or polish, feel free to ask me anytime, really - I'm fluent in all three and I'd gladly help you!
- I like the fact Maya does tarot reading! I do sometimes too! But I'm wondering about the method she uses, as I don't recognize it at all. If it's a made up method, that's fine, but I'm a bit bothered by the use of the Death card, since it rarely means literal death - it's often a quite positive card, actually. And the fact she tries so many times makes it worse since I grew more and more irritated each time haha
- And finally, once you get to the point you must choose the duties you do, it seems it's hard to click on the buttons. I mean, they don't always respond - the hunting one was the worst I think - at first I thought it isn't avaible or something - I had to click a lot of times!
Welp, lots of little things - never pleasant to point out mistakes, but at least it's constructive feedback I guess... So now, onto the good things!
- First of... I LOVE the characters! Oh My God I love them sooo much! I think Guntur is still my favorite at the moment. But remember how I told you before the demo was out that Kah'lil really didn't catch my eye? FORGET. ABOUT. THAT. I fell in love with him the second he interacted with Maya for the first time! He's... so... cute... and.... hnnn <3. I guess at this point Arya became the one I like the less, but I still like him a lot - he simply is that kind of character with whom you need a lot of time to get to know them, so obviously the demo isn't enough. I mean, of course we only know a tiny bit about each boy, but he's obviously the harder one to approach so yeah, I'll have to wait haha!
- It was implied in the previous point, but I love Maya too. She's such a tease, and I always admired pole-dancers, so yeah... I really like her. And it's nice how she's sooo different from Tamara too. Your MCs are so cool! But I also like her family, and the whole family thing actually. For... well... obvious reasons, Tamara wasn't close with her relatives, and the present day part was very short, in Legend of the Winged Ones. But since Maya is sooo close with her family, I really like the fact you get that long intro where you get to experience her day to day life. I found myself curious about but also dreading the day of the second meeting with the Goddess, since I knew it would be awful for Maya. I wish more VN games had that kind of slow starts. It's mostly used in RPGs, but not so much in VNs, and I always liked that. Anyway, basically, I really enjoyed exploring lots of different options there, and seeing her interact with her family.
- The little note about what Maya is thinking about in the menu is SO FUN! I love that gimmick! It's my first time seeing something like that. I wish the contents would change more often though, but I guess it's hard to do - I mean, it would be lots of work.
- A FRIGGIN YEAR IN GAME?! Now I understand why you said it'll be longer than Legend of the Winged Ones! Can't wait to explore the whole game!
- Yay for timed choices! I love timed choices! And it even has a time bar that is decreasing! (please, you'll have to teach me how to do that once I'll get into the programming of my game haha - I'll need that too since it'll have timed choices!)
- Music and art is great, as always. And I love Kah'lil's twitching ears and moving tail - so cute!
- Mini-game seems fun so far! But I can't have a final opinion with only the easy diffulty level.
- The mirrors are gorgeous!!! (sorry, not so constructive but had to mention that somewhere XD)
- First of, sorry I can't help for the funding - I'm in a VERY tight spot, money-wise, right now, and I really can't spend a single dollar or anything. But if I get out of that mess, I'll be sure to give at least something!
- Is it possible to meet Guntur before he barges into Maya's garden? I met Arya and Kah'lil before their main encounters ( I mean, you can see them even though you don't interact), but not him. Of course, he may have been in prison and not have any previous encounter, but I wanted to be sure!
- Sooo... 3 love interests and one secret unlockable love interest... Sure, I know about that but... both the love meter page and the gallery page have FIVE sections (well, 6 in the gallery if counting Maya), so... What is that about? A secret-secret love interest? Another character important enough for them to get a love meter and gallery section? Haha, I'm pretty sure you won't answer this one, eh?
- What is the stats' purpose? Is it used to unlock some events? I've noticed each stat has the color of one of the characters, but well, diligence was my higher stat even before the duties were avaible, while Arya was the character I had the least affinity with, so I don't know how much is it related...
Phew, that was one hell of a comment! Sorry about that! You know how much a fan I am, so I couldn't help myself haha! Hope it'll be helpful!
Konoiiii, I can't thank you enough for helping me with the Spanish translations x'D I just woke up and this is the first thing I saw in the morning! It made my day! <3
I've made the changes for the things you told me but can you tell me your email & help me check over the Spanish again? I want to send you a small part of the script where it contains the Spanish + Translation.
My proofreader & I haven't had the chance to live in Spanish so our knowledge is very limited >< I cringed and laughed at the things you mentioned to be strange/awkward as hell :')) This scene is the only time where Kahlil speak Spanish, so your help will be greatly appreciated :'D
As for the hard clicking on the status raising screen... Now this is new O.O; are you sure it's not your mouse acting up? x'D //hammer My mouse is very old and lost the sensitivity of its right click so I got a hard time clicking on things too, so maybe...? This is quite problematic since everything works okay in the ren'py so I don't know what I can do about it >< maybe try playing it in window mode? It might lessen the program's burden.
The other problem seems to be minor. I will reduce the walking sfx then since you're the second person who tell me this.
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I also laughed out loud at some of the things you mention you love x'D
The other day, a person told me the introduction about Maya's family is too long but then the next day, you told me you love the long introduction lol. I guess you either hate it or love it x'DD
Also, thanks you as always for giving all the bachelors a chance! Ah, Guntur's popularity is going up as expected <3 But gosh, the demo is not enough for you!? Woman, it's almost 4 times longer than Winged One's demo! x'DD *lol, I think I'm spamming this emoticon right now, but really, I'm having that expression a lot while writing this*
Oh and don't worry! I will tell you the code for the timed choices as a reward for the Spanish translation ;)
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Last but not least, here's my answers to your questions:
- Don't worry about the funding! The fact that you care enough about it to write this HUGE review is more than enough for me :'D
- Nope, there is no alternate scene for meeting Guntur :'))
- Welp, the fifth love interest is a stretch goal I set in Indiegogo! Scroll down to see who he is! If the stretch goal is not reached, then I guess the fifth space will stay empty u.u
- The stats will help you determine which bachelor route you're going to be in. So aside from high affection, high compatible status will be used to determine it + it might be the key to unlock happy ending ;) But if you choose Kahlil and decided to raise Combat (which is a compatible status for Guntur), the system will determine which bachelor route you're going to be in by affection points. However, this will automatically lead you to a sad ending u.u
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Thanks again for visiting and pointing my mistakes, Konoi!
I'll await your answer about your email address for the Spanish translation checking :'3
Glad I can help you with the Spanish bits! I'll give you my email by note on DeviantArt, since I don't like it being randomly published here, even though it's not that much of a secret either... oh well... XD
And I've checked the last maybe-to-be bachelor! He looks very cool - hope you'll get enough with the funding so you can reach that goal. But well, even if you don't I'm sure the game will be amazing anyway!
As for the hard clicking, no, definitely not my mouse. It disconnect sometimes, yeah, but the sensitivity and all is fine. After all, I don't have any issues with other games or even other menus and selections in Bermuda, so well... I don't think my mouse would selectively malfunction for that XD - but maybe something went wrong when I extracted the game...? I'll try re-downloading it later!
And I see, about the stats. Well, it's interesting! I'm not fond of stat raising in VNs, but it seems pretty casual - I've managed with very hard ones so I'm sure I'll be fine!
I know you have proof readers, but I figured I'd help you out a bit too since I'm here squirming and all.
In the opening it says "This I give you, an advice." It would be more like "This I give you, a piece of advice." or something like that. Which still sounds really weird to me but is at the very least more grammatically correct.
On the news paper "More people get missing" it should be "More people go missing"... And "In sheep pastures" not "on" Not that those are terribly important.
"Wish that day 'would' come sooner" instead of "will" and in all other instances it is the same, I noticed that in the first game too and it's something that has always bothered me a bit, but I still love your work regardless. There are a lot of other grammatical errors scattered that I'm sure will me caught in later updates, typos and "there"s instead of "their"s and so on. I'm also not sure what you were trying to say with the line "For those who were wondering, here are a few definitions about it; the rumors never let up, pasts were never forgotten. I mean I get the gist but I really don't even know how to begin dissecting that for you at all. D= Maybe it would be easier to say something like "No one ever let me forget those facts"? It's less wordy but I think it's a more direct way to express what you were trying to say because as it stands I'm really confused about the point you're trying to make with that particular sentence. I know English isn't your first language and you're doing really well so keep it up! =]
All the innuendo between the mc and her parents is really unnecessary and a little bit uncomfortable? Here and there is one thing like a little joke but she keeps going and going to the point where it just feels awkward. It'd be less so if they ever like... Joked back at all but they both just seem really uncomfortable with it all the time and she keeps pushing and pushing, it might just be me though.
The family bits are kinda nice, but it feels like a lot of plot-hindering filler that has no real purpose in the story. Which is fine but there seems to be ALOT of it and if you're not careful people might get really bored before ever becoming invested in your story/plot. Because thus far I have no idea what is supposed to be happening. 7 days in and it doesn't feel like we're being set up for a plot, it literally feels like we are just waiting around "what happens in 7 days?" IDK wait and find out and it's a lot of waiting. 8 days before we are ever introduced to anything resembling any sort of story-line. It really doesn't take THAT long to establish a connection between us and the MC's family and it shouldn't. TBH a simple "My family was always the most important thing to me" should honestly have been enough without having to deal with them for 8 in game days, honestly by the end of the demo I fricken hated Mawar and the mom, like tbh any time they entered the scene I was like "*sigh* Here we go.............." No offense, they just babbled too much about nothing interesting and I had a hard time staying focused on the points. There are a few parts where the characters seem to just ramble about random junk. You'd save yourself a TON of time, effort, resources on cutting that down a bit.
Also I know she's upset and desperate, but I am not and I really don't want to have to sit through her shuffling and pulling that deng death card 20 times.... You can just describe it? Twice is good, really, since I can't skip through it?
The Nusantara poster was a nice touch. ;P I definitely had to play it again after playing this demo I totally miss those boys. T^T Also SweetChiel Cafe. ;P
Thanks for letting me know about your dilemma/frustrations about some of the game's elements :"D
I also get the feeling that the 7 days are VERY long indeed. I was trying to make you get to know them better so you can relate to Maya's feelings when the event with the Goddess happened, but I guess it's a bit too much x'D I think the 'introduction' chapter of Maya's family is not as interesting as when she arrived at Forgotten isles?
I'm also sorry if the innuendo made you feel uncomfortable. It's just something unique to Maya's family; that they hide nothing from each other.
Bless you for being so patient until you finish the demo though! I will take note of this for future reference for sure!
As for the grammar mistakes... I'm sorry for that >< the proofreaders and I have been doing our best, but it seems that something always missed our radar! It might be because I went back and forth editing the script. So I apologize in advance for the grammar mistakes ^^;
I will try to cut down the word count, but no promises since this has something to do with my writing style. I think there won't be much filler after Maya went to Forgotten Isles though O.O
Thanks for visiting and telling what bothers you about Bermuda! I agree that it's still far from perfect and I still have a lot to learn, but I hope you'll come to love it - including its strong points and weaknesses.
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
P.S. don't worry about me, throw me all the comments/critiques you have! X'D I'm very happy to hear your thoughts and I want to get better!
I honestly don't mind the grammar at all, I just thought I'd let you know. I totally understand and generally it's not something I easily overlook because I'm a super grammar nazi most of the time, but I really do enjoy your games and I'll play them no matter what because I super enjoy your stories and characters. =] There really is no need to cut it down, it was just an idea as I'm not sure about other people but the wordiness might be discouraging for other people trying to get into the actual story. I know it'll be great so I can easily overlook it, but other people who come to pay for it when it's complete might be less inclined to do so if it's too difficult for them to become invested in the story. In all, however, I totally love it and support you 100%.
Thanks for coming back and letting me know you enjoy my story & character :'D and yes, I understand your good intention <3 and I'm very happy with your suggestions! Really, I'm surprised myself that the demo became that long O.O; but what makes me happier is when you said'but the wordiness might be discouraging for other people...' -then that means the ones who stayed are those who truly love Bermuda, right? I can't ask anything better than that actually :'D
While I encourage new people to try and read my story, I don't want to push my 'baby' to them, rather, I want them to come & hug them by themselves ><
Thanks for your warm concern & for visiting again, Duvessa :'3 xoxo,
I AM SO EXCITED!!! I played Nusantara Legend of the Winged Ones and I fell in love with the game <3<3<3<3 The quality of the artwork and the depth of the story made it one of the best I've played! After the last one I am so willing to pay for the next game!
Me too!! Gosh, Bermuda's Indiegogo campaign is TOMORROW! *bounces off the walls with excitement & worry*
I'm so happy to see more of you are coming to support Bermuda Q_Q
I've been restless & it's getting silly how I can't seem to focus on anything right now since the campaign is so close. But seeing you as excited as I am, if not more, makes me feel better x'D
Not yet ~ this one is still in progress. The demo have only been available this month for my patrons in patreon, but the demo will be available for public next month along with an Indiegogo campaign :"3
oh my god!! cant wait for this to come out >< im so hype for this, not only you can make beautiful story but you can insert some of traditional culture from Indonesia ! I'm proud of you :""
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i have to say that i absolutely love your work, i will play all of your games if you plan on keeping this up, i know it is an amazing dating simulator if it makes me sad when it ends, and i keep thinking about your game even when i've finished it. you are just really good at creating these kinds of games, i played hours and hours of your last game (i love reksa, mmmm) i might even replay some of my fav scenes in it, and i only finished the game last night XD i'm very excited for your future games, they make me happy and i enjoy all of your game, keep it up!!
Hi! Sorry for this late reply, b00o!
I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed my game thoroughly and my story managed to stick in your mind O///O
Ah! and now you're even following my next game >///< Thank you! I still have lots to learn and rooms for improvements, but I do hope you can be patient with me since I develop my VNs quite slowly compared to other teams ><
Stay tuned & hope to see you again!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
HOW DID I JUST FIND OUT ABOUT THIS?!
i absolutely LOVED nusantara: legend of the winged ones!!! I'm soooo excited for this one!! i can't wait for it to be finished!! seriously can't wait XD im too hyped now!! i normally never play demo's cuz i hate it when a game is good and u cant finish it :'(... but this game i have too!! im soo happy to see another game! thank you <3
lol, hi josephinex!
I'm really happy hear you love Winged Ones & even gave so much hype + enthusiasm for Bermuda >////< I'm also excited to quickly finish & see your reactions/reviews <3 but as always, one step at a time x'D
I hope you can be patient with me and read the updates every Monday!
See you again in the future~
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Edit: Ack, again, I'm sorry for the late reply Q_Q
saw your video on youtube (dari sini :D), love the artwork and story!
suggestion! kayaknya bakal lebih bagus kalau ada VO buat karakternya
aku ga pernah VO, tapi mau coba (kalau dibolehkan & mau hehe)
stay awesome, cheers!
Thanks, Fei! Glad to hear you like my game <3
Klo VO masi blm brani krena butuh Voice Actor indonesia & blm ad wktu buat audisi nyari org"ny :'D
Tp mngkin d masa depan akan terwujud, lihat sj yaa ><
good game i really like it
tapi kalau ada VO nya mungkin bisa jadi luar biasa...
love the story and art work in the game its so Cute <3
Aww thanks IoneWolfash >////<
Stay tuned!
your welcome :)
Do you have any plans for this game to have voices for the characters? And if so, would I be able to audition?
Due to limited time and un-compatible voices (I'm looking for Indonesian voice actors unfortunately u.u) I decided to not include voices in any of my games. At most, there would be only chuckles/laughs/sighs.
I'll try to back you at the end of the month, my first backing for an otome, haha! Yours is totally worth it~ Also, leaving it to only chuckles/laughs/sighs and one or 2 words spoken from a sentence is a lot better because you leave it to imagination and that's the best part~ Imo at least. x: Good luck!
I Can't Wait For The Full Game!!
I Reaaaally Hope It's Finished Next Year!
Me too x'D
Hahah, thanks for dropping by & for the support <3
Halo mbak... ada tidak cara lain membeli game selain lewat paypal?? (Saya blm punya kartu kredit dan org baru di itch.io)
I played ur previous game and reaally into it .. and i reaaally want to play ur new one, i wonder if i had other way to purchase it without using paypal.. (never puchased anything with paypal)
Im sorry if asking too much..
Haloo ~
Waduh klo gk punya kartu kredit rada susah y >< klo lwt pulsa sy gk bgtu butuh. Bisany lwt ap kira"? Sy adany rekening BCA & paypal.
kalau rekening BCA saya punya mbak.. :D
pakai rekening BCA saja bagaimana
klo gt transfer 120.000 yaa untuk Early Bird a/n Evy Kurniawan ~
Jgn lupa tempel d sni alamat emailny jd nanti bs d kirim kesitu nanti x')
email saya: protector_tessa@yahoo.com
terima kasih ya mbak
Oh ud d transfer ya? Okeee, noted ~
When the game will release?
If things go well, July 2018. At the latest, Winter 2018 >< Ican't predict the exact time because my script writing depends on my muse
Im excited :D
Hello!
Pledged Early Birds X2 because I forgot when I pledged the first time XD
I will receive two keys?
And I have no friend to give the second one...
Edit:You support Linux...It's worth 20 dollars ^_^
Hi Violette! Yep, you're going to get 2 keys x'D
Mouratille, right? The first time you pledge was at 11th July 2017 and I will send the keys to your email in the future when it's finished ~
I will also send you a wallpaper as a bonus x'D you remind me of myself -I also forgot easily and have a goldfish memory!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Yep,that's me XD
Thanks for the Wallpaper and a billion of Thanks for Linux ^__^
No problem at all!
Gotta thank Ren'Py for that x'D the creator is a genius -exporting to all 3 platforms at the same time!
Hi triquester! Thanks for visiting & giving me constructive suggestions!
I'm really happy to hear you like the demo *SPOILER ALERT* -especially when I heard about how similar Philipine is with Indonesia x'D I've been to Penang with my friends once for an anime event (um, like AFAID but smaller?) And I did notice the pigeons! I didn't know you have a similar game like Congklak though so this is really interesting!
I also like your suggestions about leaving a note or two about the hidden footnote (colored text). I think I will put it at the start of the game as a reminder or when the first colored text appeared.
Oh, and don't worry about the casual status raising ~ it won't be used for a whole year, I predict it would be used only until you reach the village in Autumn Area (4 or 5 months at most I think. The script is still at Summer area so this could still change ><)
After that, you will enter a bachelor's route. A lot of things will happen in the meantime. I just hope the programming will go smoothly x'D if anything changes, I will surely tell you through the weekly updates~
Lastly, lol, yes I noticed that Arya felt similar to Reksa, but eh, you'll see :'p meanwhile, Guntur seemed to get most of the votes this time! And thank you for giving Kahlil a chance too <3
You're always welcome to leave some comments below -I love reading them but forgive me if sometimes it took awhile before I reply ><
See you again!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Hey! I am sorry if it's written somewhere and I just didn't see it,but how long is the demo? Like how many hours,or,I guess, *days*?
Hi! It really depends on your reading speed >< It's definitely longer than Winged Ones though; the total of Bermuda's demo word count is 48k+ words while Winged Ones' demo is only around 19.5k+ words. So just double the amount of time you use to read WInged Ones' demo x')
I can't wait for the full game.The story is amazing and my fav character is Guntur I love you so much! I hope you finish it soon
ps:I played the Demo 3 times and I still can't get over it I love you so much keep up the good work!
Thanks for the enthusiasm Emmaeow <3 I'm really flattered to hear you love it enough to play the demo 3 times >////<
If nothing goes wrong & my muse cooperates, I think it will be finished around June 2018. Hopefully, you're willing to wait patiently :'3
This demo is such a teaser; deeper approach of the Goddess's mysterious "mission" to human world, more diversed characteristic of the cast with dynamic interactions, emerging more Indonesian culture (I cheer up and laugh out loud when Guntur start using Javanese xD ) and so glad to see your previous work Easter eggs in this new one ;)
I'll definitely save up my money for this promising project (>_<)9
Hi & thanks, SoraAlbum! X'D
I'm so happy to see you back and give Bermuda a try! There's nothing that makes me more happier than to see old players <3
This one is still a long way to go before completion so take your time ~
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Hi ^^,
Can't wait for your full game. Your demo was very good
Until now I like every guy.
What du you think the final version will cost?
Rinaria
Hi Rinaria! Glad to hear you like the demo & all the guys >\\\\<
the final version will be $15, unless you want to buy a early bird pack($10) via my paypal shop (go to my indiegogo page & click on the paypal button below info. There is still some left ~)
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Will the final game be free?
Sadly, no ><
Due to how much longer the story will be compared to Winged Ones, it will be commercial.
Its been a while since I've opened my account here and I see the DEMO!!! <3
I can't wait for the full game!! I can't start the demo or I might die because I need to play the whole game! xD
I'm so excited! Gudluck and stay safe! Supporting you all the way! :) <3
Thanks, KimYuki <3
The campaign had also ended not long ago x'D good to see you back though!
It will be quite far in the future until this little one is finished due to the planned script is very long, but stay tuned!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Hahahahah!! I see, I see :)
Don't worry I will~!
Okay, so I played Legend of the Winged Ones and really liked it so, of course I had to play the demo of your new game!
My favourite LI is Kahlil- and his animations- no spoilers, but they are AMAZING and HE'S ADORABLE.
(P.S. I wasn't expecting the Legally Blonde reference, haha! XD)
Hi Katz_Drawings!
I'm glad to hear you like both of my babies! X'D and yes! I've been watching musicals for awhile now and couldn't stop myself from quoting some :")) they're so fun! I wish I can find more of them with good english subtitle :'D
Hope to see you around!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
I realy like this game i can not wait for the rest off the game
Thank you so much, rosedragon! And I'm so sorry for this very late reply Q_Q
I sometimes missed a few comments and I've just noticed yours when I was scrolling down the comments!
Hopefully, you're still waiting for me ><
Yes Iam still wating for you and the rest off the games your games are so good i like eveything about the game it is the best game i been playing and i also loved Legend of The Winged Ones
Thank you! QuQ
It makes me feel so glad, relieved, and touched to hear you're willing because you like my game!
Bermuda's script is 70% completed! SFXs and BGMs library is 95% completed! I only need to finish writing 6 climax scenes & antagonist route before I quickly draw the CGs and programming!
I'll definitely do my best for my readers, so stay tuned with the updates~
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
When the real game comes out reply to this comment so I know! I can't take demos!!!
Hi, Sydsterino !
And I feel you there x'D I also personally don't like to play games that is not completed yet -but I hope you stay tuned with the updates! It will be finished before you know it :'3
See you in the future!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
I can't handle demos they tease too much.
Hi! This game is a really cool game! I really like the game and would be awesome if more features are added and I made a video on youtube in INDONESIAN! Check it out! TERIMA KASIH! PART 1!
Gamenya keren bangeeettt ga sabar buat ngelanjutin main gamenya :D bangga sekali ada orang Indonesia yang bisa bikin game sebagus ini! Lanjutkan terus game2nya! Ditunggu yaaa update2 di masa depaann :D
Hi Doxuz!
Wow, I can't believe you make youtube video for Bermuda :'D I mean, already? and you're a guy! *criesinhappiness* -no offence but not many guys play my VNs since they're otome :'D thank you so much for giving your effort into this video! *hugs*
dan makasiih! sy masi blm seberapa & msi bnyk yg bs d improve tp sy psti akn trus berjuang biar bs lbh bgus lg >< stay tuned sm update"ny d Indiegogo & hope to see you again!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Lol yeaaahh Im a guy but i do enjoy this type of games too :D Gonna upload part 2 very soon so stay tuned!
Wahh semangat yaa! Saya doakan yang terbaik :)
<3 Hello again, SweetChiel!
Gahhhhh. This promises to be another great game! I noticed that it's quite a bit different from the original Nusantara -- the art style seems slightly altered, and the gaming style is also changed. However, I still love how you make the characters so real (especially the MC and her relationship with her family). So far, Guntur's the only one who's caught my eye. The guys in Nusantara: Bermuda Triangle seem slightly more stereotypical; even though Rama and Reksa were drastically different characters, they were both very adorable in their own way, but I feel like Kahlil and Arya are more... hm.... directed towards a certain audience group instead of towards girls in general. But in any case, I still loved the demo enough to buy the game! <3 Good luck during the production process, and I can't wait! Hope you garner enough financial support for the indiegogo campaign!
Cheers, :3
Jordanyak
P.S. LOVE how you drop in bits and pieces of Nusantara: Legend into Nusantara: Bermuda! :'-)
P.P.S. Oh yes! I forgot to ask -- did you remove the affection meter from Nusantara: Legend of the Winged Ones? I saw it in the promotional pics, but I couldn't find it in the actual game.
Thanks & welcome back jordanyak! x'D
And yes, Winged Ones was made with my old laptop -the color balance in my old laptop is different with my current laptop so I guess it alters my art a little >< This is also the first time I try a status raising system -but I'm glad to hear you still love it though!
Meanwhile, Guntur is gaining more fans lol. As for Kahlil & Arya... hmm, I've just realized this recently, but does Arya fit into the stereotype of grumpy werewolf? x'D lol but don't worry, I have things planned for them *evil laugh*cough*
And YAY! Thanks for supporting!
Stay tuned with the weekly updates & it will be finished before we know it!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
P.S. lol, the tid bits about Winged Ones is a bonus for my old fans x'D glad you like them!
P.P.S. Ahh, I forgot to remove that screenshot x_x; that feature is from the old version of Winged Ones. It used Novelty, not Ren'Py and I have only just learned how to do that with Ren'Py now ><
When I clicked 'download' for this game, I knew I was going to do so with high expectations and without any regrets, as I had fell in love with Nusantara: The Legend of the Winged Ones! It's certainly beautiful (like most of your stories), and the story is A+++... I'm definitely looking forward towards the final release. Anyways, much love from a fairly new fan of yours <33
Hi clouds_xx!
Thanks for downloading & loving this 'child' of mine x'D it always makes me happy to get such a warm welcome!
I will work ward to meet your expectations, so stay tuned with the weekly updates and wait for me :'3
See you again!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
THIS GAME IS AMAZING!!!
Honestly, I thought you outdid yourself with this one! I finished the demo then in my head I was like
"no"
"I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT"
Please continue! Its really good!
THIS GAME IS AMAZING!!!
Honestly, I thought you outdid yourself with this one! I finished the demo then in my head I was like
"no"
"I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT"
Please continue! Its really good!
Hi RDGamerGirl!
Thanks for playing & loving it <3 I will definitely finish this, but it's still far in the future :"3 for now, stay tuned with the weekly updates!
Also, share it with your friends so they can enjoy it too & you can wait together x'D
Hope to see you again!
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
I actually gasped when I saw you were making another game! GASPED! Im really excited for this!! and while I basically never buy VNs (cuz im sad and broke) Im going to HAVE to buy this because I loved legend of the winged ones so much its like in my top 3 all time faves tbh. And I bet youll knock it out of the park again with this!!! ahh!!! it looks so cool already!!! Im not a demo person cuz of my severe impatience and tendancy to play entire games in one sitting, but I just needed to say how stoked I am about this!!!!!!!!!
wow I used alot of exclamation points...oops.
Hi wolvesdaughter111!
Your excitement is very appreciated! x'D It makes me very happy to see you love Winged Ones so much <3 your support literally made my day! I'm currently struggling with a village background you see, but I can do this for you guys!
I can understand the impatience since I'm impatient too :')) I hope the weekly updates will help you cope though!
Ah but take care of yourself and don't do an all nighter with this one since this is gonna be VERY long ><
Hope to see you again!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
P.S. don't worry about the exclamation points, I love them too! x'D
Whaa, i'm so sad rn lol. I downloaded quite a few games and game demos today, so i didn't remember that this was just a demo and not the full game. My heart broke at the "The Demo Ends Now" Screen, literally xD
So excited for the finished game now, i really hope i don't have to wait that long.
Btw, i fell so hard for Arya :'
Hi komaeakabane!
Thanks for visiting & telling me your thoughts! X'D I'm happy to hear you got immersed in it until the end of the demo ~
And wow, this is surprising OuO you still like Arya despite his obvious temper problem! I'm a little touched >\\\<
I will do my best to hasten the production progress, so pray that I won't have any writer's block later :"D really, I think the longest process is writing & editing the script! For now, follow my update every Monday and I hope the sneak peeks will be able to satisfy you/maybe help you bear the long wait ><
I hope to see you again~
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
Yeah, btw, i just saw that i didn't even tell u that you were reading my mind while creating this game, lol.
My favourite animals are
wolves, foxes and ravens.
And we hav a Wolf, a fox and a raven dude over here, this is quite funny :'D
What a coincidence! I guess you're in luck x'D
They're also my favourite animals <3
holy crap! So excited!!!!!!
playing rn..........Holy Bomb in my face TTnTT ya hit me with a curve ball, I gonna cry. my heart
Whoaa, deep breathes ShadowLamb x'D
Calm down and enjoy the demo <3
Thanks for visiting and letting me know your excitement though!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Guntur....is so cute. As are the others....but Guntur....
Okay, so Guntur is my all time fav but the others are so good too! Just like in the winged ones, all the love interests are so awesome! I honestly can't pick a second favorite, Kah'lil and Arya. I like the both!! I can't wait for more. I need it so bad. Seriously can't wait!!!!!!!
Hi ShadowLamb! Glad to see you back so soon! X'D
I'm happy to know that you think the love interests are all very interesting QuQ my boys have much more to tell and I think you'll like it <3
And lol, do you best and wait! X'D the sneak peeks will have to do for now sadly
Demodemodemodemodemodemodemodemodemodemodemodemo!!! *hyperventilates*
Chieeeeeel this is so greeeeaaaat I can't eveeeeen!!!
Erm.... yeah.
Yesterday I replayed Rama's route twice and I was frustrated because I wanted more of Nusantara content, and when I've checked itch.io... I see the Bermuda Triangle demo is out!!! Oh joy!
I've finished it right now, and now I obviously must comment and give some feedback!
It will contain some SPOILERS, but I don't know if anyone except the dev will have the courage to read such a lenghty comment XD
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I'll start with the negative points, so it'll be out of the way, and then I'll resume the squealing haha! So yeah, a couple of mistakes or weird things:
- When characters are walking, the sound effect for the steps is... how to put it... Too fast / frequent. It sound like a group of people walking. That's okay when it's Maya and the boys, but with only two characters (like when she's walking alongside her dad), it's weird
- Couple of time mistakes at the beginning. When Maya says she has an appointment at 11:00, she says PM (when she talks about it for the first time), but then her mother says 11:00 AM during breakfast. And after breakfast ends, Maya says it's 11:20 so she must go, but I guess it was 10:20, right?
- Now, the one that really hurts... I'm sooo soooo sorry, but I'll be blunt here - the spanish bits are awful... I won't point out the mistakes and weird wording in english since I'm not confident enough in my english and I'm sure enough people will be able to help you. But in spanish at least I can help, so bear with me! When the girl asks for help in finding her mother, you put "ayúdame a encontrar a ella", but the correct form would be "ayúdame a encontrarla". A little while after that, the girl refers to Maya and Kah'lil as big sister and brother. You... really don't say that in spanish. Even actual siblings don't call each other like that, so random strangers... it's... really no. Same goes for the end of the event when Kah'lil speaks with the girl's mother. Even if spanish isn't his language, so he may actually make mistakes, you don't call a random woman auntie, so "tía" is a no-no (it's like calling someone "dude", in english, or something close to that, except if you're talking to your real aunt - or uncle - of course) - he should simply call her "señora". It's even worse since calling someone "tía" or "tío" is some kind of very familiar slang-like thing. It's not an insult, and same age good pals often call each other like that, but it would be disrespectful to call a random woman like that. Also, "¿Cómo podría pagarte alguna vez?" is REALLY weird. In case of an adult speaking to a stranger, the "-te" suffix is weird, you'd use the more formal "-le" ("pagarle"). You should also get rid of the "alguna vez" - it means "sometime", and the whole sentence would mean "how could I pay you (familiar or speaking to a kid) sometime". It would be correct to say "¿Cómo podría pagarle?" Or even "¿Cómo podría pagarle por esto?". "Usted es bienvenido tía, estamos felices de ayudar" is wrong too. "Bienvenido" is masculine, you'd use "bienvenida" for a woman. But it means literally "welcome" as in welcoming someone to a place, so it can't be used here anyway. You'd use "de nada" or "no hay de qué". The correct sentence would be "De nada señora (or "No hay de qué, señora"), estamos felices de ayudar" - and replacing the "tía" for reasons stated above. You might also want to recheck the exclamation and interrogation points, you missed a couple of the opening ones here and there ( ¡ / ¿ ) - I know it's a pain - spanish IS a pain - I lived in Spain for years and my mom still lives there, so yeah... I was fortunate to be very young when we moved there, otherwise I would have suffered a lot to learn it XD. If you ever need proofreading for spanish, french, or polish, feel free to ask me anytime, really - I'm fluent in all three and I'd gladly help you!
- I like the fact Maya does tarot reading! I do sometimes too! But I'm wondering about the method she uses, as I don't recognize it at all. If it's a made up method, that's fine, but I'm a bit bothered by the use of the Death card, since it rarely means literal death - it's often a quite positive card, actually. And the fact she tries so many times makes it worse since I grew more and more irritated each time haha
- And finally, once you get to the point you must choose the duties you do, it seems it's hard to click on the buttons. I mean, they don't always respond - the hunting one was the worst I think - at first I thought it isn't avaible or something - I had to click a lot of times!
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Welp, lots of little things - never pleasant to point out mistakes, but at least it's constructive feedback I guess... So now, onto the good things!
- First of... I LOVE the characters! Oh My God I love them sooo much! I think Guntur is still my favorite at the moment. But remember how I told you before the demo was out that Kah'lil really didn't catch my eye? FORGET. ABOUT. THAT. I fell in love with him the second he interacted with Maya for the first time! He's... so... cute... and.... hnnn <3. I guess at this point Arya became the one I like the less, but I still like him a lot - he simply is that kind of character with whom you need a lot of time to get to know them, so obviously the demo isn't enough. I mean, of course we only know a tiny bit about each boy, but he's obviously the harder one to approach so yeah, I'll have to wait haha!
- It was implied in the previous point, but I love Maya too. She's such a tease, and I always admired pole-dancers, so yeah... I really like her. And it's nice how she's sooo different from Tamara too. Your MCs are so cool! But I also like her family, and the whole family thing actually. For... well... obvious reasons, Tamara wasn't close with her relatives, and the present day part was very short, in Legend of the Winged Ones. But since Maya is sooo close with her family, I really like the fact you get that long intro where you get to experience her day to day life. I found myself curious about but also dreading the day of the second meeting with the Goddess, since I knew it would be awful for Maya. I wish more VN games had that kind of slow starts. It's mostly used in RPGs, but not so much in VNs, and I always liked that. Anyway, basically, I really enjoyed exploring lots of different options there, and seeing her interact with her family.
- The little note about what Maya is thinking about in the menu is SO FUN! I love that gimmick! It's my first time seeing something like that. I wish the contents would change more often though, but I guess it's hard to do - I mean, it would be lots of work.
- A FRIGGIN YEAR IN GAME?! Now I understand why you said it'll be longer than Legend of the Winged Ones! Can't wait to explore the whole game!
- Yay for timed choices! I love timed choices! And it even has a time bar that is decreasing! (please, you'll have to teach me how to do that once I'll get into the programming of my game haha - I'll need that too since it'll have timed choices!)
- Music and art is great, as always. And I love Kah'lil's twitching ears and moving tail - so cute!
- Mini-game seems fun so far! But I can't have a final opinion with only the easy diffulty level.
- The mirrors are gorgeous!!! (sorry, not so constructive but had to mention that somewhere XD)
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And last, some random comments and questions!
- First of, sorry I can't help for the funding - I'm in a VERY tight spot, money-wise, right now, and I really can't spend a single dollar or anything. But if I get out of that mess, I'll be sure to give at least something!
- Is it possible to meet Guntur before he barges into Maya's garden? I met Arya and Kah'lil before their main encounters ( I mean, you can see them even though you don't interact), but not him. Of course, he may have been in prison and not have any previous encounter, but I wanted to be sure!
- Sooo... 3 love interests and one secret unlockable love interest... Sure, I know about that but... both the love meter page and the gallery page have FIVE sections (well, 6 in the gallery if counting Maya), so... What is that about? A secret-secret love interest? Another character important enough for them to get a love meter and gallery section? Haha, I'm pretty sure you won't answer this one, eh?
- What is the stats' purpose? Is it used to unlock some events? I've noticed each stat has the color of one of the characters, but well, diligence was my higher stat even before the duties were avaible, while Arya was the character I had the least affinity with, so I don't know how much is it related...
Phew, that was one hell of a comment! Sorry about that! You know how much a fan I am, so I couldn't help myself haha! Hope it'll be helpful!
Konoiiii, I can't thank you enough for helping me with the Spanish translations x'D
I just woke up and this is the first thing I saw in the morning! It made my day! <3
I've made the changes for the things you told me but can you tell me your email & help me check over the Spanish again? I want to send you a small part of the script where it contains the Spanish + Translation.
My proofreader & I haven't had the chance to live in Spanish so our knowledge is very limited >< I cringed and laughed at the things you mentioned to be strange/awkward as hell :')) This scene is the only time where Kahlil speak Spanish, so your help will be greatly appreciated :'D
As for the hard clicking on the status raising screen... Now this is new O.O; are you sure it's not your mouse acting up? x'D //hammer
My mouse is very old and lost the sensitivity of its right click so I got a hard time clicking on things too, so maybe...? This is quite problematic since everything works okay in the ren'py so I don't know what I can do about it >< maybe try playing it in window mode? It might lessen the program's burden.
The other problem seems to be minor. I will reduce the walking sfx then since you're the second person who tell me this.
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I also laughed out loud at some of the things you mention you love x'D
The other day, a person told me the introduction about Maya's family is too long but then the next day, you told me you love the long introduction lol. I guess you either hate it or love it x'DD
Also, thanks you as always for giving all the bachelors a chance! Ah, Guntur's popularity is going up as expected <3
But gosh, the demo is not enough for you!? Woman, it's almost 4 times longer than Winged One's demo! x'DD *lol, I think I'm spamming this emoticon right now, but really, I'm having that expression a lot while writing this*
Oh and don't worry! I will tell you the code for the timed choices as a reward for the Spanish translation ;)
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Last but not least, here's my answers to your questions:
- Don't worry about the funding! The fact that you care enough about it to write this HUGE review is more than enough for me :'D
- Nope, there is no alternate scene for meeting Guntur :'))
- Welp, the fifth love interest is a stretch goal I set in Indiegogo! Scroll down to see who he is! If the stretch goal is not reached, then I guess the fifth space will stay empty u.u
- The stats will help you determine which bachelor route you're going to be in. So aside from high affection, high compatible status will be used to determine it + it might be the key to unlock happy ending ;) But if you choose Kahlil and decided to raise Combat (which is a compatible status for Guntur), the system will determine which bachelor route you're going to be in by affection points. However, this will automatically lead you to a sad ending u.u
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Thanks again for visiting and pointing my mistakes, Konoi!
I'll await your answer about your email address for the Spanish translation checking :'3
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Glad I can help you with the Spanish bits! I'll give you my email by note on DeviantArt, since I don't like it being randomly published here, even though it's not that much of a secret either... oh well... XD
And I've checked the last maybe-to-be bachelor! He looks very cool - hope you'll get enough with the funding so you can reach that goal. But well, even if you don't I'm sure the game will be amazing anyway!
As for the hard clicking, no, definitely not my mouse. It disconnect sometimes, yeah, but the sensitivity and all is fine. After all, I don't have any issues with other games or even other menus and selections in Bermuda, so well... I don't think my mouse would selectively malfunction for that XD - but maybe something went wrong when I extracted the game...? I'll try re-downloading it later!
And I see, about the stats. Well, it's interesting! I'm not fond of stat raising in VNs, but it seems pretty casual - I've managed with very hard ones so I'm sure I'll be fine!
I know you have proof readers, but I figured I'd help you out a bit too since I'm here squirming and all.
In the opening it says "This I give you, an advice." It would be more like "This I give you, a piece of advice." or something like that. Which still sounds really weird to me but is at the very least more grammatically correct.
On the news paper "More people get missing" it should be "More people go missing"... And "In sheep pastures" not "on" Not that those are terribly important.
"Wish that day 'would' come sooner" instead of "will" and in all other instances it is the same, I noticed that in the first game too and it's something that has always bothered me a bit, but I still love your work regardless. There are a lot of other grammatical errors scattered that I'm sure will me caught in later updates, typos and "there"s instead of "their"s and so on. I'm also not sure what you were trying to say with the line "For those who were wondering, here are a few definitions about it; the rumors never let up, pasts were never forgotten. I mean I get the gist but I really don't even know how to begin dissecting that for you at all. D= Maybe it would be easier to say something like "No one ever let me forget those facts"? It's less wordy but I think it's a more direct way to express what you were trying to say because as it stands I'm really confused about the point you're trying to make with that particular sentence. I know English isn't your first language and you're doing really well so keep it up! =]
All the innuendo between the mc and her parents is really unnecessary and a little bit uncomfortable? Here and there is one thing like a little joke but she keeps going and going to the point where it just feels awkward. It'd be less so if they ever like... Joked back at all but they both just seem really uncomfortable with it all the time and she keeps pushing and pushing, it might just be me though.
The family bits are kinda nice, but it feels like a lot of plot-hindering filler that has no real purpose in the story. Which is fine but there seems to be ALOT of it and if you're not careful people might get really bored before ever becoming invested in your story/plot. Because thus far I have no idea what is supposed to be happening. 7 days in and it doesn't feel like we're being set up for a plot, it literally feels like we are just waiting around "what happens in 7 days?" IDK wait and find out and it's a lot of waiting. 8 days before we are ever introduced to anything resembling any sort of story-line. It really doesn't take THAT long to establish a connection between us and the MC's family and it shouldn't. TBH a simple "My family was always the most important thing to me" should honestly have been enough without having to deal with them for 8 in game days, honestly by the end of the demo I fricken hated Mawar and the mom, like tbh any time they entered the scene I was like "*sigh* Here we go.............." No offense, they just babbled too much about nothing interesting and I had a hard time staying focused on the points. There are a few parts where the characters seem to just ramble about random junk. You'd save yourself a TON of time, effort, resources on cutting that down a bit.
Also I know she's upset and desperate, but I am not and I really don't want to have to sit through her shuffling and pulling that deng death card 20 times.... You can just describe it? Twice is good, really, since I can't skip through it?
The Nusantara poster was a nice touch. ;P I definitely had to play it again after playing this demo I totally miss those boys. T^T Also SweetChiel Cafe. ;P
Hi Duvessa!
Thanks for letting me know about your dilemma/frustrations about some of the game's elements :"D
I also get the feeling that the 7 days are VERY long indeed. I was trying to make you get to know them better so you can relate to Maya's feelings when the event with the Goddess happened, but I guess it's a bit too much x'D I think the 'introduction' chapter of Maya's family is not as interesting as when she arrived at Forgotten isles?
I'm also sorry if the innuendo made you feel uncomfortable. It's just something unique to Maya's family; that they hide nothing from each other.
Bless you for being so patient until you finish the demo though! I will take note of this for future reference for sure!
As for the grammar mistakes... I'm sorry for that >< the proofreaders and I have been doing our best, but it seems that something always missed our radar! It might be because I went back and forth editing the script. So I apologize in advance for the grammar mistakes ^^;
I will try to cut down the word count, but no promises since this has something to do with my writing style. I think there won't be much filler after Maya went to Forgotten Isles though O.O
Thanks for visiting and telling what bothers you about Bermuda! I agree that it's still far from perfect and I still have a lot to learn, but I hope you'll come to love it - including its strong points and weaknesses.
Xoxo,
SweetChiel
P.S. don't worry about me, throw me all the comments/critiques you have! X'D I'm very happy to hear your thoughts and I want to get better!
I honestly don't mind the grammar at all, I just thought I'd let you know. I totally understand and generally it's not something I easily overlook because I'm a super grammar nazi most of the time, but I really do enjoy your games and I'll play them no matter what because I super enjoy your stories and characters. =] There really is no need to cut it down, it was just an idea as I'm not sure about other people but the wordiness might be discouraging for other people trying to get into the actual story. I know it'll be great so I can easily overlook it, but other people who come to pay for it when it's complete might be less inclined to do so if it's too difficult for them to become invested in the story. In all, however, I totally love it and support you 100%.
Hi Duvessa~
Thanks for coming back and letting me know you enjoy my story & character :'D
and yes, I understand your good intention <3 and I'm very happy with your suggestions! Really, I'm surprised myself that the demo became that long O.O; but what makes me happier is when you said'but the wordiness might be discouraging for other people...' -then that means the ones who stayed are those who truly love Bermuda, right? I can't ask anything better than that actually :'D
While I encourage new people to try and read my story, I don't want to push my 'baby' to them, rather, I want them to come & hug them by themselves ><
Thanks for your warm concern & for visiting again, Duvessa :'3
xoxo,
SweetChiel
will we see the winged ones?!
You mean Cameo in Bermuda? x'D probably ~ *grins*
omg omg the suspense!!! * download button clicking intensifies *
Take your time and enjoy the demo! :'3
will we see the winged ones?!
I AM SO EXCITED!!! I played Nusantara Legend of the Winged Ones and I fell in love with the game <3<3<3<3 The quality of the artwork and the depth of the story made it one of the best I've played! After the last one I am so willing to pay for the next game!
Me too!! Gosh, Bermuda's Indiegogo campaign is TOMORROW! *bounces off the walls with excitement & worry*
I'm so happy to see more of you are coming to support Bermuda Q_Q
I've been restless & it's getting silly how I can't seem to focus on anything right now since the campaign is so close. But seeing you as excited as I am, if not more, makes me feel better x'D
Thank you and see you soon, QueenMak!
xoxo,
SweetChiel
Let me pre-order here,please!
*throw money at screen*
Hi, Violette! Early birds will be available in my IndieGoGo next month lol so make sure to stay tuned x'D
You made my day first thing in the morning!
When is the release? Anyone? I love you SweetChiel! <3 You're amazing.
Hi yohanlove!
Not yet ~ this one is still in progress. The demo have only been available this month for my patrons in patreon, but the demo will be available for public next month along with an Indiegogo campaign :"3
My updates could be seen in lemmasoft forum/facebook fanpage while more sneak peeks can be seen in my Patreon <3
Aah I'm so happy more people is anticipating this! :'D
Stay tuned!
Xoxo, SweetChiel
Can't wait for this to be out. c:
Me too! So excited for my 2nd child! :'D
Looks like this is going to be a good one, I am pretty hyped for it!
Me too!
I can't wait to hear your thoughts after playing the demo :'D soon <3
Wait sweetChiel will it be available on mac?
Yup! Definitely!
yay XD
oh my god!! cant wait for this to come out >< im so hype for this, not only you can make beautiful story but you can insert some of traditional culture from Indonesia ! I'm proud of you :""
Hi, Skoren!
It will take awhile until this one came out x'D I'm planning to try IndieGoGo with this little one.
I'm updating every Monday at Lemmasoft Forum & Facebook fanpage if you're interested in the progress :'3
i ADORED Nusantara Legend of the Winged Ones, so i'm super excited for this :'D i'm sure it'll be just,if not more amazing~
Thanks CobaltTea >///< your trust in my skill flatters me :'D
I will do my best to meet your expectations!
Yo yo yo
So like
I just played Nusantara: Legend of the Winged Ones
and
yeah since I loved that
I know I'm going to love this <3
Thank you for the support, mshen19!
I'm very happy to hear you like the Winged Ones! :'D